Saga Noble Jedi (fan fiction)

This is my first post. I would like to get some feedback on a
PREQUEL AU SHORT STORY (Anakin/Vader/Sidious/Qui-Gon). It has
a dark theme but is not too graphic.


'Noble Jedi'
by Laserwriter

Teaser: Qui-Gon survives the attack of Darth Maul, but he is
crippled. And though the Sith is killed by Obi-Wan, his spirit
lives on in his son.

* * *

The Son is not the Father!

Powerless, Qui-Gon Jinn had watched the slaughter from the high
chamber balcony. Scores of Jedi and Padawan-Jedi lay silent where
they had fallen. The killer clone troops, laser-blasting their way
through the grand corridors of the Jedi Temple, led by a depraved
traitor, now searched the chambers for the little ones. And soon
the enemy would discover him.

The Son is not the Father!

The kindly words, spoken in good faith, had been thrown asunder,
the promise of goodness and greatness wrenched away from the light
-- a vow blackened like the scorched wounds of the dead.

The Son is not the Father!

The recurring statement invoked a damning question: How could I
have been so wrong?...

For twenty years Qui-Gon had been paralyzed, chair bound. His body
was a useless shell, but his mind was undimmed, the Life Force
endured -- a Life Force that conveyed his noble image, that spoke
his noble thoughts. And there was no nobler place for a Jedi to
offer council than in the High Council Chamber on Coruscant,
as one of the elite Masters who presided over matters of Galactic
peacekeeping and Sith vigilance. Thus, five years ago, when
reports of a young warrior wielding a Sith weapon on faraway
Kessel reached the Council the matter was addressed. Obi-Wan
Kenobi was dispatched to the Outer Rim spice world to uncover
the truth.

The Jedi Knight discovered an angry youth, seventeen years old, who,
after his mother Shmi Skywalker had died, leaving him an orphan in a
dangerous, merciless world, had learnt to fend for himself. He joined
a band of mercenaries waging a spice war. He piloted a speeder with
skill and his weapon of choice was a red-bladed lightsaber.

The youth was apprehended by Kenobi, brought before the Jedi Council,
and a grievous truth was revealed. Anakin Skywalker was the offspring
of a Sith: the fearsome Darth Maul, who had forced himself on
Anakin's mother. Not long after, the tattooed villain fought and
felled Qui-Gon, and was then slain by Qui-Gon's apprentice, Kenobi
(then eighteen years old).

Though Anakin never knew his father, the Jedi Council saw him as an
emerging threat. The verdict was eleven to one: life imprisonment.

But Qui-Gon, the lone voice, sensed a goodness -- and a significance
-- in Anakin. He pleaded his case: the boy had killed war-faring
mercenaries. He was not evil. He had been misled. Qui-Gon requested
Jedi training for the boy. When it was refused, the Jedi Master
threatened to leave the Order. The Council relented. Qui-Gon
commenced the training of the Padawan and Obi-Wan completed it.
Anakin Skywalker grew to be a worthy Jedi Knight. Until this day...

Three masked troopers entered Qui-Gon's private chamber and reported
their find -- he the only Jedi not to be killed on sight. The
emotionless, faceless clones stood guard over him. Black smoke from
a blazing fire billowed outside the window, its deathly aroma
seeping into the room. Qui-Gon sensed that he was the last survivor
within the ruined Temple. And now the architect of that ruin,
Darth Sidious, strode into the room accompanied by his new disciple.
Both were cloaked in black.

Qui-Gon's spirit rose from his withered body and turned to meet them,
great sadness upon his face.

"Master Qui-Gon, as you see the revenge of the Sith is nigh."
Sidious sounded imperious, gloating. He directed his words to the
paralyzed Qui-Gon and not the ethereal spirit. "You survived my
first apprentice Maste

 

This is interesting. Wonder what Anakin-son-of-Maul looks like ....?

 

A great vignette with interesting possibilities