Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Hazel, Jan 4, 2013.
Really good stuff, Hazel!
This has to be my favorite entry!
Love it! Mara is a good marksman...did she REALLY have to be that close to the farmboy to make the shot? I don't believe so. I think the farmboy's animal magnetism pulled her to him. Bow Chicka Bow Bow! Woot! I want a missing moment right about here. Turn off Artoo and when they reactivate him Luke and Mara are looking disheveled and smoking a cigarette...and both have a poodoo eating grin on their faces.
Thanks everybody! This part is a lot of fun to write.
You should write that missing moment. You have a talent for naughty, case-in-point - Null Aboard.
I did write that missing moment...unfortunately I can't post it here or FFN. Maybe I can PG-13 the story for these boards.
Artoo and Mara are a great "pair" She should read his comments
I fear for Artoo's physical integrity if Mara were to read his comments.
Hm, I wonder if the fact that Artoo's information retrieval jack is broken will have consequences...
That took a long time... I hope it won't take as long for Artoo to like Mara back again when the time comes.
Somebody needs to work on improving Artoo's recognition system to include common disguises such as hair dyes...
Sorry, I've gotten behind on things here. But I finally finished rereading the human version of events of HttE, which was made even better by having Artoo's comments from your story in the back of my mind.
ERROR »» Unable to do happy-dance due to restraining collar
Aww! But that's okay, Artoo. The sentiment is what counts!
SITUATION » Escaaaapiiiinnnng.
Those two little words made me laugh! What a great touch.
Please, tell me you have the Force back! Please, please, tell me you have the Force back. TELL ME YOU HAAAVEEE THE FOOORCEEEE BAAACKKKK!!!
LOL! Poor Artoo. That's got to be a scary situation to be a passenger in. Good thing Luke's a good pilot even without the Force (never mind that he crashed, heh).
All this violence towards us was uncalled for, she could have simply stated that an imperial detachment was coming and that we should conceal ourselves. We would have readily complied. Some sentients are so confusing!
The droid speaks the truth.
Wait, why are you two pointing at those branches? What do the branches have to do with me?
Oh, this is going to be so humiliating...
Getting the raw end of the deal again, LOL. But at least he can conserve power this way.
I posted it, but it lacks the steamy quality of the original.
»» I'm starting to dislike Mara Jade.
»» Master Luke is now trying to reason with her. They are arguing. Mara Jade is stating that Master Luke ruined her life and that this is why she wants to kill him » SEARCHING MEMORY BANK » SEARCHING... SEARCHING... » We have never encountered any being designated Mara Jade before » SEARCHING RECORDED BIOMETRIC DATA » SEARCHING... » I have found three possible matches: Shira Brie - 60% accuracy, jaw line too large; one dancer in Jabba's palace - 80% accuracy, wrong hair color; one lieutenant on Hapes - 30% accuracy - too short. None are stormtroopers, though. I require more data.
»» Resuming account of argument: Master Luke is countering that Talon Karrde wants us alive to which she is replying that everyone wants things they can't have. She is now claiming she can't spare more time with us and is raising her blaster towards Master Luke.
The Mara bit was brilliant. Laughed my head off when he searched his memory bank.
I wonder what they told Ben on the first day they met
Well son the first day we met your mother wanted to kill me
I wrote a short story about that, it's somewhere on these Boards and on FF.net.
ENTRY » START NEW
GALACTIC DATE » 44:5:11 GrS
GALACTIC POSITION » Unknown location.
SITUATION » After trekking the forest.
»» SITUATION UPDATE: After being dragged (yes, dragged as in tied to a travois and dragged) around this Force-forsaken forest for 5.3 standard hours I have now appointed myself as a guard for our present makeshift camp and also for Anakin-Junior, who is attempting to get a restful sleep. He is not being successful, though. I can tell by his breathing patterns that he is partially awake. As for my other human companion and captor, Mara Jade, she is not even pretending to sleep. She is wide-awake and staring at Master Luke. I swear, it is as if she is trying to choke him with her eyes. Even though her breathing is controlled, her heart-rate is extremely high – I imagine an effect of the pills she took when we settled down in this location. She obviously does not trust me and my sensors to guard our camp. To be truthful, I cannot blame her for her distrust since our surrounding environment contains great amounts of metal that interfere with my sensors.
