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A story of my own...

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by Taryn, Apr 8, 2000.

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  1. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I can't bear to let this go down. I only have a tidbit, but I'll post it.

    Satisfied, she left the cave and sought out Cirani. She found her with Geisha, Heracious and Atkinad. Seeing the girl who had attacked him, Atkinad startled and jumped behind the Jedi.
    She decided it would be best for her to address the caravan leader first.
    "Atkinad, I''m sorry I charged after you yesturday." she began, "I ask your forgiveness. I really do wish you no harm. I...haven't been myself since landing on this planet."
    Atkinad looked at her in a suprised silence, not sure what to say. He looked down for a moment.
    "Atkinad, she has to be told." Geisha said.
    "Told what?" Shaela wondered aloud.
    They waited in silence as Atkinad readied himself to tell the news.
    "I...did not get wounded falling into the fire as I has said. It was a lightsaber."
    He looked up and saw the confusion on the girl's face, then, understanding took its place.
    "Jerill did that to you, didn't he?"
    Atkinad was suprised that she knew, even the name of his son.
    "Yes. He came to me the night before last, and told me if I stopped the caravan for any reason, he would kill my family. I didn't know he would destroy the caravan to get you and the woman. I didn't know that he already killed my family. He killed them the day we left Shaderi. I'm the one who's sorry."
    Shaela felt a strong emotion welling up inside her, and she could not control it, but this time it wasn't anger or rage.
    "Have you decided about my offer, Shaela?" Cirani spoke up.
    "Jerill must be stopped. I'm going after him."
    Her voice was icy with resolve, and the other Jedi were somewhat suprized by her announcement.
    "Shaela, I looked for him yesturday. He's gone." Cirani told her.
    "I know what his presence feels like. I can find him." she countered.
    "And then what? He would have killed you if Cirani wasn't there to save you." Heracious said.
    "He's increased in skill since I'd last fought him at the Temple. I know that now. I will be ready for it next time."
    "Shaela..." Geisha protested.
    "A Jedi may leave at any time. Is this no longer true?" the girl asked.
    "It is true." Heracious answered.
    "I know what I must do, Master Cahn. I will leave soon for the ravine."
    Geisha spoke up.
    "Shaela, I will be escorting Atkinad and Dayn back to Shaderi. Can you wait to leave until then?"
    Shaela thought about it a moment.
    "I will wait, Geisha. As long as it isn't too long."
     
  2. light_sabe_r

    light_sabe_r Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Ooooh! I hope Shaela knows what she's doing. If it were me, I'd be off after my Master's killer faster than a speeding podracer.

    Intriguing story. Can't wait for more!
     
  3. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Don't worry. Whether she waits or not, I will say, the same thing will happen.
     
  4. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard FFoF Artist Extraordinaire star 4 VIP - Game Host

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    Since you were kind enough to read and comment on my story, I thought I'd return the favor. I like this a lot! It's very suspenseful, and I was genuinely moved when Shaela and Cirani were talking, and during Tahsh's funeral. Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to more.

    MTFBWY,
    Raissa
     
  5. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    It will be a bit until I post more. I was working on writing the next part on paper, but I'm too exhausted from work to type it up tonight.
    I have to tell you that in 2 weeks from this past Friday, I'm getting married, and will be out of state for a month. I have no idea when I'll be able to return, but when that time comes, just look for 'Remembering...Ch.2'
    But I will get more posted before I go, I promise.
     
  6. light_sabe_r

    light_sabe_r Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I'll hold ya to that

    Good luck with your wedding!

    Dum dum da-da!

    <For all the people with no musical aptitude, like me, that's the wedding march>
     
  7. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    This is as much as I was able to get. Enjoy.

