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Return To Cardaria - JA, Obi-torture/angst, sequel to "The Sorcerer's Apprentice"

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by p_stotts, Jul 11, 2001.

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  1. p_stotts

    p_stotts Jedi Master star 4

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    Okay, I won't be able to post every day on this one, because I'm helping Moonscribe write a story. So, my attention will be divided, but I'll try to get a post up several times a week. I'm going away for a long weekend in the Smokies this coming weekend, so I may or may not get another post up before Friday. If not, it will be next Tuesday. As always, enjoy:

    Return To Cardaria
    BY: p_stotts
    SETTING: 5 years pre-TPM, Obi-Wan is 20.
    CATEGORY: JA, Obi-torture/angst, Qui-angst.
    SUMMARY: Obi-Wan returns to Cardaria to face the demons of what happened to him there, but finds out the demons may be more than just nightmarish images.
    RATING: PG-13 for violence.
    DISCLAIMER: I still don?t own them...drat! Still can?t make money off them...double drat!
    FEEDBACK: Do you even have to ask?
    SPECIAL THANKS TO: As always, Moonscribe.


    Part 1

    Obi-Wan wearily lifted his head, straining against his bonds as he desperately tried to see through the murky darkness. Here and there he could make out beings flitting just beyond his senses. They?d dart at him quickly, reaching out with whip-like tentacles to lash at his exposed skin.

    He tried crying out in pain, but no sound came out. He tried calling to his master, but his bond was silent and dead. *No, * he cried in his mind, *please....merciful gods...not again. *

    Obi-Wan?s eyes flew open with a start, his breathing ragged and harsh. It took him a minute to realize he was safe in his own bed, then he quickly sat up, scooting back against the wall and hugging his knees to his chest. /Force, you?re almost twenty-one years old, Kenobi, / he scolded himself. /It?s just a little nightmare. Get over it! /

    But, he?d been telling himself the same thing for the past six months...ever since his return from Cardaria where he?d been brutally tortured and left for dead. The nightmares had been expected during his recovery...An-Paj had told him they were normal...his mind?s way of processing what had happened to him. The healer had also told him they?d pass. An-Paj had been wrong.

    Over the past six months, the nightmares had not only not gone away, they?d become more frequent and more disturbing. It was getting so he hardly slept anymore, and he was almost to the point that he was afraid to go to sleep...afraid that the nightmares would come. During the day, he could bury the dark thoughts, and push them away to the nether reaches of his mind. But, at night, when he was asleep, the dark images came out to torment him...and he?d been helpless to stop it from happening.

    Knowing from experience that trying to sleep anymore would be useless, Obi-Wan got out of bed with a defeated sigh, and quickly dressed. Checking to make sure he hadn?t woke his master, he slipped out of the apartment and headed for the training rooms. At least he could put all this restless energy to some kind of use before the day began in earnest.

    *****

    ?It?s getting worse, An-Paj,? said Qui-Gon in a quiet, yet strained voice. ?Obi-Wan doesn?t think I know, but he?s still having nightmares. He never even sleeps through the night anymore. I?m getting worried about him.?

    The blue healer leaned back in his desk chair, steepling his fingers in a gesture that reminded the Jedi master very much of his friend, Mace Windu. ?I?ve tried talking to him about this several different times, Qui-Gon,? An-Paj said finally. ?He?s refused help in dealing with it...says he can handle it himself.?

    Qui-Gon leaned forward and fixed the healer with a serious stare. ?Well, that doesn?t seem to be the case.?

    An-Paj sighed heavily. ?I know that, and you know that...but, Obi-Wan still thinks he can deal with this on his own. He?s not a child anymore, Qui-Gon. Until he realizes that he needs help, anything that you or I, or anyone else tries to do to help him will be wasted effort. I?m afraid he?s going to have to reach a breaking point before things start to get better.?

    ?Well, at the rate things are going, that shouldn?t be too far off,? commented Qui-Gon with a worried look.

     
  2. ApprenticeM

    ApprenticeM Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Obi, when are you going to learn you can't handle things on your own!! Talk to Qui- Gon soon! On second thought, don't, cause then we'll get more Obi torture/angst...... ;)

    I just love sequels p_stotts :)
     
  3. Obi the Kid

    Obi the Kid Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Apr 13, 2000
    Obi nightmares mean Obi angst!!! WOOHOO!
     
