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Beyond - Legends A Small Backwater Adventure with Han and Luke COMPLETE 11/29

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Calandria, Jul 15, 2003.

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  1. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    *wince*

    sorry I've not been writing peeps. RL has been getting in the way. Hopefully I'll manage to sneak in some time next week for a new postie :(

     
  2. The_Good_Twin

    The_Good_Twin Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Aaahh! I missed so many good posts!
    I really hope R2 will rescue them soon!

    RL has been getting in the way.- I know that feeling, I am hunted down by DRL at the moment, too. No, let me correct that- I think it's the pure Darkside itself! :p

    But I hope you will escape my fate and soooo...

    we will soon get more posts, more posts, more posts!!! :D

    :D :D :D
     
  3. GreatOne

    GreatOne Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I... Want... MORE!!!! !!!!!

    *throws temper tantrum and holds breath until she passes out*
     
  4. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Okay new postie... finally. I'm really sorry it's taking me so long to write these. I feel pretty bad about it. Especially since I have maybe 4 more I want to write till the end.


    --Part 22--


    A low dripping sound filled the small, cell like room in which Saber's henchmen had locked Sugar Trip. Drip. Drip. Drip. No faint light flickered in the cubic room. Drip. Drip. Drip. Only the door interrupted teh featurelessness of the walls and floor. Drip. Drip. Drip. A sticky, somewhat warm liquid dripped from the cieling down into a small round depression in the ground. Trip touched a finger to it, then tasted it. It was blood.

    Tia Saber's voice shoot through Trip's mind, rythmical like the dripping blood. Tia's not like that. He lied His mind whirled as Tia's warm blue eyes flashed through. The sound of her laughter seemed to fill the samll room, blocking the insistant sound. Saber must be wrong. Tia was innocence in person. She could do no harm. Tia was perfect. She could do no wrong.

    The dripping sound mixed with the endles repetition of Tia's name in his mind. Overlaid to that sound came's Saber's taunting words. Over and over and over again. Slowly Trip's mind enflamed with rage. A blind kind of rage which listened to no reason and colored all in blood. he jumped up and stumbled along the walls till his fingers reached teh doors. With closed fists he begun to pound on the barriere blocking his way. His screams of fury echoing loudly in the confined space of the room. Soon the door slip open and two henchmen rushed in to subdue Trip. A harsh voice attempted to break through the fog clouding his mind.

    "Saber wants you intact. I foyu don't calm down we will calm you down with other means." Trip ceased his struggles and the two black clad men released him. Just as they turned to leave, Trip jumped them and after a short skirmish, scurried aways down the dark hall way, ducking in and out of black corners. An angered voice and two quick bursts from a blaster followed him. "fools you sould have paid better attention." Moments later the voice roared again. "Catch him before our lord knows of his disappearance." Feet stomped after Trip down teh darkened corridors, through the Shadowy passages of Saber's lair.

    An eerie silence filled the torture chamber as Trip slipped through the open doorway. No dripping echoed through the large cavern. Halfway between the altar and the entrance, Saber knelt craddling a white clad shape. He killed Mia

    "MURDER" No one, not Saber, not his henchmen seemed to hear the cry of rage. It seemed as if Trip moved outside of their dimension, not a part of their time frame. The word could not reach Saber. Only as Trip bodily pulled him frm Natea's blood stained form did he begin to notice the intruder. Vaguely he realized that someone dragged him from her. Angered he began fighting, incredulous that someone would dare oppose him. Where had his men gone? Could they not see this interloper? A part of his mind saw them, staring at Natea's white sprawled form, watching as the blood seeped her white robes. As he turned his eyes away another stealthy figure caught his attention.

    "Noooooooooooooooo, stop her. She'll ruin everythin..." Trip clamped a hand over his mouth, stiffling his shrill voice. It seemed that the sound finally freed his men from their daze. They turned to follow his livid gaze and saw Leia carefully helping Luke onto the grav sled shed' already put Han onto. A few headed towards Saber, meaning to help him, while the rest rushed Leia.

    *********

    hmmm next postie will be about... errr... well it will be about what ever I want it to be about
     
  5. GreatOne

    GreatOne Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Oh nooo!!! They are rushing LEIA!!!! WAKE UP LUKE!!!! Good post!
     
  6. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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  7. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    GreatOne maybe not luke... but almost as good... a mysteriously possesed saber :D

    Blended awwww it's not that bad... promised... Leia will only get captured [face_devil]


    new postied should be up tonight or tomorrow, depending on how sick I feel. Salmon sandwiches DO NOT agree with me.. urg.
     
  8. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Okay... got a new postie typed up :D (And I got the last 4 posties written up but not typed yet... so hopefully you'll get a postie a day... or maybe every two days :D )


    here goes nothing...

