Before An Odd Comment ? Tahl considers something Yoda tells her. ? reply, 12·11

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  1. MistiWhitesun Jedi Knight

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    Author's Note:

    This takes place in Jedi Apprentice series, specifically The Ties that Bind, I think.

    Done at Kynstar's request. :) I can't tell if it's just weird or if I did a bad job. What do you guys say?

    EDIT: Thanks to Myri_Antilles who caught two mistakes! :) They've been fixed.

    Requested reviewing rules:
    1. No blaspheming or cursing.
    2. Critique.
    3. Put a smiley after jokes.

    Thanks.

    Enjoy! :)

    ---- An Odd Comment ----

    Made his point, Qui-Gon has.  A good one, it is.  Yet wish you do not a companion on this journey, and true it is that it will be a short one.  Suggest I do that you conceal your identity upon your arrival.

    --Jedi Master Yoda--


    Made his point, Qui-Gon has.

    No kidding. Pardon, Master Yoda, but I don't need input from Master Obvious. I'm well aware of what Qui-Gon has said. I'm well aware of his meddling.

    I've been on dangerous missions before. I am not a cripple. I can do this without help. I am going to New Apsolon for those girls. I will not let them be murdered like their parents. I will get them to safety.

    A good one, it is.

    So you think me crippled, too? Why am I not surprised??

    Qui-Gon, you and your friends?

    Yet wish you do not a companion on this journey, and true it is that it will be a short one.

    What? I beg your pardon?

    ?Well, yes, it'll be a short mission, but?

    "A companion on this journey"? Since when did you refer to a joint mission like that? How does a short pickup count as a "journey"?

    ?Since when has Qui-Gon been my "companion"? You've called us "friends", before, but?

    Don't tell me Qui-Gon's protection complex is "companionship".

    Suggest I do that you conceal your identity upon your arrival.

    No, I thought I'd go in full Jedi robes. Honestly, I'm not stupid. I've been on this type of mission before.

    Why would you expect me not to conceal my identity? I usually do.

    ?a companion on this journey?

    Why does that nag me?/>
  2. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Wheee! Oh this was great! And sooo Tahl too!

    A companion on this journey"? Since when did Master Yoda refer to a joint mission like that? How does a short pickup count as a "journey"?

    ?Since when has Qui-Gon been my "companion"? You've called us "friends", before, but?

    Don't tell me Qui-Gon's protection complex is "companionship".


    And of course... Why does that nag me?

    Oh totally great!!! [:D] thanks for posting it! Yay!! [face_dancing] hehehehe

    Poor Qui being talked about and doesn't know it *snrk*
  3. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    I really sensed Tahl's annoyance at Yoda's words, I loved the repetition of 'companion' and Tahl's dry humour here is marvelous
  4. MistiWhitesun Jedi Knight

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    Thanks, Kynstar & Hananiah! :D

    That line that I have nag her intrigued me when I was typing it from the book for a chapter of "My Dear Qui-Gon" over on FF.net. It certainly is one of Yoda's odder comments.


    Kynstar:

    You're welcome. :) Glad you so thoroughly enjoyed it. ;)


    Hananiah:

    Thanks. :) I'm glad I was able to adequately express Tahl. Hard to get into someone else's head, it often is?

    & my family tells me I don't have a sense of humor.
  5. SarkaVrae Force Ghost

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    my favorite line:
    No kidding. Pardon, Master Yoda, but I don't need input from Master Obvious.

    that was great! :) very dry humour...but very good! :)
  6. MistiWhitesun Jedi Knight

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    Thanks, SarkaVrae! :D

    I wasn't sure about that line, actually. Thanks for your reinforcement of it. :)

    Tahl's dry humor is one thing that makes writing her so much fun. ;)
  7. Myri_Antilles Jedi Master

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    Suggest I do that you conceal your identity upon your arrival.

    No, I thought I'd go in full Jedi robes. Honestly, I'm not stupid. I've been on this type of mission before.


    [face_laugh] I love that line! What I'm wondering is what Yoda's face would look like if she said that to him. :p

    Let's see... you asked for critiquing? Well, that's hard with a fic this good, but let's see what I can come up with... ;)

    Since when did Master Yoda refer to a joint mission like that?

    This is the only line I could find in which her thoughts don't seem to be "talking" to Yoda... was that intentional?

    Great fic! You write Tahl very well. :)

    Edit: I should really learn to stop before I hit the post button and think... :p

    There is one other line:
    Why would he expect me not to conceal my identity? I usually do.
  8. MistiWhitesun Jedi Knight

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    Thank you, Myri_Antilles! :)

    Personally, I'm more curious about the entire Jedi Council's reaction? I'm under the impression that most of them would be more aghast than Yoda to hear him addressed like that. :D

    I didn't realize I'd switched addressees. Thanks for catching it. :)

    EDIT: Cute icon. ;)
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