Saga Planet of Death (One Post) Obi-Wan and Anakin [Anyone want a sequel?

Title: Planet of Death
Author: jacen200015
Timeframe: Four years after TPM
Characters: Obi-Wan, Anakin
Genre: Angst, Vignette
Keywords: Obi-Wan
Summary: Obi-Wan brings Anakin to his home world to find only death.
Notes: Originally this was written for a challenge but I never posted it. I edited it so hopefully the tenses are fixed.
Tissue Warning! Character death!

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I limp over to the still body of my padawan and kneel down next to him on the dry yellow grass.

Anakin?s forehead is damp with perspiration, his cheeks flushed with fever.

Gently I lift Anakin?s head enough to trickle some water from a canteen into his mouth. ?Come on padawan, drink it.? I said softly, my voice quavering.

It had been a week already and still no sign of rescue was in sight. It was only a little more then a week ago I had decided to take Anakin on a training exercise on my home planet. I decided not to tell the council exactly where we were going so that we wouldn?t be disturbed. How I regret that decision now. Anakin was so excited at the chance to check out my birthplace only to find out that it was a deathtrap.

Tears threatened to escape my eyes as I laid Anakin?s head back down on the ground and covered him with my robe.

Things had changed so much since I had visited my parents when I was fourteen. Anakin and I had landed near one of the settlements quickly realizing that all was not right. When we had entered the settlement in which I had been born in, what we found was disturbing. It was empty, completely devoid of life. Wind blew through the cracked walls of the buildings creating a mournful wail.

We should have left right then but I was determined to find out what had happened. Anakin was reluctant but obeyed me without question, yet every time he looked into my eyes I saw a hidden fear.

I dismissed it without thought and we went about looking for clues to the inhabitants? disappearance. Hours later we came across the remains of a huge pier in the middle of the dusty street. There lay bits of burned bones, clothing and ashes.

Anakin pleaded with me that we should go back home, yet again I did not heed his words. We found an old speeder and managed to coax it to run. Through the night we traveled till we reached another settlement that I remembered my Master telling me about.

It was there that we found the same thing and more. Wild Guames had overrun the settlement and we barely escaped with our lives. Guames are four legged beasts that are four feet tall with wicked fangs coming out of their mouths. Their hair is spiky, pale yellow in color. Their tail is scaly like a reptilian?s hide and as thick as both of my fists put together.

Leaving the settlement I let my padawan drive back to our ship as I let my thoughts drift. I must have fallen asleep because the next thing I knew it was the next morning. We had stopped near a small stream and Anakin was busy fiddling with the engine. I found out that he had been working on it all night with no success. His actions betrayed the fear in his eyes, fear of what I didn?t understand.

I set up a small camp and let Anakin sleep for most of the morning. Once he woke up we would walk the rest of the way back to the ship.

That afternoon we set off and finally reached our ship?s destination by nightfall.

We found our ship, what was left of it, that night. Something had torn the ship apart, and had eten through most of the ship like acid. The remains of the hull glowed a bright red and green smoke rose from the still melting metal.

Anakin went to see if there was anything left to salvage while I looked on. My stomach burned and inside my mouth tasted bitter as the green smoke continued to curl up from the remains of the ship. Unable to take it anymore I collapsed on the ground and cried till I had no tears left.

I woke up the next morning to find myself covered with a blanket and a small campfire a few feet away. Anakin was no where to be seen.

 

NOOOO!!!!!!

It was so well written, but NOOOO!

 

The warning didnt help much but thanx any ways.

NOOOO!!!!!

Very well written!

NOOOOOO!!!!!

 

VaderLVR64: NOOOO!!!!!!

It was so well written, but NOOOO! Thanks, Sorry i made you cry. Perhaps I should make a happy one post to cheer you up.

padmay_skywalker: The warning didnt help much but thanx any ways. Well I tried.

NOOOO!!!!!

Very well written!

NOOOOOO!!!!! Thanks. Perhaps i should write another one poster with no angst. Well, maybe a little bit.

 

You killed Obi!

Ugh, that was heartbreaking, the way he poured his life into Anakin. Just the sort of thing he would do. But what was even sadder was the state of his home planet. That was creepy.

 

That was amazing! I loved how Obi-Wan was willing to sacrifice himself to save Anakin. Fantastic job!

And, maybe this is because I am a Sith, but I didn't mind the Obi death.

Again, great job!

Ani-maniac

 

OMG! That was so evil of you!

wonderfully written, and a very good twist..because obviously, I thought Anakin was going to die and then...

The descriptions of the planet were very sad too.

But Obi-Wan did a noble thing..
I love the reunion with Qui.

