Beyond Bearing the Chosen - L/M - Romance/Angst - Complete April 03, 2006 - Author Thanks July 30, 2006

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  1. princess_melissa Jedi Master

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    This is hilarious. I'm loving it so far. Can't wait til the next part
  2. RedGold Force Ghost

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    ZaraValinor - It's the next Chosen One prophecy. Except this baby actually has a father, but doesn't have a father.
    Okay, that made my head hurt... but I would expect nothing less from you! ;)

    KELIA - What a plot twist! - Thanks! :)

    MirandaFair - RedGold, you've done it again! You're not known as the Queen of All Things Cliffie for no reason.
    Well, I do try... ;) [face_devil]

    BigFatty - Oooo... *rubs hands together in anticipation* this is going to be good.
    I hope so! [face_worried] :p

    TheCrazyRodian - You're KIDDING. HAH! What a 'fic!
    I wish I was... or really, Luke wishes I was... :(

    RebelMom - I think Luke is as shocked as Mara.
    I think he would like to remember conceiving a child... ;)

    princess_melissa - This is hilarious. I'm loving it so far.
    Thanks! :)


    The muse has struck me on this one... so I might post tonight!
  3. RedGold Force Ghost

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    Here is the first chapter of the fiction. I really should be working on my other WIPs instead of doing this, but two things:

    1) The muse doesn't want to cooperate with me. I have tried and tried to work on my other stuff and it's just not working for me. Maybe if I get this out of my system I'll have better luck?

    2) I'm writing this for a friend who sends me stuff from America since I get homesick for the simple things... like Bisquick... and Airheads... and just about everything else in the candy department... and oh, mexican food... and measuring cups that are in cups not pints... you know... the simple things...

    Anyway, for those who read my other two WIP fics that aren't complete, Path and Haven, I'm still working on them, just slowly.

    I hope this makes up for it on some level!

    Oh, and since this will be posted as I write it, I offer a PM service if you wish to subscribe.




    Chapter 1

    ?There must be a mistake somewhere,? Luke managed a reply to Mara?s accusation that he was the father of her child.

    ?Genetics don?t lie,? she yelled at him, quickly standing from her seat and crossing the distance between them, blaster still raised, ?nor the Force!?

    Taking his eyes from the deadly weapon, deadly because a hormonal pregnant lady who used to be an assassin was holding it, he risked a glance at her tummy. A simple probe with the Force revealed the still developing child.

    ?Can?t be?? he whispered in shock.

    ?See!? she screeched, the blaster barrel butting up against his chest. ?What did you do to me??

    ?I didn?t do anything,? he shot back, trying to calculate his escape from the blaster while being uttered confused at the evidence presented to him.

    ?This baby didn?t make itself!? she was visibly fuming now.

    A thought struck Luke. It was the very reason he had come to Coruscant in the first place. ?Maybe it did??

    Wrong thing to say.

    Luke managed to dodge the blaster shot only by the sake of his Jedi abilities. He pushed the chair backwards, the beam racing over his head. Rolling with the chair he flipped and landed on his feet.

    Automatically his hand had went to his lightsaber, but he refused to unclip it from his belt. Instead he gripped Mara?s blaster with the Force, yanking it from her hand and sending it spiralling into the hallway.

    Wasting no time she rushed him, her fists out. Backing up as he blocked her assault he was torn. He didn?t want to harm the baby but she needed to stop attacking and listen to him for a moment.

    Seeing an opening he grabbed her wrist as he placed his foot behind hers. Putting her off balance he managed to pivot her around.

    ?Don?t touch me!? she screamed as she struggled against him.

    With one hand across the bottom of her ribcage, well above the baby, and the other hand still holding her wrist, he held her firm. ?Think of the baby.?

    Her body quickly stiffened, one hand moving to her belly. Luke sensed out at the presence and found it agitated, but otherwise fine, much to his relief.

    ?Damn you, Skywalker,? she growled, ?damn you to hell.?

    ?Mara,? he ignored her outburst, ?we need to think about this logically, it?s what you?re good at.?

    ?Let go of me,? she gave a slight jerk against his arms.

    ?I will if you promise to listen.?

    She jerked again, but gave an angry sigh. ?Alright, fine, I?ll listen. Just stop touching me.?

    ?Okay,? he released her slowly, ?thank you.?

