Conversations and Thoughts: Updated 4/9 "My Wedding Day;" Collection now complete!

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  1. Darth_Lex Force Ghost

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    Great interpretation, as always. Anakin's incredulousness was great. [face_laugh] Perhaps the critics would have been less cruel to this scene had they understood that both characters knew they sounded like idiots but blubbering declarations were all they were capable of. ;)

    Anakin blinks several times and looks at me as though I am speaking a language he does not understand.
    That's a great description of the look on HC's face -- both here and on the balustrade after she breaks the first kiss.

    (You cannot live a lie when you are no longer living at all)
    This is great -- so poetic.

    If I have to kill every living being in this galaxy,
    Eek! :eek: Did you have to foreshadow quite that much? :p

    Another great post!!! :D
  2. geo3 Force Ghost

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    Whoohoo! I can't believe how you have nailed Anakin in this one. Every word rings true - I read it through twice! Padme's POV is harder to do, I admit, and you did it very well. But the Anakin one really sings.

    It makes me ponder the previous vignette again - the trip to Geonosis. Would Anakin have been this surpised after that conversation? Never mind. It's great. Must add it to the book by the TV....
  3. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    Darth_Lex As for the killing everyone line, I thought it was appropriate. Anakin would probably misguidedly kill anyone who stood between him and Padme after she confessed her love to him. Young Anakin is not very emotionally stable. ;)

    geo3 I've tried to keep Ani's surprise in mind while writing each of these viggies. I think that, in the back of his mind, he knew Padme loved him, but to actually hear her say it is what brought about the surprise. I think up until this point (after their fireside chat anyway) he was thinking that she saw him (or was trying to see him) as more of a friend or collegue. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. I tried to keep Padme's tone more formal and more mature, whereas Anakin's was more elated and giddy.
  4. tun_dot_com Jedi Knight

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    OMG OMG OMG!!! AWESOME POST! :D
  5. MissPadme Jedi Master

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    Very nicely done; I enjoyed seeing both perspectives.

    --MissPadme
  6. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    tun_dot_com I'm glad you enjoyed it!

    MissPadme Thanks!
  7. Dally Jedi Master

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    Another excellent post!!
  8. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    Hey guys, just wanted to let you know that I haven't abandoned you; I'm just experiencing a bit of writer's block right now. I'm working on a scene while Ani's recovering from his injuries, and I'm having trouble figuring out how exactly to approach it. But hopefully it will be done by this weekend at the latest. Really, I just have to do a proposal one and then the wedding vows, and this party will be over!
  9. Wook Jedi Master

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    Wonderful viggies, Stacy! I've thoroughly enjoyed every one of them. Your characterizations are dead-on. Looking forward to more...hope you kick Darth writer's block! ;)
  10. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    Welcome back, Wook! It's not that I'm blocked, necessarily, it's just that I haven't had enough time recently to sit down and think about what I want to say! But I am trying, and hopefully we'll be up and running again by this weekend.
  11. Wook Jedi Master

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    Thanks, glad to be back! I'm just getting over a writing slump myself...unfortunately I seem to get inspired to write when I'm at work! 8-}
  12. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    Wook That's usually how it goes!


    Well, lo and behold, it's another post. It's short, and sweet, literally. I hope it's enough for your appetites until we get to the good stuff.

    This scene takes place while Ani is recovering from his injuries (i.e., right after departure from Geonosis, where I imagined that they would be onboard a medical frigate or something). I totally ripped of the OT at the end, but that's OK. So here goes.

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    I Belong Beside You

    He looked so serene lying there on that small bed, though she knew he must be in a great deal of pain. He was attached to various tubes and wires, all of which served the purpose of helping him heal. His eyes were closed, his skin pale, his breathing shallow, but there was a strength radiating from him that had helped bring her comfort through these trying hours.


    Padmé sighed as she lightly stroked Anakin?s left hand. She had been at his bedside ever since he had been permitted to receive visitors; she had even refused to have her own injuries examined. Now was not the time to be worrying about herself, not when Anakin was fighting for his life.


    He had drifted in and out of consciousness en route to the medical frigate before finally sinking into a deep healing trance. When he was brought on board, he had been whisked away to an operating room, where his injuries were repaired. Afterward, he had received a course of bacta treatments, and then finally brought to this tiny, sterile room, where an overwrought Padmé had waited for him.


