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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by greencat336, Jul 25, 2001.

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  1. greencat336

    greencat336 Jedi Knight star 5

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    Jenny, Cheryl -- Hold off on judgement until you get the whole story. Then, if you still want to hate Rai, OK fine. I have to admit that I kinda think she should have gotten over it after 25 years, but what that wouldn't have worked very well for my story ;)

    Obi the Kid -- Glad you're still here!

    cbjedi -- Thanks.

    Kaylla -- Glad you like it. You'll find out why Rai's angry in the next two posts after this one.

    Abbi_Cee -- Yes. The teaser for this was in Skirmish, when the deamons were showing Qui scenes from his life that he was ashamed of . . .

    Kenobis Girl -- Here's more.

    Consider this a teaser for Obi-Torture. I know that is what you all really are waiting for. Poor ignored Qui-Gon. Perhaps I'll have to take Qui somewhere private and comfort his hurt feelings [face_mischief]


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    Ugati had the look of a rat that lost an argument with a large, bad tempered predator. What remained of Ugati was tied to a chair, in a small room deep beneath Security Headquaters.

    The predator in question was currently reprimanding one of his subordinates. ?How could you be so careless as to allow him to die before we had all the information we needed,? demanded Major Stauser.

    ?Major, I am very sorry. I had not been informed that the prisoner had a weak heart,? the lieutenant replied contritely.

    ?You did get a great deal of information from him,? put in Chief Constable Devin. ?You now know that Ugati planned on selling your disc to Vilaso and a couple of offworlders. Before, you did not even know that the Underground leader would be coming to Marrako.?

    ?But the fool died before he told us where he hid the disc. Perhaps he left it somewhere in that club. The owner may know something,? said the Major.

    ?Rai doesn?t get involved in any business like that. As long as her customers don?t cause any uproar, she doesn?t ask what deals they do in her club. Rai?s is treated as neutral territory by the local criminal element,? said Devin. He hated the idea that Rai might get into trouble over this. He and Rai had developed a strange sort of friendship over the years. Besides which, it would be bad for Devin?s income if Rai?s club was shut down.

    ?Tonight, I will meet with this Rai, informally at her club. That setting might put her off guard. If needed, I will discuss the situation with her more . . . formally,? the Major said thoughtfully. ?I will need a complete dossier on the woman by this afternoon. Also, locate Vilaso and the offworlders. Don?t arrest them yet. They might be able to lead us to the disc.?

    ?I will get my best people right on it,? promised Devin. This situation was getting messier by the minute. Now the Bristesca Underground was involved. How was a corrupt official suppose to make a quiet living when these complications kept arising?



     
  2. Kaylla_Norn_II

    Kaylla_Norn_II Jedi Youngling star 2

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    "How was a corrupt official suppose to make a quiet living when these complications kept arising?"

    LOL yes how indeed. Thank you for the post but I'm afraid I would like another one please. Please?! Thank you.
     
  3. Jade's Fire2003

    Jade's Fire2003 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    That was good!

    Post more soon!!!
     
  4. greencat336

    greencat336 Jedi Knight star 5

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    Ask and you shall receive :)


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    The two Jedi had rented an inexpensive hotel room near the nightclub. Their hidden ship was too far from the city for them to conveniently stay on it.

    Qui-Gon had not said three words, since they had left the club. He was stretched out on one of the sleep couches, staring at the ceiling.

    ?Master,? Obi-Wan asked tentatively.

    ?Yes, Padawan,? replied Qui-Gon, continuing his observation of the ceiling.

    ?Who was that woman?? asked Obi-Wan.

    Qui-Gon did not answer. A slight frown crossed his face. Just as Obi-Wan was about to withdraw the question, Qui-Gon spoke.

    ?Her name is Raichelle Blaine. I met her about twenty five years ago, when I was part of the Jedi team investigating Ertaidos? unexpected change in government.?

