Saga Behind Closed Doors - (Obi-Wan / Anakin) - Vignette (Replies 9/7)

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  1. Bekah_K Jedi Master

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    Title: Behind Closed Doors

    Author: Bekah_K (a.k.a. bek)

    Genre: AU

    Characters: Obi-Wan/Anakin

    Summary: Obi-Wan learns the truth of Anakin's time on Tatooine.

    Disclaimer: The characters (Obi-Wan and Anakin) belong to Lucas. I make no profit from this. It's just a hobby.

    Author?s Note: A special Thank you to Kynstar for the Title and for looking this over. [:D]


    Behind Closed Doors

    Leaning against the open doorway leading to the flight deck, I watch as my padawan once again switches tools in an attempt to fasten the new part onto the underside of the ship. Working with machinery has always been his source of comfort, his source of peace. A place where he achieves the tranquility he hungrily craves but cannot find through meditation.

    His movements are restless and agitated. When he arrived home from his final escort mission to Naboo, he seemed almost at ease with himself and the world around him. Over the course of the last few months his restlessness has once again come to the surface. He spends every moment of his spare time when not in training or in the field involved in some type of project. The Temple mechanics haven?t been able to stop speaking of how much help he has been in fixing the ships that have been damaged due to the war.

    Anakin shifts onto his side and with the aid of the force, he pulls the small tool chest closer to his work area. His hand rummages through the many differently shaped items before grasping an odd angled welding tool. The brightness from the blue white glare causes my eyes to glance away until he is finished.

    From my peripheral I see him pause several times before being satisfied that the part is secured firmly in place. Without thought, I stretch my conscious toward his seeking the comfort of his presence through our bond. What I find instead are tightly secured shields blocking my attempt at contact.

    He thinks I don?t know what really happened. He believes me to be ?left in the dark? so to speak. And perhaps I am in a way; all I really have are my suspicions. He hasn?t told me of his time on Tatooine other than to inform me of his mother?s death. The anger he barely managed to keep a tight rein on while telling a limited amount of details leads me to believe that he blames the Order for her demise. His dreams were well known by the Council. Having dealt with too many sleepless nights in an attempt to comfort him, I brought my padawan before the two lead council members.

    Masters Yoda and Windu were of no help in Anakin?s eyes. He saw their assessment of his visions, as he termed them, as being nothing more than mere dreams that would ? in time ? pass away without further thought. I too had come to believe that perhaps they were only dreams. My own master had never placed any significance in dreams as his talent had lain within the Living Force, not the Unifying, where my gift and Anakin?s lie. The Council failed him in this, as did I.

    I hear him cry at night when he believes no one can see or hear. I feel the grief he tries so desperately to keep from me. Does he not know that I understand his plight? Throughout my years as a Jedi and especially during this war, I have seen many friends slain. My mind drifts a moment, wondering if Anakin remembers that I too lost my only parent. And then I realize that perhaps our limited time with him wasn?t the best show of our relationship. What my padawan witnessed during the last leg of our Naboo mission was the tension that lay between my master and I due to our differing opinions of a young boy?s future. Perhaps I should explain that grief is an emotion that I am well familiar with. If I know anything of my apprentice, it is that he blames himself for not being more forward in the desire to go to his mother.

    And yet, I am partly to blame to. I have not allowed my padawan the extension of having a master like Qui-Gon Jinn. So many times I have wondered if my master would have been the better choice in training him,
  2. Alethia Force Ghost

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    Feb 13, 2005
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    Oh my, beautiful. I truly enjoyed this. Absolutely wonderful. I love the way you portrayed the relationship between them and the way Obi-Wan spoke of what happened to Qui-Gon. Anakin explaining to Obi-Wan what he did to the Tuskens were heartwrenching and my breath stopped when Anakin finally confessed his marriage to Obi-Wan. Excellent job.
  3. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    One of my fave parts was this:

    I hear him cry at night when he believes no one can see or hear. I feel the grief he tries so desperately to keep from me. Does he not know that I understand his plight? Throughout my years as a Jedi and especially during this war, I have seen many friends slain. My mind drifts a moment, wondering if Anakin remembers that I too lost my only parent. And then I realize that perhaps our limited time with him wasn?t the best show of our relationship. What my padawan witnessed during the last leg of our Naboo mission was the tension that lay between my master and I due to our differing opinions of a young boy?s future. Perhaps I should explain that grief is an emotion that I am well familiar with. If I know anything of my apprentice, it is that he blames himself for not being more forward in the desire to go to his mother.

    And this part too :( so heartfelt and anguish here

    Tell him. The guiding voice I have listened to for so long directs. For too long it has asked and pleaded with me to be more open, to be more rebellious in certain areas but I always stayed my hand and refused to acknowledge the will of the one entity that has repeatedly tried to mend the rift that I have been so blind to. Or perhaps I haven?t been blinded. Perhaps I?ve been too wrapped up in a grief that I thought I had gotten over long ago.

    And this... oh man I truly loooooved this part!