    Even in his unconscious state, the image of her had floated through his mind. She looked like an angel, bathed in white light, whispering gently to him, anchoring him to his very life. He had fought valiantly to return to her, and after several uncertain hours, the healers had proclaimed that the young Jedi was likely to make a full recovery, although he would require a prosthetic arm.


    ?Ani,? Padmé whispered as she brought his hand to her lips and kissed it gently. She began to stroke his forehead and hair, thanking the Force that she could be there with him. ?You?re going to be alright, love. You?re going to be alright.?


    She lay her head down on his chest, staring absently at the foot of the bed, as she felt the ever-so-subtle and delicious sensation of his lips on her forehead. She raised her head, her eyes shining with tears, as she saw his blue eyes half-opened, studying her as if they had to memorize her every feature.


    ?Anakin,? she said softly but jubilantly. ?Oh, Ani!?


    She threw her arms around his neck, then quickly cringed as she felt him wince in pain. ?I?m sorry,? she apologized.


    ?It?s OK,? he insisted hoarsely. His throat was quite dry, and he could scarcely speak above a whisper. ?There?s nobody I?d rather have cause me pain than you.? He flashed one of his signature half-smiles, as her heart fluttered.


    ?Are you alright?? she asked. ?I mean, are you comfortable, is there anything I can get for you?? She rose in an attempt to retrieve an extra pillow, but was quickly pulled back down.
    ?Just you,? he said with a mischievous smile still affixed to his lips, as he pulled her face toward his and kissed her hungrily. She did not resist, and quickly began to lose herself in their passions, until she heard a painful groan escape his throat.


    ?I?m sorry,? she repeated, her lips still pressed against his. She broke their kiss and gazed lovingly into his eyes as he stroked her disheveled brown mane.


    ?Don?t worry about it,? he insisted. ?I think a kiss from you is better than anything the healers can prescribe.?


    ?Anakin!? she exclaimed in feigned embarrassment. The smirk on his lips expanded to a wide smile, but when they tried to laugh, both of them were reprimanded by their weary bodies. Anakin was troubled by the pained expression on Padmé?s face.


    ?Are you alright?? he asked, concerned. He realized that, even if she hadn?t fully experienced the aft
  13. tun_dot_com Jedi Knight

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    I LOVE IT!!!! You're stories are the best!

    But there's one thing that bothers me. Why do all the men in Star Wars say "I know" in response to "I love you"? Can't they just say "I love you too"? I guess they don't know everything in the galaxy far, far, away. 8-}
  14. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    tun_dot_com Thank you! Well, in this case, Ani didn't want to be overheard by Obi-Wan, who was coming to see him. Don't worry, he'll tell her!
  15. geo3 Force Ghost

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    He had fought valiantly to return to her...

    Well, that about sums it up, doesn't it? A short but sweet post, perhaps, but full of imagery and insight.

    I loved the "I love you" -"I know". Not only is it vintage Star Wars, I love anything that breaks the expected mold. Knowing with certainty that someone loves you, and expressing that understanding, rather than just saying how you feel sets up a completely different level of communication between two people.

    I wouldn't change a thing!

  16. Darth_Lex Force Ghost

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    I like Padme here -- she's so concerned for him she hasn't treated her own wounds yet. Except she's forgotten how pissed he'll be that she hasn't! It's lose/lose for her. :p

    Great post! :D
  17. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    geo3 Yeah, I had to put "I love you," "I know" in there!

    Darth_Lex Thanks!
  18. MissPadme Jedi Master

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    Very sweet story. The beginning foreshadows unfortunately what will become of Anakin but Padmé won't be by his side then. But the rest of it really shows how much these two care for each other; I didn't even mind the OT ripoff. I think it fits.

    --MissPadme
  19. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    MissPadme Thank you. No, unfortunately, when he "needs" her the most, she won't be there. Sad thing is, I don't think it will be a result of her choice. :_|


    Here's the next post guys...THE PROPOSAL! It's rated PG-13 for some sexuality.

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    Forever Yours

    It had come as quite a shock to both Anakin and Padmé that he had been ordered to return with her to Naboo. Both of them were certain that, given her display of affection to him in the Geonosian hangar and the fact that she had remained steadfastly by his side on the medical frigate, they would not be aloud within several kilometers of one another once they returned to Coruscant. But the directive had come from the Supreme Chancellor himself that Anakin was to escort the Senator home, and the Jedi Order had no choice but to allow it.