    Questions buzzed in Obi-Wan?s head. Qui-Gon had been part of that original team? Why hadn?t he told him? What had happened that Qui-Gon would act so strangely when he had to return to Ertaidos? Obi-Wan decided to ask what he thought was the simplest question, one that he could use to lead into others.

    ?Did you know Raichelle well??

    ?I almost left the Jedi for her,? Qui-Gon said quietly, as if unaware he was speaking his thoughts aloud.

    Obi-Wan was shocked into silence. He could only look incredulously at Qui-Gon. The idea that his master would have ever considered leaving the Jedi . . .

    Qui-Gon stood up abruptly. ?It has nothing to do with our mission. Our focus should be on retrieving the disc and escorting Vilaso to the Senate.? He stalked out of the room, closing the door firmly behind him.

    Astonished, Obi-Wan stared after his master.

     
  5. ApprenticeM

    ApprenticeM Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Hmmmm.....you know, has I read this, it kinda reminds me of Obi's decision to stay on M/D...both found something they cared about outside the order.

    Was that what you were aiming for GC, or am I just reading too much into this?
     
  6. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    quigon is being a jerk and obiwan wants to help grrr at you quigon grrrr........
    can't wait for more......... :) :)
     
  7. Kaylla_Norn_II

    Kaylla_Norn_II Jedi Youngling star 2

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    "Astonished, Obi-Wan stared after his master."

    Obi-Wan isn't the only one that is astonished.

    And I want to echo AprenaceM's question.
     
  8. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    'It's not important' he says and just gets up and walks out... NOT IMPORTANT?? You're right about M/D, uh, whoever said that (my memory is bad). Concidering how upset Qui got over Obi's decission to leave, don't you think this is kind of a big point?

    Okay, now the problems lie in convincing Rai the angry to relinquish her data card... Good luck guys.

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  9. Jade's Fire2003

    Jade's Fire2003 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    This gets more interesting by the post!!!
     
  10. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    Great Posts!!!!!!

    BTW, your pages won't be over funny if you make your ***** things shorter.
     
  11. Aida

    Aida Jedi Youngling

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    :Thinking, a sometimes very difficult process: ooohhhhh....Hey I think I get It!!! *wow* That almost never happens. :p
    What's that quote about a woman"s scorn? :wink:
     
  12. greencat336

    greencat336 Jedi Knight star 5

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    ******************************************

    As Qui-Gon aimlessly walked the streets of Marrako, his thoughts were filled with memories of long ago.


    Ertaidos had been one of his first missions as a Knight. Using false documents that identified him as a native, he worked as a clerk for the planetary government. Undercover, he was to find any information concerning the resignation of the original planetary officials. Moreover, he was to gauge the feelings of the people, determine if they supported the new government.

    To that end he had socialized, making friends with the others who worked in the government offices, his neighbors, and a pretty young woman that managed the bar where he and his friends hung out. The life he led was so different than the one he had at the Temple. Strangely easygoing, though he still pursued the mission objective. Qui-Gon had intended his relationship with Raichelle to be as causal as the ones he had established with the other people he encountered.

    But, from the first, it was different. Her sense of humor, her zest for life . . . She captivated him. The feeling was mutual, he could sense the deep love she had for him.



    They would walk through the park, hand in hand, saying nothing. Sharing the joy of the moment. With a mischievous look in her eye, Raichelle pulled away and said, ?Catch me if you can!?

    Laughing like carefree children, they chased each other through the trees. Sweeping Raichelle up in his arms, Qui-Gon kissed her passionately. ?Caught you and you?ll never escape from me.?



    Evenings in the bar Raichelle managed. Qui-Gon sitting at a table filled with friends, laughing and joking. Catching Raichelle?s eye from across the room. A smile that promised time together after she got off work.



    Curled up together on the couch in Qui-Gon?s small apartment.

    ?What does the future hold for us, beloved?? Raichelle asked.

    ?Always in motion is the future. It is the moment that is important,? he had replied. He had not wanted to think about what would happen when the mission was over.

    ?I want to spend all our future moments together, Qui-Gon,? she said.

