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Temple Training (Jedi Apprentice)

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  1. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    It was a cloudy day on Coruscant, cloudy enough that one could not see the heavy traffic moving around the giant city, it seemed the only place immune to the cloudiness was the Jedi Temple. In side the Temple Knights were talking about their last missions and their troublesome padawans, while padawans were talking about their rough missions and strict masters. It was supposed to be a day off from the normal rigorous training required of an apprentice in the Jedi Temple, but Mace Windu had an idea. He called for all of the Masters and their Padawans to go to the Apprentice training hall.
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    Meanwhile Qui-Gon Jinn was in the Room of a thousand fountains meditating when he heard the call. "Where is Obi-Wan". with that Qui-Gon got up and reached out with the Force. "Obi-Wan" he called, and found that Obi-Wan was in the pool in the opposite side of the building from him. He went to the turbolift tube and took it to the side of the building where Obi-Wan was. Qui-Gon entered the pool room and found that Obi-Wan was practicing telekinisis with water he was binding water molecules together in the shape of a big bucket over his head. Qui-Gon smiled at the boy's effort. Obi-Wan who was startled at feeling the presence of his master lost the deep concentration necessary to keep the water molecules together and in the air so the water splashed down on Obi-Wan and he yelled in surprise "aaaaah". Qui-Gon could barely keep the signs of humor off his face as Obi-Wan got out of the pool. "Get dressed padawan, Master Windu requires us to get to the Apprentice training hall. Obi-Wan looked shocked at the news. "But isn't this a day off for reflection and meditation!" he exclaimed. Qui-Gon smiled and said "Master Windu seems to have a better idea."
    Obi-Wan went into the refresher, then got dressed. By the time they had arrived at the training hall they were late. Mace Windu seemed to pick up on this immediately. "So nice of you to join us Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan" The comment made Qui-Gon smile and Obi-Wan blush. Qui- Gon spoke up "We apologize for our tardiness, what is the purpose of our being here Master WIndu". Mace Windu replied "I have called for a special training session, two masters and two padawans will make a team, the Temple will be turned into the place of trials, the object of this exercise is to find Master Yoda, you may search anywhere in the temple for clues. Yoda will be hiding his presence in the Force, you will need to find the necessary clues in order to find Yoda. Some clues will be false it is up to you and your partner to determine which is which. Some clues will require you to find another in order to understand the first one, some will require direct usage of the Force in order to find, and to acquire. That is all you need to know. Find your partners now."
    Qui-Gon looked at Obi-Wan "Padawan you can pick our partners." Obi-Wan replied "Thank you master, it is an honor." With that Obi-Wan took off and returned with Bant who was still a student of the temple and Tahl a Jedi Master that recently lost her sight in a great battle on the planet Melida/Daan. Qui-Gon nodded in approval "As usual you have made good choices padawan." Mace Windu clasped his hands together and said "Now that you have chosen your partners find an empty space in the training hall to spar with your partners, Apprentice and Apprentice, Master and Master." With that Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Tahl and Bant took off to an empty space and Bant and Obi-Wan went first. Obi-Wan and Bant hugged before starting. They then lit up their blades at the same time. Obi-Wan went on the offensive slashing left then right, right then left. Bant got into a defensive stance that allowed her to block and parry each of the slashes Obi-Wan tried to hit her with. Suddenly Obi-Wan slashed downward and Bant flew under Obi-Wan's attack, then they both turned and slashed for the others' neck the blades clashed. "Enough, it's our turn now" called Qui-Gon. Obi-Wan and Bant looked at each other out of breath but still smiling and powered do
     
  2. Obi the Kid

    Obi the Kid Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I like the story, it's a bit hard to read though.
    My advice is to break up your paragraphs so the words dont all run together, it makes it much easier to read.

    Please continue your story though, sounds interesting.
     
  3. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    Definitely interesing MasterYu, please do continue.

    Post often, post soon.
     
  4. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Mar 23, 2000
    Very worth continuing!!!!!
     
  5. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Thanks for the advise and comments. I will try to make this one more interesting.
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    That night Obi-Wan went to his quarters instead of the one designated for his team. When he got to his room he found that his room looked as if it had been hit by a storm. As he stepped further inside he felt a surge in the Darkside of the Force. It felt sort of ..... familiar. He froze.

    A voice spoke up from behind him.

