Beyond Broken Promises **Dear Diary 2007 Challenge** Thanks for the nom!

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  1. Jade_Pilot Force Ghost

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    Dec 10, 2005
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    Title: Broken Promises
    Author: Jade Pilot
    Characters: OC, Luke and some of the usual.
    Genre: Drama/Angst, AU
    Summary: Written for the Dear Diary 2007 challenge. Tani Dahl (OC) journals her life and experiences on Tatooine with a certain farmboy.
    A/N: Thanks to WyoJedi for the artwork!

    **Thanks to everyone for voting Tani Dahl as Best OC 2008!


    [image=http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v248/Lyli/Tani_fic2.jpg]


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    Journal entry # 11,756:

    After so many years, I?ve decided that the best thing to do would be to make contact. I know?I?ve said this so many times in the past that even I don?t believe me anymore. But this time I mean it. I?m not just fantasizing about seeing him again, wondering how he?ll receive me?if he?ll even recognize me. This time I?m really going to go see him and tell him what I?ve longed to tell him for so many years.

    This doesn?t come without risks. He has a whole new life now, a wife and a Jedi Order to maintain. But some things were left unsaid and he has a right to hear the words denied him back on Tatooine?when we were both young and naïve. The question is?can my heart withstand the onslaught of emotions that seeing him again will cause?

    It doesn?t matter. Sometimes you just have to do the right thing no matter what the cost. I have been a coward for much too long and now?now I intend to remedy that. The truth will be told?and our lives will never be the same. I just pray that Luke will understand and forgive me. After all, I was his first wife.


    ?to be continued.




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  2. G__Anakin Jedi Master

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    ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!![face_devil]


    Looks cool! Do you mind giving me PMs when you update? Please![:D]
  3. ginchy Force Ghost

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    May 25, 2005
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    Ack!

    *peeks out through fingers*

    ;)

    What a start there, gal. :eek: Can't wait to see more! :D
  4. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    EEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!!!!!!!! HIS FIRST WIFE!!! :eek: :eek: :eek: :eek:

    The author deserves a thwacking for that. [face_laugh] No, maybe not. Apparently he's wised up and married the bestest lady i.e., Mara. [face_love] [face_love] [face_love]
    Please PM me with updates? :)
    I will enjoy this, I can't help it. [face_laugh]
    ;)
  5. Princess Cambria Force Ghost

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    It's a great start!=D=

    I know you would take the plunge.:D

    Looking forward to more of the first wife of the Grand Husband.:p
  6. brodiew Force Ghost

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    Oct 11, 2005
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    Wow, Jade! A shocker out of the gate! I like then idea of Luke having a wife on Tatooine. Wife? 8-} I really look forward to more.

    What is she going to do? What is here as yet unstated motivation? [face_worried]

    I haven't been hangin in Beyond lately, but I glad I stopped over or I would have missed this. As always, your lyrical narrative is captivating and easy to engage. I'll take a PM when you start dishing them out. :)

  7. MirandaFair Force Ghost

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    Jun 13, 2005
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    Whoa-o-o-o-ooooo!

    :eek:

    Stop the presses!

    *does a double-take*

    After all, I was his first wife.

    I love this already! You've hooked me, my friend. =D=

    Cannot wait for more. It'll be interesting to learn the answers to the mysteries. I'd love to be included in the PM list. Pretty please. [face_batting]
  8. Jedi Trace SouthEast RSA

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    Duuuude.......... This looks fascinating! Please add me to your PM list. :D
  9. divapilot Force Ghost

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    Nov 30, 2005
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    :cool: Oh, cool!

    A first wife!? Who even knew the landspeeder had a backseat? (And I've seen the real deal at the Boston Museum of Science.)

    This is one story I have to read. Please put me on your soon-to-be ginormous PM list, sister pilot!
  10. verybusy Jedi Grand Master

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    *gulp*

    ....and I had nearly missed this.... :eek:... I guess I have to read this as well, so can I have a PM too?[face_batting]

    cheers,

    VeryBusy
  11. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Incredible! :eek: I love this idea! [face_love]

    It doesn?t matter. Sometimes you just have to do the right thing no matter what the cost. I have been a coward for much too long and now?now I intend to remedy that. The truth will be told?and our lives will never be the same. I just pray that Luke will understand and forgive me. After all, I was his first wife.

