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Saga Attack Of The Sith (AU)[A/P,Qui,Tru,Xan,Bruck,Han,OCs] Updated 2/1

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by jacen200015, Jul 24, 2006.

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  1. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Oh dear! Obi wants one of the twins? [face_mischief] Obi and Siri! :D [face_worried] Though one has to wonder if Siri and her love will be strong enough to snap Obi out of it...

    Poor Nev :( it's so sad that his father was such a ... well you know!

    Great update! :D :D Glad to see ya back on board again (though it isn't to terrible of a wait for me since I was net dead most of the time ;) So it doesn't seem to long ago to me :D )

    [:D] Hope things have been good?
     
  2. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I almost forgot how much I love your work!

    Keep up the good work.

    Hears a plate of brownies.
     
  3. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Kynstar: Oh dear! Obi wants one of the twins? Yep [face_worried]
    Obi and Siri! Though one has to wonder if Siri and her love will be strong enough to snap Obi out of it... Either it will or Siri will have landed herself in a big spot of trouble.

    Poor Nev it's so sad that his father was such a ... well you know! Yeah :(

    Great update! Glad to see ya back on board again (though it isn't to terrible of a wait for me since I was net dead most of the time So it doesn't seem to long ago to me ) Thanks :)

    Hope things have been good? Well I graduated College but i can't seem to get a job in this economy. :(

    Lady_Misty: I almost forgot how much I love your work!

    Keep up the good work.
    Thank you :)

    Hears a plate of brownies. Yummy :) To bad they're not real.
     
  4. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Wow! So glad to see this one updated!

    It was worth the wait.

    =D=
     
  5. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    VaderLVR64: Wow! So glad to see this one updated!

    It was worth the wait.
    Thank you. I am almost done with the next update, but i need to have the mods check one of the scenes I have written due to its content and see whether or not i need to tone it down.

     
  6. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    So after having to find an alternate way to do the scene I needed to have checked, i have finally got the update completed, and i believe that it is better than before. For anyone who was waiting for Han to make an appearance, wait no more :D

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    ?You wouldn?t happen to be spying now, are you?? Qui-Gon asked as walked up to Xanatos? side.

    Xanatos crossed his arms over his chest and continued staring at the grove of trees where Raven and Nev-Kwellen were. ?I?m just observing.?

    ?She?s not a little girl anymore, Xanatos. She can take care of herself.?

    ?I know that, but I can?t help but worry.?

    Qui-Gon chuckled and placed his hand on Xanatos? shoulder. ?Is it all just worry or is the nest feeling empty??

    Xanatos glanced at the ground, at the dirt-covered tips of his boots, and then looked up at Qui-Gon. ?I missed ten years of her life and then after that I only saw her through holomessages until she returned a few days ago. And now with the Sith on the move??

    Qui-Gon gently squeezed Xanatos? shoulder and then removed his hand. ?Have you meditated lately??

    Xanatos shook his head, ?No, I haven?t. I?ve been busy.?

    ?I?m headed over to my usual meditation spot, would you like to join me??

    Xanatos looked back at the grove of trees for a moment before answering. ?Do I really have a choice?? He grinned as Qui-Gon gave him an innocent look.

    They stared at each other for a few seconds before they started lightly laughing. Together they walked down the path away from the grove of trees.

    ~*~*~

    After a light morning breakfast, Anakin and Kenshin left the Casa and found Lecwertawa waiting for them outside.

    Lecwertawa walked up to them and then dropped to his knees, ducking his head to the ground and splaying out his hands to his sides in a sign of respect. ?Greetings Ja?mak Skywalker and Ja?mak Kenobi. The clan dynasts have assembled and are awaiting your presence in the grand dukha.?

    Anakin nodded. ?Please lead the way.?

    They left the Casa behind them and went down a trail that veered away from the one they had traveled on to get to the Casa. They traveled deeper into the green woods until they came upon a large field that was ripe for harvest. They passed several more fields, each bearing a different crop until they were back briefly in the woods. When they emerged from the woods five minutes later they walked through a field of grass and beyond it was a large village.

    As they entered the village they saw a large crowd of Noghri waiting for them. There were men, women and children there. The children had a very light gray skin tone and the elder Noghri had a darker gray skin tone.

