Saga Bent But Never Broken 2nd drabble added - Satine, now

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  1. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    (Drabbles for those who don't know are 100 word "stories")

    Title: Bent But Never Broken
    Author(s): Valairy_Scot
    Timeframe: Clone Wars
    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi
    Genre: Drabble
    Keywords: Obi-Wan Kenobi
    Summary: Obi-Wan has lost another dear to him; he left without his mission sanctioned by the Council or Senate - and he failed.

    Soon I will raise my head and face the gaze and judgment of my fellow Council members: without regret at my actions but oh so much regret in my heart. I left without word; I left without permission – and left without yet another piece of my heart.

    Qui-Gon, Cerasi, Satine : those I’ve loved and those whom I was unable to save. Who or what is next?

    Not Anakin! Not Ahsoka, not the Republic, not the Order itself. Have I not accepted enough losses? Please, no more: I have too little heart left to lose.

    Unless the Force wills otherwise.
    Last edited by Valairy Scot, Feb 5, 2013
  2. earlybird-obi-wan Force Ghost

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    A nice piece. Will you continue in the drabble challenge?
  3. leiamoody Force Ghost

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    Very awesome drabble. It perfectly reflects Obi-Wan's grief.
  4. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Amazing and poignant. @};- If this continues, please tag. [:D] !!!
  5. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    :_| So many warring emotions, each touched on wonderfully. Incredibly impressive to do this in a drabble
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  6. Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus

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    Poignant picture of Obi-Wan's feelings. =D=
  7. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    Earlybird: I guess I need to go back to that thread and see how it's set up. So, maybe.

    Leimoody: Thank you. "Awesome" - preens.

    @Jade_eyes: I wasn't planning to continue, but when the muse calls...thanks for asking for a tag. Mucho appreciated.

    Serendipityaey: Someone as wordy as me ([face_laugh]:_|) needs to explore brevity once in a while. Thanks so much.

    Luna_Nightshade: Thanks.

    I really tried not to go overboard with Obi-Wan's emotions yet show he is not immune to them. Sounds like it worked.


    Satine:

    I look upon the face of my beloved, my dear Obi-Wan as death steals close. Oh, my dear, so much has separated us but now we are united in pain. Your eyes, my dear, I have always loved your eyes and now they hold so much silent meaning, so much unvoiced love.

    Some loves are just never meant to be. Ours is not emblazoned across the stars nor wrapped in a band around our fingers.

    Your arms and your love enfold me and I grow warm within even as I grow cold without: no better place within which to die.
    Last edited by Valairy Scot, Feb 5, 2013
  8. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    Aw, comfort in her coldest moment, nicely put
  9. leiamoody Force Ghost

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    Perfect, perfectly stated line here. It reflects the truth about Obi-Wan and Satine and the borders of their relationship.
  10. ruth baulding Jedi Grand Master

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    :_|
    And in the words of so many Shakespearian heroines... "I die."
    And as for 100 word pithiness, I wil quote Dooku. "Impressive. Most impressive."
  11. Alexis_Wingstar Force Ghost

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    You got Satine's voice perfectly.

    Both drabbles were very poignant.
  12. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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  13. Eryndil Jedi Grand Master

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    You've caught the emotions and the characters really well in so few words - great job.

    And this:

    "Please, no more: I have too little heart left to lose.

    Unless the Force wills otherwise."

    Ah flip, that's just so... :_|
  14. earlybird-obi-wan Force Ghost

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    A perfect view on Satine so fitting to the first drabble
  15. Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus

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    Poignant and very sad, brooding drabble in Satine's voice. I liked your description of their relationship and how it is different than most. A sad punch in the gut. Beautiful drabble.
  16. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    leiamoody:
    Thanks! It is a far "quieter" relationship, much deeper than friendship and far beyond "passion" although I think had the moons aligned right, Satine might have taught Obi-Wan a thing or two about "passion." :D

    serendipityaey: if you got to die, what better way to die than in Obi-Wan's eyes, looking up at his beautiful eyes and proclaiming your undying love?

    ruth baulding: What do I owe you again? ;)

    Alexis_Wingstar:
    I like the sound of that - "perfectly." Thanks! Am I nuts, or am I seeing you around the boards more frequently again?

    Jade_eyes:
    Thanks - and for the flowers, too.

    Eryndil:
    Yup,Obi-Wan gives in to a bit of human plea for all this to end, then pulls himself back into Jedi-mode.

    earlybird-obi-wan:
    Thanks!

    Luna_Nightshade: Aw, you're always so full of compliments - thanks.


    Maul coming up, once I dredge up both the pieces and fit them together. [face_laugh]
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