    "If it isn't my good friend Oafy-Wan Kenobi."

    Obi-Wan started.

    "Bruck?"

    The voice laughed cruelly at Obi-Wan.

    "Good to hear that you still remember me Oafy."

    Obi-Wan's skin paled.

    "You're... You're de.."

    The voice cut him off.

    "Dead, I think not, but you'll soon be."

    Obi-Wan whirled, his lightsaber appearing in his hand as he turned to face....nothing.

    "Where'd he go!"

    Obi-Wan ran out of his living quarters and looked down both ways of the hall. No one was out, it was late. He ran to where Qui-Gon and the others were. When he got there he found that they all were asleep, so he yelled.

    "Qui-Gon!,Tahl! Bant!, Wake up, there's trouble."

    Bant awoke first.

    "Obi-Wan, what's wrong."

    Obi-Wan ran over to Bant.

    "Someone is in the Temple, help me wake Qui-Gon and Tahl."

    Bant ran over to Tahl and began shaking her.

    "Master Tahl! wake up!"

    Obi-Wan reached out to Qui-Gon with the Force, he let Qui-Gon feel his distress.

    Qui-Gon woke with a start.

    "Obi-Wan!"

    Obi-Wan called to his master.

    "Master, I'm here."

    Qui-Gon sat up.

    "Obi-Wan, thank the Force. What's going on, why are you up at this hour."

    Obi-Wan exclaimed.

    "Bruck! He was in my room!"

    Qui-Gon looked confused.

    "Bruck....Chun?"

    Obi-Wan looked at his master.

    "Yes, when I went to my room it was in complete disorder, and when I stepped into the room, I...felt a..... presence."

    Qui-Gon looked sympathetically at his padawan.

    "Padawan, Bruck is dead. I know his death has taken a toll on you but you must realize that his death was his fault, he dabbled in the Darkside and did not see his mistake until it was too late."

    Obi-Wan looked up.

    "I know but..."

    Qui-Gon cut him off.

    "No buts padawan, you must know that you did your best to save him while also doing your best to save your friend, he saw his error in the end and that's the best anyone could ask for."

    Obi-Wan looked bewildered.

    "You don't believe me, I.. I felt his presence."

    Qui-Gon looked at Obi-Wan.

    "What I believe is that you need rest and that you're letting the past haunt you. If you need to talk or someone to meditate with..."

    Obi-Wan becomes irritated.

    "No, I know what I felt!"

    Tahl sat up.

    "What in the Force are you two arguing about."

    Qui-Gon spoke up

    "Obi-Wan thinks that Bruck Chun was in his room.

    Tahl looked confused.

    "The same Bruck Chun that died falling off the waterfall while trying to kill...Bant."

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    "The same."

    Qui-Gon looked at his padawan.

    "I believe that you are mistaken Obi-Wan."

    Obi-Wan started towards the door.

    "Maybe you'll believe me if you see my room for yourselves."

    The four of them took off for Obi-Wan's room.

    When they arrived at Obi-Wan's room, Obi-Wan walked up to the door and paused.

    "Maybe now you will believe me."

    Obi-Wan opened the door and turned to face Qui-Gon.

    "Do you see?"

    Qui-Gon looked past Obi-Wan into the room.

    "Padawan, your room is always like that."

    Obi-Wan argued as he turned to see for himself, he was shocked as he found that the room is as neat as it was supposed to be.

    "No it.... hey it wasn't like that, it was as if a storm hit it!"

    Qui-Gon looked sternly at the boy.

    "Obi-Wan you will tell me what is going on."

    Obi-Wan stammered.

    "Bbut...But...it was all messy, it was total chaos in here."

    Tahl then walked up and put her hand to Obi-Wan's forehead.

    "Force! you're burning up, you should go to the Medic Chamber."

    Obi-Wan jumped away from her.

    "What! You think I'm sick?, that I'm making this u
     
  6. Obi the Kid

    Obi the Kid Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oh, Obi torture, evil/dead Bruck, a quilty Qui-Gon, an upset Obi....all in the same story.

    And a long post too!!! This is much easier to read JEDIMASTERYU.

    I like the idea of Bruck haunting Obi too.

    Nice Job !!!!
     
  7. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    sorry. my newest post was deleted, will try again later.

     
  8. KnightMara

    KnightMara Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Interesting. Obi-wan gets hit and hears a voice with inverted syntax? Reminds me of a little green Jedi Master.