  4. p_stotts

    p_stotts Jedi Master star 4

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    Yeah...poor Obi. Too stubborn sometimes for his own good. ;) Hope to have more soon.
     
  5. Jenny_The_Jedi

    Jenny_The_Jedi Jedi Youngling star 1

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    HERE I JUST FOUND THIS OH MY GOD I LOVE IT ALREADY HOPE THERE WILL BE MORE UP SOON I AM DYING HERE AND I HOPE OBIWAN SEE'S HE NEEDS HIS MASTER'S HELP!!!!!!! :_| :)
     
  6. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    Jan 21, 2000
    sequal WAHOO!!!!!!!
     
  7. Abbi_Cee

    Abbi_Cee Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Jul 3, 2000
    You've started another one! Great! :) Poor Obi(TM). So determined to be strong and not be a bother. Looking forward to your next and hope you have a good trip.
     
  8. DarkATX

    DarkATX Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Sep 14, 2000
    Great way to start it off...
    All the best on your trip...by all means, take your time with this one. We all love your quality over your quantity.
    ;)
     
  9. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    A sequel??? Already??? WHOO-HOO.

    Such forboding...Obi's having nightsmares and thinkd his master's unaware. Good thing he's not!

    Post often, post soon!! :) :)
     
  10. JediKnightZarc

    JediKnightZarc Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Oct 6, 2000
    Can it be true!? Can it be true!?

    Yes, a SEQUEL! YAY! Very interesting beginning. Poor Obi...more soon?

     
  11. Glad is June

    Glad is June Jedi Master star 4

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    Well that's our stubborn and headstrong Obi.

    A sequel so fast. YEAH!
     
  12. Ginger_Jedi

    Ginger_Jedi Jedi Knight star 6

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    A sequel! WOO HOO!!! Post soon PLEASE!!! Oh I'm soooo happy! (dances a jig)
     
  13. KenobisGirl

    KenobisGirl Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    A SEQUEL???? YAHOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! Thanx soooo much for continuing the story, absolutely LOVED the first one! POST SOON!!!!
    *~*AShley*~*
     
  14. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    A sequal!

    Boy, that's unoriginal. Hmmm, let me try again...

    Great start!

    Worse. How about...

    Yehaa! A new story!

    *pulls her own hair in frustration*

    Forget this.

    I especially like that Obi doesn't realize that Qui knows that he's not okay. Good work Qui! We are so proud of you! :D

    How's that?

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  15. Artemis_Silverbow

    Artemis_Silverbow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    That was fast [face_shocked] but then a sequel to a good story really can't come fast enough :D I notice you seem to be going for psychological, not physical, torture so far. Do you plan to keep it that way?
     
  16. p_stotts

    p_stotts Jedi Master star 4

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    Well, Artemis, that's the trouble with my stories...I never know exactly which direction they'll end up taking. So, to answer your question about physical torture...uh...I don't know. :D
     
  17. DarthIshtar

    DarthIshtar Chosen One star 10

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    Okay, I read all of The Sorcerer's Apprentice" and what you have of this so far in two sittings, so I'm going to have to learn to be patient while waiting for another fantastic post, but in the meantime, keep UP! the good work.
     
  18. p_stotts

    p_stotts Jedi Master star 4

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    Glad to have you, DarthIshtar! Got the rest of part 1 back from Moonscribe. Since she gave it her blessing, I'm posting it. I might possibly have another post before we leave on Friday for the weekend, but realistically, you probably won't see anymore of this story until Tuesday.

    Enjoy!

    *****

    Cestra sighed. Leaning her head on one hand, she stared listlessly at the computer screen as she used her other hand to scan through more records about Jedi history. While she found the subject more than fascinating, and was thrilled at the many connections she?d discovered between the Jedi and her own sorcerer?s clan on Cardaria, she still wasn?t happy.

    In her honest moments, Cestra had to admit she was homesick. She missed the lush green
    fields and dense woodlands of Cardaria. She missed her master, Balen. But, most of all,
    she missed Minah. She was eighteen seasons old now, and had at one time been Minah?s
    apprentice...that is until the young sorcerer had given up his training to become chieftain of the Cardarian people.

