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Beyond - Legends Am I Allana or Amelia? - Completed 10/10

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by FelsGoddess, Jan 25, 2010.

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  1. Zorkel567

    Zorkel567 Jedi Master star 4

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    This is so adorable. I love this. It sounds exactly as it should. Can't wait for more.
     
  2. madman007

    madman007 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Poor Allana. She just has to think of the phrase, WWYD (What Would Yoda Do)? Not ready for the burden, she is.

    Politicians slow? They certainly do beat around the Bush. (that was a pun, btw. [face_laugh])

    Great entry. Keep it up!
     
  3. Kailene

    Kailene Jedi Youngling star 3

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    [:D] [face_love]

    Wonderful job at portraying the inner thoughts of a child. Her concern and passion at wanting to help, but not knowing what she can do, and her uncertainly about making the right decision were all expressed so well.
     
  4. Alexis_Wingstar

    Alexis_Wingstar Jedi Master star 4

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    I wonder if it would scare her to know that grown ups do get scared? It's their actions when the fright comes on that make them brave... if that makes any sense. My [face_coffee] hasn't kicked in yet. :p

    Anyway, great update. :)
     
  5. NYCitygurl

    NYCitygurl Manager Emeritus star 9 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Aww, poor Allana!! Hopefully she can talk with Leia or someone about fearing the Force. That's never good :(
     
  6. Iverna

    Iverna Jedi Master star 4

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    Aww, poor Allana. It's hard enough to be a little girl surrounded by grown-ups, and unable to be with your mother, and having to pretend to be someone else... and then to top it off you're Force-sensitive. Let's hope she can come to terms with it - I'm sure she will, though. She's a strong one.
     
  7. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    Jade_eyes
    Awesome blend of compassion and wanting to help and the hesitance borne of not wanting to make a tragic misguided mistake. Very insightful questions Amelia has. grin
    She's one smart cookie. ;)

    Zorkel567
    This is so adorable. I love this. It sounds exactly as it should. Can't wait for more.

    Thanks so much!

    madman007

    Poor Allana. She just has to think of the phrase, WWYD (What Would Yoda Do)? Not ready for the burden, she is.
    Politicians slow? They certainly do beat around the Bush. (that was a pun, btw. laugh )
    Great entry. Keep it up!

    [face_laugh] Nice pun. WWYD indeed. Thank you.

    Kailene
    Wonderful job at portraying the inner thoughts of a child. Her concern and passion at wanting to help, but not knowing what she can do, and her uncertainly about making the right decision were all expressed so well.

    Thank you very much!

    Alexis_Wingstar

    I wonder if it would scare her to know that grown ups do get scared? It's their actions when the fright comes on that make them brave... if that makes any sense. My coffee hasn't kicked in yet. tongue
    Anyway, great update. happy

    Yes, that makes sense. Thank you very much.

    NYCitygurl

    Aww, poor Allana!! Hopefully she can talk with Leia or someone about fearing the Force. That's never good sad

    Nope. It's kind of like Ben's shying away from the Force. Thanks!

    Iverna
    Aww, poor Allana. It's hard enough to be a little girl surrounded by grown-ups, and unable to be with your mother, and having to pretend to be someone else... and then to top it off you're Force-sensitive. Let's hope she can come to terms with it - I'm sure she will, though. She's a strong one.
    She definitely is. Thank you!
     
  8. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    A/N I apologize for not updating this sooner. I was stuck. The end is actually written. It's just getting there. :p I'm not sure exactly how many posts will be left before I post the ending.




    Datapad, today we did a great thing, according to Grandma Leia.

    It?s been a couple weeks since I last wrote to you. Been very, very busy.

    After all everyone came back from trying to help the kids, I told my grandparents about my idea. I had heard them saying that they had found a way to free the kids, but the kids needed a place to go. Iella knows some people who can help the kids find their families again, but they need money. I started thinking where we could get money or a safe place for the kids to go.