    At the entrance of the village was a group of ten young adult males, five on the right and five on the left standing in a straight line and waiting to escort the visitors to the Dynasts who were waiting in the grand dukha.

    There was excited chattering among the Noghri as they watched for the visitors arrival.

    The crowd parted as Anakin, Kenshin, and Lecwertawa walked in the middle of their escort and their escorts began to move in a straight line for the grand dukha.

    The dukha was certainly large. It was round and had a domed roof made of plaited grass. The doorway was covered with some sort of brown flexible flap. Its walls were made of wood, both inside and out and inside one could see that the roof also consisted of wooden planks. The supporting pillars were also made of wood. Inside the dukha were numerous carvings on the walls and pillars. There were floating wick lamps near the walls and a gap in the center of the ceiling that let light pour into the dukha. There were also solar light fixtures in the walls that spread light into the rest of the room.

    The floor was level with no covering over the dirt except six inches of covering next to the walls. Thirteen elder male Noghri stood in a row, each wearing a garment that was a combination of a vest and a shawl. Their escort stopped several feet away, leaving the three to
     
  7. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    You've got to update more often, I almost had a heartattack when I saw that this was updated.

    It's nice to see that Han still has the knack for getting into trouble!
     
  8. EGKenobi

    EGKenobi Jedi Master star 3

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    Excellent update.

    Nice to see Obi-Wan's good nature is still there.

    EG
     
  9. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Poor lil Han :( at least he has Chewie to keep him company! Hopefully Siri will understand what Redav has done and why. Though I'm sure she'll be spitfire mad ;)

    Great update! :D Glad you were able to graduate from college, and I'm sadden at the no jobs available bit. It is hard right now, but keep the faith! Something will surely show up soon for you to grab onto! :D [:D]
     
  10. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Lady_Misty: You've got to update more often, I almost had a heartattack when I saw that this was updated. Oh, sorry. I will try to update more. Sometimes before writing the next update I go back over my notes and fix up things here and there and stuff, so that makes the process longer.

    It's nice to see that Han still has the knack for getting into trouble! Yeah.

    EGKenobi: Excellent update. Thank you :)

    Nice to see Obi-Wan's good nature is still there. Yes, but how long will it last is the question [face_worried]

    Kynstar: Poor lil Han at least he has Chewie to keep him company! Yeah. Hopefully Siri will understand what Redav has done and why. Though I'm sure she'll be spitfire mad Maybe, Maybe not. One thing is for sure, she will indeed be mad.

    Great update! Glad you were able to graduate from college, and I'm sadden at the no jobs available bit. It is hard right now, but keep the faith! Something will surely show up soon for you to grab onto! Thank you. I did manage to get a job, but it remains to be seen if i will still have it during the schoolyear and if i am still working there whether it will be part time or full time.
     
  11. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Nev-Kwellen walked along a cobblestone pathway, greenery was to his left and right. This garden was the only garden that was let to grow wild, yet carefully weeded. It was, perhaps, his second favorite garden. A light mist sprung from the ground, watering the plants, splashing his face with cool water.

    Raven had been called away to the healers ward, leaving him alone in the tree cave. The sense of emptiness he felt when she left disturbed him, chilled him even. Nev-Kwellen rubbed the back of his neck and bent to avoid some overhanging branches that dripped lightly with water. The comlink on his belt beeped and he answered it. ?Hello, Nev-Kwellen here.?

    ?We need you in the healers wing in room 38b?It?s Asha.?

    Raven?s words were calm, but he could hear something else in her tone that was anything but calm. ?I?ll be there in a couple of minutes.? He responded, turning to leave the garden.

    He arrived at the healers wing in record time and found the room Raven had told him. He paused a few feet from the doorway, his mind catching up with him. Why am I even here? So Asha is sick again, it?s nothing new. Still, he walked the last few steps to the doorway, touched the side door panel and the door slid open. Inside he found Raven sitting at Asha?s bedside. Asha was hooked up to various monitors and her face was pale against her light brown hair.

