Beyond - Legends "After the storm" - A poem for Kyp. Revised version posted 5/25

I only see a few changes. I do like some of the phrasing better in this:

But I can't.
Linked to nature through the Force
I struggle to wipe the slate clean.
My memories are like this ocean,
are like this morning-after sky.
My storm is the mirror of this,
always on the periphery. Always
capable of making another sweep,
yet sweeping like an old broom,
that leaves corners untouched.

Good though, thanks for giving me an excuse to read it again

 

Thanks for that Yoda. I think the phrasing is a bit better in this version, too.