    Hapes.

    Hapes has 63 planets. There are lots of places to stay. Grandma Leia agreed to let me call my mommy and she thought it was a great idea. She said something to Grandma about how not only would it help people, but it?d improve diplomatic relations with the Corellians.

    Whatever that means.

    Any time the words ?diplomatic relations? are said, Grandpa Han rolls his eyes and looks annoyed. Grandma Leia usually tells him to behave or something.

    My mommy sure can work fast. She talked to Uncle Luke and some Jedi are coming to help get the kids. They are taking the kids who Iella can?t find their families to a shelter on Hapes.

    Grandpa said I?m already trying to save the galaxy Solo-style. I?m not really sure what that means.

    Now that everything is settled here, we?re going to see Selonia and Drall with Wedge, Iella, Myri, Syal, Tycho and Winter. Grandma Leia thinks it?s important to my education that I see as many planets as possible. Grandpa Han calls it ?Queen Training.? I can?t wait.

    After we?re done with that trip, we?re going back to Coruscant. Ben is going to be promoted to a Jedi Knight.

    I?m really going to miss everyone here, especially Myri. Myri spends a lot of time with me. She has shown me so many neat things to do with make-up and color crawlers. She told me she worked as a dealer on Booster Terrik?s Star Destroyer the [i]Errant Venture.[/i] She said it has a lot of casinos and restaurants. It sounds really neat. I read about casinos and gambling problems with 3PO. According to 3PO, there aren?t a lot of people as lucky as Uncle Lando.

    I?ll see you later, datapad. We?re getting ready to head out.

     
  9. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    Enjoyed this a lot. :D

    I can just hear Han's witty remarks LOL -- "queen training" [face_laugh]

    Myri has had quite the "education" -- on the Errant Venture I'd expect nothing else.

    ;)

    Great solution Allana had -- and TK does work fast :)

     
  10. Tarsier

    Tarsier Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Clever girl! :)

    I like how we get all these little glimpses of other characters--Han, Myri, Tenal Ka--through Allana.
     
  11. madman007

    madman007 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Grandma Leia agreed to let me call my mommy and she thought it was a great idea. She said something to Grandma about how not only would it help people, but it?d improve diplomatic relations with the Corellians.

    Nice to have connections in your own hidden family. Hope she learns to use them more as she grows older.

    Great entry as always. Can't believe it's almost over. I'll miss l'il Allana.

     
  12. Zorkel567

    Zorkel567 Jedi Master star 4

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    I can't believe it either- almost over?! This has been a great story and I can't wait for the next update.
     
  13. Kailene

    Kailene Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Almost over ? :_| :( This has been such a great story.

    Any time the words ?diplomatic relations? are said, Grandpa Han rolls his eyes and looks annoyed. Grandma Leia usually tells him to behave or something. [face_laugh]

    She has shown me so many neat things to do with make-up and color crawlers. I'm sure her mom will be pleased with that!:p
     
  14. Alexis_Wingstar

    Alexis_Wingstar Jedi Master star 4

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    Hehehe, I'm sure Leia won't tell Allana/Amelia how certain parts of "queen training" didn't sit well with her when she was young.
     
  15. Lane_Winree

    Lane_Winree Jedi Master star 4

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    I feel absolutely terrible for not having commented sooner, but I have been reading this fic and it is one of my absolute favorite ongoing pieces in all of my fandoms right now.

    I'm off on a business trip, so I can't give you an in-depth review right now, but I promise one is coming because this fic absolutely deserves it. Your handling of little Allana has been pitch-perfect throughout. I can't offer enough praise for that because (for me anyways) writing child characters can be incredibly difficult. You've really done a magnificent job voicing her.

