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Saga A Distant White Shore (Post RotS, AU, Anakin/Padme, Obi-Wan) - COMPLETED

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Sara_Kenobi, Oct 24, 2004.

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  1. Sara_Kenobi

    Sara_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master star 7

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    Title: A Distant White Shore
    Summary: Anakin is arrested by Obi-Wan at the end of RotS. Ten years later he's released, and must rebuild the life he has lost.
    Author: Sara Kenobi




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    The corridor was black. Breathing of some madness could be heard off in the distance; the Jedi Master came closer to his opposite in the dark chamber with his lightsaber at the ready. He made a move with his weapon, making the dark one reveal himself from his hiding place. He had only been inches away from him in this black room. A swing of his weapon could have finished Obi-Wan off in one move, if he had not caught him by suprise just then.

    He stepped back more, and as the dark one attempted to leap into the air away from him, Obi-Wan connected his weapon across his chest, knocking the dark one down in defeat.

    "You are going to pay for what you have done." Obi-Wan declared breathlessly. "You will pay the price for the life's of good men and women you stole!" Obi-Wan breathed labourly. "I never thought this day would come." His voice now broken with a near sob from his chest. "How could you turn away from me so easily, Anakin? You were more to me than just my student." Obi-Wan declared grippingly. "You should have trusted me my friend."

    "I was never your friend!" Anakin snapped back harshly. "You betrayed me first, master! You knew that I loved her...You knew that I couldn't live without her!"

    "She still loves you Anakin. She's willing to look past this..." Obi-Wan admitted, wiping away tears from his blue eyes. "But I cannot phantom how you could believe Sidious' lies. You should know in your heart that I could never betray you like that, Anakin. I loved you as my son. My son..."

    A large group of Nubian officer's then stormed the chamber where they had been fighting, surrounding Anakin and Obi-Wan with armed weapons of all kinds. A lone, small figure, then entered the room, his brown Jedi robe dragging behind him as he walked into the room with a beat up cane.

    "Away with your weapons" Yoda ordered instantly. With a wave of his hands, llightsaber's from both men flew into his hands. "Take young Skywalker away, you will." Yoda then told the troops. "And behave Skywalker will, as I will follow right behind him."

    Yoda gave one, lingering look, toward a breathless and broken Obi-Wan Kenobi, before escorting Anakin from the chamber personally.

    "Speak with you later, I will. A victory for the lightside today, this is. Know this, you must."

    Yoda then left with Anakin from the chamber, and Obi-Wan fell to his knee's and cried brokenly over the son he had lost...



    TBC
     
  2. Sword-of_the-Jedi

    Sword-of_the-Jedi Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Fantastic start! This is a great idea, I can't wait to see what you do with it :D
     
  3. VaapadMaster

    VaapadMaster Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Nice. Has the potential to be a pretty good story. :)
     
  4. Tribun

    Tribun Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Well, interesting idea.

    Wouldn't it be hard for the children to knew, that their father is in prison? But then again, Anakin now has much time to think.
     
  5. DarthIshtar

    DarthIshtar Chosen One star 10

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    Potential? It already is a good story! Excellent beginning, Sara!
     
  6. Jazz_Skywalker

    Jazz_Skywalker Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Interesting beginning. I can't wait to see where you go with this!

    JS
     
  7. AngelofDarkness

    AngelofDarkness Jedi Master star 2

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    Great so far, just great :D I wonder if Anakin was allowed visitors in 'jail'? Maybe not anyone but a Jedi, since he's technically dangerous, but it'd be interesting to see if Obi-Wan ever visited.
     
  8. laurethiel1138

    laurethiel1138 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Interesting. Most interesting. [face_raised_brow_à_la_Padmé]

    I believe I'm hooked, Sara.

    Please continue soon.

    MTFBWY,

    Lauré ;)
     
  9. Starrunner

    Starrunner Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Nice Start! Very interesting idea!
     
  10. Aiel

    Aiel Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    What a brilliant start Sara_Kenobi I agree with everyone else when they say that it's a gripping start. Can't wait too see more, so Uppers and please continue. :D
     
  11. JediMaster_Jen

    JediMaster_Jen Force Ghost star 4

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    This is a terrific start. Can't wait for more.
     
  12. mixza

    mixza Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great idea; this sounds interesting. Can't wait to find out what happens next.
     
  13. Falcon

    Falcon Chosen One star 10

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    need more
     
  14. AnakinsHeir

    AnakinsHeir Jedi Youngling star 3

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    A wonderful start! I can't wait for more! :D
     
  15. qtrhrs78

    qtrhrs78 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    I've been reeled in as well. Can't wait to see more.
     
  16. LaYa_

    LaYa_ Jedi Knight star 5

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    Great start! :)
     
  17. DarthYong789

    DarthYong789 Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I love it
     
  18. Sara_Kenobi

    Sara_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master star 7

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    Thank you for all the replies, everyone. That was quite the suprise for me. A nice one at that.

    The next part should be up later tonight. :)
     
  19. Jedi_of_Imladris

    Jedi_of_Imladris Jedi Youngling star 2

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    This sounds like it will be a very interesting piece! I like the emotion you showed between Obi-wan and Anakin. Though I think their duel was perhaps cut a bit short. I look forward to see how this plays out!
     
  20. Aiel

    Aiel Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Yay! Finally a postie coming, hope it arrives soon. ;)
     
  21. HandmaidenVeme

    HandmaidenVeme Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Looks like a great story in the making!!!
     
  22. Ana_Labris

    Ana_Labris Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oct 31, 2000
    Pleeeeeeeeeease post soon? *face_hopeful*
     
  23. Sara_Kenobi

    Sara_Kenobi Jedi Grand Master star 7

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    Thanks so much, everyone. I'm half way done writing the next part. :)
     
  24. Vongchild

    Vongchild Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Great start! This looks like a promising story with loads of potential! I'd like to see what you do with it.
     
  25. DarthIshtar

    DarthIshtar Chosen One star 10

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    Let it come!
     
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