Author Topic: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 11/7 Xan and Obi encounter
GeneralKenobi7  847 posts
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Date Posted: 6/21 5:38am Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 6/20 Thanks for the nom(s)!
Striding forward, she smacked him upside the head. “That’s for me having to come to your rescue.”
Yay! Another woman who has things well in hand wink

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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6129_Anakin Skywalker
Date Posted: 6/30 5:18am Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 6/20 Thanks for the nom(s)!
Valairy_Scot: Ah, now we really veer into unknown territory as to what's to come. Nice update. Thank you happy We'll be getting back to Obi-Wan and Xanatos soon.

GeneralKenobi7: Striding forward, she smacked him upside the head. “That’s for me having to come to your rescue.”
Yay! Another woman who has things well in hand
Yep happy I hope i write her well. She's supposed to have dry humor but humor is not a strong point for me.

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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6129_Anakin Skywalker
Date Posted: 7/3 5:29pm Subject: RE: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
A/N: Descent into Darkness has qualified for the Best Drama category. Does anyone have any ideas of what scene I should use as the excerpt?

This chapter is short, but i thought i would post it now since next week is going to be busier and i probably won't be near the computer much. Enjoy grin

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Chapter 14

Zane’s eyelids slowly flickered open and for a moment he simply stared at the ceiling. A noise to his left caused him to turn his head and he watched in confusion as he saw Darra enter with a tray of food.

“Oh good, you’re awake. How are you feeling?”

“Darra?” he croaked out. He wet his lips and swallowed, trying to get some moisture into his parched throat. “What are you doing here? He looked around the rest of the room, confusion marring his face. “Where am I?”

Darra set the tray on the bare dresser top and sat down on the edge of the bed. “You’re back at the Lars. You’ve been unconscious for several hours.”

Zane pushed himself up into a sitting position and bit back a groan as his whole body protested. He felt as if a herd of Banthas had trampled him. He relaxed his back against the wall at the head of the bed and massaged his temples, wanting the fog in his brain to completely lift.

Darra handed him a cup of water and Zane gratefully took it and slowly sipped at it. He gave the cup back to Darra after finishing half the water and closed his eyes, using the Force to help clear away the rest of the fog. “What happened? Is Shmi safe?”

“Mrs. Skywalker is recovering, she’s in a bacta tank now.” Darra answered. “You don’t remember what happened?”

Zane frowned as he tried to remember and then, in a heartbeat it all came back to him. Horror filled him and his whole body tensed. The color drained from his face and he looked at Darra with wide eyes. “Is Anakin all right? What about the Tuskens? I didn’t mean to do it…I just…I just.” He shook his head, his breathing coming in ragged gasps.

Darra sat closer to Zane and wrapped her arms around Zane in a tight hug, feeling his whole body tremble. “Shh, calm down. Anakin is fine, just tired. Only two tuskens died, the rest fled the camp.”

Zane shook his head and pulled away from her. “No, it’s not alright. I shouldn’t have lost control. I’m better than that. I could have killed everyone in that camp.”

“What happened?” Darra asked softly.

“I panicked.” He looked at the wall opposite Darra for a moment, swallowed and turned his gaze back to her. “Shmi was dying, we weren’t going to be able to get her proper medical help in time. I unblocked my ability to detect medical conditions based on a person’s signature in the Force and how long they have to live so that I could get a better assessment of her condition.”

Zane looked down at the green comforter and picked at a stray piece of thread for minute before continuing. “It magnified her pain, I could sense all of her emotions. I could also fully sense Anakin’s pain at the thought of losing his mother, the anger he was feeling, the frustration, the fear. I thought of my Master, how I failed to save him, my anger at the council, my own frustration. It just all built and in the midst of all that I had a brief vision of a possible outcome and that caused me to snap. I sent out a wave of burning Force from the outside of the hut. I felt it move from the hut, heard the screams of tuskens.”

His eyes burned with unshed tears and he turned his head away from her. “Anakin tried to stop me, but instead became trapped as I began pouring Force and life energy into Shmi. Anakin became like a conduct for a time, and then, I’m not sure how, it’s all fuzzy to me, but he slowed down the amount of energy I was pouring into Shmi and used his own energy to heal Shmi instead.”