    I promise, a much more detailed review later but for now I just wanted to let you know how much I've enjoyed this dairy fic. Bravo!=D=
     
  16. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    Jade_eyes
    Enjoyed this a lot. grin
    Thank you. :)

    I can just hear Han's witty remarks LOL -- "queen training" laugh

    He has a lot to say. :p

    Myri has had quite the "education" -- on the Errant Venture I'd expect nothing else.

    [face_laugh] That whole part in LotF was great.

    Tarsier
    Clever girl!
    She sure is.

    I like how we get all these little glimpses of other characters--Han, Myri, Tenal Ka--through Allana.

    I'm trying to add some bits from everywhere. Thank you!

    madman007
    Nice to have connections in your own hidden family. Hope she learns to use them more as she grows older.

    They have to be the most connected family ever.

    Great entry as always. Can't believe it's almost over. I'll miss l'il Allana.
    I'm not sure how many most posts there will be. Thank you!

    Zorkel567

    I can't believe it either- almost over?! This has been a great story and I can't wait for the next update.

    The wait is over. Thank you very much!

    Kailene
    Almost over ? cry sad This has been such a great story.

    Thank you. I'm glad you are enjoying it. :)

    She has shown me so many neat things to do with make-up and color crawlers. I'm sure her mom will be pleased with that! tongue
    I'm sure. :p

    Alexis_Wingstar

    Hehehe, I'm sure Leia won't tell Allana/Amelia how certain parts of "queen training" didn't sit well with her when she was young.
    What she doesn't know won't hurt her. [face_whistling] Thank you for reading.

    Lane_Winree
    I feel absolutely terrible for not having commented sooner, but I have been reading this fic and it is one of my absolute favorite ongoing pieces in all of my fandoms right now.
    I'm off on a business trip, so I can't give you an in-depth review right now, but I promise one is coming because this fic absolutely deserves it. Your handling of little Allana has been pitch-perfect throughout. I can't offer enough praise for that because (for me anyways) writing child characters can be incredibly difficult. You've really done a magnificent job voicing her.
    I promise, a much more detailed review later but for now I just wanted to let you know how much I've enjoyed this dairy fic. Bravo!

    Thank you very much. [face_blush]
     
  17. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    Datapad, sometimes I wonder what exactly is wrong with the people in charge.

    Natasi Daala, an old Imperial admiral that captured Grandpa Han, is in charge of the Galactic Alliance. I paid attention to my history lesson about Daala. Grandma said it was really important that I understand our leader?s past. I don?t understand why she is in power. She?s not a very good leader. She?s not a good admiral. She seems to do more wrong than good.

    I?m so confused.

    She?s been doing crazy stuff lately. Uncle Luke was kicked off Coruscant because of Darth Cadeus. I guess Cadeus used to be a Jedi. Uncle Luke told me I?ll learn about him when I?m older.

    There?s a lot of fishy information about him. I tried to search his name at the datastation in our apartments, but name is blocked. So is Jacen Solo. I want to try to computers somewhere else. A small part of me says not to, though.

    There?s something wrong with that. I know there is. I just can't figure it out.

    Back to Daala. She then had people follow the Jedi around. Grandma Leia got out of it by leaving. Lando needed some help so we went to Kessel. I don?t like Kessel. This dark voice kept calling to me. It made me feel cold. I remember Uncle Luke describing the Dark Side making him feel cold on Dagobah.

    I was so happy when we left. Plus, Chance is such a little baby.

    Daala took away the watchers. She comes with something new every day. I?m not sure what all she is doing. I watch the news with Grandma Leia and Grandpa Han, but there?s so much it?s hard to remember. I know there's something about Mandolorians.

    Now on to the fun news. Except for Grandpa Han.

    Aunt Jaina is getting married! She came over last night and told us. Grandpa Han acted like he didn?t like it, but I could tell he was kind of happy. Happy for her, anyways.

    He definitely looked happy- after Grandma Leia stepped on his foot. She does that all the time.

    She told me later that he is happy for her and stuff.

    Anyway, Grandma Leia and I are really excited. I hope I get to be in the wedding. That will be fun.

