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My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) 11-20-08: Another Rescue Mission
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KaraJadeKim
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6/7 3:58pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 7, 2008
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Nice update kenobi keep up teh good work
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
6/7 4:06pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 7, 2008
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Alexis_Wingstar posted:
I thought I responded to the last update!  That was cute interaction between brother and sister. So, are both Ani and Petra going to become jedi?
maybe..maybe not.  I mean, she'll have interaction *obviously!* with the Jedi later on, but as to how big her role will be, I'm still debating on whether or not to revise it or expand it out. I'd already had her in a role as a healer but that may or may not change, I don't know yet. 
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KaraJadeKim
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6/7 4:35pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 7, 2008
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You should revise it Kenobi we have revised our charcers alot in our rp why not expound that in your story.
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silverfighter
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Date Posted:
6/8 8:18pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 7, 2008
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Sorry for forgetting to reply.  I'm trying to catch up on everything that I got behind on when I was really busy with school work.
I'm still really curious where this is all going to go. Did I see you say "healer"? Ohhh, the interestingness. 
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PetraKenobi
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6/9 9:30am
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that's okay. I try not to update more than once-twice a week so nobody gets behind.  but as of last night, I was stuck on Petra and Obi-Wan's first meeting; even though I know where I want it to go, I'm lacking some inspiration....or maybe more correctly, the will to write more.
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
6/11 11:07am
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“Why would I care?” I didn’t like him much as a stranger; but as a Jedi…I felt that he was reading my thoughts. I hated it. He smiled as if he had just read my thoughts and then he continued walking on past me. I shook my head, sighed in frustration, then walked after him and Jar Jar. They walked to the garage area and met Watto there. I and Jar Jar walked behind Qui-Gon and Watto as they discussed something about the podrace. I wasn’t really interested until…
“I’ll take that bet.” Qui-Gon said without hesitation.
Watto turned and looked at him with surprise. “You what?”
Qui-Gon remained calm. “I’ll wager my new racing pod against…say, the boy and his family.”
Watto shook his head. “No pod is worth three slaves; maybe two, but that’s a longshot. The girl and her mother then, the boy isn’t for sale.”
I joined Qui-Gon and I grabbed his shoulder, forcing him to look at me, fire in my blue eyes. “You can’t do this. What if he loses?”
Qui-gon gently removed my hand from his shoulder. “Let me handle this.”
I wanted to protest more but I shut my mouth. Qui-Gon was determined to make Watto see his point of view.
“The boy and his sister then.”
Watto pulled a small cube out of his pocket. “We’ll let face decide. Blue, it’s the boy and his sister; red his mother.”
Watto tossed the cube down but what he didn’t’ see is that Qui-Gon waved his hand slightly to make the cube land on blue. Watto was angry, and so was I.
“You won the small toss, outlander, but you won’t win the race so it makes little difference.”
Anakin, Padme, R2, Kitster, 3PO and Shmi entered the area; the humans on eopies with 3po and R2 towing the pod. I was still furious at what Qui-gon had done; how dare he try to manipulate our futures?
Watto flew past them out of the garage, but that didn’t stop him from saying, “Bonapa keesa pateeso, o wanna meetee chobodd.”
He laughed and continued past them. Anakin looked at me and Qui-gon. “What’d he mean by that?”
Qui-Gon helped Shmi down off the Eopie. “Nothing; I’ll tell you later.”
A\N: The podrace won't be included in detail, as explained in my next post. I thought that Petra and Obi-Wan's story is more important, adn therefore, the podrace shouldn't slow down the story. Plus I hate to write it.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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Date Posted:
6/11 5:36pm
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She has no interest in being free? Interesting.
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KaraJadeKim
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Date Posted:
6/11 6:29pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 11, 2008
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nice update kenobi but tis a cliffie and i don't blame you the pod race is boring plus o/p story is more importent
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
6/11 6:32pm
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Alexis_Wingstar posted:
She has no interest in being free? Interesting.
I've written it from her viewpoint of: "This will separate my family" and she doesn't want that because she's always been with her mom and brother. I also think that it can stem from the fact she's not sure about what to do with the freedom being given to her.
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
6/13 10:34am
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED JUNE 11, 2008
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Anakin looked at me. I shrugged my shoulders and joined him and my mom. He and Kitster were talking; about Anakin never winning or finishing a race and Padme sounding just a little unsure of this. We all helped Anakin get himself and his pod ready for the race.
I needn’t go into details about that day, except that Anakin did in fact win the race, and he and I were free. But instead of feeling relief, I felt dread. What would this do to my family? Why couldn’t mom be freed as well? I wanted to hit something or someone out of frustration. Qui-Gon got the parts from Watto, and as he did so, released me and Anakin although Anakin didn’t know yet. He was taking the laden eopies to his ship and he wanted me to help install the hyperdrive. I hugged my mom, knowing it was the last time I’d probably see her, then I hugged Anakin.
“If I don’t come back, get my things, okay?” I whispered in his ear. A look of confusion filled his face but then he shook it off and nodded. Qui-gon offered me his hand and I stepped up behind him onto the eopie. Reluctantly, I wrapped my arms around his waist so I wouldn’t fall off.
“You’ve been quiet all day.”
“I’ve had things on my mind.” I said half-heartedly.
He turned his head around slightly. “I’m sorry if you hate me for what I did. But your mother wants a better life for you both.”
“If it means leaving my mom, I’d rather be a slave.” I snapped angrily.
“Your transmitter has already been deactivated and you’ve been freed.” Qui-gon said in his usual calm tone of voice that hardly ever was raised out of anger.
I removed my arms from around his waist, wanting to fall off. “I don’t care. I’m not going with you.”
