Qui-Gon's Error (JA, AU, first attempt at anguish) ~Announcement~ FINISHED 4~1

Title: Qui-Gon's Error
Author: Neobi
Spoilers: JA15
Summary: Takes place during JA15. Instead of them both going to help the miners only Obi-Wan goes. And Qui-Gon pays a very high price for the error.

italic : thought
* : directly from book

Disclaimer: All characters and places belong to Gorge Lucas.

 

So where's the story? Sounds good. Hope you up it soon.

~Swede

 

Up, up, and away!

 

*Obi-wan and Qui-Gin heard the noise of the transport at the same time. They both turned toward the source of the sound.

?What is it?? Eritha asked.

The speck grew rapidly and turned into Yanci, her auburn hair flying in the wind as she piloted a swoop at maximum speed toward them.

?Something?s wrong,? Obi-Wan said.

Yanci pulled up so rapidly she almost tipped the swoop. She hovered next to them.

?We need you,? she gasped, out of breath. ?A raid?a massive raid?like nothing we?ve seen...?

She bent over, trying to catch her breath.

?This time they are trying to destroy the entire camp,? she said after a moment. ?They are killing as many of us as they can. Using small explosives and blasters. We have rallied who we can and have made a last stand in an out-building. We have some weapons. Not many.?*

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Obi-Wan scanned the horizon one last time with a hope that Qui-Gon would come back, but the horizon showed no sign of him. Obi-Wan struggled, wondering if he had made the right decision. He looked at Yanci then at Eritha.

?We should hide you, it?s going to be dangerous and I can?t let anything happen to you,? Obi-Wan said his gaze still on Eritha.

?No, I will come. It will waste time if we have to find a place for me.?

?Alright but stay back.? And with that they left for the settlement, hoping it was not too late.

* * *

You?re wrong. Those words echoed in Qui-Gon?s mind.

Maybe I am wrong, maybe I should turn back. Qui-Gon shook his head. ?No, Obi-Wan can handle himself,? he said aloud to himself, trying to reassure his decision.

Finding the Absolutes hide out took longer than Qui-Gon expected. In agony he searched knowing that if he took too long all would be lost. Finally he reached a point where he had to leave his transport and walk through the ever narrowing canyon.

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Hope you guys like the first post.

~Neobi

 

Hey Neobi!
Just wanted to say nice start!
Can't wait for more!!
-Snowbee-Wan Kenobi

 

Hey.

TheSwedishJedi = Hope you enjoy the first post.

The Butler = Thanks for uping!

snowbee-wan kenobi = Thanks!

More coming.

~Neobi

 

Good post. Yes, I liked it. Sounds like something I wrote. I'm interested to see where you take this.

~Swede

 

Interesting. I can't wait to see where this is going.

Great start.

 

Good start.Sure hope Obi is not gonna DIE!?!?!? in this.PEACE Ewen

 

Yes, I agree with everyone else.....Nice Start!

Wherever you take it, its sure to be better than where Jude Watson took it.

Looking forward to more

 

Hey. Just thought I would warn you now this story isn't going to be very long, 5-10 posts probably.

TheSwedishJedi : Glad you liked the post hope you like the next one too.

red_rose_knight : Welcome and thank you.

ewen : Thank you, you reply has let me know that I can be a very diverse writer. It helped me because you did not like one of my other stories. So I hope you like this.

shanobi : Welcome and thank you.

Next post tonight or tomorrow.

~Neobi

 

uppers!
more please!

 

You are a good writer,I am a bad reader.shallow in fact.I just don't read romance, cause I truly believe it is not in the Jedi code.This story is an easy read{enjoyable} and I am looking forward to another post.PEACE Ewen

 

Hey. Next post is going to be short.

snowbee-wan kenobi : Thanks for the uppers.

ewen : Its ok, I think of it as a compliment that one person can not like one of my stories but like another.

~Neobi

 

As Obi-Wan, Eritha, and Yanci neared the village they could hear the screams of the people and shots from blasters. Obi-Wan heard Yanci accelerate her swoop to the limit, Obi-Wan did the same with his transport.

They stopped at the entrance to the village, jumping out of their vehicles. Yanci raced ahead to a body on the ground; she knelt beside him ignoring the blaster fires above her head. Obi-Wan and Eritha saw the small explosive fly in her direction, both crying out. But she did not hear their cries and the explosive landing beside her.

Drawing his lightsaber as he ran he went to the people that held the blasters, knowing he was desperately out numbered.

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For Qui-Gon his search seemed to take hours, but in truth it was only a few vital minutes.

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~Neobi

 

Oh, you are such a tease! That was way too short.

Looking good though otherwise. Cant wait for more, and possibly a longer post?

 

Yes, a longer post would be much better.

UP!

~Swede

 

Hey Neobi...
great post... as short as it may have been

 

Hey.

Shanobi, TheSwedishJedi, and snowbee-wan kenobi = Thank you, and yes there will be a longer post tomorrow. And I am sorry for the very short post.

~Neobi

 

Hey...no prob Neobi...looking forward to that post.....

 

It's tomorrow. In fact it's almost the day after tomorrow. Where's the post?

 

Great story! Hey guys stop rushing her, you know how hard it is to write when your not motivated.

Quote from my Dad:

"Idiot, your rushing and screwing every d*** thing up, here give it to me!"

 

Hey, i can wait a little while longer if the postie is a little longer

 

Uppers!
More soon Neobi?
Great Job...this is an awesome story!

 

Hey.

TheSwedishJedi : Sorry for the delay.

Jedisam : Welcome and your father sounds like an interesting person.

shanobi : Thank you for waiting.

Snowbee-Wan Kenobi : Next is the new post.

~Neobi