    Pulling away she stomped over to the sofa and flopped down, arms protectively wrapped around her midriff. ?What did you do to me??

    ?I swear I didn?t do anything,? he reiterated as he tipped his chair back up to sit. ?Think about it. I?ve been on Yavin for the past seven months working with the Jedi Academy and you?ve been all over the place with your job. This is the first time we?ve been on the same planet together, let alone seen each other, since you left.?

    She opened her mouth, then closed it, then opened it again and said, ?So??

    ?So I haven?t seen you in five months,? he sighed. ?Had I done
  4. ginchy Force Ghost

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    Not as fun as if L/M got to...uh...make the baby together, but interesting.

    Luke is Mara's baby's "nephew".

    Maybe you should take the "L/M" out of the title. ;)

    Hmmm...my brain cannot think of where this is going. I can't wait to find out, though. :D

    ETA: I forgot to say, I really like the time-frame you've put this in.
  5. academygrad88 Force Ghost

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    Luke is Mara's baby's nephew? LOL That sounds like one of the crazy theories we would cook up on the Sex thread.

    Great update.

    AG88
  6. Jedi Trace SouthEast RSA

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    *whistles* Poor Mara! All the cons of pregnancy and none of the pros - i.e. the prelude, LOL.

    I'm glad that Luke is finding out about his father and heritage. (His grandfather is the Force - I love it!)

    Looking forward to where you take this! :)





    (2) I'm writing this for a friend who sends me stuff from America since I get homesick for the simple things... like Bisquick... and Airheads... and just about everything else in the candy department... and oh, mexican food... and measuring cups that are in cups not pints... you know... the simple things...

    Anyway, for those who read my other two WIP fics that aren't complete, Path and Haven, I'm still working on them, just slowly.


    Will you finish Thin if I send you something from the States? [face_batting] :D )


  7. FelsGoddess Game Host

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    ?Damn you, Skywalker,? she growled, ?damn you to hell.? [face_laugh]

    ?I bet they rethought that when he was running them through with his saber [face_laugh] I doubt it. They were probably thinking oh crap!

    Interesting.
  8. ZaraValinor Force Ghost

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    RedGold
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    Date Posted: 6:56am Subject: RE: Mara Challenge Response
    ZaraValinor - It's the next Chosen One prophecy. Except this baby actually has a father, but doesn't have a father.
    Okay, that made my head hurt... but I would expect nothing less from you!


    Okay now who's making who's head hurt. This is like Arrian being his own father's uncle.




  9. Trepidation Jedi Knight

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    I was hoping you would take the seed you planted and grow it out. Nice start!

    Cheers,
    Trep
  10. Jadie Jedi Master

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    This is getting interesting. :)

    So... he is Mara's baby's nephew, ahn??? 8-} [face_laugh]


    I wanna see where you take this, so please PM me! [face_batting]
  11. MirandaFair Force Ghost

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    Woot! Chapter 1 is UP! [face_dancing]

    Excellent start. Lot's of laughs...having trouble hiding them here at my desk...as other co-workers suspiciously look my way. I'll make up for it here: [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh]

    Really good job explaining everything...so Luke's the nephew? *rubs forehead* I need an Advil. ;)

    Poor Mara...missing out on the fun that led to everything.
    Great start, RG!=D= Can't wait to see where this goes.
  12. Killik_Twilight Jedi Master

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    Very interesting, RedGold? if you could PM me when you update, I'd appreciate it.

    Mother's uncle's nephew's friend's baby?????

    KT
  13. Vongchild Force Ghost

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    This looks like an excellent fic!

    I've seen the multiple chosen ones theory before...

    Marsa did a vig...

    oh yeah! I did one! :p

    Send me those PMs!!!
  14. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    WOW - 2 chosen ones

    :eek: :eek:

    I'm intrigued...nice update!

    =D= =D= =D=
  15. Lady_Jade Jedi Master

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    A second Chosen One??!! Can the galaxy handle another? ;)


    This just keeps getting more interesting. Poor Mara. She's gonna have a long road ahead. But maybe with Luke by her side...........
  16. BigFatty Jedi Master

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    Yep, I'm suckered in. Good job and keep the PMs coming please.
  17. RedGold Force Ghost

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    ginchy - Not as fun as if L/M got to...uh...make the baby together, but interesting.
    Not as fun for luke and mara as well...

