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Before - Legends ~ ... and Loyalty ~ ; Short Story; Leila/Jango Series Three; updated 1/25

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by MsLanna, Oct 19, 2007.

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  1. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Title: ... and Loyalty
    Author: MsLanna
    Timeframe: about 34 BBY
    Characters: Leila Durmon, Jango Fett
    Genre: General, action
    Keywords: Bounty Hunter, Assassin, Seedy Side
    Summary: Leila Durmon is hired to kill Jango Fett.
    Notes: Third story in a series.
    Find Number One here: [link=] Strictly Business [/link]
    and Number Two there: [link=] Misconception[/link]

    Sorry for the teaser start.[face_blush] Following updates will be longer. Promise.

    [u]...and Loyalty[/u]

    So that was it. Leila heard the door close softly behind her and began to walk towards the exit. He really wanted to have the bounty hunter killed. And for whatever reasons, he had indeed hired her to do it. Graden had also been rather specific about the proof of the job done.

    "With Jango Fett? I'll believe he's dead when I see his dead body," he had said.

    Leila nodded. "With or without armour?"

    "As you please."

    And that was that. It wasn't that there was too little room in the Snakebite to transport a second person, or body in that case, but Leila avoided dragging corpses around when possible. It tended to make authorities suspicious and end up in more trouble than a job was worth. Except that this job was worth a big lot. So much, that it automatically raised her trouble tolerance by several notches. Graden had eve set up -

    "Lana, wait!" a familiar voice called.

    Leila almost forgot to answer to the name she had assumed once, but within seconds the voice fell into place. Elida.

    "What are you doing here? Did my father get you, too? Are you saved?" The girl almost fell over herself with excitement.

    Leila measured her coldly "I am an assassin and your father just hired me."

    Elida stared at her. "An assassin? Then how did you end up in Raad's place?"

    Sorely tempted to roll her eyes at the naiveté of Graden's daughter, Leile suppressed a sigh. "He also hired me to retrieve you and terminate Raad," she explained.

    Shocked, Elida's hand flew to her mouth. It took her some time to gather her courage. "And, did you? I mean-

    Leila nodded.

    "Oh, how could you! I-"

    Leila cut her off with an impatient gesture. "In a galaxy like this, men like your father will always find women like me to hire for such jobs. No matter which man you had chosen, if Lord Graden disapproved, he would have found the same end. That's just the way it is."

    "My father?" Elida's voice trailed off.

    "You better do what he wants Eldia, He's a mighty man and not very patient if opposed."

    Leila clapped the girl on the back and left. [i]High time for an eye-opener there,[/i] she thought as she returned to the [i]Snakebite[/i].
  2. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 5, 2004
    Please put me on the PM list! :D

  3. Stovros

    Stovros Jedi Youngling star 1

    May 2, 2002
    I haven't read the other ones and I should but this sounds cool. How is she going to kill Jango Fett? He's the pre-Boba! Unless she has a device of somesort that accidently hits his jetpack and sends him all the way down into a sarlacc.

    I'll have to see the others. THis sounds cool though.
  4. Luton_Plunder

    Luton_Plunder Jedi Knight star 3

    Jun 15, 2006
    Great start MsL - teasers are no problem for me, they're like an appetiser ;)

    I love the ship name snakebite, by the way :D And so now Leila is on her way to kill Jango, eh? Bring it on :D

    Edit - Sorry, forgot to ask for PMs. Which I meant to do.

    So...can I have them? :p
  5. angry_bendu1

    angry_bendu1 Jedi Youngling star 2

    Apr 15, 2007
    Ooh... I like the start!:D Please PM me when you have another post! Thanks!
  6. The_Face

    The_Face Ex-Manager star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 22, 2003
    I haven't read the other two but I may have to now after that opening. Leila is cold as ice - just the way I like my assassins. :p If you'll be sending Private Messages out for updates, I'd like to be on The List. :D
  7. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Ack! this is so typical of Murphy and his **** law.
    The one story I have nothing to back up with and what do I get? Readers!:eek: :oops:

    As you wish Vadey. Soon, I'll just put you on any pm list I keep.;)

    Welcome Stovros. I hope the other stories can help you as tide over until I get on with this one.[face_blush] And, how will she, indeed? I hope to keep you all puzzled.[face_mischief]

    Futon, nice to see you around.:D
    The name is by courtesy of Alcie Cooper and his great song with the same title. I just LOVE it. Yes, she is. And taking the straightes circumventing way she can find. Plans within plans within plans and such.;)

    Thank you, angry_bendu1.
    I shall certainly pm you when I update.:)

    W00t? Mr. Seedy Side himself.:eek: I better shape up.:p
    So, am I deducting correctly, you'll leave if I thaw her? [face_thinking] Well, won't happen this time, so no worries.

