Before Coruscant's Finest. Challenge Response (M*A*S*H Quotation Roulette Challenge) Obi and Qui

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  1. GuNgAnFaN3090 Jedi Grand Master

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    Oct 16, 2008
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    Title: Coruscant's Finest
    Author: GuNgAnFaN3090
    Timeframe: Obi-Wan is 15
    Characters: Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OC?s
    Notes: For the M*A*S*H Quotation Roulette Challenge.
    Disclaimer: Nothing Belongs to me

    My Quote?
    Potter: Listen, it's too big a world to be in competition with everybody. The only person I'm out to beat is who I am right now. And in your case that is tough enough.


    ?Are you sure this is a good idea master? Going down to lower Coruscant. It?s dangerous down there.? Fifteen year old Obi-Wan Kenobi walked cautiously with his mentor and master, Qui-Gon Jinn. They stepped from rooftop to rooftop, taking every turbo lift they came across into the lower abyss.

    ?Don?t be afraid Obi-Wan, it?s a simple mission.? Qui-Gon?s features were lighthearted and friendly. The Jedi master had waved to every being they passed on their way. That was Qui-Gon.

    ?It?s not that master?? Obi-Wan?s mind seemed distant.

    ?What my Padawan?? Qui-Gon?s face lost it?s smile for the first time that day. ?Are you okay?? Obi-Wan recovered after a few moments.

    ?Yes master, something tells me this won?t be as easy as you expect.? Qui-Gon started to chuckle. So much, that Obi-Wan had to ask. ?What master??

    ?Oh Obi-Wan, in all my years I?ve learned to expect the unexpected.? The two Jedi strode through Coruscant, onto their destination and mission.

    * * *

    The underworld of the giant city planet was not pleasant at all. Young Obi-Wan Kenobi walked slowly, turning around every few steps to see who or what might be lurking. Qui-Gon had gone off on his own. He said the mission would be done quicker if they split up.

    I don?t care about the mission anymore, thought Obi-Wan, I want to go back to the temple and study! The young Padawan kept his pace. Until he heard a noise.

    ?Hello?? Asked Obi , looking around. ?W-who?s there??

    Rattle.

    Obi-Wan took another step.

    Shake.

    And another.

    Crash.

    The shadows became solid figures with glowing red eyes. Obi-Wan Kenobi yelled for his missing master?

    * * *

    Qui-Gon Jinn finished his mission quickly and productively. The Jedi Knight knew it would be easy. Qui-Gon headed back to where he left Obi-Wan, with swift movements, when he heard the yell. It was both physical and mental, but very plain and simple.

    ?QUI-GON!?

    The master rushed off towards the noise and his learner?s force presence.

    It took only moments before Qui-Gon Jinn found himself right next to Obi-Wan, but the master couldn?t see him. He felt more than one presence and immediately took light saber in hand.

    ?Does this belong to you?? Qui-Gon spun around and was face to face with some odd alien male. The alien held Obi-Wan by the back of his tunic neck at arms length.

    ?Pardon?? asked Qui-Gon, devising a plan. He couldn?t very well go swinging his light saber. At that thought, more aliens of the same unknown race appeared from the shadows. Qui-Gon counted nine, all surrounding him. Their red eyes stabbing at his soul.

    ?I said,? started the alien again, ?does this belong to you?? The alien was ready for a fight.

    ?I don't see how sir, I am a Jedi. Jedi are not allowed possessions.? Qui-Gon answered quickly.

    ?You want to fight, punk?? The alien threw Obi to Qui-Gon who caught him with no trouble at all. Then the alien pulled a Vibro-blade. ?Let?s go.? Qui-Gon?s face became more serious.

    ?Listen, it's too big a world to be in competition with everybody. The only person I'm out to beat is who I am right now. And in your case that is tough enough.? Qui-Gon waited for his words to sink in. The alien didn?t understand that the fight was over. He moved towards the Jedi.

    With one swift movement, a sizzle of green came and went. The alien man was no more. His friends covered their eyes at the appearance of the lightsaber beam. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Qui-Gon Jinn ran for their Jedi lives. Back to the temple. Back home.


    ---The---End---
  2. earlybird-obi-wan Force Ghost

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    Aug 21, 2006
    star 6
    Loved your little fic with Obi and Qui and the banter between them.

    Great use of the quote.=D==D==D=
  3. MiralukaJedi Jedi Master

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    May 15, 2008
    star 4
    Very nicely done. Great banter and great use of the quote.
  4. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    Sep 16, 2005
    star 5
    If Qui-Gon won't claim, Obi - I will! Yes, he's mine, mine, all mine.
  5. GuNgAnFaN3090 Jedi Grand Master

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    earlybird-obi-wan - Thank you, glad you liked it. :)

    MiralukaJedi - Thank you, I love Qui/Obi banter. :)

    Valairy_Scot - Sorry, I don't think Qui-gon would really give Obi up. :( Thanks for reading :)
  6. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Fine use of the quote. =D= I followed that very well... your descriptions were very concise. Your Qui-Gon was perfect *melts!* ;)
  7. GuNgAnFaN3090 Jedi Grand Master

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    Oct 16, 2008
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    Jade_eyes - Aww, thanks. [face_blush] I try and get my characters close. :) Thanks for reading.
  8. KELIA Manager Emeritus

    Member Since:
    Jul 26, 2005
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    ?You want to fight, punk??

    Never a good question to ask a fully trained Jedi Master :p

    On the other hand, thank the Force Qui-Gon got there in time!

    Great response to the challenge

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  9. GuNgAnFaN3090 Jedi Grand Master

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    Oct 16, 2008
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    KELIA - Not something I would ask a Jedi either. Not even a Padawan! :p Thanks for reading! :)
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