I couldn’t see it but Qui-Gon was smiling slightly. “You may think differently once you meet my apprentice.”
“What does your apprentice have to do with anything?” I said, half-curious, half-ticked.
“You’ll find out.”
A\N: Next post will be Obi-WAn and Petra's first meeting.
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KaraJadeKim
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6/13 3:54pm
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that should be interesting nice update kenobi and i don't remember that point of view in your original story
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6/13 8:19pm
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Hmm... is this going to turn into a blossoming romance, perhaps? 
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
6/15 1:10pm
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KaraJadeKim posted:
that should be interesting nice update kenobi and i don't remember that point of view in your original story
It probably wasn't in the original version.
Alexis_Wingstar posted:
Hmm... is this going to turn into a blossoming romance, perhaps?
I don't know...you'll have to keep reading to find out.
He pulled the Eopies to a stop as we arrived outside the ship. It was a silver, sleek looking thing; the nicest looking ship I’d ever seen. Although it was impressive, my eyes were drawn away from it to a young man walking towards us; he wore an outfit similar to Qui-gon’s, though it was mostly brown and cream colored. He had a braid on one side with different colored ribbons weaved on the end. When he got closer, I could tell he had blue-grey eyes. Though I could see him, he couldn’t see me yet.
Qui-Gon spoke to the young man. “Start getting this hyperdrive generator installed. I’m going back…some unfinished business. I won’t be long.”
“Why do I sense we’ve picked up another pathetic life form?” The young man asked.
“It’s the boy who’s responsible for getting us these parts. His sister will help you install the generator.”
I could see the look of surprise on his face. “His sister?”
Qui-gon motioned with his hand behind him. “Petra Skywalker, meet Obi-Wan Kenobi.”
I moved from behind Qui-gon so that Obi-Wan could see me. My blue eyes locked with his blue-grey ones. I couldn’t break the gaze; neither could he. Qui-gon’s voice spurred us both back to reality.
“I need to be going back.” He said, noticing the gaze between us.
Obi-Wan moved closer to the Eopie as I held Qui-Gon’s arm. As I started to get down, I felt strong hands wrap around my waist and guide me to the ground. When I released Qui-gon’s arm, I turned slightly and looked into Obi-Wan’s eyes. This time, though, I broke the gaze and stepped out of his arms. Qui-gon turned the Eopies and headed back to Mos Eisley. There was a minute or two of awkward silence between us before Obi-Wan broke the silence.
“So…um, the ship is this way.” He walked towards it.
“No kidding” I said under my breath. He turned and looked at me, almost as if he had heard what I said, then continued on into the ship. He led me into the engine room. As I walked past him, our shoulders touched but I ignored it. I started working on the damaged hyperdrive, trying to rid my mind of him. As if sensing what I needed, he handed me a tool to help pry the damaged parts out. The trouble was, the part wasn’t releasing. I tugged and pulled at it; he moved behind me and extended his arms around me to try to help. I pushed him back.
“I can do it.”
He looked at me puzzled. “Sorry, I was only trying to help.”
By the look on his face, I knew he had his feelings hurt at least a little but he wiped it off his face. I continued pulling and tugging at the part. I thought I had it but it gave way when I was pulling it hard, and I fell backwards into Obi-Wan, landing on top of him. Our faces were inches apart. I didn’t realize just how clear his eyes were until I saw them really closely. Likewise, he thought that my eyes resembled deep pools of sapphire blue. His face started moving closer towards mine and his arms wrapped around my waist; our lips barely touched but I pulled away, pushing him down. I got up; breathing heavily, heart racing looking down at him.
“What’s wrong?” He asked me.
“We don’t know each other.” I said, shocked. How could I kiss a man whom I had known only for an hour? Strangely, I felt like I had known him my whole life and deep down, I KNEW I could trust him. I shook my head and returned to extracting the damaged parts. Once that was done, I grabbed the new parts and started to install them.
Obi-Wan was sitting behind me against the bulkhead, arms crossed, legs stretched out in front of him. “How old are you?”
His voice distracted me. “Seventeen.”
“Really?” I could tell by the sound of his voice that he was a little taken aback. “You seemed older than that.”
I turned back around. “Thanks.” I said it under my breath. “And just how old are you, Jedi?”
“Twenty-five; I’ll be twenty-six in several weeks.” He said smiling slightly.
“Congratulations” I responded half-heartedly. “There, I got it all done now.”
He motioned for me to join him against the bulkhead but I stayed standing where I was.
“Do you always treat strangers this way or is it just Jedi?” He said with a smirk.
“I’m sorry; I’ve just been a little…testy lately.” I couldn’t believe I was apologizing to him! Right now he was being just a little bit of a smart aleck and it was getting on my nerves; yet I liked it.
He still kept that blasted smirk on his face. “Some Jedi have been known to do that.”
“Wipe that smirk off your face, Kenobi.” I said angrily, without realizing that I called him by his last name. He noticed and the smirk disappeared. I realized my mistake then and my face turned red as a Tattoine grub. I turned back and inwardly chided myself for getting so riled by him.
One important thing I didn’t know is that Obi-Wan was having a moment of déjà vu. I looked strangely like a fellow Jedi, Siri Tachi; and the way I treated him resembled her as well. That was why the smirk disappeared off his face after I lashed out at him. The eyes, the voice, the personality; it all resembled Siri. He slapped himself mentally; he was already in love with Siri. He didn’t need another woman to complicate things. Then again, one woman was enough to complicate everything.
A\N: about a day early but I thought I'd go ahead and post this.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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 Poor Obi-wan can only fall in love with women who treat him like an annoyance.
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KaraJadeKim
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6/15 3:47pm
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great up date kenobi
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