Before - Legends Trust Me - Updated 3/18

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Good start

"May I join you?"

Siri looked up, surprised by the unfamiliar voice. Obi-Wan stood across the table a tray in his hands.

"Uhh...sure," she stammered the heat on her cheeks betraying her less than civil thoughts.

I thought it was good that he didn't speak to her after he sat down.
Let her think he just needed a place to sit
That would annoy her.

Sounds like their relationship in your story is going to be volatile.
Well at least on her side anyway.

Sounds interesting

 

That was a very lovely beginning.

It's interesting Obi-Wan would ask to sit with Siri and then not talk to her.

Looking forward to more

 

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"May I join you?"

Siri looked up, surprised by the unfamiliar voice. Obi-Wan stood across the table a tray in his hands.

"Uhh...sure," she stammered the heat on her cheeks betraying her less than civil thoughts.

Awww, somehow I found that really cute. Which probably wasn?t the point. LOL!!!

Well, I just loved this start and I?m looking forward to read more. Oh, and if you know how to send pm?s then do you think that you could send me one whenever you update, and if you don?t, then say so and I can try and help you. Thanks.

EDIT: Oh, I posted while you did, well, I loved the second part as well, oh, love, you got to love it.

 

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Well, of course, I will help you, okay, so:

1. To send a pm you just have to look for the button that you can find a little bit everywhere, it?s marked with ?Private Message? and when you have gotten that far you have to make sure that the name of the person you want to send the pm to is there.
You can make sure of that by otherwise send a pm through that persons profile or through a post, because you can find a ?private message? button next to the ?edit? button.

2. When you send a pm to let someone know that your stoy has been updated then you just simply say it and I?m one of many that likes it when you get a link with so that would be a big +.

Anything else, oh, I would recommend you to have the pm list in your first post, that way you will always know which once to pm and then go after that, it's usually the easiest way.


If you have any other questions, or if this was a terrible explanation then let me know and I?ll try and do better, and I can even send you a pm if you want.

I hope that everything work out

 

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Oh cool update, I loved it but now I?m very curies to see what Obi-Wan is going to do.

Thanks for the pm and I?m really looking forward to read more.

 

This is a very nice story and I will be following this. I don't think anyone else has explored the dynamics between Obi-Wan and the other padawans after his return from Melida/Daan, so I find this very fascinating on that level.

Good job.

 

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One of the things I am curious about is how well you think I am keeping to the character's true personalities. What suggestions do you have for how I can improve this?

It seems to me to be ok, Obi-wan was a bit nervous
when he came back and embarrassed too
because of what he had done.
So he would act like that

But Siri probably would have made him squirm
more
But you are doing great it is
well written and interesting

Can you put me on your PM list please.

 

I think your doing pretty good Star_Writer, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this!

Please add me to the PM list.

TnTornado

 

Awww!!! Now that was sweet, but I can understand Siri?s way of thinking, cuz I would probably react the same way, yet I liked Obi-Wan in this because well, I guess that I never would have the guts to ask someone something like this myself.

Well, amazing update and thanks for the pm.

 

Her frowned deepened as she considered the idea again. Kenobi a friend? It was absurd, but for some strange reason the idea made her want to laugh. Then against her will she felt the corner of her mouth lift. She fought the smile for everything she was worth until she was able to subjugate it into an odd looking smirk.

?Sure Kenobi we can be friends.?

His eyes brightened and he let out the breath he had been holding.

That was cute. I think you're doing a great job.

 

Your story is very intriguing and characterizations done well.

Looking forward to their little sparring date

 

This is a really nice story! Lunch with Siri, pretty ambitious. Maybe Obi-Wan should've started with baby steps, saying "Hello" in a hallway.

You're doing a great job with the characters. I think Siri would've had a hard time trusting Obi-Wan after what he did, and Obi-Wan would've tried so hard to get people to trust him. Good tension between the two.

If you're PMing readers when you update, I'd love to be included.

 

Oh i just found this and it's looking good so far!

Please add me to ur PM list

 

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Hey! your back.

Great update, looking forward to more.

TnTornado

 

Cool add me to the PM list please!

 

I love it who could not

So Glad you've updated

 

I loved it .

Hmm, I wonder what?s up with Siri?s master.

Amazing update and thanks for the pm, now I?m really looking forward to read more.

 

Cool update

I look forward to reading what's going on

Tnx for the pm!