“You’re not the only one who has ever panicked and lost control before. No one is perfect. Be thankful that the results were less severe than they could have been.” Darra told him.

Zane looked back at Darra, “Was it really?” He turned over onto his other side and laid back down.

“Zane—”

“I want to be alone right now.” He said, his voice cracking.

“And let you wallow? I don’t think so.” Darra responded.

Zane plopped the pillow over his pounding head, trying hard to ignore Darra. His mind still felt so raw. His ability was still unshielded, letting him sense with enhanced clarity pain, emotions, death, and illnesses. His efforts to rebuild the block were slow and unsteady. He hadn’t realized how much his ability had grown, despite the block he had put around it, was not prepared for the consequences of releasing the block.

He felt Darra’s gentle Force caress on his mind, felt her create a protective Force bubble around him that temporarily blocked his ability.

“You need to learn how to properly use this gift Zane, not keep it under a complete block.”

“I know, but it’s worse than Force visions. Force visions I can handle, this ‘gift’ as you call it, is completely different.”

“Is it? When you described it to me a couple years ago it sounded more like an enhanced version of a regular Force sense, but separate. You just need to build up a different filter and shield.”

“Sure, I could, but I won’t.”

Darra frowned and yanked the pillow away from him. “And have what happened earlier happen again? You can’t keep blocking and ignoring it forever.”

Zane ventured a glance at Darra and saw her eyes narrowed in a glare before looking away. “I can try.”

“You are being impossible.” And with that she stood up and left the room.

~*~*~

Anakin woke up a couple of hours later and after he had gone to the refresher and gotten some food he was feeling more like his regular self. He was just finishing washing up the dishes when Padme walked into the kitchen.

“How are you feeling?”

“Better.” Anakin said as he placed a plate into the drying rack next to the sink. He wiped his hands on a towel and turned to face Padme. “How’s my mom doing?”

“She’s improving. The med droid is certain she’ll make a full recovery.” Padme answered.

Darra walked into the kitchen then and got herself a cold glass of juice before sitting down on a chair at the table. “Does the Council even know that you guys took a side trip to Tatooine?”

Anakin scratched the back of his neck as he sat down at the table and Padme left the room. “No, but we did go to Naboo first like we were supposed to. We’re planning on returning early tomorrow so no one will get suspicious.”

“They’re going to ask questions you know if any one of them sensed that ruckus you and Zane made in the Force.” Darra said before sipping at her juice.

“They’ll question you too when you don’t arrive back at the Temple at the time you are supposed to.” Anakin responded with a smirk.

Darra frowned. “I’ll figure something out.” A smile twitched her lips. “Although, you should be the one to worry since the Council is more likely to scrutinize your actions and Zane’s then they would mine.”

Anakin shrugged and leaned back in his seat with his arms crossed. “So they watch us somewhat closely. The closer they watch, the more likely they’ll fall on their collective noses.”

“Anakin!” Darra said in shock.

“Sorry.” Anakin stood up and headed for the doorway. “I’m going to check on Zane.”

Darra shook her head and downed the rest of juice. Boys.

~*~*~

Zane sat on the floor of the bedroom, his legs crossed and eyes closed. His latest attempt at meditation was fruitless and only made him grow more frustrated. He opened his eyes and saw Anakin walk into the room.

Anakin spotted the tray of uneaten food on the dresser top and noted the absence of heat coming from the once hot food through the Force. He sat down across from Zane, and studied him for a moment. “You’re looking better.”

“Look yes, feel no.” Zane shook his head. “Darra is right, I should learn to properly use my gift instead of blocking it. I could have hurt many others because of my lack of control.”

“It isn’t lack of control, Zane. You have plenty of that. You just weren’t prepared. I don’t blame you for what happened.”

Zane pressed his lips together in a thin white line. “The Council is sure to find out, someone would have sensed what happened.”

“Maybe, and maybe they’ll simply have Obi-Wan look into the matter and he’ll appease the Council for us. He’s done it before.”

Zane’s lips twitched. “He has.”

“Would you like me to help you meditate?”

Zane nodded his head and the two friends fell into a meditation trance. Anakin helped Zane sort through his emotions and discard the negative ones into the Force and helped him to rebuild the block around his gift until Zane had someone to help him learn how to use the gift without negative consequences.

