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*See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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Anduli_Vader
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May '08
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Date Posted:
5/15 6:25pm
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*See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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Title: See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil
Author: Anduli_Vader
Genre: Vignette, Angst
Main Character(s): Palpatine, Vader
Summary: A little exploration into the dark heart of the Empire. My first story. Much darker than my usual, but a plot bunny hit me on my way home from the library. Based on the saying from the title.
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See no evil.
Imperial Center was bloody tonight. It was raw and bleeding with misery and pain. To most of the citizens, it was a hulk, a heart scraped of all it's flesh, a bright painful wound that was Darkness. The sunset was crimson, flared with touches of gold, a curtain of blood edged with hope that was nearly shut out.
To the man sitting alone on his throne, it was glorious. Wizened eyes gazed upon the magnificence of decay and death and behind those eyes, a sadistic mind smiled. It was triumphant in its slow decline. It was everything and nothing at the same time, monumental and a flickering annoyance.
Palpatine gazed out at the scene in Monument Square and saw blood in the hollows of the land. His own hands, feeble as they were, held the Empire together with an iron grip, a ruthless grip. He gazed down at his fingers and smiled. Those fingers had clutched a lightsaber once, had bestowed healing powers to his apprentice and had choked another that was unworthy of life.
In those hands lay billions of atrocities. Those hands also held power.
Hear no evil.
Far from the dying heart of the Empire, the darkest enforcer walked through the streets of the underground, his dark glare penetrating the shady streets of the nearest stocking station to his goal. His eyes saw red everywhere, muting and filtering all other colors until the hot, fiery burn of red was all he saw.
Lord Vader stalked the streets, wondering what had called him here. Death and ruin walked hand in hand, smiling at the perfection of their work. He gazed at the destruction and headed toward the center, the perfection and the elegance he was used to.
A voice wailed in fear as he walked and his eyes started to turn toward the sound. He stopped himself and walked on, ignoring the sound. It was long ago that he would have helped someone who was in trouble. Now he had his own worries, and the grim delight of his fragmented mind laughed as the wail turned to frightened sobs, crumpling into a scream and deafening silence.
The Dark Side held sway here. Fear was its ammunition.
Speak no evil.
Later, the dark warrior bowed before his crippled, aged Master and listened.
"We have a new Enemy. Luke Skywalker."
"He's just a boy. Obi-Wan cannot have taught him so much that-"
"The Force is strong with him. He must be destroyed."
Desperation now. The dark one's mind was filled with it.
"If he could be turned, he would be a powerful ally."
"Yes." Contemplation. "Can it be done?"
Evil's face smiled and said, "He will join us or die, my Master."
See Evil. Hear Evil. Speak Evil.
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TaRionne
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Nov '02
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Date Posted:
5/15 8:45pm
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RE: *See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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Great job! I loved your use of description and language. 
Some lines I especially enjoyed:
Imperial Center was bloody tonight.
The sunset was crimson, flared with touches of gold, a curtain of blood edged with hope that was nearly shut out.
In those hands lay billions of atrocities. Those hands also held power.
The Dark Side held sway here. Fear was its ammunition.
See Evil. Hear Evil. Speak Evil.
Thanks for sharing, and welcome to Jedi Council fanfiction!
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earlybird-obi-wan
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5/15 10:00pm
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RE: *See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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Great job on this Dark vignette.
Loved your writing 
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KELIA
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5/16 3:53am
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RE: *See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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Ooohhh that was chilling!
But you captured Sidious' character perfectly.
Great job
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Takianna
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Great job! Such a description of the Imperial Center! Loved it. You really captured the darkness which penetrated Palpatine.
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"Hi, Mama," he said. "Your little boy's back."
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Anduli_Vader
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5/17 6:59pm
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RE: *See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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earlybird-obi-wan posted:
Great job on this Dark vignette.
Loved your writing
Thank you earlybird-obi-wan! Like the name btw
TaRionne posted:
Great job! I loved your use of description and language.
Some lines I especially enjoyed:
Imperial Center was bloody tonight.
The sunset was crimson, flared with touches of gold, a curtain of blood edged with hope that was nearly shut out.
In those hands lay billions of atrocities. Those hands also held power.
The Dark Side held sway here. Fear was its ammunition.
See Evil. Hear Evil. Speak Evil.
Thanks for sharing, and welcome to Jedi Council fanfiction!
I am always glad to share plot bunnies TaRionne!
KELIA posted:
Ooohhh that was chilling!
But you captured Sidious' character perfectly.
Great job
Thanks Kelia ! I love your work. Palpatine isn't one of my usuals, but I was trying to step outside my comfort zone.
Takianna posted:
Great job! Such a description of the Imperial Center! Loved it. You really captured the darkness which penetrated Palpatine.
I like your name, Takianna ! Thank you for the critique, all of you!
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Helen_Taft
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5/18 12:58pm
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RE: *See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Speak No Evil* Palpatine/Vader Vignette, First Fic!
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First fic? Wow!  This is excellent. Great descriptive visuals and a seriously creepy and evil Sidious. I have to say that my favourite bit was Vader, especially this:
A voice wailed in fear as he walked and his eyes started to turn toward the sound. He stopped himself and walked on, ignoring the sound. It was long ago that he would have helped someone who was in trouble. Now he had his own worries, and the grim delight of his fragmented mind laughed as the wail turned to frightened sobs, crumpling into a scream and deafening silence.
I loved how you had him hesitate, as if his first instinct was to help, only to have it be quashed almost the same moment by the darkside that dominated him.
I also liked Vader's initial response to Sidious' demand that Luke be killed, saying that he couldn't be that much of a threat...a kneejerk attempt to protect his son. *sigh* 
Great job!
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