    Raven looked up at him after placing another cool cloth on Asha?s forehead. ?She collapsed on her way to class and she hasn?t woken up since. I tried reaching to her through our bond but it?s blocked. The Crèche Master also tried, but found that her bond with Asha was severed. I think the transformation process of her development is beginning but I can?t get her to open up to me.?

    ?So you want me to try.? Nev-Kwellen said. He sat down on the edge of Asha?s cot and then closed his eyes as he reached for the bond he had with her. He encountered no resistance and found himself in her mind.

    It was a cloudy mist he mentally stepped into, one filled with a multitude of colors. He walked, his footsteps making no sound, the mist lifting off of the ground with every step he took. ?Asha?? He walked deeper into the thickening mist until he came to a small brown structure that pierced the mist. Nev-Kwellen entered it and found Asha curled up in a far corner. ?Asha, what?s wrong??

    Asha hugged her knees closer to herself, her eyes wide with fear. ?It?s trying to get me.?

    Nev-Kwellen sat down next to her and she crawled into his lap. ?What is trying to get you??

    Asha pointed toward the doorway where the mist was beginning to seep through the cracks.

    ?The mist?? Nev-Kwellen moved Asha off his lap and stood up. ?There?s nothing to be afraid of. It?s just mist, like the mist that comes from a waterfall.? He took her hand and she stood up and leaned close to him. ?Come on, I?ll show you.?

    Asha slowly, hesitantly, walked beside him, her eyes still wide as he opened the door to the mist. They stepped into it and immediately Asha backed up to go back into her shelter.

    Nev-Kwellen let go of her hand and followed her back into the shelter.

    ?It?s too scary.? Asha said, once again curled up in a ball in a far corner.

    The door opened behind Nev-Kwellen and he turned around. ?Raven??

    Raven gave him a brief nod before hurrying over to Asha. ?Asha, it?s going to be okay.? Raven said as she cuddled the young girl. ?The mist is not going to hurt you, I promise. You need to stop fighting it.?

    Asha shook her head, tears running down her cheeks. ?I don?t like it, Ray.?

    Nev-Kwellen sat down next to Raven and looked at Asha. ?Do you trust us??

    Asha nodded her head.

    ?Then you know that we will protect you.? Nev-Kwellen continued.

    Asha swallowed hard and nodded her head again.

    Raven rubbed circles on Asha?s back and kissed the top of her head. ?Let us guide you through the mist. You don?t need to be afraid, because we will be with you every step of the way.?

    ?Really??

    ?Really.? Nev-Kwellen confirmed and gave Asha a genuine smile.

    Asha stood
     
  12. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Heartfelt chapter! :( Poor Sagu...man that's just rough, can you imagine all that? I know it would have been extremely emotional for me!

    Glad Nev helped the two out. :) Hopefully Asha will make thru :D

    Great chapter!
     
  13. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Thanks for the information about Asha's race. Quite intriguing.
     
  14. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Kynstar: Heartfelt chapter! Poor Sagu...man that's just rough, can you imagine all that? I know it would have been extremely emotional for me! Indeed.

    Glad Nev helped the two out. Hopefully Asha will make thru Yeah [face_worried]

    Great chapter! Thank you.

    Lady_Misty: Thanks for the information about Asha's race. Quite intriguing. You're welcome :)
     
  15. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Yet another excellent chapter! I'll try to make it over here in a more timely manner next time. [face_blush]


    =D= =D=
     
  16. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    VaderLVR64: Yet another excellent chapter! I'll try to make it over here in a more timely manner next time. Thank you. I am hoping i can get the next post done in a week or two or less.
     
  17. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    A/N Wow, waddya know, it's a post. I'm still not very thrilled with how this came out but then an author is their worst critic. Also, there is a tissue alert warning.

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    Siri slowly woke up and heard the familiar sounds of a cargo ship. Blinking her eyes, she saw stars streaming past through the viewport. Her eyes narrowed and she looked down to see herself fully strapped into the copilot?s seat. Unstrapping herself, she checked the to see what the destination was plugged into the nav computer and discovered that it took her far away from the asteroid belt, away from the Jedi.

    Pressing her hands against the warm console, she closed her eyes against the tears that threatened to flow. The events from the time she was on Redav?s ship came flooding back through her with a vengeance. The pain of the encounter, the frustration and anger, ripped through her and she slammed her hands against the console. ?Hard headed stupid son of a ---? Her last words were drowned out by an annoyed roar behind her.