    -- Part 23 --

    Leia pulled her blaster out and soon red bolts of pure energy arced through the roon, taking down black clad henchmen. But for every one she killed, another two appeared in the black doorway. Her luck was that they weren't shooting, not wanting to damage their master's prizes. She moved away from Han and Luke, looking for cover behind the black pullars, still shooting randomly at the approaching figures. Soon the first Henchman reached her and began grappling with her for her weapon. All the while Saber's voice echoed through the cavern.

    "Kill her. Maim her. Subdue her. Prevent her. She'll ruin everything." Brief silences punctuated his words as Trip tried to stiffle his shrill voice. From a corner of her eyes, Leia saw Trip take out the few who had rushed him, Saber trussed up like a christmas special. Briefly she wondered what he had planned with the madman. Then she stopped wondering as Natea's blue saber sprung into existance and drunkenly slashed through the dwindlins mass of attackers. Straining her eyes as she might, she couldn't make out the hand wielding it. In her amazement at the sight, she stopped struggling against her captors. Just as they stopped trying to hold her as the haunted saber slashed through its hapless victims.

    //must protect// the ghostly hand wielding the glowing weapon spoke into Leia's mind with a slurred voice. She couldn't quiet make out to whome the voice belonged. //can't let Leia be harmed// A slow realization dawned as Leia wactched the uncertain blade twirl and flash first slowly, then faster and faster as who ever controlled it grew more confident. Thru slitted eyes she threw a quick look over to where Luke lay heaped together. His fist was clenched in concentration and his eyes pressed closed. Sweat stained his pale features. For a moment he realxed as he lost his grip on the saber and it tumbled down to the smooth black stone. Then he attacked with renewed vigor and intensity. Leia tentivley called out to her brother, offering him her strenght. Blindly he took it and fought harder, thinking only of protecting her.

    WHile all concentrated on the eerie blue apparition, Trip dragged Saber to the hanging rack, and strapped him to his own invention. During the commontion of the fight between Natea and Saber, some worker had repared the system and quietly Saber glided up into the air. Using the King's own vibroblade, Trip slowly started hacking at the restrained limbs.

    "Tia's not like that. You lied. You lied. LIAR." With each stroke, of the blade, Trip chopped another dent into Saber's increaslingly ravaged skin. Blood flowed in thick streams, gushing down onto the already slick stone surface. Before lonag, pale from bloodloss an pain, Saber slipped into oblivion. And Sugar Trip kept on mutilationg the man's dead body, his sister's face floating in the streaming blood.

    *****

    [face_devil]

    Next postie will be about Tia :D and you'll just have to wait to see if Leia and Luke manage to win against their attackers in the postie after that [face_devil]
     
  9. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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    [face_shocked] What have you done! Trip's not supposed to do that! He's supposed to be nice and not kill Saber!

    Leia's not been captured... I'm confuzled...
     
  10. GreatOne

    GreatOne Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Wow. So Luke controlled a lightsaber, even when he was "out of it"!? And Trip has really lost it! WOW!!!
     
  11. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Blended Well Trip wasn't really ever the nice guy. He wanted to find his sister... if necessarily over dead bodies... he just looked like a good guy. I might not have made it very clear, but one part of his mind thought that Natea was Tia... and that Saber had just killed her... so he went ballistics.

    As for Leia, she did get captured, but everyone was so shocked by the haunted lightsaber that they're not really paying attention... for now. But remember... she's all alone, in a cavern surrounded by bad dudes, her brother has his hands full with keeping that saber aloft, and han... well han's kinda out of it :D


    GreatOne Like it? I always did think Luke could be a pretty good jedi. I mean it's totally in line with my opinion of him. He just fixed his mind on something (protecting his sister) and does everything he can to reach that goal. I don't think he's someone for half finished things... and that saber was just lying around... forgot by everyone except this twisted author :D
     
  12. The_Good_Twin

    The_Good_Twin Jedi Youngling star 2

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    :eek: Oh my, You can't say about Trip that he is at peace at the moment, can you? :p

    And it's time that Luke and Leia strike back!! :D [face_devil]

    -And Han could move his lazy butt and do something, too! :p
    Okay, he is handicapped at the moment,but so is Luke! :p - Nah, just kidding! Poor Han! [face_devil] ;) :D

    :D :D :D
     
  13. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Now, this is when R2 and C3P0 pop in and save the day...
     
  14. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    GoodTwin awww come on... give poor Han a break... he's pretty badly banged up after all :p

    Blended Now, this is when R2 and C3P0 pop in and save the day...

    you... you... :eek: you read my script... you... :eek:
     
  15. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    --Part 24: 20 years ago --

    The shuttle settled on te gleaming silver landing pad. It was slightly damp from recently fallen rain, and even now the last drops spattered against the smooth surface as the sun managed to break through the dark clouds, slowly scattering them to where they'd come from. An old Zetrami man surrounded by several black clad and hooded guards stood waiting to one side of the pad. He watvched with stilll alert eyes as the ramp lowered allowing a gaunt looking man with peirecing blue eyes and a young woman of maybe fifteen to exit the craft.