    I bet you were glad to read about stuff happening, datapad, instead of hearing about my annoying lessons.

    Oh, I have even more news. I?m going to Dathomir. Ben called us. Uncle Luke needs help or something. I'm not sure what trouble he's gotten into now. My mommy and my grandmother (she died a long time ago) came from there. Grandma Leia and Grandpa Han said I could ride a rancor if we ever went there.

    I bet they forgot. I can?t wait to remind them.

    See you later, datapad!
     
  18. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    She steps on his foot a lot [face_laugh] [face_laugh]

    Yay for Jaina -- [face_dancing]

    Hmmmm. Cadeus and Jacen Solo both can't be googled [face_laugh] ;) or twittered [face_laugh] -- yuppers, there's definitely a link there :p



     
  19. Tarsier

    Tarsier Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Grandma Leia and Grandpa Han said I could ride a rancor if we ever went there.

    I bet they forgot. I can?t wait to remind them.


    That will be an interesting conversation I'm sure. :D

    Looking forward to more!
     
  20. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Force Ghost star 4

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    I just got caught up with this fic. I haven't read any of the EU featuring Allana yet, but this story is really lovely.
     
  21. morrison85

    morrison85 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    I really like this update. and yes women do sometimes have to step on their spuses feet :p
     
  22. madman007

    madman007 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Natasi Daala, an old Imperial admiral that captured Grandpa Han, is in charge of the Galactic Alliance. I don?t understand why she is in power.

    You and us both, kid. You and us both can't figure that nonsense out! :confused:[face_thinking]

    She can't look up Caedus or her own father? Sounds like they're using the Kenobi Method of not telling her the truth "from a certain point of view" until she's 18. Why not tell her now and save her the sudden heartache later in life? It sounds like, as little as she is, Allana's the most mature of all of them. I think she'll find out soon anyway. At least she won't have Caedus revealing, I am your father, like Luke experienced.

    Do they allow rancor rides to the public? I'm sure there's a waiver to sign in case it devours you! :eek:

    Excellent job again!
     
  23. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    She steps on his foot a lot laugh laugh

    He doesn't listen. :p

    Yay for Jaina -- dancing

    [face_batting]

    Hmmmm. Cadeus and Jacen Solo both can't be googled laugh wink or twittered laugh -- yuppers, there's definitely a link there tongue
    [face_laugh] Now that's a scary thought. Jacen Solo's Twitter/Facebook.
    Thanks!

    Tarsier
    Grandma Leia and Grandpa Han said I could ride a rancor if we ever went there.

    I bet they forgot. I can?t wait to remind them.


    That will be an interesting conversation I'm sure. grin

    It was mentioned in Backlash

    Looking forward to more!

    Thank you! Here it is.

    JediMara77
    I just got caught up with this fic. I haven't read any of the EU featuring Allana yet, but this story is really lovely.
    Thank you very much.

    morrison85
    I really like this update. and yes women do sometimes have to step on their spuses feet tongue

    Thank you very much.

    madman007
    You and us both, kid. You and us both can't figure that nonsense out! confused thinking
    Yep, no idea how that happened.

    She can't look up Caedus or her own father? Sounds like they're using the Kenobi Method of not telling her the truth "from a certain point of view" until she's 18. Why not tell her now and save her the sudden heartache later in life? It sounds like, as little as she is, Allana's the most mature of all of them. I think she'll find out soon anyway. At least she won't have Caedus revealing, I am your father, like Luke experienced.

    [face_laugh] The Kenobi Method. That is awesome.

    Do they allow rancor rides to the public? I'm sure there's a waiver to sign in case it devours you! shock

    Excellent job again!

    They should. :p Thanks!
     
  24. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Jedi Master star 5

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    Note Here's the second to last post. We jump in time a bit for two entries.

    Also, a big thank you to Jade_eyes for helping me out. [:D]



    [b]Age 10[/b]
    Oh, datapad. The saying is right. The truth does hurt.

