Affections (Obi, Qui, AU)

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  1. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    This is my first fanfic so please be kind.

    Comments always welcomed

    Title: Affections
    Time: Obi-Wan is 16
    Author: Kenobis_Padawan
    Disclaimer: All the characters you recognise belong to George Lucas. I am making no money so please now law suits against me. All character?s you don?t recognise belong to me and are welcomed to be used in any ones fanfic if they wish.

    Summery of part of the story: Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon have been sent to Aldaraan to attend peace talks with a neighbouring planet. During their time there Obi-Wan starts to become suspicious of a certain being.

    //= Telepathy

    Episode 1: Guidance and distractions

    Obi-Wan Kenobi walked down the long cream halls in the Aldaraan Grand Palace. His master Qui-Gon Jinn was walking a pace in front of him. They were on their way to the Aldaraan Senatorial Conference Room. They were here because the neighbouring planet of Malayka had started a conflict that was growing with each and everyday. At the talks the two Jedi would met the Queen from Malayka and the King from Aldaraan. They would also be meeting the ambassador for the two worlds.

    As the two Jedi walked Obi-Wan noticed the tall, elegant statues that lined each side of the hall. They were carved out of a black marble substance that appeared to be shiny when fully polished.

    Just a head the Padawan could see two large doors made out of a light pink stone called Rose Stone. Detailed pictures had been very delicately carved into the double doors. Just before the pair reached them Qui-Gon turned and looked to his Padawan. ?These meetings will be tense Obi-Wan. If you sense the slightest thing wrong don?t be afraid to speak up.? Qui-Gon smiled and put a hand on his apprentice?s shoulder then turned and entered the extremely large room.

    Obi-Wan held back a gasp. The room was gigantic. In each corner stood a statue similar to the ones in the hall. In the centre of the ceiling hung a beautiful chandelier. Under the chandelier was a large rectangular table made from a fine local wood that was polished to a high sheen.

    Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon sat at opposite ends of the large table. Obi-Wan noticed that only the Queen from Malayka and the ambassador were present so far. He also observed that the ambassador also sat with the Queen. Obi-Wan thought they would have sat near Qui-Gon. Away from either party.

    Before another thought could enter the Padawans mind the double doors opened again and the King of Aldaraan walked in. He wore elegant robes with a simple gold sash. The king sat down opposite to the Queen and the two exchanged an unfriendly glance.

    That?s when Obi-Wan noticed another being walking behind the king. They wore a brown cloak similar to his with the hood up concealing their features. The being walked over next to the king and sat down.

    Qui-Gon stood up and bowed to everyone in the room. ?It is a pleasure to meet you all. I am Qui-Gon Jinn and the boy opposite me is my Padawan Obi-Wan Kenobi.?

    Obi-Wan stood up and bowed to the two royals, the ambassador and the mysterious figure, before sitting down again.

    The Jedi master continued, ? Now we are all here we can start the peace talks. We shall hear from the Malayka Queen first.? He said the proceeded to sit down as the Queen rose to start speaking.

    Obi-Wan looked at the Queens dress. It was quite beautiful. Gold beads and black feathers were carefully sewn onto the lovely bright red dress. Her hair also looked elegant. It wasn?t up in a fancy stile like most queens, but just hung at shoulder length in perfect curls.

    Obi-Wan listen intently to the Queen as she spoke, but he found that his eyes kept drifting to the figure who sat only meters away from him. Some how he managed to get a quick glimpse of their eyes. They were brown/green. He now knew that they were human and female.

    The Padawan?s attention was diverted. He felt a disturbance in the force. The girl not far from him seemed to stiffen for some reason. Obi-Wan looked at him master who gave him a nod the stood.

    Qui-Gon spoke just as the Queen had finished.
  2. padawan lunetta Jedi Grand Master

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  3. ewen Jedi Padawan

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    Good luck with your first story.Sounds like it could be good.I hope for my sake,you do not have romance in it.I like stories that try to stick to the Jedi mantra.But it is your story, you should do as you please.PEACE Ewen
  4. KenobisGirl Jedi Padawan

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    Ooo, cool start! This is great so far for your first fic, and I understand how scary it is, waiting for the first few replies!

    Post more and often, please! :D

    KenobisGirl :cool:
  5. PadawanKitara Jedi Master

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  6. Kathryn Jedi Padawan

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    Just thought I'd chime in and say I'll be looking for another post, too. Intriguing start...
  7. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    WOW. Hey thanks all.

    ewan I wouldn't worry. It mat seen like romance at first but lets just say there's a little thnig called the Code.