»» What am I talking about? Of course I can blame her. She does not have to be so nasty about my limitations or about our presence here in general. It’s not as if we were not forced to remain with her. Both Master Luke and I would have been happy to part ways. Well, maybe not Master Luke; he seems to be very content with watching Mara Jade through the corner of his eye when she is not looking his way (which is not often since she seems to enjoy watching him just as much). Master Luke is also enjoying picking arguments with our captor, albeit I doubt he intends them to become arguments since his intentions appear to be more curious than confronting. It’s just that Mara Jade takes every one of Master Luke’s questions as a personal assault and as a result they end up fighting even more than Princess Leia and Captain Solo used to back on Hoth. Hmm, interesting... If I recall correctly, and I do, at that time the Princess often spoke of killing the Captain with her bare hands. Maybe if I lock these two on ship together for a while, they would sort things out?
»» I’ll see what I can do about that. I wish C-3PO was here to direct me on this task. He was there for the Princess and the Captain.
»» I wonder what C-3PO is doing right now...
ENTRY » CLOSE » ENCRYPT ENTRY
Nice Artoo and will with locking them up the same thing happen as with Leia and Han?
HA! Love it! And I bet Mara was not strangling Luke with her eyes...she was undressing him with her eyes.
Bow, chicka, bow wow!
Locking them together on a ship at this point could be disastrous in many ways. But not a bad idea.
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Another brilliant entry! Love the thought of locking them together on a ship!
Lol. I loved it.
Ooh, I loved R2's take on Mara's and Luke's reactions to one another and comparing them to H/L. Interesting. Yes, R2, lock them on a ship together. They'll kill each other or ... wind up doing something else.
Delightful. Though I agree locking them could have two-fold results..one good...one....not so much
After being dragged (yes, dragged as in tied to a travois and dragged) around this Force-forsaken forest for 5.3 standard hours I have now appointed myself as a guard for our present makeshift camp and also for Anakin-Junior, who is attempting to get a restful sleep. He is not being successful, though. I can tell by his breathing patterns that he is partially awake. As for my other human companion and captor, Mara Jade, she is not even pretending to sleep. She is wide-awake and staring at Master Luke. I swear, it is as if she is trying to choke him with her eyes. Even though her breathing is controlled, her heart-rate is extremely high – I imagine an effect of the pills she took when we settled down in this location. She obviously does not trust me and my sensors to guard our camp. To be truthful, I cannot blame her for her distrust since our surrounding environment contains great amounts of metal that interfere with my sensors.
After correcting 50 class tests like a mad person and writing the marks down into two different files (one a word document for the mentors & another one the school system), reading THIS made me all smiley. I like R2´s descriptions and rantings a lot.
It is also brilliant seeing him making connection between Luke & Mara and Leia & Han, who indeed had similar fights back on Hooth... or, if I think hard on it, since their 1st meeting on DS1.
Oh, Artoo - he obviously needs a human culture update.
Oh, I think they would sort things out, just not in the way Artoo imagines.
I wonder if C-3P0 would be better at figuring out human emotions than Artoo in this case...
loved the update, and poor Mara when she found out why Palpatine ordered her to kill Luke, she couldn't once she realized it was revenge against Luke's father.
Well, she will definitely have her revenge against Palpatine I just wish he was alive on their wedding, tied up with ysalamiry to his back , forced by Rogues to watch Luke and Mara kissing and being happily proclaimed husband and wife!
Mara was mitthed when she discovered she wan't the only hand to Palpatine. Palpatine lied to her more then a few times. She was just as much a victim as anyone else being dragged by Palpatine.