A Visit Gone Wrong (Kenobi Twin fanfic)

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  1. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Sorry this is taking so long. The next chapter is alredy written out, i just to type it onto the computer. Plus I've been really busy writing about Kadi on the Life at a Temple thread.

    Hopefully more soon. Thanks for your patience with me. :)

  2. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Sorry about taking so long.

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    Chapter 32

    I felt something shake my shoulder. Groaning, I motioned for whoever it was to go away. It shook my shoulder again.

    "Go away." I mumbled through the covers.

    Nothing happened.

    Whoever it was had finally left. I began to drift back to sleep.

    A large cry filled the room. I sat straight up. With a happy mew, Mokee jumped into my lap.

    "Mokee!" I yelled.

    How had he gotten here?

    I was sure he had been left back with Obi-Wan. I knew it hadn't seen him in my bag.

    "What are you doing here?!"

    Right before my eyes, he disappeared. I watched i amazement as footprints appeared, heading fot the edge of the bed. Focusing on them, I noticed the air seemed to move.

    Mokee could camaflogue himself until he was completely invisible.

    I let out a sigh as he plopped himself down on the ground and began to let out a sad wail. Sheaking my head, I got up and knelt down by his side.

    "Shhh. I'm sorry. Its alright." I picked him up. "You should have stayed back at the house."

    A sharp knock suddenly came from the door.

    "Hide." I hissed to Mokee, jumping up. Mokee instantly disappeared, sensing the urgency of the situation.

    I jumped up and quickly walked to the door.

    There stood the same servant who had brought me the dress the night before. He once again held a bundle in his arms.

    "Your closthes, your highness." I looked down in shock as he placed the clothes in my hands. I hadn't known they were missing.

    If they had found....

    "Or should I say Jedi." He hissed, pulling out a blaster. I backed away into the room. He followed, closing the door behind us.

    "I knew there was something strange about you." I glanced around the room, searching for a way out.

    "Are you looking for this?" He asked gleefully, pulling my lightsaber from the folds of his robe.

    How could I have been so stupid? Of course they would have droids remove the dirty clothes in the morning. Every palace I had ever been to had.

    "When I present you to the king, I'll be proclaimed a hero. I will probably get a promotion."

    Out of the corner of my eye, I suddenly noticed part of the rug moving. Mokee!

    "Yeowww!" The servant screamed. He looked down at his ankle, pointing the blaster at Mokee. My Jedi training turned on.

    I grabbed the blaster, twisting it out of his grasp.

    He stared at me in shock, then at the blaster pointed at his chest.

    Just then, as I stared at him, I noticed purple splotches beginning to appear on his face. He seemed to shudder, then collapsed to the ground.

    I looked down in shock at him. What had caused that?

    Reaching down, I was relieved to find a pulse. He was alive.

    A purr caught my attention.

    Mokee was happily poking around the servants legs, sniffing them every once in awhile.

    Wait a minute.

    Mokee bit the servant right before he went down. I knelt down, moving Mokee aside. I pushed up his pants leg, to find two small marks where he had been bitten. The area had turned purple.

    Mokee had some kind of venom.

    Picking up my pet, I placed him on the bed, then looked around for somethign to tie the Re'dth up with.
  3. Uisceban Jedi Master

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    Yippee you wrote more! Mokee is soo cute
  4. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Up. I should have the next chapter up later.
  5. Buffynick60 Jedi Knight

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    YEAH!!!! Mokee to the Rescue!!! :) More soon please!!!!! I so love Mokee!! :)
  6. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    Me too! Not only is he incredibly cute, he's dangerous, too. To the bad guys, at least! I want one! Can we clone him?

    up!
  7. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Have any of you been to Alien Encounter at Walt Disney World?
  8. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Thanks for going over this for me Borme. :)

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    Chapter 33
    I quickly strode towards the throne room. It was time for the last part of the plan to be put into motion.
    The servant was tied up in my room, hidden behind the bed. The wires had worked nicely as rope and gag. Mokee was now happily keeping an eye on him.
    My lightsaber hung at my side, hidden in the folds of my clothing. Just in case.
    Finally, I reached the large doors and entered into the throne room. The chatter between the courtiers stopped as I walked towards the throne. Something was wrong.
    "Ah, your highness, we recieved a rather disturbing message this morning." He said. I tensed slightly. "It seems the princess, that is you, weren't supposed to show up today. As a matter of fact, I got a transmission that told me you weren't coming at all."
    "That's ridiculous! As you can see, I am right here." I exclaimed, trying to sound shocked and outraged.
    "Oh really. Then would you care to explain why you were seen in town several days ago walking into town with only a human boy as your escort? Or why you were see with Rack'tar, the leader of the Rebellious scum?" He stood up, dropping his disguise of friendliness.
    "I wouldn't have believed it if I hadn't seen the surveilance tape from the dugeon." I glanced behind me to see several guards moving behind me. My hand strayed over to where my lightsaber was hidden. "Nice try, you almost fooled me. But, like before, I will win. Jedi."
    Everything happened at once. A loud war cry suddenly fill the air. I ignited my lightsaber. Hundreds of Re'dth streamed into the room from doors and windows. They even came through panels in the ceiling. Obi-Wan landed by my side, lightsaber ignited. Blaster bolts flew everywhere as we stood back to back, deflecting them.
    "Right on time." I said, deflecting a potentially dangerous bolt from my head.
    "You can thank me later. First we need to free everyone else." We managed to move out of the room towards the door. Finally, we were away from the fighting. I instantly began to run in the direction of the dungeon.
    "Kadi, where are you going?" Obi-Wan asked. "The camp is that way." He didn't know.
    "The Council and some Masters are being held in the dungeon. If the king triggers some device attached to them, it'll kill them. We have to free them first." He hesitated for a moment. "Obi. Our Masters are there also."