    The journey from Coruscant to Naboo was relatively short; eighteen standard hours to be exact. However, once the ship had jumped to hyper space and the automatic pilot had been activated, Anakin practically ran to Padmé?s state room, where he was greeted with an almost animalistic embrace. The chaste kisses the two of them had shared up until this point were quickly replaced by fervent passion, with clothing being peeled from their bodies and hands and lips roaming over previously untouched surfaces.


    Afterward, Anakin lay there on the comfortable bed, the sheets tangled around his long legs, staring dazedly at the ceiling as if he could not believe what had just happened, as Padmé rested her head on his rapidly rising and falling chest. She had never felt like this before, so complete. But contentment soon faded into confusion.


    ?Ani?? she entreated him as he absently stroked her tousled hair.


    ?Hmm?? he replied


    ?Wh-what do we do now??


    He rolled to his side and propped himself up on his elbow. ?That wasn?t enough for you?? he asked seductively.


    She gently kissed his forehead. ?It was wonderful,? she sighed, ?but that?s not what I meant.?


    ?What did you mean, then?? he asked as he took her left hand in his and began to lightly kiss her fingertips. She shuddered in delight.


    ?How-how are we supposed to be together Anakin? What are we supposed to do? This time together won?t last forever, sadly, and eventually you will have to return to the Jedi and?.?


    She was interrupted when he captured her mouth for a deep kiss. He rolled himself over on top of her as he moved his mouth from her lips to her neck, and then lower. She felt desire welling in her as she read his intentions perfectly, but she reluctantly pushed him away.


    ?Ani, this is serious. We cannot just make the universe disappear by making love,? she said reasonably.


    ?Why not?? he said with a muffled voice as he rested his head on her chest. ?It works for me.?


    ?Well, I wish it could be that way, but it isn?t, Ani.? She placed her hands on both sides of his head, and raised his face to look in his eyes. ?This?.relationship, it?s??


    ?It?s a dream come true,? he said. ?This is all I?ve ever wanted, Padmé. You should know that. I?I love you. I?ve loved you for half of my life!? He bent his head and stole another kiss, but was interrupted by a tug on his hair.


    ?I love you too, Ani. But this isn?t all you?ve ever wanted. You also want to be a Jedi. And I fear you cannot have both, and I?I don?t want to stand between you and your destiny, Anakin.?


    He looked away from her with a twinge of despair crossing his countenance. ?I told you, we could keep it a secret,? he finally said as he rolled over on his back and folded his hands across his bare chest.


    ?Do you honestly believe that, Ani? What would that entail, us only being able to see one another with careful planning and manipulation? I told you, we couldn?t keep this a secret even if we wanted to,? she said as she rolled over on to her stomach and propped her head up in her hands. She frustratedly ran her fingers through her hair.
  20. tun_dot_com Jedi Knight

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  21. Lady__Skywalker Jedi Knight

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    AWWWWWW! That was so sweet and entertaining. I loved that one and Padme's fighting mind and a small Moulin Rouge reference, paraphrased. That was excellent!
  22. qingauk Jedi Master

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    OH MY.. THAT MELTED ME FOR SURE.. HOW ABSOLUTELY LOVELY. I COULD PICTURE IT ALL WITH HC/NP IN MY MIND. THIS WAS JUST SO ROMANTIC THAT I FEEL ALL BUBBLY INSIDE AFTER READING IT ..

    YOU DID A++ WORK ON THIS. AS A TEACHER, I SEE VERY FEW A++!!
  23. MissPadme Jedi Master

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    Siiiighhh...who could say no to Ani under THOSE circumstances? I also caught the "Moulin Rouge" reference ;).

    --MissPadme
  24. stacysatrip Jedi Master

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    tun_dot_com Yes, mush is good!

    Lady_Skywalker Thank you, and welcome back! Yes, I had to stick the MR reference in there; after all, it's true isn't it, especially in Padme's case: The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return!

    qingauk A++, huh? Do I get a gold star? Thank you, and I'm glad you liked it.

    MissPadme Well, I couldn't have! I don't know how Padme did it for so long.


    Well guys, we have one more post to go before our tale is told...the wedding day! But I am strongly considering taking all of these viggies and adapting them into a full-blown AotC Ani/Padme romance story called "The AotC you Didn't see." (That's a working title or a sub-title if you will). I hope you guys will check it out, and I'll be sure to PM you when I start it.
  25. tun_dot_com Jedi Knight

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    Awww only one more? I really hope you do write that full story. :D
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