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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 7/16/08 12:21pm Subject: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	Title: Pieces Characters: Padmé Timeframe: ROTS Genre: Poem (of sorts), Angst Author's Notes: I've never written anything in this style before, so my apologies in advance. cringes as she hits the post key Pieces The pieces lay shattered now Broken and abandoned at my feet Scattered to the winds Fodder to the creatures that scurry the ground The pain left behind is unbearable A fire that smolders and sears Unending in its brutality Relentless in its consumption It cares not that I beg for mercy Compassion is not in its nature I chose to taste its sweet nectar It now demands nothing less than my soul in return The ache burrows ever deeper Settling into my very core Its poison seeping, festering Claiming what is left of this hollow shell as its own I grow weary of resistance It is a futile endeavor It whispers to me, scoffs at my weakness I am its prisoner, and it is my penance I hear their cries as if from a distance It is my one regret But my surrender is now complete Where I once longed to be whole, I now long only for release It is love that was our undoing And that must now be their salvation It is love that will breathe life Into a heart now closed and empty It is a lesson we all must learn Yet often it is learned too late Love is a powerful weapon And it must be wielded wisely, my little ones But some things, once broken Even love in its power cannot mend The pieces scattered and too many The pain more than even love can withstand With shattered heart and broken soul I close my eyes in willing surrender Knowing that it was indeed love that brought us here To this time, to this place But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home. -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 7/16/08 1:45pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	It cares not that I beg for mercy Compassion is not in its nature I chose to taste its sweet nectar It now demands nothing less than my soul in return Whoa. And that's a GREAT whoa, not a "I can't believe she posted that!" whoa. Simply stunning. And that last line... You're such a talented writer, and you've proven that yet again. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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VAPa Registered: Jul '08	Date Posted: 7/16/08 5:34pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	It cares not that I beg for mercy Compassion is not in its nature I chose to taste its sweet nectar It now demands nothing less than my soul in return The ache burrows ever deeper Settling into my very core Its poison seeping, festering Claiming what is left of this hollow shell as its own Poor Padme, she paid the ultimate price when she fell in love with Anakin. Painfully poignant but so beautifully written.
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AnakinLuver Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 7/16/08 8:08pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home. Tore right through my heart... Rachel Rose -----signature----- e-sister to Dee and Crystal and Alley! Star Wars, Twilight, and Superheros - Trio of my Life Proud Cheesehead & Movie Fanatic** Edward: "Do you want me to sing to you? I'll sing all night if it will keep the bad dreams away."
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KotOR_girl Registered: Jun '07	Date Posted: 7/17/08 2:28am Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	Wow, beautiful piece. Very touching and sad. -----signature----- "You are people !" Zayne Carrick
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KELIA Title: The Pretty in Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/17/08 5:00am Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	WOW That was very poignant and powerfully written Bravo! -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 NaNaWriMo Progress: 32,105
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Takianna Registered: Apr '05	Date Posted: 7/17/08 8:14am Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	Gina posted: With shattered heart and broken soul I close my eyes in willing surrender So poignent! Great writing! I think you did an excellent job with this! -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29819847/p1 *** Loves those Republic Twinkies Friend of Mrs. Ben C. Blocked
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ratna Registered: Mar '07	Date Posted: 7/17/08 9:52pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home. Yeah, I loved that line, too. The best! -----signature----- “What we measure affects what we do. If we have the wrong metrics, we will strive for the wrong things.” Joseph E. Stiglitz
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 8/6/08 1:42pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	VaderLVR64 Thank you. You know how much that means to me. VAPa Yes, she did. If only things could have turned out differently for them. glares at evil Palpy AnakinLuver I'll take that as a compliment. LOL! Thanks for reading! KotOR_girl Thank you very much! KELIA I thank you for your kind words. Takianna Thank you! This was my first attempt at this style, so I'm glad to know you enjoyed it. ratna That was one of my favorite parts, too! Thanks for your review! -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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Lady_Skywalker87 Registered: Aug '08	Date Posted: 8/6/08 2:09pm Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	But some things, once broken Even love in its power cannot mend The pieces scattered and too many The pain more than even love can withstand With shattered heart and broken soul I close my eyes in willing surrender Knowing that it was indeed love that brought us here To this time, to this place But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home. WOW! Just beautiful!!! It brought tears to my eyes...poor padme.. grea job!!! -----signature----- 5/19/09:10 Years of the Beginngi!4 Years of the End! Attachment:a feeling that binds one to a person, thing, cause, ideal, or the like; devotion; regard.Attachment itself is not the problem.The prob is attaching yourself like Ani did!
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 9/7/08 6:07am Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	Lady_Skywalker87 Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 9/17/08 4:43am Subject: RE: Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
	Lovely work - I think you've done a great job capturing Padmé and all the tragedy in her death. I was especially struck by the conflict between the twins and what they meant for her and that overwhelming hopelessness and loss she felt with Anakin's fall.
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