    "Tarkin. How good to see you."

    "It is always a pleasure to be here, your highness." Tarkin bowed slightly, then motioned the young woman to step forward. "May I present my daughter Tia?" The old king took a mesuring look at the girl.

    "She meets my needs. Terak. Take her to the rooms prepared for her." One of the guards stepped forward and escorted Tia from the platform. The King waited in silence, watching her go. "Has she been suitably prepared?" He asked once she'd disapeared into the dark recesses of the building.

    "Yes. She will submit to your will. She... believes that once she has born you a son whs will be left alone to live out the rest of her life as she sees fit." The King barked a laugh, a kind of evil pleasure gleaming in his eyes."

    "I shall enjoy her then. Tell your master I am pleased." Tarking bowed low and turned to watch the unloading of Tia's few possessions. "And Tarkin"

    "Yes your Highness?"

    "I admire a man like you. Strong enough to sacrifice his daughter for the greater good."

    "She was beginning to be a nuissance."

    "Aren't daughters always?" With slitted eyes The King watched as Tarkin again flew off. He would return in a few days time for his daughter's wedding.

    "So much to to Saber." One of the black clads stepped forward and romeoved his hood, revealing youthful human features.

    "All is ready. The jedi apprentice will tumble into the trap laif for her. All will occur as planed after the wedding."

    "Good. Good. This alliance is important, but i have no intention of raising that man's brat. I am sure he has arranged for his master's seed to be planted within her."

    "there are medications..."

    "Yes, but I want a more final solution. She will be dead soon, you will be king with the jedi bitch by your side, and the alliance with the rising galactic power will be cemented in duracret." Saber bowed and bagan moving away. "Saber. Disapoint me not."

    "Never my Master. My loyality belongs to you now. Not the weaklings of the Dead Jedi Order."



    ******

    3 more posties to go after this one :D

    and next up will be... R2 [face_devil]
     
  16. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    eeek I just reread what I wrote and realized that (on top of the really bad spelling mistakes I've got in there) I have tons of plot holes.

    So as soon as I've posted the last segment, I'll post a re-edited version of the story (having hopefully filled plotholes and continuity problems.)

    Which means I'd like a beta to proof read that final versions to make sure I caught all the really bad mistakes. If you'd like the job, just pm me and I'll send you the corrected version as soon as I've got it :D

    That's the problem when you write a story on the go... you change your mind about things :D
     
  17. GreatOne

    GreatOne Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    poor Tia! Only two more posts?? :eek:
     
  18. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    no only three more posts if you count the epilogue/teaser for the sequel [face_devil]

    if you really wanna feel sorry for Tia... think about Saber's "hobby" and the fact that her body ended up mummified. [face_devil]
     
  19. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Script? What script? *Hides script behind back innocently*

    Nearly ended? :_| Sequel? :)
     
  20. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    blended yup.. nearing the end.. but don't worry... I got me an evil sequel in mind... well actually (according to a friend on another site) I just have a really EVIL teaser for the sequel... [face_devil]


    and in 3 days you'll know what it is [face_devil]
     
  21. kristeh

    kristeh Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Hi, Cala,

    I'm sorry I don't have time for a real response now, but I have caught up reading and I'm really enjoying it. Great action! And I love Luke controlling that saber. I'll try to give a more detailed response this weekend.

    Kristeh
     
  22. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Kristeh That's not a problem. I know how life can get, I've not been able to keep up to date with most of the stories I enjoy, I keep on printing out the posties, hoping to find the time to read them on the train...

    okay again new postie :D (only 2 more to go after this one)

    --Part 25--

    The blue saber snapped off and fell to the ground in an echoing clatter. All stood frozen, watching the cursed object lay unmoving. Leia risked a glance over at her brother, feeling drained from their link. He was curled onto himself, breathing heavily. Wanting to go to his and Han's side, she weakly tried to stand up, her legs failing her. While her guards no longer watched her, she crawled over, working on trying to untangle herself from the strength robbing link.

    A low beep from a nearby data terminal eventually drew her attention. Artoo had plugged himself into the terminal and was busy doing what ever droids did in a situation such as this. Leia was too weak to wonder. A sudden, far off explosion drew her from her stupor. Her mind must have dozed, because she lay in chains, black men milling about her, just watching the bloody remains of Saber. She felt ill. Sugar Trip wandered around aimlessly, mumbling incoherent words, still wielding his vibroblade. The henchmen left him alone, just as they left the motionless saber alone.

