Before Contentment - Drabble - For the First Sentence Challenge, AU, Qui-Gon

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  1. Jinngerbread Jedi Master

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    Sep 2, 2007
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    Title: Contentment
    Author: Jinngerbread
    Characters: You'll just have to see.
    Author's Notes: This was written for the first sentence challenge. Enjoy!





    It was always messy cleaning up after a murder.

    The smells of ozone, the grisly corpse with lightsaber markings, the look of confusion, of horror, on the victim's face, but those were not his concern.

    His only concern was that justice had been served at last.

    He felt relieved, as if a weight had been lifted from his shoulders and now that this one was dead, he could sleep peacefully knowing that his former apprentice could no longer haunt his dreams.

    The betrayal had left him weakened and wounded, but no more.

    And Qui-Gon Jinn was at last at peace.
  2. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    The betrayal had left him weakened and wounded, but no more.

    And Qui-Gon Jinn was at last at peace.


    Loved it! =D=
  3. Gkilkenny Force Ghost

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    Mar 27, 2004
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    Very interesting first sentence, or rather the second. The look of confusion and horror on the victims face. If Qui-Gon is at peace because his former Apprentice can disturb his dreams no more.
    Why the look of confusion and horror? Mysterious[face_thinking]

    Or perhaps that person didn't expect to be beaten by Qui-Gon.o_O

    I liked it.=D=
  4. Ara-gon Jedi Knight

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    Dec 31, 2005
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    Lovely! Haunting description in such a spare form.

    (See, I made it!)

    Ara-Gon
  5. ardavenport Force Ghost

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    Dec 16, 2004
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    Oooh, very dark and mysterious. Peace is messy. [face_mischief]
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