    The small group traveled toward the ravine in silence. Atkinad not wanting to speak, for fear his true emotions would come out, Deine, the other survivor, not having anything to say. Geisha was silent, concentrating in the Force for any remaining threat, and Shaela was focused, reaching out, searching for any sign of Jerill. The group was about halfway to the ravine when Geisha felt something.
    "Not again." Shaela muttered as she also felt the presence of several men nearby.
    Atkinad looked over to the Jedi, afraid of what it might be.
    "There are many beings approaching us from the diraction of the ravine." Geisha informed the men.
    "What are we going to do?" Deine asked.
    Shaela looked around, as did the healer, and saw the cliff nearby had vines growing on them.
    "What, you want us to climb those, girl?" Atkinad said when he saw what she was looking at.
    "No. I feel it's hiding something." Shaela answered.
    She walked over to the vines, pulled some aside, and revealed a cavern. Something seemed to call to her, and she entered the darkness.
    "Come on, men." Geisha said. "Let's go."
    And then, she also went into the cavern. Daine looked at Atkinad momentarily.
    "I'm going to continue on." Atkinad told him.
    "What? You can't be serious. Not after yesturday." Daine protested.
    "I have nothing left. My family is all dead. After that ambush Atkinad's Provision Acquisition and Transport Depo is gone. You know we used all our resources on the Jedi. You go with them. I don't wish to live in shame."
    Atkinad turned and continued alone. Daine watched for a moment, then entered the cave with the Jedi, telling them Atkinad's decision.
    "That's his right." Geisha told him.
    The tree traveled into the cave, and when they were deep enough they had no light, Shaela ignited her lightsaber, providing some light with her violet blade. They immediately saw they were not in a cave. The tunnel was nearly a perfect square, and support beams could be seen along the walls. There were lights at a regular interval, but none of them were on. In a few places, the wall would sparkle.
    Daine took a closer look at the mine wall.
    "Jheridite." he told the Jedi. "We're in a jheridite mine."
    "Is there any danger from it, Daine?" Geisha asked.
    "No. Unless the ones who dug it come and see us in here. It's illegal to mine the Cauldron. It's one of the protected Natural Wonders. But the worth of jheridite would make it worth the risk."
    Durring the talk about the mineral, Shaela felt something.
    "Jerill's been in here. It's been a while, maybe a day, but he was here. That's why Cirani failed to find him."
    That was part of it, she knew, but there was something else she couldn't identify.
    "Let's keep going. Our persuers might find out where we went to." Geisha told them.
    The three walked along the mine shaft, following its many twists and turns, and finally saw sunlight ahead. They emerged on the outside of the Cauldron on a wide ledge wide. A cliff rose high above them on three sides, a small stone wall, just less than a meter high, crossed the remainder of the distance, and ahead there was a large stone pillar. The cliff face to their right had burn marks that indicated that the space had been used as a landing pad for a small ship.

     
  8. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    PAGE THREE!!!!????
    I don't THINK so.
    Not yet, anyway.
     
  9. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Shaela looked at the ground, noticing the way the dirt had been blown by a ship's repulsor engines, confirming that there had indeed been a ship there. Voices were heard in the mine shaft behind them.
    "Over here." Geisha quietly called to Daine and Shaela.
    Shaela neared Geisha, and saw a cave enterance that had been hidden behind the stone pillar. The three entered the cave, and followed the cavern trail down and to the left, emerging directly below where they had been moments before. The trail that lay before them continued downward, and evened out with the ground before turning out of sight.
    "They're not here." one voice said above them.
    "Keep looking. They're here somewhere, I know it." the man obviously in charge ordered.
    The three looked at each other, and Daine spoke quietly.
    "I think if we run, we can make it past them."
    Before anything else could happen, Daine took off running, Giesha following close behind.
    "There they are!" the leader called out, hearing the footsteps. The persuers began firing their blasters down at Daine, and he managed to get around the bend. Geisha took cover, and Shaela was forced to move as the attackers would come behind her. She, too, began to run, but something turned her attention to the cliffside, and she saw another mine shaft. Not really thinking, not having time to, she ducked into the shaft and blended into the darkness while her persuers passed right by.
    Breathing a sigh of relief at her safety, she felt Jerill's Force shadow. He had been here also. When it was safe, she ignited her lightsaber and followed the shaft, looking for any clue where he might have gone to.