    Maybe you should take the "L/M" out of the title.
    Nah... it has a purpose...

    Hmmm...my brain cannot think of where this is going. I can't wait to find out, though.
    mmuuwwwaaahhhahahaha.... [face_devil]

    ETA: I forgot to say, I really like the time-frame you've put this in.
    Cool.

    AG88 - Luke is Mara's baby's nephew? LOL That sounds like one of the crazy theories we would cook up on the Sex thread.
    Probably... [face_worried]

    Trace - *whistles* Poor Mara! All the cons of pregnancy and none of the pros - i.e. the prelude, LOL.
    Sucks... doesn't it... :(

    I'm glad that Luke is finding out about his father and heritage. (His grandfather is the Force - I love it!)
    Always a good thing in my book!

    Will you finish Thin if I send you something from the States?
    Um... well... what are we talking here? [face_thinking]

    FelsGoddess - I doubt it. They were probably thinking oh crap!
    Among other things... hehehehehhe

    ZaraValinor - Okay now who's making who's head hurt. This is like Arrian being his own father's uncle.
    I blame you. :p

    Trepidation - I was hoping you would take the seed you planted and grow it out. Nice start!
    Let's just hope this one keeps growing... I have been known to kill a few. :(

    Jadie - So... he is Mara's baby's nephew, ahn???
    It's my version of a StarWars soap opera... 8-}

    MirandaFair - Lot's of laughs...having trouble hiding them here at my desk...as other co-workers suspiciously look my way.
    ah... let them be suspicious... mmuuwwwhahahaha

    Really good job explaining everything...so Luke's the nephew? *rubs forehead* I need an Advil.
    You probably need two!

    Poor Mara...missing out on the fun that led to everything.
    That seems to be the general consesus... ;)

    Killik Twiligh - Mother's uncle's nephew's friend's baby?????
    Suddenly I'm reminded of SpaceBalls!

    Vongchild - I've seen the multiple chosen ones theory before...
    Marsa did a vig...
    oh yeah! I did one!

    Really? I didn't know, but I'm not surprised that the idea hadn't been picked up before.

    KELIA - WOW - 2 chosen ones
    The galaxy couldn't really deal with one... :(

    Lady Jade - A second Chosen One??!! Can the galaxy handle another?
    Probably not... :p

    This just keeps getting more interesting. Poor Mara. She's gonna have a long road ahead. But maybe with Luke by her side...........
    well... [face_whistling]

    BigFatty - Yep, I'm suckered in.
    The circle is complete! MMUUUWWWAHAHAHAHHA


    sorry, I just love being evil...
  18. oldjedinurse Jedi Master

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    Oh, super idea, RedGold!

    I love the way you're developing this ... keep it coming!

    oldj
  19. LVB Force Ghost

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    Wow, didn't realise you'd "officially" start this so soon! Once again, I love it. The idea is phenomenal. Another Chosen One? Mara's in for one hellofa ride!
  20. JadeLotus Force Ghost

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    Very interesting...Two chosen ones? Great premise.

    Will Luke and Mara get to enjoy some baby-making activities of their own at somepoint in the story, though? :D


    ?This baby didn?t make itself!? she was visibly fuming now.

    A thought struck Luke. It was the very reason he had come to Coruscant in the first place. ?Maybe it did??

    Wrong thing to say.


    [face_laugh] Clueless as always....
  21. Vongchild Force Ghost

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    Yeah. It's been picked at. My fic "Vessel of the Force" and Marsa's vig "No One Is Alone" approached the topic of repeating chosen ones.
  22. RebelMom Jedi Grand Master

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    Hmm. Makes sense to me. 8-}
    Didn't realize you'd start so soon. Glad though.
  23. jade51999 Jedi Grand Master

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    Call me fascinated...and stick me on the PM list
  24. mavjade It's so Fluffy Fanfic & New Movies Manager

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    This is awesome!

    deadly because a hormonal pregnant lady who used to be an assassin was holding it,
    Yeah, that might be a little scary :p

    I also love the joke about Luke being the baby's nephew [face_laugh]

    I can't wait for the next chapter...If you could add me to the PM list that would be great!
  25. ThePariah Jedi Master

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    Oh boy. I have a feeling McEwok is going to love this one. [face_laugh]
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