 

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Valairy_Scot  4120 posts
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Date Posted: 7/3 7:09pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
A
/N: Descent into Darkness has qualified for the Best Drama category. Does anyone have any ideas of what scene I should use as the excerpt?


How about Xan/Qui scene or Darra coming to the boys assistance? Either one is dramatically strong, and, um, less tied to canon.

That being said, nice update...oh boy, though, is something going to hit the fan next chapter?

 

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earlybird-obi-wan  5886 posts
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Date Posted: 7/3 11:38pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
Nice update and for excerpt, concentrate on Zane and Darra.

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bogan_sith 
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Date Posted: 7/5 4:26am Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note

“We managed to stop the potential eternal bleeding, but she’s not out of danger yet.”

Well I bloody well hope so!

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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6129_Anakin Skywalker
Date Posted: 7/12 12:57pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
Valairy_Scot: That being said, nice update...oh boy, though, is something going to hit the fan next chapter? Something will hit the fan, but will it be what you think it will be? grin

earlybird-obi-wan: Nice update and for excerpt, concentrate on Zane and Darra.

A great story
Thank you happy

bogan_sith: “We managed to stop the potential eternal bleeding, but she’s not out of danger yet.”

Well I bloody well hope so!
I wasn't to happy with that part and it will be one of the scenes that i'm going to rewrite later on. Do you know of any thread that talks about Shmi's injuries?

 

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GeneralKenobi7  847 posts
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Date Posted: 7/20 1:25am Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
I'm late, I know sad
But the chapter was good as always.
So when they get into trouble they just send Obi-Wan to appease the Council? Very clever tongue

 

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AZURASKYE 
Registered: Jun '07
7464_Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
Date Posted: 8/19 3:06pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
jacen just curious have you abandoned this fic?

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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6129_Anakin Skywalker
Date Posted: 8/19 6:00pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
GeneralKenobi7: I'm late, I know
But the chapter was good as always.
Thank you happy
So when they get into trouble they just send Obi-Wan to appease the Council? Very clever Yep grin

AZURASKYE: jacen just curious have you abandoned this fic? Nope, just been busy with work. I am still trying to decide what point of view would work best for the next chapter too, so... I will do my best to update quickly grin

 

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lilacph 
Registered: Jan '09
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Date Posted: 9/9 10:32pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
Really sorry for the lack of responses from me. DRL has been running over me with a bulldozer the last several months.

I'm looking forward to scenes with the entire Kenobi family together. I'm interested to see how she interacts with Obi-Wan, Zane, and Anakin. I'd also like to see how she and Padmé would interact.

I'm glad you included Darra. I was always under the impression that her death was another notch on the "Why Anakin went bad" counter.

On a side note, why does Darra keep referring to Shmi as Mrs. Skywalker? Wouldn't Shmi be Mrs. Lars instead?

Update soon! happy

 

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AZURASKYE 
Registered: Jun '07
7464_Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
Date Posted: 10/13 8:31pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
jace at this point really don't care how short or crazy it sounds, just, PLEASE, give us a post soon.

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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6129_Anakin Skywalker
Date Posted: 11/7 7:57pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 7/3 and Author's Note
lilacph: Really sorry for the lack of responses from me. DRL has been running over me with a bulldozer the last several months. That's quite okay. Full time work has left me feeling like i had more time at college.

I'm looking forward to scenes with the entire Kenobi family together. I'm interested to see how she interacts with Obi-Wan, Zane, and Anakin. I'd also like to see how she and Padmé would interact. Mmm.

I'm glad you included Darra. I was always under the impression that her death was another notch on the "Why Anakin went bad" counter. Thank you happy I hope i do her character justice.

On a side note, why does Darra keep referring to Shmi as Mrs. Skywalker? Wouldn't Shmi be Mrs. Lars instead? *chuckles* Lack of information. She'll be corrected eventually.

Update soon! One short post coming up.

AZURASKYE: jace at this point really don't care how short or crazy it sounds, just, PLEASE, give us a post soon. ok, i will. happy

 

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jacen200015  4777 posts
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Date Posted: 11/7 8:00pm Subject: RE: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 11/7 Xan and Obi encounter
Chapter 15 Part A

Xanatos looked down at the lines of armored clones, his hands gripping the steel bar until his knuckles grew white. A frown marred his features. Clones, hundreds and hundreds of clones made for a single purpose, to destroy.