    She swiftly turned around and saw a Wookiee glaring down at her. ?I can say what I want!? She replied.

    The Wookiee made a motion to the back of the ship and she saw a young boy sleeping on a makeshift bed on the floor.

    Her face softened a bit as she said in a much softer voice. ?Oh.? A number of suitable curse words ran through her mind and she gave an annoyed huff. ?Why are you both on my ship??

    The Wookiee, who introduced himself as Chewbacca, calmly explained their presence on the ship and by the time he was done, Siri had calmed down a little bit more.

    ?I understand now and of course I will do my best to help Han and you.? She took a deep breath and slowly let it out. ?I?m sorry for my behavior, it?s been a irritating day for me.?

    Chewbacca stepped closer and placed his furry hand on her shoulder, barking a short reply.

    Siri attempted a smile but it faltered and tears ran down her cheeks.

    Chewbacca wrapped her tightly in his arms and she relaxed against him, letting the tears fall.

    ~*~*~

    Han yawned and stretched before sitting up and rubbing his eyes. ?Chewie.?

    Chewbacca left the cockpit at the sound of his young charge?s voice and as soon as he reached Han he picked him up.

    Han wrapped his arms around Chewbacca?s neck and laid his head on Chewbacca?s furry shoulder. ?I?m hungry.?

    Chewbacca carried him into the cockpit and sat him down in a seat behind the pilot?s seat.

    ?You?re going to have to settle for some nutri bars.? A woman spoke from the pilot?s seat. She turned the seat around and smiled at him. ?I?m Siri Tachi. Chewbacca told me of your situation and I will do what I can to help you both out.?

    Han nodded his head and took the nutri bar that Chewbacca had gotten for him. He bit into it and wrinkled his face at the stale, dry taste. ?This tastes nasty.? Han said with his mouth full.

    Siri turned back to the console as the hyperdrive panel began to flash red. ?Hold on, we?re coming out of hyperspace.? She gently pulled down on a lever and the ship slowed and the secondary engines cut on. No sooner had they emerged from hyperspace, they encountered strong turbulence.

    Han dropped his nutri bar and strained in his seat to get a better look out of the viewscreen. ?What?s going on?? A strong jolt knocked him back against the seat.

    Chewie growled as a piece of piping burst overhead and white smoke poured out.

    ?I know, I know!? Siri snapped as she rolled the ship as another wave of energy hit. ?We must have dropped in on a pirate raid or something.

    The ship flipped rear to front to rear as a large chunk of debris slammed into it. ?Shields are down!? Siri said and Chewbacca got out of his seat, grabbed an emergency tool case from under the seat and began working on a panel in the wall. The ship jerked sharply, throwing Chewbacca to the floor and then the lights flickered and died as the ship lost power.

    ~*~*~

    A black cloaked figure entered a darkened room, lit only by a candle on a short round
     
  18. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Uh oh...Siri and them are in trouble :( Hope they're gonna be ok and not be kept as prisoners!

    Liked the flashback of Anakin's past there :D

    Thanks for the update!! [:D]
     
  19. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Anakin's childhood memory is interesting.

    What did happen to Tala?
     
  20. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Kynstar: Uh oh...Siri and them are in trouble Hope they're gonna be ok and not be kept as prisoners! Well... :D

    Liked the flashback of Anakin's past there I'm glad :)

    Thanks for the update!! You're welcome :)

    Lady_Misty: Anakin's childhood memory is interesting. Indeed.

    What did happen to Tala? Good question :)


     
  21. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Uh oh. I've got a bad feeling about this! [face_worried] And what happened to Tala? [face_thinking]

    Looking forward to more. =D=
     
  22. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    VaderLVR64: Uh oh. I've got a bad feeling about this! And what happened to Tala? A good question. :)

    Looking forward to more. Thanks. I'm hoping i can finish writing the next post before the end of this week. :)
     
  23. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Happy Thanksgiving everyone :)
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    Siri slowly drifted back to consciousness and before she opened her eyes, sensed a change in her environment. Before opening her eyes she used the Force to sense for any nearby danger. Satisfied when she found none, she opened her eyes and carefully sat up.