    I'll be right back with this as soon as I appeased another angry audience.[face_blush]

    EDIT: 'cause I can't spell.[face_blush]
  8. correllian_ale

    correllian_ale Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 20, 2005
    Oi! What's this?!? I like finding Lil' Lanna fics around the boards....

    Awaiting the next update, for which I will receive a PM, right?

  9. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Master ale! [:D]
    There's more to find, if you follwo the links....[face_whistling]
    And of course you'll get a pm. You're actually, right in time for one.

    The journey to Leritor was uneventful and almost to short to come up with a good plan. Not that this mattered much to Leila, Graden had already set up the bounty hunter and all she had to do was collect him at the right place at the right time. And then, of course, kill him. Which was the difficult part.

    [i]If Graden had only kept his mouth shut then,[/i] the assassin mused.

    Of course, the fact that he had set up things so neatly, made Leila more than suspicious. The extremely high bounty of 75,000 credits added to her queasy feeling about the set up. Leila doubted Graden really wanted to pay that much, even if his pride was involved. It was probably a trap within a trap, with somebody waiting to dispose of her after she had eliminated Fett. She would not let that happen, though. Fett had the reputation of being rather indestructible, so pure force would most likely not work. Storming the meeting place with a drawn blaster and shooting until nothing moved any more might just work, but might just as well get her killed in the process or imprisoned.

    But Leila was specialised on subtlety, a fact Fett certainly knew. So she decided to try blunt, and take things from there. What was important about this mission, was to keep Fett off balance as well as possible and unaware of her real plan. Which she needed rather desperately. Realizing that she was drumming her fingers, Leila stopped and began to do elaborate finger exercises in stead. It looked like cat's cradle, only with fingers used instead of string.

    By the time she reached Leritor, the assassin had her plan worked out roughly, and dressed neatly into a dress that catered to her figure without being obvious about it. Deep cleavage would not help her any, Leila, assumed. She was not dealing with just another guy this time.

    [i]Too bad, he's not as instinct driven as my other clients, [/i] Leila thought, adjusting her high collar. Her soft boots made no sound as she walked down the ramp and locked the [i]Snakebite [/i] behind her.

    The meeting place was in the centre of the city, the alien origin of which could not be denied. The houses seemed to be at odd angels, and though their colours were subdued, the mix of light lilac, purples and dark orange was not something humans would come up with. At least, Leila hoped so. The native Sauvax probably saw a different spectrum of the light and since there were fewer humans had not felt any need to adapt.

    The streets were a little wider than expected, taking into account the broader built of the six-legged Sauvax. The assassin watched the crab-like creatures as she passed them by, assessing their strengths and weaknesses as well as she could. She might still end up having to fight some of them. In general, the natives seemed a lot more peaceful than the few humans scattered in the streets. With no visible weapons except an occasional pike, they seemed almost harmless. But Leila was wary. She used no weapons herself, but harmless was not a word that described her well.

    The tapcafe itself was situated at the central place. It was easy to watch from all sides, and on the roofs of the other buildings was enough space to hide a sniper, or a small army of them. That was not taking into account the possibility of having agents around on the place itself, or inside the buildings. Obviously, the bounty hunter had come to the same conclusion. Unlike arranged, he did not sit at a table outside. Leila smiled tightly, she had not expected the bounty hunter to play sitting duck, anyway. Time for the show.

    Leila sauntered into the café, making sure her swaying walk attracted the attention of a few patrons. Being seen was one way to discourage being shot immediately, nobody liked witnesses scattered all over the place. The bounty hunter sat with his back to the wall and able to watch the whole café. Of course, he had seen her entrance, >
  10. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 5, 2004
    The whole post was great, but I loved this part:

    Leila frowned when she saw the origin of the call. "Just wait a minute, it might save your life," she told Fett. "And don't go anywhere," with a sly wink she got up.

    To her relief the bounty hunter crossed his arms over his chest and leaned back challengingly.

    "I'll just be a minute."

    In the privacy of the fresher, Leila accepted the call, after putting up appropriate security measures. It did not pay to be listened in to.

    "Durmon here."

    "Um, hello," the voice was soft and hesitating. "Lana, this is Elida."

    The assassin smiled tightly. This would be exciting.

    And then her thoughts at the end, about him vanishing... [face_love]

  11. correllian_ale

    correllian_ale Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 20, 2005
    "Graden sent me to dispose of you. Seems he's keen enough about it to set you up, even." Leila decided to let him have his way for now. She leaned back and watched the armoured figure. Time for phase two.