    *come on, people! I'm not gone yet!*
     
  10. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Shaela followed the shaft, followed the Force, and before long, she felt the disturbance directly around a bend. She extended the Force to feel for life-forms, and felt nothing. Nobody was there.
    She turned the corner, and suddenly, she was under attack, not by anything she could see, but an unknown something was attacking the midichlorians inside her, causing her to fall toward the ground in anguish. The Force took over and she threw her lightsaber across the shaft, connecting with a power cable attached to a large clump of jheridite, just before falling to the ground.
    The attack ended, but Shaela still felt the effects of it. As she lay on the ground fighting for her life, one by one, her memories vanished, possibly forever. Finally she gave in, and she lost consciousness.

    *I have only one week until I get married. I might post more before I leave on my honeymoon, but that's a maybe.*
     
  11. light_sabe_r

    light_sabe_r Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Just catching up on my fave fics.

    UP YA GO!

    Don't leave it there, It's a great cliff hanger.

    MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
     
  12. Taryn

    Taryn Jedi Youngling star 1

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    But that's the idea. Leave you guys hanging, just waiting to see what happens next.
    this is first draft of what happens next, so it isn't quite as good as I want it, but here.


    Atkinad had not continued on alone just to spite the Jedi, or for the reasons he gave Daine. He knew of the mine already, and knew where the entrance on the other side was. In fact, it was his great grandfather who had started this mine, and now, he knew, his own son was using it. He knew this area of the Cauldron well, and got around the men who were hunting them down. He reached the path leading to the outer entrance in time to hear blaster shots. Pulling his weapon from his side, Atkinad ran, seeing Daine get shot five times and go down. Atkinad felt anger rise inside him, and he found himself shooting Daine's murderers. Within moments, every one of them were dead or dying. Atkinad proceeded around the bend. Three men searched for something.
    'The Jedi, most likely.' Atkinad thought to himself.
    From the cover of the cliff, he fired off four shots, three of them connecting with their target, and, having wiped out all the threat, he began his own search for the Jedi.
    "Geisha! Shaela! Where are you?"

    The first thing Shaela noticed was someone calling out nearby.
    "Geisha! Shaela! Where are you?" the voice called.
    She opened her eyes and found she was on the floor of a cave.
    "Shaela Daegar! Can you hear me?"
    She pushed herself up, feeling only minor aches and pains, and realizing she had no idea who she was. She knew no details about herself.
    "Geisha? Shaela?" the voice was closer this time.
    Shaela looked around, noticing her surroundings. She was in a room that appeared to be cut from the rock specifically to be an office. All the furniture was cut out as the room was created, and there were some datapads on the stone table.

    Atkinad had entered the lower mine, and found Shaela looking over a datapad. He found himself relieved to see the girl apparently unharmed, but was confused at something.
    "Shaela, why didn't you call out? Didn't you hear me call you?"
    The girl looked over at him, no recognition in her eyes.
    "Do you know me? Shaela. Is that my name?"
    Atkinad realized the girl had been through more than was apparent, and quickly made a decision.
    "Your name is Shaela Daegar. You are in trouble here and you need to get off this planet. I'm Atkinad, and I will help you get transportation. Come with me."
    The two hurried out of the cave, and Atkinad found a speeder the attackers had used. Before long, Shaela found herself on a ship, heading to a far off world by the name of Tatooine.
     
  13. Abby...someone

    Abby...someone Jedi Youngling

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    I would like to go to the SW fan film archive database thing but i don't know the address. Can anybody help???

    Abby...someone
     
  14. pitdroid777

    pitdroid777 Jedi Youngling

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    Is it my site you are looking for? Star Wars Fan Film Database at http://www.welcome.to/swffd http://www.welcome.to/swffd

    if so there it is.
     
  15. Abby...someone

    Abby...someone Jedi Youngling

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    thats the one, thanks a mil

    Abby...someone
     
  16. Jean

    Jean Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Upping for the move
     
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