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  1. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    Title: Twenty-four Hours
    Author:Arwen Jade Kenobi
    Rating: PG-13
    Category: Angst, Drama (age 16)
    Summary: Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon are sent to investigate murders at a haunted castle. But things are more complicated than they appear.
    Author?s note: The castle mentioned in this fic, Chillingham Castle, is an actual place in Britain. It is said to be one of the most haunted/scariest places on earth. If any of you have an issue with ghosts DO NOT READ ANY FURTHER

    // = Obi/Qui bond
    italics = personal thoughts


    PART 1

    Jedi Temple
    Suite 1506 (Jinn/Kenobi residence)
    0:18hrs (12:18am)

    Obi-Wan Kenobi sat on his bed, propped against the wall, reading a book filled with short horror stories. He had been sitting there for over an hour, since his Master had been awoken by the council for a briefing. Qui-Gon Jinn had muttered under his breath about how important sleep was to a man of his age, then he?d left.

    Obi-Wan looked up from his novel briefly, he thought he?d heard something. He shrugged his shoulders and continued to read. The Jedi Padawan suddenly gave a start as large hands clamped on his shoulders

    ?AHH ? he exclaimed, then looked up into the midnight blue eyes of Qui-Gon Jinn who was trying hard to suppress a laugh. ?Master, you scared the Hell out of me.?

    ?If you read horror novels past 24 hours I wouldn?t be surprised.? The tall, stoic Jedi Master picked up the discarded novel and gave it a quick once-over. Obi-Wan was curious as to why the council had summoned Qui-Gon at so late an hour.

    ?Master, what did the council want at this hour of the night??

    Qui-Gon?s amused expression faded and he sat in the chair next to Obi-Wan?s bed. ?We?re leaving on a mission tomorrow. They were contacted later tonight so they had no choice but to call at this hour. We are going to a supposed haunted castle on the planet Airené called Chillingham Castle.?

    The Padawan slowly inclined his head, he had heard of the place before. The building was over 800 years old and supposedly haunted by the spirts of the people tortured and killed there during a civil war.

    ?The castle has been a museum for the past five decades,? Qui-Gon continued, ?But there have been two murders all within the past week. The first casualty was an eight-year-old girl, the second was a twenty-three year-old man. The people of the planet believe the castle?s evil spirts are to blame for the killings. We are going to the castle with the father of the child, the fiancé of the man, and a thirteen-year-old Sanderai psychic.?

    Obi-Wan was not surprised to hear that a psychic would accompany the group, but he was startled that they would send one that was so young.

    ?This girl is the only psychic who has dealt with these types of forces before, that is why she is coming with us,? continued the Jedi Master, ?She has also completed her Demoiselle training, that is why she is even being permitted to join us. Her name is Alexis Brélis, she is the cousin of Kyra Dulais.?

    Obi-Wan straightened. Kyra Dulais was a Sanderai warrior who had aided them in attempts to rescue each other. Obi-Wan was unaware that the young woman had any surviving family. Qui-Gon stood from his chair and gave a small yawn.

    ?We leave first thing tomorrow morning, good night Padawan.?

    ?Good-night Master,? answered Obi-Wan. Qui-Gon flipped off the lights and went back to his room.

    Obi-Wan lay on his bed staring at the ceiling, something told him that this mission was far more complicated than it appeared.

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    Anyone interested?
  2. Master_Ari Jedi Knight

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    Looks interesting. Please post more.
  3. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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  4. Rainbow_Moon_Angel Jedi Knight

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    Sounds good. Really good. Is it the sequel to another story?
  5. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    nope..it just mentions a character from two of my other fics.

  6. Jaggie_Jaya Jedi Knight

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    I'm intrested! I'm a sucker for horror stories! ( any kind of stories for that matter! ) Keep going!
  7. sheleigh Jedi Master

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    Ahh... very interested. More soon, I hope! :)
  8. Falcon Chosen One

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    hay wingmate good start more soon please?
  9. PadawanKitara Force Ghost

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    Great start. Waiting for more :)
  10. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    Sorry this is short
    * * * * * * * *

    Jedi Transport
    10:37hrs

    Qui-Gon Jinn had the same feeling as he made his way back to the quarters he shared with Obi-Wan for the duration of the ride to Airené. He knew that his apprentice was interested in the supernatural, he hoped that Obi-Wan had some kind of idea as to what went on in Chillingham.