  9. JediRogue9 Jedi Master

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    This is soooo good! I love how you keep having plot twists to keep the story interesting. This is awesome! I cant wait to see what happens.
  10. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Thanks JediRogue9. :)

    Up.

    More later.
  11. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Thanks Borme for going over this for me. :)

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    Chapter 34

    Obi-Wan had made his decision instantly. We managed to run to the room without meeting any of the guards. They were probably fighting in the throne room.

    Finally, we came to the Authorized Personel Only door. With Obi-Wan's help, the code was broken in a matter of seconds.

    I felt Obi-Wan's shock when he saw the room. This time, though, all of the Masters were awake. I rushed over to my Master's cell and looked at the control panel, trying to figure out how to disable it without triggering the device. I was hesitant to use the Force.

    Looking over at Obi-Wan, I saw he had come to the same conclusion. The Force could very possibly set it off.

    //What should we do?// I asked as we backed up to the middle of the room.

    //I don't know.// He admitted, looking around the room, as if something would give him a clue.

    Suddenly, a blaster sounded in the room. I felt a sharp pain in my back, then fell to the ground.

    "Kad-" Another blaster shot hit Obi-Wan in the chest. He fell beside me with a thud.

    The king walked over to us.

    "Goodbye, Jedi." He said, holding out a small device. He punched a code into it, then destroyed it with his blaster. The lights began to flash red.

    I knew what it was, even as the world began to dim.

    Our masters had 5 minutes left in life.

    We had even less.
  12. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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  13. anya Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Wow!That's all i can say!
    Way to go,Mokee!Nice going Obi-Wan!:)
    Look at this!I miss it for a cople of days;and when i read it again,what do i find?Wonderfull posts waitting to be read! :)
  14. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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  15. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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  16. Uisceban Jedi Master

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    Cliffhanger! Great work as is your usual!
  17. anya Skywalker Jedi Master

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    I'm here,and waitting for a post,like always! :)
  18. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  19. anya Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Up,up,up!
    See,there are many people reading this!Now can you post?Please? :)
  20. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    yeah, please?
    *Senni mutters something about Sithly writers and how they always leave it at a cliffhanger then don't post...*
    :D
  21. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    LOL! Sorry Senni.

    I hope to have the next post up either later tonight or tomorrow sometime.

    Depends on how busy everything is.
  22. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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  23. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    'If I seem to give up, they'll still never win. Deep in my heart, I know that the strength is within.'
    Too Many Walls


    Chapter 35

    My mind was beginning to get fuzzy, slowly shutting down.

    The room was filled with a red light every few seconds, then left in darkness, as the lights flashed on and off.

    Everything seemed to be moving in slow motion.

    I stared at the cells, seeing the horrified looks on the Masters' faces.

    Slowly, my eyes closed.

    Everything faded away.

    I felt like I was standing in the middle of the black void.

    "Trust in the Force, you must." A voice came from nowhere and everywhere. It seemed to vibrate around me.

    "Master Yoda?" I called, looking around.

    Nothing.

    Just a black void.

    Where was I?

    "The strength is within." That voice, there was something familiar about it.

    The void around me began to dim.

    "Remember, the stength is within." The world went black and I remembered nothing.

    Still, those four words continued to echo in my heart, growing fainter.

    The strength is within.

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    I hope that wasn't confusing.
  24. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Um...if any lurkers are out there, can you please delurk quickly and let me know you're reading this?
  25. Fleet Admiral Jedi Knight

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    Ok.. I will "delurk" now!
    Your stories are amazing and I have just finished reading the entire Kadi-Wan series from fanfiction.net.
    Aftering reading the thread "where you are" I counldn't help feeling that Kadi keep getting shot at the back! There must be a big "bull's eye" behind her. hehehe :)

    Back to this story.. She is not going to die is she? I hope not..
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