    Please post more.
     
  9. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Thanks all, again my newest post was eaten or something, anyway here goes another one.
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    The next morning, Qui-Gon woke up in a cold sweat. He had seen Obi-Wan in his dreams, he was being tortured.

    'Get it together, Obi-Wan is fine.'

    The thought did not comfort Qui-Gon, so he reached out with the Force to try and contact Obi-Wan.

    Nothing.

    Qui-Gon sat up, hitting his head on an open window.

    "Sithspawn!"

    Tahl smiled wryly at him.

    "Glad to see you're finally up."

    Qui-Gon closed the window and stood.

    "Any word from Obi-Wan?"

    Tahl looked up from her breakfast.

    "No, nothing yet."

    Qui-Gon walked towards the refresher station. Tahl stopped him.

    "Bant's in there, she has been for an hour."

    Qui-Gon looked worried.

    "Bant is everything alright."

    Bant sobbed.

    "Something bad is going to happen to Obi-Wan."

    Qui-Gon's heart wrenched at Bant's declaration.

    "Where did you come to that conclusion, child?"

    Bant left the refresher station and cried out.

    "I saw it in a dream, it was so real."

    Qui-Gon thought to himself.

    'As did I'

    Then said.

    "Obi-Wan is fine, as you told me he just needs sort out his thoughts."

    Bant cried out again.

    "It was so...real."

    Qui-Gon grasped Bant by both shoulders.

    "Help me find him to ease both our worries."

    Tahl spoke up.

    "There is still a matter of Master Windu's training course."

    Qui-Gon attached his lightsaber to his belt.

    "We will do both, we will find Obi-Wan while searching for clues."

    The first place they looked was the Jedi Council Room. In Yoda's chair they found a note. It read:

    A nursemaid the Force is not.
    Many healers the Jedi have.
    A Jedi's strength flows from the Force.
    Beware you must the easy course.

    - Yoda.

    Bant and Tahl looked bewildered. They then looked to Qui-Gon. Tahl asked.

    "What does it mean?"

    Qui-Gon looked just as confused.

    "I'm not sure, however Master Windu said that some clues would require the touch of the Force to comprehend."

    Qui-Gon looked at Tahl.

    "Tahl, I need you to enhance your sense of touch, and feel all the words, take note of all the words with special emphasis or words written harder than the others."

    Tahl nodded and took the paper.

    "Half the second word, the seventh word and the last word."

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    "Now give the paper to Bant. Bant I need you to enhance your eyesight and see if you notice the same impression as Tahl."

    Bant took the paper.

    "Nurse...Healers...Course."

    Tahl looked up.

    "The next clue will be in the Medic Chamber."

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    "Brilliant deduction."

    Before starting after the next clue, Qui-Gon reached out through the Force for Obi-Wan.

    Nothing.

    'It is as though my padawan is cut off from the Force.'

    Guilt overwhelmed Qui-Gon.

    "I'm making him hide, he's angry with me for not believing him. It's all my fault."

    Tahl snapped at Qui-Gon.

    "Qui-Gon Jinn! Snap out of it! He's not helpless you Know. He's a Jedi, we're in the Jedi Temple, what could happen to him here?"

    Qui-Gon smiled ruefully at her.

    "Any number of things."

    Tahl's voice softened.

    "Don't worry he'll be fine"

    Qui-Gon nodded while thinking

    'I sure hope so.'
     
  10. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    Ooooh. It couldn't be Yoda behind the messy room and sighting of Bruck Chun, that would be awfully cruel of the diminutive Jedi Master.

    Looking forward to more.
     
  11. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Obi-Wan awoke feeling a searing heat and hearing a buzzing sound, kind of like a ...

    'Lightsaber!'

    Obi-Wan forced his eyes open to see a blue bladed lightsaber close to his neck. He tried to move away.

    'I...can't move!' he thought.

    A cruel laughter pierced his thoughts.

    "ha ha! You'ved managed to get in deep this time Oafy!"

    Obi-Wan cringed, the heat from the lightsaber was burning him.

    "Bruck, where am I!" he demanded.

    Bruck looked at Obi-Wan with mock-sympathy.

    "Ssshhhh, you wouldn't want to upset my master, would you?"

    Obi-Wan struggled to lift his head.