    Here's the next part.

    Obi-Wan lead the King back to his quarters, using the force to make sure everything was safe, and made sure two guards stood out side of the quarters at all times. As he was about to leave to escort the Bassador back to her room when he realised that he didn?t even know where her room was.

    Obi-Wan blushed at bit then faced her. Or what he could see past the hood. But before he had a chance to speak she spoke. ?I shall show you the way to my room.? Her voice was kind that also held strength behind it. She turned around and led the way.

    Obi-Wan walked a pace behind her. He checked every few seconds to make sure no one was following. Soon they had come to a small hallway with just 3 doors leading out of it.

    The Bassador walked up to one of them, which must have been her room. Before she opened the door she bowed to Obi-Wan and said her thanks to the boy and stepped inside.

    Obi-Wan still couldn?t figure out why she didn?t pull down her hood. This question ran around in his mind while he walked back to his own quarters that he shared with his master.

    Obi-Wan palmed the scan next to the door and then it opened with a swoosh. He walked inside and flopped down onto an over stuffed chair rubbing the back of his neck. Soon his master came up to him and sat down on the couch. ?What is troubling you Padawan?? He asked in a much concerned voice.

    Obi-Wan stiffened a bit at the question, but he had to ask the questions that ran around inside him mind. ?Master what is a Bassador?? He asked the first one.

    Qui-Gon lent back against the back rest of the couch and looked at his apprentice. ? A Bassador is an ambassador in training.? He said simply.

    Obi-Wan nodded at the answer. Then he asked his next question, ?Who is she, why was she there and why does she always wear her hood up?? Obi-Wan was about to kick himself. He asked to many questions at once.

    Qui-Gon rubbed the back of his head before speaking again. ?Her name is Juelan Hanga. This meeting is part of her training. She must learn how to work with Jedi. I was only notified of this a second before we left for the conference room. I apologies for not telling you Padawan. As for her hood. No one is suppose to see her face in detail until she is the ambassador for some reason that I am not familiar with.?

    Obi-Wan just shrugged and rubbed his forehead. ?Master. May I go for a walk in the palace gardens? I need to clear my thoughts.? Obi-Wan asked as he stood up again.

    Qui-Gon nodded, ?But make sure you come straight back if you sense a disturbance. I am no going to endanger your life or take any chance on this mission.?

    As Obi-Wan walked out the door he wandered why his master was being so protective of him lately. This had all started on their last mission when Obi-Wan almost died because he decided to pursue a bad feeling he had. When his master had found him he was barely awake and breathing. All he could remember from then was his master crying and saying he wasn?t going to let Obi-Wan die.

    The Padawan pulled out of his thoughts when he reached the garden. It was so peaceful, so green. The force was strong here. As he wandered through the garden he noticed someone to his left. He turned his head slightly and saw Juelan reading a data pad. As suspected she had her hood up covering most of her face. He shook his head and walked over to her silently. ?Uh. Hallo Bassador Hanga.? He said unsure of how to address her.

    Juelan looked up. In front of her stood a boy about her age with ginger hair cut short and the most beautiful eyes she had ever seen. Juelan slap herself in her mind. She shouldn?t be thinking about stuff like that. She blushed a bit thanking the force that her hood covered her cheeks before speaking. ?Hallo Padawan Kenobi.? She said and went back to her data pad.

    Obi-Wan moved slight from discomfort. ?Um. May I sit down with you?? he asked indicating
  8. shanobi Jedi Padawan

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    This does sound interesting. And it's not a romance? I'll definately be checking back in for more :)

    Love your descriptions as well, they paint a vivid picture of the surroundings :D

    Also, have to wonder about this Bassador. Can't wait to see what her story is.

    Hurry with more.
  9. Abbi_Cee Jedi Padawan

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    Oh good, another Qui and Obi story. Makes my day. :) My first thought, when Obi sees something attatched to the Bassador's belt is that it must be a lightsabre and she must be a Jedi, but if she were she wouldn't need to learn how to work with Jedi so now I'm as confused as Obi. Looking forward to reading more. :)
  10. PadawanKitara Jedi Master

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    It looks like Abbi and I were thinking along the same line. I guess we will just have to wait while the story unfolds.
  11. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    hey thanks for the replies. As for you suspecions. Well I'm trying to make it a bit confusing.