    She?d been able to stay in contact with her people over the previous six months because
    Master Yaddle?s padawan, a young girl named Bria had been staying with Balen on
    Cardaria, doing research into their own ancient history.

    Smiling, Cestra remembered how happy she?d been to learn that Balen had been able to
    restore Minah?s connection to the ancient power, an ability the sorcerer had suppressed
    when Minah had challenged Draco, the previous chieftain, to a duel. Balen told her that just because Minah had given up his training was no reason why he shouldn?t be able to use what he?d already learned. The knowledge eased Cestra?s heart somewhat, knowing how painful it had been for Minah to willingly cut himself off from their ancestral powers.

    Minah...her thoughts kept going back to her former master, and she found herself
    daydreaming about him more and more. She?d realized early on in her relationship with
    the young sorcerer, that she?d developed a crush on him. He was, after all, only ten years her senior, and was quite a handsome man. But, Cestra was sure he only viewed her as a younger sister, and had resigned herself to enjoying the daydreams while they lasted. Once she returned to Cardaria, she?d be too busy with her training to see very much of Minah...and he was certainly busy with his duties as chieftain. No, it was a fool?s dream to think that anything would ever come of her infatuation, and she knew it.

    *****

    ?A mission we have for you, Qui-Gon.?

    Yoda and Qui-Gon were strolling through one of the many Temple gardens, taking time to
    spend with one another, a pleasure neither usually had time to indulge in. Taken off guard by his former master?s statement, he turned to Yoda in shock and surprise.

    ?Master? You know Obi-Wan is not ready for any missions yet, and I will not leave him
    alone when he?s in such a vulnerable state of mind.?

    ?Cleared him for this mission, An-Paj has,? replied Yoda, calmly countering Qui-Gon?s
    objection.

    ?Master?? Qui-Gon certainly didn?t want to question Yoda?s sanity, but he couldn?t
    understand what had happened since that morning to make the master healer do such a
    drastic about-face regarding Obi-Wan?s readiness for missions. ?I just spoke with An-Paj earlier. He said he was keeping Obi-Wan and me planet-bound until Obi-Wan?s mindset is a little more stable.?

    Yoda sighed heavily, closing his eyes a moment and humming to himself...a habit that
    Qui-Gon was finding most irritating at that moment. ?Ill, Master Yaddle?s padawan has
    become,? he said finally. ?To go home, young Cestra wishes. Escort the girl and Master Yaddle to Cardaria you and young Obi-Wan will. Feels some good it might do your
    padawan, An-Paj does. Accompany you also, Healer Da-Mar will.?

    ?How serious is Bria?s condition?? asked Qui-Gon with concern. Master Yaddle?s
    teenaged padawan was approximately the same age as Cestra and from all accounts had
    been doing a marvelous job of researching the sorcerer?s history on Cardaria.
     
  19. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    oooooooooooooo
     
  20. Artemis_Silverbow

    Artemis_Silverbow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    OK, we have one love(and home)-sick apprentice, one psychologically sick apprentice, and one physically sick apprentice. Perhaps you should have put "apprentice torture" in your subject line ;) Looks like this will be a very interesting story. :D
     
  21. p_stotts

    p_stotts Jedi Master star 4

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    Hey! That's an idea! Apprentice-torture/angst
     
  22. Senni_Arava

    Senni_Arava Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Sep 22, 2000
    but if you only put aprentice, then we won't be sure if it's Obi!

    :D
     
  23. Jenny_The_Jedi

    Jenny_The_Jedi Jedi Youngling star 1

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    god this is getting really good.
    any way'z i hope you have a good vacation peggy and and can't wait for the next chapter
    but i will untill you get back :) :_|
     
  24. Artemis_Silverbow

    Artemis_Silverbow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    If p_stotts is writing it, then it's probably Obi-torture-even if it doesn't specifically say so :D
     
  25. JediKnight-Obi-Wan

    JediKnight-Obi-Wan Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    OOoooo. :D I like! I especially like how you have Cestra liking her er, used-to-be Master.

    I had an inkling that maybe she did in the last one, but thought it was just me. Well, I'm all for it. Only ten years younger after all. ;) I hope it works out!

    And as usual, Poor Obi.
     
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