    "I'm not afraid of that failure Xanatos."

    Anger surged through Bruck, but he forced a sad smile.

    "My friend Xanatos is truly dead, my master is much more powerful, the Jedi will be sorry for what they did to us."

    Obi-Wan finally suceeding in getting his head up, looked at Bruck with defiance in his eyes.

    "We will defeat your master as well."

    Bruck, no longer trying to control his anger lightly held the lightsaber against Obi-Wan's neck.

    Obi-Wan screamed as he felt the scorching of his neck and smelt the smell of burnt meat, and realized in horror that there was little that he could do since he could not move.

    Bruck let up.

    "How can the rest of the puny Jedi defeat the most powerful sith of all."

    Obi-Wan wrenched in pain.

    Bruck smiled triumphantly.

    "Yes, the almighty Sith, of course, now that you know we exist... guards!"

    Obi-Wan shouted out.

    "You may defeat me, but you'll never take the Jedi."


    The guards rushed in, there were six of them, Obi-Wan had to do something fast.

    Obi-Wan drew in the Force to heip him gain control of himself. Quickly he hopped up and kicked the first two rushing Whiphid guards taking them temporarily out of the fight. Obi-Wan turned to strike the next one when he felt a surge in the Darkside of the Force, then he found himself flying into a transparisteel wall, he felt bones crack as he hit the wall a third and fourth time.

    Obi-Wan slumped to the ground as he heard a familiar but twisted voice.

    "Perhaps now, believe it you will."

    Obi-Wan sparked in recognition.

    "Yoda?"

    But the presence had left the room, leaving Obi-Wan to the six Whiphids.

    The first Whiphid grinned at Obi-Wan's broken frame.

    "Pick him up!"

    Two of the Whiphids ran and stood Obi-Wan up.

    The leader asked.

    "You call yourself a Jedi?"

    The leader then stuck Obi-Wan with an Electojabber.

    Had the two Whiphids not been holding him up, Obi-Wan would have been doubled over in pain. He held his head up and said serenely.

    "I am a Jedi."

    The leader laughed.

    "A Jedi." he said contemptuously.

    The leader knocked Obi-Wan from the grip of the two that were holding him and jabbed at him with the Electrojabber, knocking Obi-Wan to the floor.

    Obi-Wan had coughed up blood from the last blow. He tried to reach out with the Force to call his master but could not get a sense of anything outside the room.

    The leader shouted.

    "Bind his arms and legs!"

    Four of the six Whiphids took out these strange looking sticks and sprayed Obi-Wan's arms and legs, in moments Obi-Wan could only move his head, but wouldn't because of the burn.

    The leader called to his men.

    "Now let's show him what pain is all about."

    Two Whiphids took out electrosticks and shocked Obi-Wan on his broken ribs.

    Obi-Wan screamed in Agony.

    "Aaaaaaaaaaaaaarggg!"

    Two more stabbed him in the thighs with vibroshivs.

    Obi-Wan's eyes widened as he let out another pain filled scream.

    "Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrggg!"

    The other one was stomping and kicking Obi-Wan's chest and stomach while the leader shouted orders.

    Obi-Wan heard a door open and close.

    Everyone stopped.

    "Oafy, Oafy, Oafy."

    Obi-Wan strained. 'It's Bruck.'

    Bruck was tossing a duracrete brick in the air.

    "I'll make you a deal, let my master teach you the ways of the Darkside and I'll end all of this.

    Obi-Wan forced his eyes open and as strongly as he could said.

    "Never."

    Bruck smiled and tossed t
     
  12. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Holy cow!!!!!! So much evil in those posts!!!!

    You have definitely got my attention when you mentioned Yoda, just what is going on here?!?!?

    Keep up the great work, I look forward to more!!!
     
  13. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Sorry I took so long, had to work late past two days.
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    Qui-Gon entered the medic chamber followed by Bant and then Tahl.

    "I wonder where the next clue will be."

    Tahl nodded.

    "We should get started searching."

    Qui-Gon turned to Bant.

    "Look around the Bacta tanks and the Healing Crystals of Fire."

    Bant blinked her large silver eyes and nodded.

    "Yes Master Jinn."

    Bant then left the main area towards the room where the Bacta tanks were.

    Tahl spoke up.

    "What shall I do Qui?"

    Qui-Gon turned to face Tahl.

    "You and I will search the reception area and the medical cabinets."