    When Qui-Gon stepped through the door he found his apprentice sitting by a window reading his horror stories again.

    ?Don?t even try it,? the Padawan said to his Master without lifting his eyes from the page.

    Qui-Gon smiled at his apprentice and wished he hadn?t come to discuss so serious a subject. ?I have a question. Do you know anything about the ghosts of Chillingham??

    Obi-Wan?s mood sobered as he put his book down. ?I know of two ghosts Master, the first is known as the Radiant Boy. He was locked up in a closet in the Pink Room, he died in there. When they found his skeleton, his teeth and knuckles were no longer there. He?d tried to claw and bite his way out.?

    Qui-Gon sighed and shook his head, it was a very disturbing story. ?And the other ghost?? the Master questioned his apprentice.

    ?The other one is of one of Chillingham?s torturers, his name was John Sage. He had injured his leg causing him to have a limp leg that dragged across the floor, that?s how you knew he was coming. He was always devising new ways of killing people, I think he?s one of the most evil spirts in the place.? Obi-Wan bit his lip and Qui-Gon could tell by the look in his eyes that he intended to say something but wasn?t sure how.

    ?Do you believe in ghosts Master??

    Qui-Gon was taken slightly aback by the blunt question. ?I do not believe that spirts are behind the murders here, but that someone is trying to make is appear as so.?

    Obi-Wan shuddered so did Qui-Gon. It was as if a chill had passed through him, bringing cold to every part of him.

    ?Something tells me you should not have said that.? Qui-Gon did not find it wise to disagree.
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    How's that?
  11. Master_Ari Jedi Knight

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  12. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Master

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    I LOVE IT!!!

    but no one likes my storys i put up (sniffles)
  13. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    I've never seen any of your fics

    Post the links and I'll check em out
  14. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    Airené legislative building
    Conference room
    14:30hrs

    Obi-Wan Kenobi looked around the circular table at the beings that were to accompany himself and his Master to the castle. The first figure was a human man with short brown hair and blue eyes, he had a medium build and could be no older than 35 standard years. The second was a Sanderai female, the blood red braids and the daja across her back betrayed her. She had brown eyes and the rest of her hair was a rust coloured red, sharply contrasting the blood red of her braids. She looked about 25 standard years.

    The last member of the party was without a doubt Alexis Brélis. She shared the emerald green eyes of her cousin, but had raven black hair with the blood red braids. She seemed to answer to the name Lex also. Obi-Wan could understand that Alexis seemed quite formal for her, so she would naturally offer a contraction.

    Lex opened up the meeting by thanking the Master/Padawan team for coming and for their speed. Then she turned to the man and asked him to relate his story. Obi-Wan was amazed at the professionalism the thirteen year old was showing.

    The man stood nodded toward Lex.
    ?My name is Jaim Marlin,? began the man, ?I came here with my eight-year-old daughter Juliet, her class was assigned Chillingham Castle as a school Galactic History project.? Obi-Wan sighed, he could sense what was coming next.

    ?About half an hour into the tour,? Jaim continued, ?We had stopped by the Gray Room, I assume Juliet wandered off because when we were told to move on I noticed she was gone. We all searched the castle, nothing. By the next day local authorities were called in and the search widened to the surrounding moors.? Jaim stopped for a moment, Obi-Wan could see that he was preparing himself to retell something very painful. ?Three days later I recieved news they had discovered my daughter?s body in the gray room, lying in the middle of the floor. They were baffled, the Gray had been searched many times.?

    Jaim took a shuddering breath and continued. ?When I got to the castle I received a coroner?s report: there was no physical reason for my child to be dead. Yesterday, Demoiselle Brélis came to see the body and nearly fainted. We saw a pale, normal body. Lex saw her..gutted.?

    The man sat back down and put his face in his hands, great sobs racking his body. Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon exchanged glances, each of their eyes showing nothing but sympathy towards the grieving father. The Padawan saw his Master give a small shudder as he turned back towards the others.

    What is he feeling? The bond told Obi-Wan nothing, Qui-Gon?s shields were up.

