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Saga Brothers (vignette)

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  1. Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus

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    This one was inspired by one of Darth-Seldon's 'fics.


    Title: Brothers
    Author: DantanaSkywalker
    Timeframe: circa ANH
    Characters:
    Genre: vignette
    Keywords: OT,
    Summary: A short look into the relationship of two brothers.
    Author's Notes: I don't own either of these characters.


    It was a nice day for a swim.

    At least, that's what his brother said. Not that his brother was letting him come with, as much as he wanted to. He kept calling him a baby, and telling him to go home.

    The little boy was five years old; he'd just celebrated his birthday. . His brother was quite a bit older, all of ten years old. The older brother was annoyed at having to play with his brother, on their mother's orders.

    "He adores you," his mother had told him this morning. "I think it would be good for the two of you to play together. And he's got no one else to play with."

    Grudgingly, he'd let his little brother follow him outside, but he'd been trying to ditch him every since. It annoyed him that the "baby" could find him so well.

    A group of older boy approached. They were the boys that the older brother desperately wanted to make friends with, but he knew they'd make fun of him if he told them he had to play with his brother today.

    The little boy watched as his worshipped older brother sneered at him and ran off with the other boys. He watched as they stripped down to their trunks and dove into the water.

    He didn't want to be left alone. Padding to the edge of the dock, he let his little toes hang over and watched as the older boys splashed each other. One of them called out a challenge: to the buoy and back, first one back was the winner.

    His brother's dark head cut through the water. He felt a surge of pride; his brother was the best! He knew his brother would win!

    One of the other boys, the leader, was gaining on his brother. The little boy glowered, praying that his brother would win. If he won, maybe he'd be happy enough to let him play, too.

    It was close, so very close, but the little boy let out a happy shout when his brother got back to the starting point one whole length ahead! He jumped up and down, cheering.

    One of the other boys looked over, and jeered him. "Hey, look, it's the brat!"

    His little heart fell when his brother glared at him and turned away. He frowned and sat on the edge of the dock, his short legs nowhere near the water, and sighed. He plunked his elbows on his knees and rested his chin on his hands.

    He didn't understand why no one wanted to play with him. It wasn't like he was a girl or anything! He was five! He was old enough to play! And besides, Momma had ordered his brother to play with him.

    He didn't want to tattle, but he didn't want to play by himself . . . yet again.

    Decision made, he considered how to get into the water. He was too scared to jump off the dock, like his brother and the other boys had done. But he couldn't slide off the dock, either; he was too far away. Sometimes it was hard being small. Of course, there was the minor obstacle that he didn't really know how to swim, but he wasn't thinking about that. He just wanted to play with his brother!

    Finally, the little boy crawled to his feet, walked back up the dock, and went to the bank of the water, where the cool waves lapped at his toes. Puffing up his small chest, he strode bravely into the water.

    He discovered instantly that the water was a lot colder than it looked. And the bottom dropped out sharply. It wasn't anything like the shallow area where Daddy took him to swim.

    He floundered, splashing his little arms, until he remembered what his father had told him. He began paddling, working his way slowly towards the other boys. But it was a long way, and he couldn't swim very fast.

    He began to tire before he was halfway to them. They'd moved farther out now, and he started to think that maybe this wasn't such a good idea. He couldn't feel the bottom, and was suddenly afraid that maybe there was so/>
  2. EBrooklynW Jedi Youngling

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  3. Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus

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    Apr 7, 2002
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    EBrooklynW - Aww! Sho Sweet!

    Thanks. :) I just wanted to write something like this . . . and you know how I am about you-know-who. :D


    Dana
  4. SaberBlade Jedi Master

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    Sep 19, 2001
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    Aw, very sweet. I like Zeth... why'd they have to kill him off? He's a cool character to play around with!

    -Saber
  5. djcati Jedi Master

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    Mar 20, 2004
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    *makes mental note to click on people's sigs more often*

    Niiice...
    It's cute!
    And even though the fact that you're writing it is a dead giveaway, it took me a while to figure out who it was. *sigh*
  6. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    Loved it! You did a great job.
  7. Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus

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    Apr 7, 2002
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    SaberBlade - Aw, very sweet. I like Zeth... why'd they have to kill him off? He's a cool character to play around with!

    That's one of the reasons I'm writing WTTC. :D


    djcati -
    *makes mental note to click on people's sigs more often*


    I have it in my sig 'cause it doesn't qualify for the K/J index.

    Niiice...
    It's cute!


    Thanks. :)

    And even though the fact that you're writing it is a dead giveaway, it took me a while to figure out who it was. *sigh*

    Well, that was sort of the point. I figured that people would assume it was about Kyp, but I didn't want to give that away immediately.


    VaderLVR64 - Loved it! You did a great job.

    Thanks. :D


    Dana
  8. In_Luv_wit_kenobi Jedi Master

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    Dec 3, 2003
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    too cute. i guess the relationship between siblings never change eh. even in GFFA
  9. Connemara Jedi Knight

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    Nov 18, 2000
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    Awww...I agree. I keep wishing Zeth would come back, that would be soooo great. It sucks they killed him before we could even meet him. :(

    But anyway, excellant viggy! :)
  10. Darth-Seldon Jedi Grand Master

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    May 17, 2003
    star 6
    Wow, great story.

    I'm glad one of my stories
    such as "The Eyes of Kessel"
    could help you come up with this story.

    A great connection to the Jedi Academy Trilogy's Kyp and Zeth.

    Well done!
    -Seldon
  11. Ars_longa Jedi Youngling

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    Mar 26, 2004
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    That's great. There can't be too much of Kyp's background stories around. :) He's such a fashinating figure, why people so rarely write something about how he became the Kyp Durron we all know and love?

    Thanks for this little present, Dana.
  12. Amidala_Skywalker Manager Emeritus

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    Jul 4, 2001
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    Adorable, Dana :). Zeth and Kyp actually sounded like young boys. This is probably one of the first Kyp background stories I've read. It's such a sweet story that I'm sure I'll remember it.

    Amsie [face_love]
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