    More to come tomorrow.... I hope
  12. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    Here's the next part. Enjoy.

    Juelan placed the data pad down next to her and sighed. Her eyes were hurting from looking at the screen for so long. She glance at Obi-Wan who sat next to her. ?So. What do you think about Aldaraan?? She had to think of something to say. Fast.

    Obi-Wan looked around the green garden and nodded as if he were looking at the planet from space. ?It seems like a friendly planet from what I have seen so far.? He answered while still looking around. ?Um. What is it like to be a Bassador?? The question was asked with out him knowing so.

    Juelan looked at him with wide eyes. ?It is really confusing.? She confessed. And it was. She had to remember politics, every custom to every religion, what the right thing to say was, how to address people. The list went on forever. She shrugged, ?But it was the life I was meant to have. What is it like being a Jedi apprentice??

    Now it was Obi-Wan?s turn to go wide eyed.

    For the next hour or so the two asked questions about each other and their training.

    Obi-Wan walked Juelan back to her room said his good-byes and left to go back to his own quarters.

    Juelan smiled and walked into her room. ?Ma..? She didn?t finish the word. Ice-cold water poured down her back. She looked up too see a bucket hanging above her than to the fresher where a laughing Ma-Hamn stumbled out. ?Ma-Hamn. You are my gardein.? Juelan snapped. ?Not my entertainment.?

    Ma-Hamn tried to suppress a laugh but fail. Ma-Hamn was Juelan?s gardein when she travelled to other worlds. She was quite tall and elegant. She was at least a good 30 years older than Juelan. ?My apologies Bassador for I thought you were one of those pesky Jedi.? Ma-Hamn got a small smile across her lips.

    Juelan quickly walked over to the couch, picked up a pillow and through it towards Ma-Hamn with a lot of strength. ?The Jedi are not that bad.? She said then tried to do her best to impersonate Qui-Gon Jinn. ?There is no passion. There is serenity.?

    The two fell on top of each other in laughter. Juelan had tears streaming down her cheeks because she was laughing so hard. A knock on the door stopped the pair. Ma-Hamn stood up and walked towards the door and palmed the button to open it. The door opened with a swoosh to revile a guard standing there. ?Yes.? She asked him.

    The guard nodded a hallo than preceded to talk. ?Jedi master Qui-Gon Jinn has requested that all personal who are attending the peace talks have a guard out side of their quarters.?

    Ma-Hamn frowned and crossed her arms into the lovely dark purple cloak she was wearing. Her brown eyes showed the guard that she did not agree with the Jedi master?s wishes. ?Well you can turn around and go tell that Jedi master that I am perfectly capable of looking after Bassador Hanga and myself.? With that Ma-Hamn turned and shut the door. She faced Juelan. ?The Jedi think we are not capable of looking after ourselves.? She said in a flat tone.

    Juelan looked at her gardein who was also her friend. ?I am sure they?re just being careful. That?s all.?

    Obi-Wan sat down on the couch in the quarters he was staying in. He couldn?t find a comfy spot. In his mind he knew something was wrong here. There was danger lurking, but he could pin point it. His master finally turned to him. ?Obi-Wan are you ok?? He asked.

    Obi-Wan stood up. ?I have a bad feeling about this.? He answered.

    ?About what?? Qui-Gon said now standing and looking at his Padawan with concern.

    ?About these peace talks. I have a feeling that something bad is going to happen and I can?t shake it.? Obi-Wan rubbed the back of his neck. Maybe he was going nuts at the age of 16. He didn?t know.

    Qui-Gon placed a hand on the boys shoulder and squeezed gently for a slight second. He gave out a loud sigh before talking again. ?I can sense it too Padawan. So do not fret. There is something dark here and we must find out what it is. During tomorrows meetings. Only you will attend. I shall search around the buildings to see if anyone is there that shouldn?t be.?

    Obi-Wan looked at
  13. Abbi_Cee Jedi Padawan

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    Wow, that's quite an interesting guardian the Bassador has, I wonder what other tricks she has up her sleeve. ;) What does she have against the Jedi or does she just think they are too stuffy?
  14. PadawanKitara Jedi Master

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    I think her guardian has a great sense of humor. She probably dors think that the jedi are too stuffy.
  15. chefdexter Jedi Youngling

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    Great very expressive I love it so far


    Most Impressive

    Man I can?t believe your 14
  16. KenobisGirl Jedi Padawan

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    There seems to be a lot of writers who are 14, myself included!

