Beyond Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Completed 11/4/09!

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  1. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Title: Blood Trail
    Author: YodaKenobi
    Timeframe: Post-LotF, 42 ABY
    Characters: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke, Allana
    Genre: Adventure, Mystery
    Keywords: Intergalactic Rorschach Test
    Summary: I don't want to spoil it
    Notes:


    This is just the result of a fifteen minute conversation with jagsredlady about the possibilities for post-LotF EU. It will probably be a trilogy.

    [image=http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3223/2610188726_0e8822a464_o.jpg]

    *cover art by Maggy*

    Dramatis Personae

    Allana Solo(Amelia); Heir to the Throne of the Hapes Consortium (female human)
    Ben Skywalker; Jedi Knight (male human)
    Boba Fett; Mandalorian bounty hunter, Mandalore (male human)
    C-3PO; protocol droid
    Corran Horn; Jedi Master (male human)
    Daala; Chief of State of the Galactic Alliance (female human)
    Dif Scaur; intelligence director (male human)
    Han Solo; captain, Millennium Falcon (male human)
    Jae Juun; intelligence operative (male Sullustan)
    Jaden Kor; Jedi Knight (male human)
    Jagged Fel; Grand Moff of the Imperial Remnant (male human)
    Jaina Solo; former Jedi Knight (female human)
    Kalin Windrider; child (male human)
    Kyle Katarn; Jedi Master (male human)
    Kyp Durron; Jedi Master (male human)
    Leia Organa Solo; Jedi Knight (female human)
    Luke Skywalker; Jedi Grand Master (male human)
    Mirta Gev; Mandalorian bounty hunter (female human)
    Porav Dorsa; GFS Director (male Nautolan)
    R2-D2; astromech droid
    Saba Sebatyne; Jedi Master (female Barabel)
    Tahiri Veila; former Jedi Knight (female human)
    Tarfang; master spy (male Ewok)
    Tenel Ka Djo; Queen Mother of the Hapes Consortium (female human)
    Vak Rive; senator (male Blood Carver)
    Valin Horn; Jedi Knight (male human)
    Wobbler; modified children's droid


    Special thanks to jagsredlady for her beta work and all her other help and inspiration.
  2. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Prologue: Blood Trail

    There was an intruder.

    No matter how much she cut herself off from the Force, she couldn't stop the prickles of impending danger from needling her spine or the icy ball of fear that formed between her shoulder blades. There was someone out there, and she couldn't think of any innocent reason for that.

    Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water. She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut? there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.

    Making sure her blaster was, Jaina cinched her belt around her waist and fastened its buckle before creeping towards the door. Her hut was small, not much larger than the one that existed there decades earlier, and it took the lithe woman only a few strides to reach the door after ducking the low-arching passages.

    She palmed the toggle control for the door and crawled through the narrow passage into the fog-blanketed mud outside the home she'd built here two years ago. The stench of Dagobah's sweltering bogs mingled in the cold night air, and Jaina could tell from the musty aroma and faint hint of electricity in the shadows that it was going to rain. She unclipped a glowrod from her belt to help light her way and snapped the device on, casting a beam of golden light through the roving mists.

    There was no sign of him.

    Starting forward, she tried to think of who it would be. If it was anyone with good intentions? Uncle Luke or her parents? they would have just knocked. This person had come to kill her.

    Jaina's boots squashed against the sucking mud of the marshlands as she passed the bubbling swamps and serpentine branches of Dagobah's gray trees. She paused when a vine snake dropped down and glided across the ground, as if being stalked by a predator.

    Instinctively she reached for her lightsaber and again felt silly. She'd dismantled the weapon when she left the Jedi Order and came to Dagobah to live in solitude. In order to defeat Darth Caedus? to kill her twin brother, Jacen Solo? Jaina had chosen to become something other than a Jedi. When it was over, there was no going back for her, and she was wise enough to know that if she continued, she would only be following her brother's path. She could feel that he had made a similar choice once, deciding that the Jedi way just wasn't enough, and that the ends justified the means to secure galactic peace...

    There would never be peace for her, she knew, but she needed to be alone. It didn't matter where, Dagobah was simply the first planet that came to mind.

    She left everything behind.

    Jaina pulled her blaster from its holster and started forward into the murky grove ahead, her legs drowning in fog. To her surprise, she came to the dark mouth of a cave covered by tangles of coiled vines and gnarled tree roots? something about it sent a chill up her spine, and she knew that her intruder was waiting for her inside.

    Suddenly she felt afraid in a way she never thought she would again.

    Taking a deep breath, Jaina pushed her apprehension away and wrapped herself in the battle-calm that she'd worn through too many wars, the armor of the Sword of the Jedi, and she crept inside, dropping into the darkness. She hit the soft ground and her glowrod seemed to dim, as if it couldn't peel the shadows from the cave walls of stone, mud, and frayed roots. It defied logic, but Jaina could feel from the energy radiating from this place that logic just didn't matter here.

    She continued ahead slowly, as creatures she could not make out crawled and slithered across her boots with far more legs than anything should have. Eventually, she came to a dark
  3. Jedi-Ant Jedi Master

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    First!