    "Obviously. How were you to go about it?"

    "The usual way using female guiles and all that. Everything else would have depended on how pliable you are." The assassin played with a strand of her hair. "I would not have minded at all this time." She winked.

    "And you kill your victims before or after?"

    She looked him up and down slowly. "That would have depended on your performance, Mando. But I would venture the guess of afterwards."

    ;) [face_whistling]

    I liked how Jango never un-crossed his arms the whole time she was in the bathroom. [face_laugh] Shows he wasn't concerned in the least.
  12. The_Face

    The_Face Ex-Manager star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 22, 2003
    Getting to this in the midst of end-of-semester madness?

    Heh, she seems to be enjoying herself this time. Could it have to do with the choice of target? ;)

    I love seeing these two slick operators playing each other. They?ve both got their contingency plans and neat tricks. True professionals, in their element; it?s fun to read.

    Great update, Lanna! :D
  13. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Plans within plans, Vadey. :D It's difficult but fun to write. And Jango is quite the mysterious one. I know how he got out, though.;)

    You know me ale. Be happy the ToS don't allow me to write that part down.:p
    And, he did uncross his arms, if we can believe his words. So, how big an if is that?[face_thinking]

    Yes, she's enjoying this, Face. There is still some payback for the Eilda incident waiting to be done. [face_mischief] Contingency plans, great expression I have to remember that. *makes note* And bnot even I am sure who's playing who in this game.[face_laugh]
  14. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    She had spent half the night over her pad, checking and rechecking all information about the alleged artefact. There were hints and legends, but a little research showed, that all entries could be followed back to the same two holonet accounts. The whole thing was a hoax, not even executed too well, but a cursory survey would not find anything amiss.

    Leila shut down her pad and massaged her temples. She would not get any further now, which was frustrating, when she considered that she didn't get anywhere at all yet. With a sigh she stood up. She had an appointment to keep. Time to get going.

    On the way to the speeder, Leila popped a few stim pills into her mouth. They would keep her awake through the next day, even if it meant she would have to go to sleep early. There was no real sleep in the small time between now and sunrise. Washing the pills down with a bottle of water, she kicked the speeder to life.

    The road wound northward along the coastline, never losing sight of the ocean. In her mind, Leila still tried to puzzle together the best way to get her hands on a faked artefact. All of them needed time, the better the longer, and neither of them could be executed on Leritor itself. Which would make Graden suspicious, not to mention that he would have to be left out of the first bargain anyway. But she could think about the intermediary later. First they needed that stupid sculpture. Squatting Seer. What a ridiculous name on top of it all.

    The road took another turn, heading back towards the land along a narrow strip of land. As narrow as the path I am going down, Leila thought. Crossing Graden is not an easy thing to do, but having to work together with bucket man complicated things enormously. She didn't trust him further than she could throw him - with armour - and if given a choice not even that far. The assassin needed leverage on the bounty hunter.

    The last stars began to fade, leaving the planet in a murky greyish light. In her headlight, Leila saw a tiny bay come closer. In the dim light, it seemed like a perfect semicircle, the waves lapping at the shore pensively. It was beautiful. Seeming completely untouched by anybody it lay in the small bay, the changing light of predawn colouring it all shades of grey.

    Time enough, Leila though, checking her chrono. The remaining way would only take a couple of hours and this - this was the ocean. She took the speeder down into the last underbrush, and locked it. Then she slipped out of her boots, revelling in the soft touch of the sand under her feet. A light streak of grey slowly pried apart the horizon, separating it into ocean and sky again.

    Leila used a large stone to pin down her clothes and mark their place, then she dived into the water. After the long hours of fruitless thinking, the cold waves were invigorating. Chasing the weariness away, the forces of ebb and flow tugged at her. She dipped her head below the water as if washing the frustration away. For a long time there was nothing but the cold rush of water in her ears and the taste of salt on her lips. then she broke the surface again.

    With her head cleared from the exertion, the assassin began mulling over her problem again. There had to be a way to get that force frigged artefact. Of course, faking something that looked as if it had belonged to the Sith was no problem at all. She could scrounge up countless of those. The problem was the authenticity when you touched them. Real Sith artefacts gave you the cold willies. Like touching current, only that current was not disgusting. And that was something, nobody had managed to fake so far.