    We need more!!!

    KG :cool:
  17. chefdexter Jedi Youngling

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    But you could allways be a 40 year old man.

    Saying that you are a 14 year old Girl.

  18. KenobisGirl Jedi Padawan

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    star 4
  19. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    chefdexter. A 40 year old male, How dare you.

    *tries not to laugh*

    I'm a long way off of 40. I'm just a typical 14 year old Aussie girl.

    Thanks for the replied guys.


    A post will be up shortly.
  20. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    Ok here's the next part. Hope you like it.

    A knock at the door interrupted the conversation Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan were having. The Jedi master frowned and walked to the nearby door. ?How can I help you?? He asked the guards who was standing before him.

    The guards said hallo then proceeded to tell Qui-Gon what Ma-Hamn had said to him.

    Qui-Gon said his thanks and dismissed the guard. As he shut the door he whispered something about Senators, Ambassadors and Bassadors having too much confidence in their bodyguards. He looked at Obi-Wan and sighed. The feeling he had was growing stronger and stronger. ?Padawan. Bassador Hanga has refused to have a guard at her door.?

    Obi-Wan let a small curse escape his lips. ?Why? It?s for her own safety. You should be more strict with them.? He just let the words slip out with out him knowing so.

    Qui-Gon raised his eyebrows at his young Padawan.

    Obi-Wan realised what he had done and lowered his head while his cheeks turned to a bright red. ?I am sorry master. It is not my place to argue and I know you will do what is best.? He said just above a whisper.

    Qui-Gon walked over to the apprentice and knelt down in front of him. He gently rubbed Obi-Wan?s upper arm. ?Obi-Wan do not be afraid to voice your opinions to others. If you don?t speak up how am I suppose to guide you in the right direction. I value your point of view and you are right. I should be more strict with the Bassador.?

    Obi-Wan raised his head and looked at his master. He gave a small smile and nodded.

    The next day Obi-Wan walked to the Aldaraan Senatorial Conference Room by himself. His master was patrolling the far side of the palace. He stopped in front of the large Rose stone double doors. ?Her it goes.? He whispered to himself as the door opened. He was relieved to see that everyone had already arrived. He walked up to the end of the table and bowed to the King, Queen, Ambassador and Bassador. ?We shall begin.? He said.

    Obi-Wan listened carefully to every word the King or Queen spoke. Every now and again the Ambassador would speak up and suggest something for the new peace treaty that was going to be written.

    Half way through the talks Obi-Wan was sure that he was going to fall asleep from shear boredom. He glanced at the Bassador who as expected wore her hood up to conceal her face, but he could still see that she was falling asleep too.

    All of a sudden the King thumped his hand down onto the lavish table and stood up. ?I will not stand for this. Aldaraan are peaceful people who live simple, but happy lives and you will not take that away by turning this planet into another Corusant because you want to.? He yelled at the top of his voice.

    That was enough to bring Obi-Wan?s attention back to the present time.

    The Queen stood up as well. Both hands on the table. ?I do not wish to turn Aldaraan into another Corusant, but if you don?t start making money you planet will fall to another. To stop this from happening you must start making a decent amount of profit. Malayka will be happy to help in some areas, but we will not be Aldaraan?s backbone.? The Queen yelled back in a strong voice.

    The ambassador was the next to speak. Except he spoke in a calm voice. ?Aldaraan makes enough money to sustain it self.?

    ?I very much doubt that Malayka will have to help Aldaraan.? The Bassador added.

    The King and Queen ignored what the two had just said and continued to yell back and forth across the table. Finally Obi-Wan had had enough. ?Silence.? He yelled above the two.

    The two royals closed their mouths and looked at the 16 year old who looked as calm as ever. Slowly Obi-Wan began to speak again. ?These are friendly talks. Discus your opinions in a civil manner or the Chancellor will resolve the problem for you in the Senate. Am I understood?? Obi-Wan?s heart was about to jump out of his chest. Did he just do the right thing? He wasn?t sure.

    Both parties nodded and sat back down.

    Obi-Wan nodded. ?You may proceed your majesty.? Obi-Wan said to the king.