    I want that, too, Qui-Gon had thought. He had said instead, ?Its an uncertain galaxy we live in. Every moment we have with each other is a gift.? A kiss, a caress, to distract them both.


    The day he had received the order recalling him. The mission was over. Ertaidos had withdrawn from the Republic. Its internal political problems were no longer the Jedi?s concern.

    He had spent the rest of that day in meditation. What would Raichelle do if he told her the truth of who he was, not a government clerk but an offworlder Jedi. Would she think that his love was as much a lie as his identity? Could he ask her to leave behind her life and return with him to Coruscant? Would that be allowed by the Council? Being married to a Jedi was a difficult thing. What if he ignored the summons, stayed on Ertaidos. Gave up the life of a Jedi for a life with Raichelle.

    Night had fallen when he came to his decision. He was not proud of what he was about to do, but he could not face her. The note written and sent, Qui-Gon had packed his few belongings and returned to the Jedi.



    Qui-Gon found himself outside of Rai?s. The nightclub?s garish neon sign was dark, but he sensed she was still inside. Almost against his will, he went in.
     
  13. TrianaJinn

    TrianaJinn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Awesome posts, greencat! :)
     
  14. Jade's Fire2003

    Jade's Fire2003 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oh my!!!

    More!!!
     
  15. Jedi_Laura_Kenobi

    Jedi_Laura_Kenobi Jedi Master star 5

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    Wow, Greencat! This is great so far!

    Poor Qui-Gon and Raichelle! They have a lot to work out, I think... :)

    And we even have Obi torture to look forw... er - come... ;)

    I'm really looking forward to reading more of this! Please post soon!

    :D
     
  16. I love Sci Fi

    I love Sci Fi Jedi Master star 4

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    very nice
     
  17. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    Hmmmm. I don't quite care for the fact that QuiGon stayed undercover all the while pursuing a relationship with Rai. What did he think would eventually happen??? How would he expect her to feel???

    I don't blame Rai a bit for being angry at him. He lied to her, led her on and then left... leaving only a note??? Not very Jedi-like at all! He didn't even give her the options of choosing to stay or go with him. I'm very diappointed in him. :( :(

    Excellent post greencat.
     
  18. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    Hmmmm. I don't quite care for the fact that QuiGon stayed undercover all the while pursuing a relationship with Rai. What did he think would eventually happen??? How would he expect her to feel???

    I don't blame Rai a bit for being angry at him. He lied to her, led her on and then left... leaving only a note??? Not very Jedi-like at all! He didn't even give her the options of choosing to stay or go with him. I'm very diappointed in him. :( :(

    Excellent post greencat.
     
  19. greencat336

    greencat336 Jedi Knight star 5

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    Leaving Rai was not one of Qui's best moments, and he knows it. Not that it excuses him, but he did start out intending things to be causal and he was young, in his early twenties. And, although some fanfics have Qui dating alot, I'm going from the POV that padawans don't have a lot of romantic encounters. So as a newly made knight, Qui didn't have much experience on how to best conduct a break up.

    As to not letting her know from the start he was undercover, the best way to keep a secret is not tell anyone. I agree that he should have talked things out with her, but I think we have all seen in both canon and fics, Qui isn't much for discussion. Of course, if they had worked things out years ago, I wouldn't have had much of a story to write. :)

    I appreciate your comments, feedback and your continuing to read this!


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    Memories of long ago . . .

    Raichelle shifted her weight impatiently as she waited. If Qui-Gon did not get there soon, they would miss their shuttle. They had been planning this trip for weeks, a romantic get away for just the two of them.

    Her impatience evaporated as she smiled to herself. If anyone had told her six months ago she would be looking forward to a long weekend at a nature preserve . . . But she?d be with Qui-Gon. His connection to living things enchanted her. He enchanted her. She was astonished at the depth of their feelings for each other, considering the relatively short time they had know each other. Once she would have laughed at the idea of love at first sight, but now she knew better.

    Where was that man? It wasn?t like him to be late. The first tendrils of worry began to tug at her.

