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Story [24]Critical Infrastructure Protection - Tony Almeida, Pre-Day 7

Discussion in 'Non Star Wars Fan Fiction' started by karebear214, Mar 11, 2009.

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  1. karebear214

    karebear214 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Title: Critical Infrastructure Protection
    Author: karebear
    Rating: PG
    Summary/Notes: A long time ago (Early Day 3) I wrote a story in which Tony and Michelle had a daughter, and since then she?s been one of my favorite characters that I?ve created for fanfic, though she rarely gets to come out to play. With Tony?s return at the beginning of Day 7, I realized that the character didn?t have to vaporize, and I was suddenly fascinated by the effects the loss of Michelle and Tony?s activities in the intervening years would have on a young child - and how having a child would affect Tony?s actions and motivations. So what I wound up was this...



    ?You remind me of someone,? he says quietly, his face pressed into her still damp hair. The shampoo smells vaguely of bananas. She twists away from him and scribbles in her coloring book, pressing the crayon down hard into the paper and scrawling in deliberate, violent arcs.

    ?I know, Daddy.?

    In truth, she reminds him of two people. One is Mommy, who died a long time ago. The other is someone named Kim, who is a grown up now but who Daddy knew when she was a little girl.

    She drops the green crayon and pulls a yellow one out from the tattered cardboard case, and starts filling in the star at the top of the tree, more carefully. It?s a Christmas coloring book, even though it?s June. Daddy bought it for her at the Salvation Army. Neither of them really care much about seasonal appropriateness. She likes it because it reminds her of her favorite time of the year, when there are decorations and carols and sometimes it snows. She finishes the star and finds the red and blue to start into the ornaments, closing her eyes and wishing, the way she always does, that she could stop reminding him.

    It?s dark outside by the time she finishes coloring, and she slips down from the chair, finds the TV remote under the couch, and counts up the channels one-two-three until she gets to the one that shows the Chicago Cubs. That?s the only team Daddy will watch, even though they don?t always live in Chicago.

    Right now they are living somewhere in Florida. The sign outside says ?Motel?, but it doesn?t look like any motel she?s ever seen. For one thing, she has her own bedroom, and there?s the couch, and an old refrigerator that?s painted an ugly green color. The couch turns into a bed, but most nights, Daddy falls asleep before he remembers that. The TV chatters on in the background, still on when she wakes up the next morning. She passes it on the way to the kitchen. It?s not hard to find something to eat, there aren?t that many options. She sets two jars down on the counter, and untwists the wire wrapped around the plastic sleeve holding the loaf of bread.

    She carefully paints a slice with purple jelly and peanut butter. They have creamy now because it was on sale, even though she and Daddy both like crunchy better. Daddy wakes up later than her most days, but he?s awake now. The sound of water running through the bathroom sink goes away and he appears behind her.

    ?Don?t we have anything else to eat??

    ?No.?

    He grunts and sits at the table.

    She finishes assembling the sandwiches and stacks them onto a paper towel, carrying the small tower carefully from the kitchenette to put it down in front of Daddy. She crawls into the chair next to him and takes a small bite of the first sandwich. Daddy picks up another one and gobbles down half of it in one bite. He taps his foot in a jittery rhythm under the table as he swallows.

    ?Why aren?t you at school??

    ?It?s summer.?

    He nods, and takes another, smaller bite as an excuse to look away.

    God, he needs to get her out of the house. He can?t stand seeing Michelle in her, needing so much from him, and always here.

    He won?t let her out of his sight for the same reason.

    Still, the need to get her out of the house grows more insistent and immediate when he recognizes the cell phone singing out from his jacket pocket, an annoyingly upbeat ringtone he hasn?t cared enough to change.

     
  2. brodiew

    brodiew Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Oct 11, 2005
    This was kind of sad, karebear. Tony seems in weird emotionally painful purgatory; torn between love for his daughter and the pain caused by seeing her every day. I really feel bad for him. But, on the other hand, he a daughter who loves him greatly and will follow him whereever he goes.

    You also did a great job of describing a snapshot of their lives. I was pulled in.

    I see how this was a turning point for Tony; a reason to reject the damamge potentially caused by the CIP device.

    well done.
     
  3. Lithiniel

    Lithiniel Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Jun 26, 2006
    Sad, yes, but a touching little vignette that shows us Tony's nurturing side.

    Very well written, Karebear. I enjoyed it quite thoroughly. :D
     
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