    Lex stood again and asked the Sanderai woman to tell her story. Lex sat back down and the woman stood.

    ?My name is Sandretta Latrey, I came here with my fiancé, Cody, for a getaway, We were also on a tour but while the guide was talking, Cody started to fade away. He reached out to me, but he disappeared and...?

    Sandretta never finshed, she instead sat down and started crying. Obi-Wan knew that she would have much prefered to preform this ?emotional outburst? in private. But her grief was too great.

    Lex stood and turned to the Jedi. ?They searched for days until they found his body in the Pink Room, again with no physical cause of death. But when I saw him, I saw dismemberment and other wounds.? Lex spoke some words in Sanderai to Sandretta, who turned to Jaim and whispered in his ear.

    The two of them both left. Lex manuvered her chair to face the Jedi. ?Obi-Wan,? she began, ?You believe that the spirts of Chillingham are behind this. You believe it deeply don?t you??

    Obi-Wan nodded and looked at his Master. //How does she know all this//

    //Maybe she is a real psychic after all//

    ?Yes Master Jinn, I am a real psychic.? She smiled at the Master and Padawan?s stunned expressions, then her mood turned serious again. ?Obi-Wan could you please leave the room for a moment?? Obi-Wan was stunned, what did this girl have to say to Qui-Gon that she couldn?t say in front of hi
  15. Master_Ari Jedi Knight

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    Luv the post. Please continue.
  16. Falcon Chosen One

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    great post wingmate more soon?
  17. JediClare Jedi Master

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    This is very interesting. What's gonna happen next? Post more! :)
  18. sheleigh Jedi Master

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    Eee... *blinks* you can't stop... I want to know what happens.

    Qui-Gon better be careful... I have a very bad feeling about this...
  19. PadawanKitara Force Ghost

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    Scary ghost story- maybe I shouldn't read it right before bedtime ;)
  20. Wild_Huntress Jedi Master

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    Cool story.... I saw part of a TV special about Chillingham Castle once but I was too scared to watch the rest.
    Keep up the good work.
  21. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master

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    Ya 'Scariest places on earth with Linda blair right?

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    PART 2

    Obi-Wan sat outside the door waiting for Qui-Gon and Lex. A moment later Lex emerged, gave him a sad look, then walked on. A few minutes later Qui-Gon walked out, his face was a mask of calm but Obi-Wan could tell that whatever Lex said rocked him to the core.

    ?Master,? began Obi-Wan, ?What happened??

    Qui-Gon considered the question for a moment. ?I?ll tell you later, Padawan. It will not compromise the mission if you do not know.?

    Obi-Wan nodded, while trying to keep his frustration under control as he and Qui-Gon walked up to the others. Qui-Gon had kept things from him before and had told him in due time, Obi-Wan believed that Qui-Gon would tell him when the timing was right.

    They approached Jaim and Sandretta where they expressed their condolances. Lex arrived with her daja slung across her back.

    ?Where we are going,? she stated, ?is known as the ?home of evil.? You will be faced with things you do not understand, you will have contact with the otherside.?

    Lex turned away for a moment and Obi-Wan caught his Master rolling his midnight eyes in annoyance. Obi-Wan nudged him.

    ?Jaim, Sandretta,? Lex continued, ?No one had more reason that you not to return to the castle. If either if you wish to remain, please say so now.?

    Not a word was said. Lex nodded in approval.

    ?Very well. We leave at 21:00hrs.?
  22. Wild_Huntress Jedi Master

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    Oh, this is so good! Honestly.
    No, I saw the thing about Chillingham on some kids' show (you know how all the kids shows try to be all scary now right?) I don't remember what it was called though. Just that John Sage got his leg injured in a battle with the Scots (I'm a British history buff.) Anyway, I'll stop ranting now, good post though!
  23. sheleigh Jedi Master

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    Ahh... Qui-Gon better watch out... the ghosties are going to get... err Obi-Wan most likely.

  24. Jaggie_Jaya Jedi Knight

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    Great post!! Keep it up!
  25. PadawanKitara Force Ghost

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    I saw part of the scariest places show about Chillingham...CREEPY. I had enough trouble with ghosts at my old job (officially I think it was considered a poltergiest), I don't need to go there for a vacation!!
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