    Standing up, the chair forcefully falls behind him. Standing there he gauges my reaction, not receiving what he thought would be a reprimand for his quick temper he turns his back and walks over to the counter. His hands come to rest atop the ceramic surface, a slight clicking sound as his artificial hand touches the delicate surface. Leaning forward on his arms, he shakes his head. ?You don?t know what it?s like to have someone you love die right in front of you,? he leans back and his hands begin to absently rub against one another as if trying to remove something he may have picked up from the countertop.

    Lowering my gaze to the table?s surface, I release the cup I?ve been holding tightly to and push it aside. Raising my gaze (my eyes now moist) to look his direction, I reply, ?Do you not remember my own master?s death, Anakin? Do you not remember Qui-Gon?s funeral??

    Anakin nodded, ?I remember. But he was just your mentor, your instructor,? he said as he turned toward me, ?He wasn?t anything of consequence.?

    Faster than Anakin could?ve thought possible, I was out of my chair and pinning him against the cabinets, my hands at his throat, ?You will not disrespect the dead, do you understand??

    Swallowing with difficulty as my grip had yet to loosen, he struggled to nod, his eyes wide within a confused hurt expression.

    Realizing the example I was setting, I released my hold and stepped back. ?Qui-Gon was the closest thing to a father I could?ve had, Anakin. He wasn?t just a mentor as you so callously label him. He raised me and all that implies,? the tone of my voice is firm with no room for rebuke.


    Ack... I nearly posted a third of the fic... [face_blush] Opps well it is awesome! I have wondered if it ever came to be that Obi found out. I always wondered how'd this moment would come out as. Lovely job! Excellent work! I truly enjoyed it and I can see this actually happening! And from Obi's POV was juz great!

    Loved how you had Anakin like 'He what?!' when Obi told him about Qui pausing to meditate while waiting for the shields to recycle. [face_laugh] I could see Hayden's expression at playing Anakin! That look would have been priceless!

    At least Anakin is reminded at how close Obi actually was to Qui. All he saw was a young man not agreeing with his mentor. He knew nothing of all the 'good' times that the two had shared. Now he knows. And also that his own Master had embraced his own hatred if only momentarily. I loved how you had Obi stay his automatic response that he was going to do at Anakin's admission of killing all the Tuscans.

    And Obi suspecting of him and Padme
  4. Bekah_K Jedi Master

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    Alethia: I love the way you portrayed the relationship between them and the way Obi-Wan spoke of what happened to Qui-Gon. Anakin explaining to Obi-Wan what he did to the Tuskens were heartwrenching and my breath stopped when Anakin finally confessed his marriage to Obi-Wan. Excellent job.

    Anakin and Obi-Wan have a lot of similarities even if they themselves don?t acknowledge them. They?re both reckless for one and they both briefly touched the darkside when confronted with the death of the only parental figure they?d really known.

    Thanks for reading! :D

    Kynstar: Loved how you had Anakin like 'He what?!' when Obi told him about Qui pausing to meditate while waiting for the shields to recycle. I could see Hayden's expression at playing Anakin! That look would have been priceless!

    I thought that it would be something that would have had Anakin scratching his head in confusion. I would?ve been neat to have had Qui live and Anakin having to come to terms with all these little idiosyncrasies that made Qui-Gon who he was. :D

    And also that his own Master had embraced his own hatred if only momentarily. I loved how you had Obi stay his automatic response that he was going to do at Anakin's admission of killing all the Tuscans.

    I don?t think Obi-Wan and Anakin are as different as they think they are. ;)

  5. Laine_Snowtrekker Force Ghost

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    I liked this viggie. Makes me understand Obi-Wan just that much more. And Anakin, too.
  6. dianethx Jedi Grand Master

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    Mar 1, 2002
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    OH, Bek, this was lovely. I really loved that Anakin didn't realize the depth of Obi-Wan's love of his Master, religating him to a mentor when what he really was was a father. And Obi-Wan finding out that Padme is married to his apprentice and yet doing nothing about it. I liked that a lot!

    Well done.
  7. JediGaeliaWindstar Jedi Knight

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    May 9, 2005
    star 1
    Mwar! This is a good story ! Keep up the good work!
  8. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Delightful Bekah... I like that Obi-Wan was not surpsied at ?We were married when I escorted her back to Naboo.? .. such a wonderful response with ?I figured as much.? :D :D

    A wonderfulviggie!
  9. Malz4JESUS Jedi Grand Master

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    Apr 12, 2002
    star 5
    Awesome! :D

    I liked your idea and how you wrote it! :)


    God bless,
    Malz
  10. PadawanKitara Force Ghost

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    Dec 31, 2001
    star 5
    Well done. I like the emotions and trust issues; it's not mush. It's much more complex than that =D=
  11. Jedi_Linewalker Force Ghost

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    May 1, 2005
    star 2
    Soulful, insightful and well written. Well done, well done
  12. padawan feline Force Ghost

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    May 26, 1999
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    Oh wow! I have never read a story which portrayed the Obi-Wan/Anakin relationship better! That was so amazingly well thought out! I am struggling through writing my own version of them at this time period... and I am afraid mine falls very short of yours in insightfulness.