    She drifted in the water, feeling the first rays of sunlight on her face. At least, she was not alone with the problem. Let that bounty hunter do some thinking, too. After all, it was his life at stake. Leila turned around and began to swim back with long strokes. The ebb pulled at her body, but it had no chance against the measured force of the assassin. Every now and then, she dived deep, letting the ocean drag her ba
  15. The_Face

    The_Face Ex-Manager star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 22, 2003
    An update! [face_dancing]

    She didn't trust him further than she could throw him - with armour - and if given a choice not even that far.

    [face_laugh] Awesome line.

    A light streak of grey slowly pried apart the horizon, separating it into ocean and sky again.

    So?s this, for its unique phrasing ? very original description. Good work bringing something fresh to a subject that?s been described many times.

    Enjoyed the visit to the dig site. Jango and Leila?s tense working relationship is, again, fun to read. Excellent update, Lanna!
  16. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Feb 5, 2004
    You've got a real talent for writing the Fetts! :D I love this story and I was SO glad to see it updated! =D=
  17. Jade_Max

    Jade_Max Jedi Master star 5

    Jun 28, 2002
    Interesting er... solutions. Fett is very much in character and your OCs are lively and vivd... an enjoyable read - I'll have to come back and keep an eye on this one :)
  18. Meredith_Kenobi

    Meredith_Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 20, 2005
    Cool story! [face_mischief] I liked the part where Fett dressed up in archaeologist's clothes and glasses. [face_laugh]

    I like your OC, Leila, too.

    Please add me to your PM list. [face_praying]
  19. yodas_waiter

    yodas_waiter Jedi Youngling star 3

    Oct 31, 2006
    Your OC was really cool and Fett disguising himself as an archeologist is a pretty cool mental image. Nice, albeit, temporary solution to the problem! :)
  20. Luton_Plunder

    Luton_Plunder Jedi Knight star 3

    Jun 15, 2006

    I have so much catching up to do on this one! I'm going to leave this as my placeholder review and come back and do a proper one shortly ;)

    As far as the challenge goes, Leila and Jango make a great pair when it comes to getting out of tricky situations [face_laugh] And certainly much smarter than this Sisyphus fellow :p

    I'll be back with all my catching up done at once, I promise ;)
  21. BigE

    BigE Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 31, 2002
    Exciting fic, MsLanna. Nice job of capturing Fett?s personality, I?d say. Exciting plot.

    Very well done!! A great read! :cool:

  22. Commander-DWH

    Commander-DWH Manager Emeritus star 4

    Nov 3, 2003
    I like your OC here. :D She's quite the character, and she must be doing something right if she's making me enjoy a character I've occasionally wished to be stricken from the canon. :p This was really fun, and a great response to the challenge!
  23. Alkibiades

    Alkibiades Jedi Youngling star 2

    Dec 15, 2007
    Great job, Lanna! Could you put me on the PM list too?

    Yours, Alkibiades
  24. Thumper09

    Thumper09 Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Dec 9, 2001
    Very interesting story so far, MsLanna. :D It's fun watching the dynamic of two people working together when they really don't trust each other. I'm looking forward to seeing how Leila's layered plans turn out, and what will happen as a result of their tricky thinking and fragile partnership.

    And I agree with the others who said that Fett in an archaeologist's outfit was a neat mental image. ;)

    Keep up the great work! =D=

  25. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    *takes a deep breath*
    So many comments.[face_hypnotized]

    The_Face - A reason to dance indeed. Id does not happen often. :oops: I love unique phrasing, glad you like it, too.:D

    Vadey - Thank you. I will happily improve on that. Somebody has to spead the Fett-love.;)

    Jade_Max - I like this Fett, so I am happy when I get him down well. You're welcome to keep an eye on this, but you might just fall asleep waiting for the nex t update.[face_blush]

    Meredith_Kenobi - Not my idea, though. When I googled pic of temuera Morrison, I found some in which he wore glasses. I rather like how that looks.

    yodas_waiter - The solution doesn't have to last long. There's more to the plan, which needs quick working so the deceit does not see the light of day...

    Luton_Plunder - I leave this as a placeholder authr reply then.:p And, of course, they're smarter than Sisyphus, one's a Fett and the other is mine.

    BigE -Thanks. I try to keep my readers as entertained as possible.:)

    Commander-DWH Leila is a blast. And was created to have excatly the effect she has: make others enjoy Jango.:p Believe me, I did not like him for the longest time, either.

    Alkibiades - thank you. Consider yourself added.:)

    Thumper09 - It's great to read, but a ToS-violation to write. i love it anyway. here's hoping I can keep the tension up.:D
    Jango with glasses? [link=]Try this.[/link]

    And for those girls who always wanted to see a bit more of Jango. [link=][face_whistling] [/link]
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