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Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
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Gina
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Jun '03
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Date Posted:
7/16 12:21pm
Subject:
Pieces ~ A /P Poem, ROTS
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Title: Pieces
Characters: Padmé
Timeframe: ROTS
Genre: Poem (of sorts), Angst
Author's Notes: I've never written anything in this style before, so my apologies in advance.  *cringes as she hits the post key*
Pieces
The pieces lay shattered now
Broken and abandoned at my feet
Scattered to the winds
Fodder to the creatures that scurry the ground
The pain left behind is unbearable
A fire that smolders and sears
Unending in its brutality
Relentless in its consumption
It cares not that I beg for mercy
Compassion is not in its nature
I chose to taste its sweet nectar
It now demands nothing less than my soul in return
The ache burrows ever deeper
Settling into my very core
Its poison seeping, festering
Claiming what is left of this hollow shell as its own
I grow weary of resistance
It is a futile endeavor
It whispers to me, scoffs at my weakness
I am its prisoner, and it is my penance
I hear their cries as if from a distance
It is my one regret
But my surrender is now complete
Where I once longed to be whole, I now long only for release
It is love that was our undoing
And that must now be their salvation
It is love that will breathe life
Into a heart now closed and empty
It is a lesson we all must learn
Yet often it is learned too late
Love is a powerful weapon
And it must be wielded wisely, my little ones
But some things, once broken
Even love in its power cannot mend
The pieces scattered and too many
The pain more than even love can withstand
With shattered heart and broken soul
I close my eyes in willing surrender
Knowing that it was indeed love that brought us here
To this time, to this place
But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home.
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A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force.
She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave.
- Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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VaderLVR64
Title: Fan Fic Manager Digging out from Fay
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Feb '04
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Date Posted:
7/16 1:45pm
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It cares not that I beg for mercy
Compassion is not in its nature
I chose to taste its sweet nectar
It now demands nothing less than my soul in return
Whoa.  And that's a GREAT whoa, not a "I can't believe she posted that!" whoa.  Simply stunning. And that last line...   You're such a talented writer, and you've proven that yet again.
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They call me NANA Vader.
At least she doesn't lack confidence...
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VAPa
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Jul '08
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Date Posted:
7/16 5:34pm
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It cares not that I beg for mercy
Compassion is not in its nature
I chose to taste its sweet nectar
It now demands nothing less than my soul in return
The ache burrows ever deeper
Settling into my very core
Its poison seeping, festering
Claiming what is left of this hollow shell as its own
Poor Padme, she paid the ultimate price when she fell in love with Anakin. 
Painfully poignant but so beautifully written.
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AnakinLuver
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7/16 8:08pm
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But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home.
Tore right through my heart...
Rachel Rose 
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KotOR_girl
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Jun '07
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7/17 2:28am
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Wow, beautiful piece. Very touching and sad.
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KELIA
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7/17 5:00am
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WOW
That was very poignant and powerfully written
Bravo!
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Takianna
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7/17 8:14am
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Gina posted:
With shattered heart and broken soul
I close my eyes in willing surrender
So poignent! Great writing! I think you did an excellent job with this!
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ratna
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7/17 9:52pm
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But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home.
Yeah, I loved that line, too. The best!
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Gina
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Jun '03
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Date Posted:
8/6 1:42pm
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VaderLVR64
Thank you. You know how much that means to me. 
VAPa
Yes, she did. If only things could have turned out differently for them. *glares at evil Palpy*
AnakinLuver
I'll take that as a compliment. LOL! Thanks for reading!
KotOR_girl
Thank you very much! 
KELIA
I thank you for your kind words.
Takianna
Thank you! This was my first attempt at this style, so I'm glad to know you enjoyed it.
ratna
That was one of my favorite parts, too! Thanks for your review!
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A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force.
She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave.
- Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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Lady_Skywalker87
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8/6 2:09pm
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But some things, once broken
Even love in its power cannot mend
The pieces scattered and too many
The pain more than even love can withstand
With shattered heart and broken soul
I close my eyes in willing surrender
Knowing that it was indeed love that brought us here
To this time, to this place
But it is the Darkness, my Knight, that now carries me home.
WOW! Just beautiful!!! It brought tears to my eyes...poor padme.. grea job!!!
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