    Tahl drew in the Force to sharpen her sense of hearing.

    "Qui-Gon, I hear something."

    Qui-Gon called for Bant.

    "Bant come in here we may have found the clue."

    Tahl walked up towards the cabinet used to store the Healing Crystals of Fire.

    There was a StaticHolo with the voice of ... Yoda, playing over and over.

    "Qui-Gon Jinn, have your padawan I do,being tortured he is. If want him back you do, find him you must, too late it will be though, for use the Darkside I will make him and he will like it."

    Qui-Gon looked confused.

    "Yoda? it... it can't be."

    Tahl sightless eyes looked shocked.

    "I... I don't believe it.

    Bant's silver eyes flashed defiantly.

    "It's a trick."

    Both Qui-Gon and Tahl turned their heads to face a fiery Bant.

    Tahl spoke first.

    "How can you be certain little one?"

    Qui-Gon nodded in agreement.

    "We cannot be certain, but I cannot take that chance, Yoda would not have turned to the darkside, but someone may have Obi-Wan, we've not seen him in days."

    The fire in Bant's eyes seemed to dim.

    "Obi-Wan?"

    Tears welled up in those huge eyes.

    Qui-Gon rushed to her side.

    "He'll be fine, we don't know if they have him yet, if they do.. Obi-Wan is very stubborn, he'll survive no matter what."

    'I hope' thought Qui-Gon.

    Bant blinked back the tears.

    "We need to find him."

    Bant pulled out Obi-Wan's lightsaber.

    "I found this in a bacta tank with a note on it."

    The note read.

    "If believe us you do not, see now you will, playing games we are not, intent we have to kill."

    Qui-Gon looked at the note.

    "We must show this to the Council, Xanatos may yet be alive."

    The three took up all the evidence and left for the Council Room at the top of the Temple.
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    More coming soon... Please criticize.

     
  14. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Obi-Wan woke up in a dark room that appeared to have no walls or ceilings.

    Obi-Wan touched his forehead, blood covered his fingers, his head ached, he reached out for the Force to blunt the pain.

    'I can't feel the Force!' he thought in despair.

    Suddenly his head started reeling and the room appeared to be spinning. Obi-Wan tried to sit up only to be pushed back down.

    "Lay down you will, serious injuries you have."

    Obi-Wan sat up again only to be pushed back down again.

    "Yoda? is that you?"

    The figure spoke.

    "Me it is, danger we are in Obi-Wan, and our ally the Force is not, strange this room is, everywhere is the Force, .... but in this room it is not."

    Obi-Wan did not catch on.

    "What do you mean?"

    Yoda spoke up.

    "Feel the Force,... I cannot."

    Obi-Wan reached out for the Force.

    nothing.

    "I thought you said the Force could never leave you."

    Yoda stepped into the light, he had been badly beaten, and was bleeding worse than Obi-Wan.

    "Believed it could not I did, until now."

    A door opened from seemingly nowhere.

    "Hey Oafy! I hope you and that little troll are having a great time in this special room!"

    Obi-Wan got up and ran for the door, but it closed before he could make it.

    "Now what are we going to do!" he shouted in frustration.

    Yoda walked towards the door.

    "Patience you must learn Obi-Wan. Qui-Gon will find us, impatience leads to frustration, frustration leads to anger, anger leads to hate, hate leads to suffering, many paths there are to the darkside."

    Obi-Wan walked toward Yoda.

    "So what do we do."

    Yoda's ears twitched.

    "On a plan meditate we will, agree we must."

    Obi-Wan sat cross-legged and began to meditate.

    Yoda kneeled and started meditating then spoke a part of the Jedi Code.

    "There is no ignorance there is knowledge."

    The words gave Obi-Wan an idea.

    "Master Yoda, we must find out what is keeping us from feelin the Force."

    Yoda nodded in agreement.

    "Wise you are, search the room we will."

    They got up and began looking around the room.
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    TBC. hope ya like. comment.
     
  15. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    Ah Very Good this is.
     
  16. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Mace Windu's piercing gaze bore into Qui-Gon's angry one, the gaze had a way of making you feel as if your tunic was stained or you made an apprentice mistake.

    "This evidence proves that Obi-Wan is missing but... in no way proves that your old apprentice is alive, none of the clues suggest that he is involved."