    Good job! I am glad I took the time to read it! :D
  13. Emma_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Feb 24, 2003
    Beautiful! :) I like how you compared the two lifechanging events in their lives and that Obi-Wan didn't walk away from Anakin after hearing it. Well done.
  14. Bekah_K Jedi Master

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    Laine_Snowtrekker: I liked this viggie. Makes me understand Obi-Wan just that much more. And Anakin, too.

    It was a nice change of pace to write what might have been. :)

    diane: Obi-Wan finding out that Padme is married to his apprentice and yet doing nothing about it. I liked that a lot!

    I always wondered if Anakin ever told Obi-Wan everything (hopefully we'll find out in Ep. III) and wanted to explore that. I think Obi-Wan may have been disappointed in the choices Anakin made, but I don't think he would have turned his back on him. At least I hope not! :p

    Well done. Thank you! :D

    JediGaeliaWindstar: This is a good story! Keep up the good work! Thank you! :)

    Healer_Leona: "We were married when I escorted her back to Naboo."..such a wonderful response with "I figured as much."

    Obi-Wan wasn't as blind to his faults as Anakin would like to think. :)

    Malz4JESUS: I liked your idea and how you wrote it! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

    PadawanKitara: ...it's not mush. It's much more complex than that.

    I was hoping it wouldn't be! :) I didn't want it to come across as Obi-Wan being too easy on Anakin or that there be too much mush. I tried to balance it. I guess it worked! :D Thank you for reading!

    Jedi_Linewalker: Soulful, insightful and well written. Well done, well done. Thanks! :)

    padawan feline: I have never read a story which portrayed the Obi-Wan/Anakin relationship better! That was so amazingly well thougth out!

    Thank you! [face_blush] I like to think of Obi-Wan and Anakin as having had a good relationship with the normal tensions/stresses that every relationship goes through. Happy endings and all that! :D

    Emma_Kenobi: Beautiful! I like how you compared the two lifechanging events in their lives... Thanks! :)
  15. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    I found myself holding my breath while I read this. I so wanted to see this scene come to life on the screen. But in a way, you described it so vividly, so perfectly, that it seems like it did.

    I hear him cry at night when he believes no one can see or hear. I feel the grief he tries so desperately to keep from me. Does he not know that I understand his plight? Throughout my years as a Jedi and especially during this war, I have seen many friends slain. My mind drifts a moment, wondering if Anakin remembers that I too lost my only parent.

    :_|

    Just what I needed today, of all days! :_| Might as well get used to sobbing...


    Lovely, incredible!
  16. Master_Noi Jedi Master

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    Sep 8, 2004
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    The was so beautiful. I loved the contrast and comparison of their lives and Anakin's eagerness to know more about Obi-Wan.
  17. ZekksGoddess Force Ghost

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    Oct 2, 2004
    star 4
    Wow, that was very sad...in a beautiful, moving way...
    Awesome job!!!
  18. kateydidnt Force Ghost

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    Nov 11, 2004
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    Who was, or is, your attachment, Master??

    ?You know her quite well, actually.


    Oh! Siri!
  19. agentj Force Ghost

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    Dec 3, 2004
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    I missed this the first time it was posted! :eek: For shame!

    These two definitely need more moments like this....
  20. hansgirl1031 Force Ghost

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    Feb 26, 2005
    star 1
    This was another one of those "Ahh, if only..." kinds of scenes.

    I loved how you wrote them...they way they reacted and responded to each other was great, and seemed very true to their characters. Well sort of, I would have loved it if Obi-Wan had been that patient, understanding and encouraging with Anakin. He may not have turned had that been the case. The story may not have been that interesting though had things gone that way. Oh well, thanks for letting us dream! :D

  21. Arwyn_Whitesun Jedi Master

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    Jul 13, 2002
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    That was beatuifully written, Bekah, and one of those scenes we wish could have actually taken place in the movie. I liked how both Anakin and Obi-Wan shared not only their moments of overwhelming grief at the loss of someone they loved but of how both were overcome by anger and were almost lost to the dark side. In sharing those memories they grew much closer. Nice job! :)
  22. Aelan_Greenleaf Jedi Knight

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    May 20, 2005
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    This was so beautiful and so sad. I loved the interaction between Obi-Wan and Anakin, and how Obi-Wan just listened to Anakin and his woes. Great job. :)
  23. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Jan 11, 2002
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    Kynstar, great minds think alike :)

    This is indeed a wonderful viggie. Kynstar seems to have summed up my feelings for the vigg so i'll just say, wonderful, amazing, magnificent, work. :)
  24. Gina Force Ghost

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    Jun 3, 2003
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    Absolutely stunning. If only they had opened up to another regarding their shared emotions and experiences, perhaps things might have turned out differently.

    Beautiful! =D=

  25. Erin_21 Jedi Knight

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    May 27, 2005
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    Wow!! what a beautiful vignette!! this is the kind of story that makes me come back to this boards everytime I feel sad, tired or depresed, you people have a gift for writing!!.
    I'm totally going to check for other stories from you, and I really believe and hope you could make a longer story here [face_praying]
    If something like this had really happened there would have been such a different ending to ROTS!!!.
    Thanks [:D] be well and take care.
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