    EDIT:

    Holy moly! :eek: Another YodaKenobi ?fic!! *does a happy, somewhat crazy little dance* [face_dancing] I?m so on board with this!!!

    This is just the result of a fifteen minute conversation with jagsredlady about the possibilities for post-LotF EU. It will probably be a trilogy.

    Awesome! :cool: Even better! I?m glad to hear it.

    Now onto the ?fic?

    Prologue: Blood Trail

    Fabulous title.

    There was an intruder.

    No matter how much she cut herself off from the Force, she couldn't stop the prickles of impending danger from needling her spine or the icy ball of fear that formed between her shoulder blades. There was someone out there, and she couldn't think of any innocent reason for that.


    And a fabulous beginning!! =D= The descriptions of (looks below for name) Jaina?s reaction to the realisation of the intruder are spot on, just fantastic!!

    Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water. She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut? there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.

    More great descriptions here! :D I especially love the part about Jaina?s sweat-logged shirt -- the girl?s been busy training, obviously.

    And an interesting fact that leapt out at me ? ?there was a moment where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber?? so, she obviously isn?t carrying it with her [face_thinking] I wonder why?

    (And if this is should be obvious, sorry.. I?m not exactly up on my Legacy books? I?m still waiting for Sacrifice to hit the bookstores here in Oz. [face_plain])

    Her hut was small, not much larger than the one that existed there decades earlier, and it took the lithe woman only a few strides to reach the door after ducking the low-arching passages.

    Ah. [face_idea] Dagobah. Interesting. [face_thinking] Self-imposed exile?

    Starting forward, she tried to think of who it would be. If it was anyone with good intentions? Uncle Luke or her parents? they would have just knocked. This person had come to kill her.

    Not necessarily. It could be Zekk, come to steal her away to a caged bedroom on a faraway island, ala Days of our Lives :p 8-} (Sorry, couldn?t resist!)

    She'd dismantled the weapon when she left the Jedi Order and came to Dagobah to live in solitude.

    Ah. So my line of thinking was correct.

    She could feel that he had made a similar choice once, deciding that the Jedi way just wasn't enough, and that the ends justified the means to secure galactic peace...

    Ouch. Glad she decided on exile then. We didn?t need another Caedus. [face_plain]

    She left everything behind.

    Jag, too? *lip wobble*

    To her surprise, she came to the dark mouth of a cave covered by tangles of coiled vines and gnarled tree roots? something about it sent a chill up her spine, and she knew that her intruder was waiting for her inside.

    Suddenly she felt afraid in a way she never thought she would again.


    Uh-oh? [face_worried] That cave has never been good for the Skywalker family? I don?t like the sound of this?

    [face_idea]

    Wait a minute? she?s not going to go in there and see herself in Caedus? clothing, is she? :eek: ;)

    But before she could repeat herself more forcefully, the glowrod was ripped from her grasp and sent sailing through the cavern, bouncing off the cave floor. She squeezed the trigger of her blaster only to see the stranger whip around in a fan of dark robes and catch the flare of red brilliance in the palm of his hand. Jaina's blaster was similarly wrenc
  4. brodiew Force Ghost

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    2nd! I'm finally on the ground floor of a YodaKenobi story! I'll return tonight with a review.
  5. Jag4Me Jedi Grand Master

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    Amazing start! Your descriptions of Degobah are wonderful and I felt like I could hear the squishy mud.:p
    I'll be watching to see where you take this. [face_hypnotized]
  6. corran2 Force Ghost

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    New Story!!![face_dancing] [face_dancing] [face_dancing] And a trilogy at that!:eek: First I'll compliment Maggy on yet another wonderful cover! She never fails! Second, what a terrific opening chapter! I got serious Lost vibes when Jacen tells Jaina she has to save him. Reminds me of Boone leading Locke through a vision quest in Further Instructions. Looks like this is going to be a mystery as well. I'm quite surprised by such a short DP. Does this mean this story won't be as epic as your other stories?

    Yoda, I have to say this has seriously got my attention. Can't wiat for a new post!
  7. jadesabre75 Jedi Master

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    Oh yeah, this is gonna be a fun one. :D Excellent painting of the scene here. Very well done! Can't wait to see more!
  8. star_writer24 Jedi Master

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  9. Lola64 Force Ghost

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    "Save him."

    Ok, who does Jaina need to save and why? Inquiring minds want to know.

    You're going to tell me I have to read the story to find out aren't you?

    So will Tuesday be the day you'll be posting updates? You usually have a routine right? Just want to make sure I note my calendar so I don't miss anything.

    And btw, loved the Prologue and look forward to the next chapter.
  10. Jaina_and_Jag Force Ghost

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    Woah! Awesome. :D You've already got me hooked. I wonder who this 'he' is that she has to save... [face_thinking] Can't wait to see more. :D
  11. Draconarius Force Ghost

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    Yes! Finally, a YodaKenobi story I can catch from the beginning. I always seem to have to marathon read to catch up with your fics... I still haven't caught up with the others.