    Qui-Gon was used to the gaze, it was something that had been taught to the Knights by the Masters before they were ready to choose padawans.

    "I know the way he works Mace, it's him, and where is Yoda, I know about the training but this is a very serious matter, we need another voice on the matter."

    Mace Windu's eyes seemed to focus on something distant, then he blinked himself back into the present.

    "I have not seen Yoda since the first day of Temple Training."

    Qui-Gon let confusion show on his face.

    "What do you mean?"

    Mace Windu explained.

    "As you know, Yoda has been shielding himself in the Force to where only the masters could feel his presence, but as of late none of the masters including myself has been able to feel Yoda in the Force."

    Qui-Gon exclaimed.

    "But he's the strongest presence in the Temple."

    Mace Windu continued.

    "Also the masters began their own search for Yoda, looking in all of Yoda's favorite meditation spots and other places, and we found this."

    He reached into his tunic and pulled out a note.

    (Masters, Listen to this you will, the little troll I have, If want him back you do, use the Darkside you must, only your anger can destroy me.)

    Mace continued.

    "For mant days we contemplated this and the council judged it a 'ridiculous tale' because a Jedi master could never be kidnapped, but... I held on to this because I myself had been looking for Yoda for sometime and he wasn't in any of the scheduled hiding places."

    Qui-Gon stopped the discussion.

    "I must find Obi-Wan now. I need the assistance of m the rest of my Temple Training team."

    Mace Windu spoke.

    "You have the permission of the Council, where will you be looking first."

    Qui-Gon's blue eyes gleamed.

    "Telos, we'll find them on Telos."

    Mace Windu warned.

    "If you're wrong you know that you may be too late to save them."

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    "I must hurry."

    Qui-Gon left and gathered Tahl and Bant. They packed necessity and emergency items and left for their transport.

    The transport was a tourist class ship,The wanted to arrive on the planet without herding attention to themselves. Qui-Gon had tried this once before..., hopefully it will work better this time. The three were posing as a family on board, husband, wife and daughter.

    "Father" Bant called. "Will we get to big brother soon?"

    "Yes honey." Qui-Gon said as soothingly and assuringly as he could.

    'Obi-Wan hold on, I'll be there soon.'
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  17. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    Good job. Can't wait for more.
     
  18. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    "Master Yoda, the only thing in this sithly room are these furry lizard like creatures." said Obi-Wan.

    Yoda acknowledged.

    "Noticed I did, the reason they may be, to why present the Force is not."

    Obi-Wan looked at Yoda. He looked old and weak, not like the Force-filled wise youthful acting Jedi Master that Obi-Wan was used to seeing. He saw Yoda begin to lean harder on the gaffi stick.

    "Master Yoda please sit down, you need rest."

    Yoda walked over to Obi-Wan and cracked his leg with the stick.

    "Know I do when I need rest padawan."

    Obi-Wan mumbled.

    "And you call me the Stubborn One."

    Yoda chuckled.

    "Right you are, need rest I do, sorry I am Obi-Wan."

    Yoda sat in his meditation position and went to sleep.

    "Reason they may be to why present the Force is not."

    With that Yoda drifted off into sleep.

    Obi-Wan decided to test the theory.

    Obi-Wan began crushing the creatures in a crude manner.

    "I am not killing in anger, I am trying to save us." he said to himself aloud.

    Obi-Wan felt the Force come back to him and stopped before he killed the last two. Master Yoda's eyes came wide open as he discovered that he was floating in the Force. Obi-Wan looked on astonished.

    "Our ally the Force is once again."

    To Obi-Wan, Yoda looked to be shining like a beacon.

    "Master Yoda, quickly dim your presence in the Force."

    Yoda did as asked.

    "Sense your reason I do, sith are here, escape we must."

    Obi-Wan struggled to come up with a plan.

    "I've got it." he said.

    He ran over to the last two alive furry lizard creatures and broke off the branches.

    "Here carry this."

    Yoda took the branch.

    "Feel the Force I cannot again, strange this creature is, to the council it must go, studied it must be."

    Obi-Wan explained the plan to Yoda.

    "These creatures will make us undetectable in the Force, The Sith will have felt a tremendous surge in the Force when it was returned to us, they..."

    Yoda cut him off.

    "Understand I do, hide in the shadows we must, ambush we will, also coming to save us is Qui-Gon."