Thank you for the read, and despite the warning, I simply must,

 

Very nicely done!

I thought Anakin was going to die, only Obi-Wan sacrificed himself to save him! But then Obi gets to be with Qui in the end, so he's happy!

So, why do I get the feeling that Anakin's not going to be very happy?

Oh well, you can't please everyone...

 

JadeSolo: You killed Obi! Yep. I did.

Ugh, that was heartbreaking, the way he poured his life into Anakin. Just the sort of thing he would do. But what was even sadder was the state of his home planet. That was creepy. It sure was.

Ani-maniac: That was amazing! I loved how Obi-Wan was willing to sacrifice himself to save Anakin. Fantastic job! Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.

And, maybe this is because I am a Sith, but I didn't mind the Obi death. Well it was either obi's life or Anakin's.

Again, great job! Thanks

JOINME: OMG! That was so evil of you! Yes I can be evil

wonderfully written, and a very good twist..because obviously, I thought Anakin was going to die and then... Thanks. Twists are fun

The descriptions of the planet were very sad too. It sure was.

But Obi-Wan did a noble thing.. Yes he did even though Anakin wouldn't agree.
I love the reunion with Qui. I'm glad

Thank you for the read, and despite the warning, I simply must, Here are some more tissues *hands over a box of tissues*

Star_Drifter: Very nicely done! Thanks

I thought Anakin was going to die, only Obi-Wan sacrificed himself to save him! But then Obi gets to be with Qui in the end, so he's happy!

So, why do I get the feeling that Anakin's not going to be very happy? I can name a couple of reasons

Oh well, you can't please everyone... True.

 

Oh, that was so sad. Well written, but sad. It was beautiful, the way Obi-Wan sacrificed himself for Anakin, the way a parent would for a child.

Well done!

 

So like Obi to sacrifice himself for his padawan. Heartbreaking!

 

How sad! But really well done. You showed the emotions wonderfully and I liked how you made me believe that it would be Anakin who'd die and then it was Obi-Wan. Hey, what am I saying? I liked it? Kill Anakin next time! I really enjoyed it.

 

Hey I found this again, and it's been a while since I read it, and so I thourougly enjoyed it oncemore.

except I still feel like



anyway more people need to read this. and cry. like me.

 

To echo everyone else...sad and yet wonderfully written!

Of course, Obi may have just driven Anakin to the dark side with his refusal to accept the loss of those he loves that is. Or, maybe not.

Loved the reunion between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon!

 

All I can say is

Bravo

 

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That's what I get, I suppose, for being intrigued but the title. This was wonderfully written, and oh so heart-wrenching. Poor, poor Obi-Wan! *sniffles*

Stormqueen

 

Gina: Oh, that was so sad. Well written, but sad. It was beautiful, the way Obi-Wan sacrificed himself for Anakin, the way a parent would for a child.

Well done! Thanks

whie_dreams: So like Obi to sacrifice himself for his padawan. Heartbreaking! It sure is.

Indra: How sad! But really well done. You showed the emotions wonderfully and I liked how you made me believe that it would be Anakin who'd die and then it was Obi-Wan. Hey, what am I saying? I liked it? Kill Anakin next time! I really enjoyed it. Thanks. Perhaps a sequel is in order?

JOINME: Hey I found this again, and it's been a while since I read it, and so I thourougly enjoyed it oncemore.

except I still feel like *hands over a box of tissus.*


anyway more people need to read this. and cry. like me.

bek: To echo everyone else...sad and yet wonderfully written! Thanks

Of course, Obi may have just driven Anakin to the dark side with his refusal to accept the loss of those he loves that is. Or, maybe not. Hmm. I think that question requires a sequel.

Loved the reunion between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon! Thanks

KELIA: All I can say is

Bravo This thread is sure filling with tears

stormqueen874: That's what I get, I suppose, for being intrigued but the title. This was wonderfully written, and oh so heart-wrenching. Poor, poor Obi-Wan! *sniffles* Thanks. I did my best

Anyone want a sequel? If I get enough responses, I'll write and post it after my finals are over

 

oh my...... you did an absolute wonderful work, really talended and the emotions wonderfuly displayed, but so sad I can believe Obi is dead, but it does sound like something he would do
I look forward to reeding more historys by you, you did an amazing job with this one

 

michaellover: oh my...... you did an absolute wonderful work, really talended and the emotions wonderfuly displayed, but so sad I can believe Obi is dead, but it does sound like something he would do
I look forward to reeding more historys by you, you did an amazing job with this one Thanks I'm glad you liked it.

 

The sequel is posted. Return To The Planet Of Death