    My father, Jacen Solo, was the Sith Lord Darth Cadeus. He kidnapped me. He ordered the burning of Kashyyyk. He tortured Ben and battled Uncle Luke. He killed Ben?s mother, Mara.

    I feel like I?ve been lied to. My whole life has always been full of lies. I spent years believing my father was my mom?s friend. I had to live under another name and couldn?t admit who my real mother was. Any news or information about my father was hidden from me. Aunt Jaina saw me all the time and never said that she killed Father.

    I?ve been told what Father was like as a child. He loved animals. He was kind-hearted. Is this even true? All I know that is real is this:

    My father, Jacen Solo, was a Sith Lord.

    I think, deep down, I always knew. Everything I heard, read, and remembered leads to Father being a Sith Lord. Mom told me everything Uncle Luke had found out from his turn. He though that he could make the galaxy safe for me by going dark. How he figured that out, I have no idea. I feel like it?s my fault. I know it?s not. He made a choice to go bad. I can?t help it, though.

    It was and wasn?t shocking to hear. I remember when he took me. I remember him telling me he loved me. I think that he did. I wonder what happened to him. Uncle Luke said he never got over the death of his brother and that the Yuuzhan Vong did something to his mind. I guess we?ll never know. Mom gave me

    a box of trinkets and letters she had kept for me. There?s some stuff he gave me when I was really little and letters.
    That?s not all. There?s more.

    Aunt Jaina killed Father. She ran a lightsaber through his chest.

    She?s his sister. How could she have killed him?

    Mom and Aunt Jaina sat me down in private and told me everything. Mom thought I was old enough to know the truth. I was angry. I yelled at Aunt Jaina.

    Mom made me calm down while Aunt Jaina just let me yell at her. She said she was sorry and that she hated that she had to do it. She told me that if I never wanted to see her again that she understood. I could tell how sorry she was. I apologized, but I?m still angry.

    I don?t know if I?m angry that no one told me until now or that she killed Father. I know he had to be stopped, but why did he have to die? Uncle Luke saved Anakin Skywalker. Why couldn?t my Father be saved? I keep hearing he was too far gone. I don?t know what that means.

    I know I can forgive Aunt Jaina. She seemed relieved when I told her that I still wanted to see her.

    I?ve always known about the Dark Side. My great-grandfather was Darth Vader. Now I know that the Dark Side is closer to me than I thought. Aunt Jaina told me she fell, but that?s not the same as Father falling. He hurt his family. He hurt me and Mom. I don?t want to hurt anyone like he did. I?m not going to go dark. Grandpa Han said I should talk to Ben. He told me that he had to forgive Father for killing Aunt Mara. He said that holding onto that anger would lead to darkness.

    I think he?s right, datapad.
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    I have my red hair back.

    Thank the Force.

    Tomorrow I start my first day at the Jedi Academy as Amelia. I begged to keep my red hair and Mom finally agreed. The past month has been ridiculously emotional and hectic. I?m sorry I couldn?t keep you up-to-date on this. I?ll start at the beginning.

    After I found out the truth about my family, Mom said it was time for me to formally train as a Jedi. She wants me to be able to protect myself and on Hapes, you need all the help you can get. These people are crazy! I will be living at the Temple with Uncle Luke and Ben.

    He was able to come back to Coruscant, by the way. I?m not sure how he did it, but he outsmarted Daala. And Ben won?t be there a lot. He?s always running off doing Jedi stuff or flirting with Jysella Horn.

    I?m excited about my training. I wen
     
  25. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Force Ghost star 4

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    Yay, Allanna! :)

    Uncle Luke saved Anakin Skywalker. Why couldn?t my Father be saved? I keep hearing he was too far gone. I don?t know what that means.

    Oh man, I have sooooo many problems with Jacen's fall, and this is one of the major ones.
     
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