    That was one freaky nightmare. Can't wait to see where you take this. If you're PMing for updates, could you throw me on the list?

    Draco.
  12. THE_PIED_PIPER Chapter Rep Knoxville, TN

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    Wes, this is greatness, not that I'm surprised at all considering the source. ;)

    The way you capture Jaina's mood and the dreams is......compelling? I guess, is all I can really come up with.

    Your writing is always so pure and perfect, you write the characters how they are as human beings...no more and no less.

    I can't wait for more. [:D]


    Kick :)
  13. zonzo Jedi Grand Master

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    No PM? Thanks much. :rolleyes:

    Very good, though. I hope Jaina can save this mysterious person.
  14. TheOnlyJediPrincess Jedi Master

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    Wow! What a great beginging! It gave me chills down my spin. I can't wait to read more! If you have one, Please add me to the PM list!
  15. canadianjedimama Force Ghost

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    Nice to see this up Wes!

    ;)

    [face_thinking] Most intriguing....I wonder who it is that Jaina has to save. Will she get there in time? Does Victor still love Nikki?

    Sorry about that last part...I'm a bit punchy right now.:D

    Can't wait to see where this goes.

    :cool: Cyn
  16. Stroja Jedi Knight

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    Great start! Dagobah has so much potential for spooky stuff like that. I'm very interested in this story.

    I'll be curious to see who it is she has to save.
  17. Jedi-Ant Jedi Master

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    [face_laugh] :_| [face_laugh]

    That's what I'd like to know! :p
  18. Sticks Force Ghost

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    This is intriguing! Please add me to a PM list, if you have one.
  19. DarthBellumSolo Jedi Grand Master

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    WOW!!!! A post-Legacy of the Force!! Fine!!!! And about Allana is!!! With impatience I wait for updating. You are simple a miracle!!!
    *has immediately dragged off the chapter to itself and greedy reads*:-B

    [face_devil] Bel[face_devil]
  20. TKeira_Lea Jedi Grand Master

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    Yobi,

    Wow! A post-LOTF fic. I'm excited to see you venture this far into canon, especially since your knowledge of the EU is so incredible. It'll give your story wonderful depth. :D

    I'm curious if you put Tahiri second to Jaina in the title bar because she's going to have a big role... [face_thinking]

    Love the name of the story. I thought the blood trail idea in Inv was truly inspired. And your keyword coupled with the title. I'm pondering the immense possibilities.

    Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water. She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut? there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.

    Great show right off that bat for what you'll reveal about Jaina's use of the Force later.

    Jaina's boots squashed against the sucking mud of the marshlands as she passed the bubbling swamps and serpentine branches of Dagobah's gray trees. She paused when a vine snake dropped down and glided across the ground, as if being stalked by a predator.

    Snakes! :eek: Oh no!

    Seriously I loved the imagery here.

    Taking a deep breath, Jaina pushed her apprehension away and wrapped herself in the battle-calm that she'd worn through too many wars, the armor of the Sword of the Jedi, and she crept inside, dropping into the darkness.

    She can't seem to leave the SotJ behind, can she? :(

    "You have to save him, Jaina."

    Gah. Who's him?

    Ah, but you're not going to tell us yet are you?

    Great start. I can't wait to see where you take this ;)
  21. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    She's never heard Uncle Luke's stories about Yoda? :p

    She's handed in her lightsaber? o_O

    I'm vaguely reminded of Leia getting dressed after her one-on-one fight with Khabarakh in Heir to the Empire.:p

    Two years!? :eek: Yet she's still expecting her lightsaber? [face_thinking] She has some issues, then? o_O

    ... "him"? o_O

    That's more than she should rationally know. Force instinct? Symbolism? Both? [face_mischief]

    Paranoid, Jaina. Perhaps being alone hasn't helped you. Last time we saw a Jedi girl alone on Dagobah, at least some of the Yuuzhan Vong who showed up HAD come randomly in peace and were coincidentally looking for her. Don't you talk to Tahiri? o_O

    And, then there's the Yoda analogy. [face_mischief]

    She's not even consciously thinking. In spite of the metaphor, she's the top of the local food-chain.

    </Ewok>"She's wise."

    I never thought I'd call Jaina "Yoda-like", but there ya go. Your 'fic impresses me like that. :D

  22. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    A new YK 'fic and nobody told me? :eek:

    "Save Him" ?

    Must mean Boba Fett. Save him from the terrible characterisation and writing that has been inflicted on him recently in profic [face_mischief]
  23. Kidan TFN EU Staff

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    wow, that was a great start YK!
  24. Solo_and_Fel Force Ghost

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    Great hook of a start, YodaKenobi!
  25. shahid_chestro Jedi Grand Master

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    Awesome first chapter! =D=
    loved the fact that she left her old life behind after killing Jacen. shows a much more humane reaction than what was shown in profic. i hope we see more of Jacen (that his ghost/wraith is guiding Jaina and showing that a sith lord retains power even in death)cant wait for the next chappie. please add me to your PM list.
    Update Soon.
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