    Obi-Wan felt relieved.

    'I just hope he makes it in time.' he thought.

    then said. "Let's go."

    Yoda and Obi-Wan hid in the dark shadows directly by the door in order for the sith to believe that the room was force empty long enough to be ambushed.

    The door opened and Obi-Wan was shocked at what he saw.

    It was Yoda. Only evil looking, the Warm green-orange eyes Obi-Wan associated with Yoda were replace by fiery glowing red and black eyes with mere specks for pupils. The ears were sharp and pointed and the teeth glowed a dark orange color.
    The dark Yoda was dressed in black and had a... Double ended lightsaber attached to his belt.

    Obi-Wan looked at the face. The mouth was contorted evilly and looked as though he was... smiling.

    The Dark Yoda-like creature spoke.

    "Jedi, Know who I am you do not, but know you I do, remember Jedi master, chose you over me they did that day long ago, but now I.. am the master of the Darkside in which you fear, enough it is that you know, nothing there is that you can do about it."

    The Dark Yoda like creature turned to leave and shut the door.

    The door opened again... It was Bruck, Obi-Wan saw his chance.

    Obi-Wan pushed into Bruck knocking his head into a transparisteel wall rendering him unconcious. He took Bruck and threw him into the room.

    "Come master Yoda."

    Yoda and Obi-Wan ran down the dark corridor searching for an exit.

    "There it is." said Yoda

    The two opened the door to the outside only to find the group of whiphids that had did Obi-Wan and Yoda in before.

    The leader stepped forward.

    "Where do you think you're going."

    Yoda took the creature off and reached out with the Force to the whiphids.

    "Sleep you need, break time it is."

    The six blankly repeated.

    "I need sleep, it's break time."

    Yoda pick up the creature.

    "go we must."

    Obi-Wan and Yoda hurried through the streets.

    "On Coruscant we are not, know this planet I do." said Yoda."

    Obi-Wan thought it l
     
  19. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    This is great. Critiqu huh.......You know that sounds to much like school work but here goes. You don't post often enough. hehe. Does that help. hehe :)
     
  20. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Thanks for replying I love sci-fi, I will post more from now on.
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    The transport carrying Qui-Gon, Tahl and Bant landed on Telos.

    Qui-Gon turned to face the two.

    "We must be as inconspicuous as possible, that goes for the Force as well."

    Bant and Tahl nodded then dimmed their presences in the Force.

    Qui-Gon shook his head.

    "That will not be enough, you must ... cut it off."

    Bant gasped.

    Tahl protested.

    "We are Jedi, the Force is our ally, you know that Qui-Gon."

    Qui-Gon agreed.

    "Yes I am aware, but using the Force could alert Xanatos of our presence on Telos."

    Tahl nodded.

    "Shouldn't you try to contact Obi-Wan first?"

    Qui-Gon shook his head.

    "Too dangerous."

    Tahl glared in the direction her amazing ears told her the voice came from.

    "Obi-Wan may need to know you're here, plus you need to know if Obi-Wan is here and it would help us find him."

    Qui-Gon looked at Tahl wistfully.

    "The last time I tried, I got... nothing... cold and empty."

    Tahl took Qui-Gon's hand.

    "You have to try."

    Qui-Gon sighed and opened himself completely to the Force.

    'Obi-Wan'

    'Master?'

    'I'm here Obi-Wan, everything will be fine, where are you?'

    'Remember the old Katharsis dome?'

    'Obi-Wan stay there, we'll be there soon.'

    Qui-Gon opened his eyes.

    "I know where they are."
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    Obi-Wan spun to face Yoda.

    "Qui-Gon is here, he's coming here now."

    Yoda looked up from his meditation.

    "Know I did, felt his presence I could, my padawan he was."

    Yoda spoke again.

    "Wait here does Qui-Gon want us to do?"

    Obi-Wan nodded.

    "Yes master."

    "Then wait we shall, wise is Qui-Gon, well trained is he."

    Obi-Wan smiled, compliments were rarely given by Yoda and yet he seemed to hear them often.

    "Yes master Yoda, he is."

    Just then Obi-Wan felt a huge surge in the Darkside of the Force.

    "Found you I have, heh heh heh." said an evil twisted version of Yoda's voice.
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  21. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Jul 11, 2000
    Will post more later today.

    If there are any readers please respond.
     
