Cry If You Want To

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  1. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    I'll post in 2 min. :)
    This is a JA fic I wrote last night. The plot bunny hit, and I got nothing else done until
    this was finished.
  2. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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  3. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Title: Cry If You Want To
    Author: Tenel'Ka
    Rating: PG
    Archive: my Star Wars page, and if any of you want it, be me guest, just send
    me and E-mail first so I can check out your site! :)
    Disclaimer: Look, I don't make any money off this George, so please don't sue
    me for loving your work. That wouldn't make much sense would it?
    Note: //=thoughts. *= Talking through their bond.

    **********
    Cry if you want to -Holly Cole-
    (The verses not all there)

    Cry if you want to
    I won't tell you not to
    I won't try to cheer you up
    I'll just be here if you want me
    *
    Don't ever apologize
    Venting your pain
    It's something to me
    You don't need to explain
    I don't need to know why
    I don't think it's insane
    You can cry if you want to
    *
    You can stare at the ceiling
    And tear at your hair
    Swallow your feelings
    And stagger and swear
    You can show things
    And throw things
    And I wouldn't care
    *
    Cry if you want to
    I won't tell you not to
    I won't try to cheer you up
    I'll just be here if you
    Want me to be near you.

    **********
    After a long day of classes, seventeen year old Obi-Wan Kenobi was dead
    tired. As soon as he walked in the door to the quarters he shared with Qui-Gon
    Jinn, he went straight to his room, and flopped down on his bed. It was getting
    late, and his bed felt so soft. His arm was ready to fall off after taking notes on
    his data pad all day. It was a matter of seconds before he fell asleep. The busy
    day had taken its toll on him.

    //What's that? // Obi-Wan thought as he awoke. It was dark out, but he had
    heard something. Getting off his bed, he went out to the common room. He went
    to the entrance and pulled off his boots which he had fallen asleep in., placing
    them by the door. Then he started off; searching for the source of the noise
    that woke him.

    After looking into his Master's room and noticing the bed was empty, he
    reached out with the Force to locate his master, but was met with resistance.
    //Why would Master Qui-Gon shield himself? // He wondered, and headed for the
    balcony.

    On the balcony, Qui-Gon Jinn was sitting in a chair, looking at the city that
    never rests. Obi-Wan noticed Qui-Gon's face looked drawn, as if in deep though,
    and a little...sad?

    "Master?" Obi-Wan asked, revealing his presence.

    Qui-Gon gave a start, clearly he had not noticed Obi-Wan's approach. Then
    tried to regain his Jedi composure. "Yes, Obi-Wan?"

    "I, uh, just wanted to make sure everything was alright." Obi-Wan replied.

    "Why wouldn't everything be alright?" his master questioned him.

    "You just, uh, kind of look preoccupied." Obi-Wan answered. "Is something
    wrong?"

    Qui-Gon seemed to study him for several minutes before answering him. "I
    recieved a message from Master Yoda." When he hesitated, Obi-Wan nodded,
    encouraging him to go on. "It seems Master Tahl has been killed." He explained,
    casting his eyes towards the city once again.

    Obi-Wan stood still, in shock. //Master Tahl is dead?!// The thought seemed
    impossible to believe. "How?" was all he could stutter out.

    His master sighed, but never looked back towards him. "She was killed on a
    mission. It was supposed to be a simple mission, but terrorists planted a bomb
    in the conference room. Thirty two people were killed."

    Obi-Wan was speechless. His master and him had seen Tahl off to her shuttle.
    Despite the fact she was blind, she was determined to do some of the simple
    missions, such as getting two tribes to sign a peace treaty. She seemed so
    happy that day...

    "What now?" The words cut through Obi-Wan's thoughts.

    "Pardon?"

    "What now? What do I do? Tahl was such a good friend. Such a good friend..."
    his master trailed off.

    Obi-Wan had never seen his master like this. He seemed so vulnerable. So
    instead of answering questions that were impossible to answer, he stepped further
    out on the balcony, and gently laid a hand on his master's shoulder. The simple
    gesture seeme
  4. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    That was beautiful. I liked it alot.
  5. JediMellina Jedi Knight

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    I agree, that was beautiful!
  6. darth_morgana Jedi Master

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    That was written from the heart, even a Sith can see that!
  7. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    WOW! My computer froze, so I restarted it, and came back and there were
    already replies! Thanks A LOT you guys! Glad to hear you liked it. I finished writing
    it at about 1:30am, so you know. I wasn't sure if it would be as good as it seemed
    last night. :D
  8. Anakin's Angel Jedi Master

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    It is! It is! That was lovely, Tenel'Ka!! I'm really liking these COMPLETED JA fics that have sprouted up! This one was just awesome!

    aa :D
  9. Rosemary Jedi Knight

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  10. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    *bows* Thank you, one and all. :D
    Anyone have a favorite part?
    or a comment longer than 5 words, even though I welcome any comments you write! ;)
  11. Eryce Jedi Knight

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    Beee-Yoooouuu-Teeee-FooooLlll...

    Yes.. that's all I can say.. beautifuL..
  12. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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  13. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    That was beautiful Tenel'ka.

    Qui-Gon trying to keep his sorrow inside and Obi-Wan's quiet persistance to be there for him was incredibly heart-warming.
  14. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    UP! Try to boost my ego!

    Go ahead... Make my day. -The Good The Bad And The Ugly-
  15. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    :( No one wants to make my day. :(
  16. Bastet Jedi Master

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    You killed Tahl! Noooooo! Okay, with that aside, that was beautiful!! Qui-Gon should be very proud of his padawan for being so caring and understanding. And the ending was soo sweet! Aaawwwww...... :)
    I hope you get hit with many more plot bunnies, because your stories are excellent! Which reminds me, don't forget your other one, "Not so pathetic lifeform," please!
  17. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

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    Beautiful story Tenel'ka. I am happy I found it!
  18. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Thanks Bastet and Kelly! :D

    Bastet: Don't worry I havn't forgotten about my other story, but I'm trying to finish writing the story before posting more. That way I can post regularily. :) If you could up it every now and then, I will be able to find it when I get more done. Or do you think I should re-post the story when I'm done writing?

    You know, I myself thought it was horrible to kill Tahl, but I knew it would make an interesting story because Qui-Gon and her were so close. So I did what I must. :p

    Anyone else care to comment?
  19. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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  20. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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  21. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Nobody else want to read this??? :(
  22. Rosemary Jedi Knight

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    Cry If You Want To: A beautiful story
    I think would be more appropriate now ;)
  23. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Thanks, but what do you mean?
    What more appropriate now?

    Up.
  24. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    BOP!!!
    just bringing this back up, incase anyone else wants to read it. :)
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