After leaving the Temple, he had gone straight to Kamino, a world he had done a research project on many years ago when he had still been a Jedi apprentice. So while he knew of the fact that the Kaminoans were cloners, it was a shock to him to find out that they were in the process of mass producing an army.

It was a stunning wake up call to him, reminding him that there were things happening in the galaxy as a whole. For a long time his sole focus had been getting revenge on his former Master, but even that was distracted by the presence of Obi-Wan’s son and Obi-Wan’s apprentice. Zane’s interactions with Qui-Gon and vise versa had intrigued him to the point where he only subtly affected events in order to see the outcome.

It was strange for him to watch as Qui-Gon not only became a father figure to Obi-Wan, but also a doting grandfather to Zane. When he had been Qui-Gon’s apprentice it had been strictly a Master and Padawan relationship, nothing else.

A spike in the Force broke him from his thoughts and after a brief search through the Force, he sensed Obi-Wan’s presence approaching the balcony he was at. What is he doing here? Pushing himself away from the railing, Xanatos presented himself as a picture of perfect calm as he awaited Obi-Wan’s arrival and hid himself in a shadowed area of the balcony.

The door that led to the balcony that overlooked the parade ground slid up with barely a sound and Obi-Wan entered, along with Lama Su and Taun We.

“Magnificent, aren’t they?” Xanatos’ heard Lama Su say as the group looked out over the marching clone troopers.

Xanatos stepped out of the shadows, unmasking his Force presence as he did so. It was time to find out if the Jedi knew anything about this creation of clone troopers. “Indeed, your work here is flawless.”

Obi-Wan stiffened, his hand coming to rest on his lightsaber as he turned in the direction of Xanatos’ voice. “Xanatos, this is an unexpected surprise.”

Xanatos’ lips quirked as he sensed Obi-Wan’s true feelings underneath his face of calm. As Xanatos expected, his appearance was rather unwelcomed by Obi-Wan. “Yes, and on the most unlikely of planets.” Xanatos looked at the two Kaminoans and gave a short bow. “Will you please excuse us, I have business to discuss with my friend here.”

The Kaminoans nodded and left the balcony. Once the door had closed shut behind the Kaminoans, Obi-Wan openly glared at Xanatos. “What are you doing here?”

“I should ask the same of you.” Xanatos crossed his arms over his chest, his eyes noting how Obi-Wan’s fingers curled around his lightsaber. “Have the Jedi stooped so low that they have authorized the creation of a clone army for the Republic?”

“No, the Jedi Council would never allow something like this.” Obi-Wan answered. “This looks like something you would devise.”

Xanatos snorted, “A galaxy wide war has never been on my agenda. Besides, I’m not the only former Jedi in the galaxy.”

“You’re suggesting a former Jedi has something to do with the creation of the clone army?”

“No, you’re the one that suggested it in your accusation towards me. Therefore there must be something you know that I do not.” Xanatos retorted.

“Possibly.” Obi-Wan closely scrutinized Xanatos, and in the Force could feel no hostile intentions towards him no matter how hard he looked. “Prime Minister Lama Su told me that it was Jedi Master Sifo-Dyas who placed the order to have the clone army created almost ten years ago.”

Xanatos frowned, his eyes narrowing. “That doesn’t make any sense. I remember that he was prone to having visions of the future, but to go behind the Council’s back?”

“There’s always a first time.”

“And his last time apparently since he conveniently disappeared after this order was placed.” Xanatos responded.

“That’s assuming he didn’t just disappear and then placed the order after his disappearance.”

Xanatos scowled. “This conversation is becoming pointless. Time is being wasted. As much as you would like to believe that I’m behind this abomination of an army, you have nothing but bias from the past for proof!”

Obi-Wan tightened his hand around his lightsaber, his eyes cold. “You still have not told me why you are here.”

“My business is my own and will not be compromised by your misplaced suspicions!” Xanatos said and then turned around sharply on his heel and headed for the exit.

 

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Valairy_Scot  4120 posts
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Date Posted: 11/7 8:48pm Subject: Descent Into Darkness AOTC AU A/P, Z/?, O/S, Xan. Updated 11/7 Xan and Obi encounter
Oh, oh - Obi and Xan. Intriguing.

 

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