    Qui-Gon stopped
  21. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    oh no. I think I lost my readers.
  22. BLADE_KENOBI Jedi Youngling

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    I'm here. I'm just lurking as always. Great posts! Gotta know what that tremor was though! :)

    I think everyone else is still in AOTC mode! I've already seen it twice myself! :)

    They'll be back I can assure you.

    Great job Kenobis_Padawan!

    Blade :cool:
  23. PadawanKitara Jedi Master

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    You didn;t lose your readers, but your new chapter didn't pop up until the new post this morning. Weird.

    As for the story- I'm happy to read a story where Obi_wan is allowed to handle negotiations on his own. He needs to be given a little more responsibility. Great job!
  24. Kenobis_Padawan Jedi Youngling

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    Here's the next post

    Quietly Qui-Gon walked around to where he saw the shimmer of black. His senses on alert he used the force to help pinpoint where the tremor was coming from. But it didn?t help. He crept around corner after corner, but still found nothing and he still couldn?t pinpoint the location of the disturbance.

    He was about to give up when he realised something. He quickly turned and ran a few paces. The tremor got lighter than stronger again. There was more than one dark being around. There were at least about 12 of them and they were surrounding the Aldaraan Senatorial Conference Room. // Obi-Wan. Get everyone out of there NOW. // He sent through the bond that the two shared.

    Obi-Wan sat listening to the royal?s debate about useless things. His attention was turned when the rose coloured doors opened and Juelan?s gardein Ma-Hamn walked in.

    ?I am sorry for the interruption, but I must speak with the Bassador immediately.? Ma-Hamn said walking closer to the large table.

    //Obi-Wan. Get everyone out of there NOW. // Was the cry he got from his master in the next second. He gripped his head and gave out a loud moan of pain that came screeching through the bond. When it had gone he stood up. ?Everyone. We must leave now. And hurry.?

    Everyone stood with out question. Juelan and Ma-Hamn exchanged a worried glanced as they walked towards the door. But they would not get pass it. As soon as they opened the door they saw two dark cloaked figures standing in front of them. The two stumbled back at the shock.

    Obi-Wan noticed that their bodies gave the impression that they were shocked but their eyes didn?t. He quickly ran to the front of the group. ?Who are you.? He demanded in a strong voice.

    The dark figures didn?t say a thing, but reached into their cloaks and each pulled out a long silver cylinder about 28 centimetres long. They were lightsabers.

    Obi-Wan cursed himself in his mind. He couldn?t take two of them. Could he? Just when he thought things couldn?t get any worse another 4 dark figures stood behind the original two. All had lightsaber in hand, but not ignited.

    Juelan and Ma-Hamn started to back away slowly leaving the two royals between them and Obi-Wan.

    ?Going some where?? Asked a dark voice from behind them.

    The two turned around to see another 6 dark figures standing behind them. A slight curse escaped Juelan?s lips as she glance at her gardein as if to ask a question of what to do.

    Ma-Hamn gently shook her head from side to side.

    Obi-Wan turned around and spotted the other 6 figures. ?What do you want?? he asked the one who had spoken.

    The dark figure cocked his head to one side. ?We want the Bassador.?

    ?I don?t think so.? Said a strong voice from the other side of the room. Qui-Gon ran forward and leapt over the dark figures landing in front of Juelan and Ma-Hamn. He ignited his lightsaber. The green glow didn?t seem to disturb the dark figures.

    ?Foolish Jedi.? Another spat then the group in front of Obi-Wan ignited their lightsabers while the group in front of Qui-Gon drew blasters.

    Qui-Gon scanned the room quickly looking for an escape for the people behind him. He knew that his apprentice was doing the same thing. When he saw no escape he started to come up with a plan. Talking to Obi-Wan through their bond they decided to switch places at the last second. Distracting the dark figures.

    Qui-Gon knew Obi-Wan would be better off fighting 6 guys with blasters than 6 guys with lightsabers.

    Obi-Wan ignited his lightsaber and stood in a ready position. He was nerves about making an enormous jump over the group. Anything could happen. He could collide with his master, the dark figures could anticipate the move. He soon cleared his mind of those thoughts.

    He quickly moved forward than back again before jumping over the group in between him and his master. They both made the jump and now had to think of their next move.

    Obi-Wan knew he could take on four people with blasters, but 6. He just didn?t know.

    Qui-Gon gulped. This was going t
  25. PadawanKitara Jedi Master

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    Wait, the bassador's life is in danger and she choses to go back to help her protectors? Crazy

    What did her guardian sense when she burst into the room ?
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