    She was in a simple bedroom that had a small dresser, mirror above the dresser, closet, nightstand with a basin and pitcher, and a cot with a thin blanket. She could sense Han and Chewbacca on the other side of the door, still sound asleep.

    The door to the bedroom opened and the light was turned on, revealing a figure in a black cloak. Siri?s hand automatically went to her lightsaber, only to find that it wasn?t there.

    ?Our leader wishes to speak with you. Please come with me.? The cloaked person said.

    Siri cautiously stood up. While the Force did not warn of danger, this person smelled of the darkside. Seeing no other option but to comply, Siri followed n the cloaked person to the living area where seated in a chair waiting for them was a person who was wearing a pale yellow dress, complete with a white cape, and a white hood that covered her face.

    The black cloaked figure bowed to the woman in white. ?Milady.?

    The woman in white nodded and then gestured for the black cloaked person to stand beside her and then spoke to Siri. ?What is your name??

    ?Siri Tachi, milady.?

    ?I hope you have found your accommodations adequate.?

    ?Yes, milady. I thank you for your hospitality.?

    ?Least I could do after your ship suffered irreparable damage. You and your companions are lucky to have survived in one piece.? The woman in white paused briefly before continuing. ?However, you and your companions can?t be allowed to leave.?

    ?What? Why?? Siri said, stunned.

    ?We can?t risk being revealed.? The white cloaked woman stated simply.

    Siri sensed there was more to it than that as she used the Force to try to find out what she had stumbled into. They weren?t Sith, nor were they Jedi. Siri frowned, no, that didn?t make sense, she could sense those who radiated darkness and those who simply radiated light. She couldn?t get a read on the leader who was tightly locked up. They certainly were not the line dancers, a group that both Sith and Jedi found intolerable.

    ?We will not be held against our will.? Siri responded.

    ?No, but once you see what we do here, you?ll want to stay.? The white cloaked woman stood up. ?Come.?

    Curious, yet still on guard, Siri followed the woman out of the apartment.

    ~*~*~

    After some time meditating, Nev-Kwellen rose from his meditation spot in his bedroom and headed for the door. He stopped himself from activating the door as he heard what sounded like a heated argument on the other side. Enhancing his hearing with the Force, and masking his presence to make it appear that he was still meditating, Nev-Kwellen listened in.

    ??missing!?

    ?So you automatically assume that I had something to do with it?? Woren responded.

    ?The Orcin Council believes that your loyalties are not what they appear to be. Even members of the Jedi Council have grown concerned.?

    Woren lightly chuckled. ?Ah, suspicious maybe because I took a Sith apprentice as my padawan? I can see how that can cause unrest.?

    ?It has nothing to do with your padawan. Your tendency to show up at private meetings, conversations and voice things that later prove to be true and to say things that lead to a new train of thought while seemingly innocent has a smell of something rotten. Not only that, but I also know of that secret meeting you had with members of the Shadow Watcher clan.?

    ?It was a harmless meeting.? Woren responded.

    ?A meeting that was not approved by the Orcin Council!?

    ?As a member of the Orcin, I have my rights.?

    ?It doesn?t mean that you can abuse those rights!?

    ?My loyalty is with the Chosen and will always be with the Chosen. What you and the Orcin Council fail to understand is that there are things that need to remain hidde
     
  24. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I was wondering if Obi-Wan was being possessed and this chapter seems to indicate that he his.

    Padme is sick?
     
  25. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Lady_Misty: I was wondering if Obi-Wan was being possessed and this chapter seems to indicate that he his. Kindof. He still has control over his mind and actions, but he's constantly on the defensive, rarely doing the attacking. Obi-Wan's Journal provides some insight into what's going on with Obi-Wan.

    Padme is sick? Sick and with twins on the way [face_worried]Remember the dream Anakin had in The Rising Tempest in chapter 15? Remember the future is always in motion. Does the dream relate to what's happening now? Maybe, maybe not. There's something to chew on :D





    A/N: I'm fixing up some things in Jedi Uprising so if any of you have any recommendations please feel free to PM me :)
     
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