    A page droid chirped her name. After she identified herself, it handed her a piece of flimsy. The note contained only a few, brief sentences.

    My dearest Raichelle,

    I must leave. I can never see you again. May the Force be with you.

    Qui-Gon


    Crumpling the flimsy in her hand, she leaned heavily against the wall. She could not seem to catch her breath. It was as if she had been stabbed in the gut. Her world began to crumble around her.





    A few hours ago the nightclub had been full of people, pleasure seeking, deal making. Lights flashed, music pulsed. Now, it was as dark and quiet as a tomb, save for one small light, illuminating a table with a single occupant.

    Rai remember that day in the shuttle station as if it had happened only moments ago. Remembered standing there in a daze, trying to comprehend the brief message he had sent. She reached for the whiskey bottle on the table, somewhat surprised to find it empty already.

    Qui-Gon walked out of the darkness, to stand silently before her.

    Conversationally, with only the slightest slur to her speech, Rai said, ? ?Bout time you showed up. Only 25 years too late. Think they?ll still honor our reservation? I?d offer you a drink, but,? with a shrug she turned the empty whiskey bottle upside down.

    ?You know, it took me years to believe that note wasn?t a fake. That you hadn?t been arrested like so many were in the purges after Ertaidos left the Republic. They almost arrested me,? Rai rambled on, only half aware of her audience. ?Doni ? remember Doni ? he warned me. Just enough time to get out. Spent the next years running from one end of the world to the other. Wouldn?t go off world, though. Convinced that I?d find you eventually. That you?d find me. After a while I finally realized that the note wasn?t a fake. You really had left me. Pathetic that it took me so long, really.?

    Going to the bar, Rai reached behind it, snagging another bottle. Not bothering with a glass, she took a drink. ?In my more charitable moments, I figured you took off to protect me. Draw off pursuit. Mostly, though, I think that you took off because you caught wind of the purges and wanted to save your own cowardly skin.?

    ?If it made it easier for you to believe that,? Qui-Gon spoke at last.

    ?Nothing after that day was easy,? Rai shrieked, throw
     
  20. ApprenticeM

    ApprenticeM Jedi Padawan star 4

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    She's not the only one with tears in her eyes!!! So sad GC!! Now, are we close to the Obi torture? *off GC's look* What?
     
  21. Jedi_Laura_Kenobi

    Jedi_Laura_Kenobi Jedi Master star 5

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    Awwwwww... that was great! And I second M's question... :)

    Excellent post, Greencat! I can't wait for more!

    :D
     
  22. greencat336

    greencat336 Jedi Knight star 5

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    well . . . I hate to disappoint you all, but it will be a while before Obi gets tortured. In the next post, there is some more Obi-angst. Obi has hurt feelings that Qui won't confide in him about Rai.

    I worry a little that this is a much slower moving story, with more dialog and less action than the other fics I've written. It is the nature of this story because of the movie it is based on. But I am concerned that people will get bored with it. Let me know please if you think it is dragging too much.

    Thanks.
     
  23. Jedi_Laura_Kenobi

    Jedi_Laura_Kenobi Jedi Master star 5

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    No, no, no! It is NOT dragging too much! This is a wonderful story - I love it so far! Not boring! No, no, no!

    That's too bad about the Obi-torture... but Obi-angst? That'll do for now... :)

    And hey, this is a way for us Jedi to practice patience! ;)

    Keep up the great work! I can?t wait for the next post!

    :D
     
  24. KenobisGirl

    KenobisGirl Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    There is noooo way your story could ever get boring, GC. :)

    That was sad! :_|

    More please! :D

    (-O-)Ashley Kenobi(-O-)
     
  25. Jedi Susie

    Jedi Susie Jedi Master star 4

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    I think that, although action and torture is nice in a story, it by no means makes the story. Yours is moving very nicely and slowly getting us to know the different characters and settings. Since you're dealing with a past, but not starting in the past, I think you need time to build up...doing exactly what you're doing is wonderful.

     
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