  22. mouse2

    mouse2 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oct 29, 1999
    This is cool!

    Eagerly awaiting the next post!
     
  23. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    The Dark Yoda creature stepped inside the Katharsis dome.

    "Find you we will, come out you should, only wasting time you are."

    Yoda spoke to Obi-Wan.

    "Stall I must, wait here you will, deal with the sith I will try."

    Obi-Wan disagreed.

    "Master Yoda we should wait here for Qui-Gon, you're still injured."

    Yoda nodded in agreement.

    "Right you are, but time we do not have, time this will make for, survive I will, argue with a Master you cannot."

    Obi-Wan looked on in a strong but silent disagreement with Master Yoda.

    Yoda stepped out into the open.

    "Right here I am, no further need there is for searching."

    The Yoda like creature smiled.

    "Yoda. I have been waiting a very long time for this."

    Yoda laughed.

    "Angry you are that the Jedi chose me over you, strong in the Force you were not Yado."

    Yado laughed evilly at the Jedi master.

    "And yet strong I am now, sorry those fools will be, that chose you they did over me."

    Yoda stopped laughing and let his expression become grave.

    "Stronger is the light, chance you have to change your mind, the true Force the light is, connected with living, more power in life there is than death."

    Yado smirked.

    "Fool you are Yoda. powerful Sith Master am I, need to change I do not!"

    Yoda's ears twitched.

    "Your decision it is."

    Yado's eyes turned completely black and the Darkside of the Force swirled around Yado's half of the room. While Yoda's eyes remained calm and clear and the Light side of the Force provided a thick Blockade on Yoda's half.

    Yado held out his hands "Die you will troll!" and shot out Darkside electric sparks.

    The Sparks burned through the Blockade and sent Yoda flying across the room, Yoda slid across the floor, he used the Force to stop him and to help him get up.

    This time Yoda reached out to the living Force while establishing a stronger reinForced blockade.

    'Obi-Wan get the Force-less creature and get it near the Sith Master.'

    Obi-Wan took the furry lizard like creature and ran towards the diminuitive Sith.
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  24. JEDIMASTERYU

    JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Suddenly Bruck jumped out to protect his master.

    "Where ya goin... OAFY!" then ignited his lightsaber, the red glow distorting the already evil face the Darkside had given Bruck.

    Obi-Wan stopped dead in his tracks, he couldn't beat Bruck without a lightsaber and Yoda could not hold up the shield for much longer.

    "What kind of Coward are you Bruck, scared to fight without your lightsaber, REAL BRAVE when I don't have one!"

    Bruck glared at Obi-Wan.

    "I was always smarter and stronger than you, I still am, I'll have no problems beating you with my bare hands."

    Bruck deactivated his lightsaber and through it to the ground.

    Obi-Wan pushed on.

    "Let's go then Bruckie!"

    Bruck ran at Obi-Wan to attack but Obi-Wan reached out with the Force for Bruck's lightsaber before it hit the ground and sliced Bruck at the knees. Bruck passed out.

    At that moment Qui-Gon ran to the door.

    "Obi-Wan take this."

    And threw the Obi-Wan's lightsaber to him.

    Obi-Wan deactivated and dropped Bruck's lightsaber while catching his.

    "Qui-Gon, take the animal over to the Sith."

    Qui-Gon looked startled.

    "Sith! where's Xanatos?!"

    Obi-Wan called.

    "It's not him this time."

    Qui-Gon grabbed the other creature and ran near the Sith master. Obi-Wan blocked him on the other side.

    "What happened to the Force!"

    Yado turned.

    "You!"

    He held up his hands to let out the Darkside coronal discharge.

    Nothing.

    "Aaaah, Jedi!" he said like a curse.

    With that he ran from them and used the Force to propell Bruck and him out of the dome and out of sight.

    "We'll be Back Jedi."

    Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan turned to find Yoda. He was slumped over near a wall.

    "Yoda!" they cried out.

    The two ran over to Yoda.

    "Fine I will be, leave we must. Take the Forceless creatures to the Council we must"

    Yoda didn't look okay, his tunic was badly burned, his ears drooped over his eyes and his breathing was shallow.

    Obi-Wan heard a scream.

    "Aaaaaaah! let go! heeelp!"

    Tahl ran into the dome.

    "They... they took her."
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  25. mouse2

    mouse2 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Cool! More!
     
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