    Finally Leia found the source of the explosion. A group of green clad Zetrami security forces stormed the dark cavern, brining flood lights with them to finally light up the darkness of the chamber. Leia had thought that the strange rough-smoothness of the stone floor came from the unusual texture of the material. But what her face was pillowed against was not stone, but caked blood. In the bright light, she could see that the black was covered in red, blue, and many other kinds of bloods. It sickened her. He must have been using this place for years on end. A part of her did not envy the men who would now have to search this place. Who knew what unimaginable horrors awaited them. But another part didn't care. That part just wanted to get out of here and get Han and Luke to the medics.

    Artoo rolled up to her, and if she hadn't known that he was an astromech droid, incapable of emotions, she'd almost have believe he was concerned. His optical sensor kept rotating around, going from her, to Han, to Luke and back again. Over and over and over again. It dawned on her that he must have called security forces while she was out. the little droid was smarter than the rest of them. She hadn't even thought about calling for back up.

    Listlessly she listened to the conversations between the green clads, and the screams from the black clads. She leaned back and closed her eyes. Too weary to move, wanting only to go home. Calling up some reserves she didnt' know she had, she crawled over to Luke and made sure he was alright, then she moved to Han. Collapsing by his side, she snuggled close and just held him while she waited for the medics to finally come to them. From a distance she could hear one man throw up. Another screamed weakly as he discovered some atrocity. And a third banged something against the rack control, trying to get it to lower, wanting to stop the dripping sound echoing through the cavern.

    ********

    next postie about Leia and the after effects.

    then there's only the epilogue left :(
     
  23. GreatOne

    GreatOne Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Go Artoo!!! Yeah! Now it's time for everybody to recover... right?? Good post! :D
     
  24. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Poor Leia.

    I knbew Artoo would save them! :D
     
  25. Calandria

    Calandria Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Greatone Yup now it's time for recovery. :D until the next story that is [face_devil]

    Blended Artoo's the best? Isn't he :D Am thinking of writing a story just about him... or another, lesser known droid I'd make up. But inspiration's failing me just now *shruggs* another time maybe :D

    okay... next to the last postie :D

    ***********

    --Part 26--

    Several days later Leia sat in Natea's hidden garden. The sun highlighted the ordered chaos of colors and warmed her. She couldn't seem to get truly warm ever since she'd seen the depth of Saber's gruesomeness. Once the Medics had taken Han and Luke away she'd explored for a little while, before letting the medics take her away too. Now, three days later, Han was still floating in bacta, and Luke wouldn't be released from the med wards for some days yet. The low beep of her comlink pulled her from her thoughts.

    "Organa"

    "Leia. Mon Monthma here. I've been trying to reach you for several days now." Her wane face lit up with a smile at the sound of her long time friend's voice.

    "The Zetrami have only let me out of the med wards this morning. They are quiet zealous about curing their sick, letting no one and nothing disturb them. Truth be told, it does have its nice sides."

    "Then you are well?"

    "Just exhausted. But I'll be fine. I'm mored worried about Luke and Han. The drug used on them weakened them pretty badly."

    "I hope they'll be alright. Is anything known about that madman's motivations?"

    "No. But from what I understand they have some 20 years of records to work through."

    "I've contacted both Admiral Ackbar and General Cracken. Both will send teams to help with the investigation." Leia watched as a small bird settled down on a perch near her. For a moment her thoughts wandered to the mummified girl. I wonder what her story is. "Leia?"

    "Sorry my mind wandered. I think the Zetrami will need more than just help investigating. Up to know, and for the past 20 years, Saber and Natea were the ones making all the decisions. They don't know how to rule themselves anymore."

    "I'll take care of it. You get some rest. You more than deserve it."

    "I will. Let me know what comes up."

    "Alright. Bye Leia." The comlink clicked off, leaving Leia alone with her thoughts again. Slowly she stood and wandered back to the medical ward. She wanted to be near Han and her brother when they woke up. Sometimes she wondered how they all managed to survive the horrors they'd already lived through. What made them so different' What made them stronger? They could just as well have ended up like Sugar Trip, wandering aimlessly through an abandoned lair, occasionally cradling a mummified body, and screaming in rage at anyone daring to try and take it from him, thinking that the girl was but asleep. What made her see the dead, and realize that the past too was dead?

    She stopped for a moment at the exit to the garden, and turned back to look at the artfully chaotic plant life. The sun's rays caught a dew drop hanging from one deep violet flower, casting rainbow shades all around. Such beauty on such a world. Quietly she left the garden and went to wait near the two men alive she cared about most.

    *********

    hmmm what's to say about the epilogue? [face_devil] just wait for it and see my teasers for the next story :D
     
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