    =D=

    Can I request a PM too?
  12. WyoJedi Jedi Youngling

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    PM, PM, PM, PM, PM!

    Wow! That was a shocker of an opening. I cannot wait to see what comes from this reunion. You have really opened up a world of possibilities with just a few words... Amazing job!

    Cheers,
    Wyo
  13. Jade_Pilot Force Ghost

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    Dec 10, 2005
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    A/N: Well I may just get the reputation as the only L/M shipper who keeps writing romantic Luke AUs with other women. ;)

    G Anakin: Surprised ya' didn't I? I've added you to the PM list. Thanks for reading.

    ginchy: Still speaking to me? Thanks for reading, girl!

    Jade eyes:ouch! ouch! ouch! Enough with the wacking! Hang in there...I promise an interesting ride. :)

    PrincessC: Okay...this is all your fault! Thanks for reading sis!

    brodiew: Thank you! Shocked ya' huh?

    Miranda Fair: HeeHee! Gotcha! Yes the mysteries will slowly unfold. Thanks for reading.

    JediTrace: Yes, duuuuuuude! It will surely be a killer ride, girlfriend. Thanks for reading. :)

    divapilot: A first wife!? Who even knew the landspeeder had a backseat? [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh] Funny stuff, sister pilot! But there's always Beggar's Canyon. Thanks for reading. :)

    verybusy: Thank you for reading! I've added you to the PM list.

    VaderLVR: Thanks Vadey! I heard you're doing 2 diaries???? Girl! Where do you get the energy! ;)

    WyoJedi: Shocked you didn't I? heeheehee!

  14. Jade_Pilot Force Ghost

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    Dec 10, 2005
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    <open new document>

    <save document: Journal entry #1: Tani Dahl>

    I wOn!


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  15. Princess Cambria Force Ghost

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  16. ginchy Force Ghost

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    hee, I'm smarter this time around and kept reading. ;)

    Great beginning, gal! :D
  17. WyoJedi Jedi Youngling

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    Nov 7, 2005
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    [face_laugh] =D= =D= :p

    Wonderful! I love all the technical difficulties she is having with her datapad! And the line about the Darklighters was a nice little add.

    Cheers,
    Wyo
  18. G__Anakin Jedi Master

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  19. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Jade Pilot, you're a hoot and a half!! I thought a blind folded chicken typed that!! [face_laugh] Hee!! My lands!! [face_laugh]
    Seriously, that data pad needs to be junked in the heap with eight track tape recorders. [face_laugh] The 2-minute wonders! [face_laugh]
  20. divapilot Force Ghost

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    Nov 30, 2005
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    So she's the first 16 year old to win the essay contest? She must have had a fantastic high school English teacher.:p

    Sister Pilot, I love the quirky way this is coming along! The techical difficulties are so appropriate. And the fact that it's a second hand datapad -- they are people who have so little in terms of material wealth.

    =D= =D=

    More more more
  21. MirandaFair Force Ghost

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    Jun 13, 2005
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    Darklighters...hmm. Interesting tidbit. [face_thinking]
    Must ponder this a little more. Another great update that leaves me with more questions. A great sign of an exciting plot, my friend!!!

    [:D]
  22. Jade_Pilot Force Ghost

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    Dec 10, 2005
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    A/N: Thanks for reading past the "stuff!"

    PrincessC: [face_praying] :) :D [:D]

    ginchy: You're always smart! Thank you!

    WyoJedi: "I love all the technical difficulties she is having with her datapad." Yeah....who does that remind you of???? Thanks, lil brother. :)

    G Anakin: Thanks! :)

    Jade eyes: A blind folded chicken did write that. Do you know how much it cost to rent it for the day????? Thanks! :)

    divapilot: Thanks, sister pilot! I think Tani's talent will all be 'Traced' back to a wonderful english teacher! ;)

    MirandaFair: Thanks, sweetie and Happy Birthday!
  23. brodiew Force Ghost

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    That was so totally :cool: and original, Jade. I know that took a little work, too. So she won a datapad from her school essay contest, but it needs repair? Now, there is a ringing endorsement of the Mos Eisley school system if I ever heard one. [face_laugh]

    Good job with this. I guess we have a lot of catching up to if we are going to see this confrontation with Luke.

    Keep me posted.
  24. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    Interesting Mara will have a fit. I can't wait to see that post.

    Could I get a PM when you update? @};-
  25. frankieskywalker Jedi Master

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