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~~Crystal Shards of the Force, Part One~~

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by JFettG, Jul 24, 2002.

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  1. JFettG

    JFettG Jedi Master star 4

    Jun 12, 2002
    This is my first post in the Fan Fic forum I would like feedback to know what you think.

    (DISCLAIMER):The SW Characters in this story are Lucasfilm copyrighted and they aren't my creation though some are.
    Main Character:Blaine Joset

    Other Characters:Han Solo
    Luke Skywalker

    Evil Characters:
    Darth Destrien(Sith Master)
    Boba Fett(Bounty Hunter)
    IG-88(Bounty Hunter)
    Force Sensitive Troopers

    All the other Characters aren't worth saying they probably only talk once or twice and don't have a big role.

    So enjoy it as this is only part of the first chapter.
    Chapter 1

    The cool Coruscant air made it's way through the slightly opened balcony door.The air crisp yet cool filled the large room containing a tall and sleek man standing in front of a triangular shaped picture.The man stroked his chin and grinned in amazement.The man was tall,dark hair with a clean cut,muscular build,and wore a Grey shirt and Black Pants.The man then left the masterpiece of art and unholstered his gun.He stroked the safety button and turned it on.He stared blankly at the gun as if something was wrong.Then a banging was heard from his door and he jerked his head to the right and looking at the door suspicious.

    "Sir open the door now or we will be forced to bring it down!"A loud yet muffled voice yelled from the other side of the door.

    The man in the room then turned the safety on his gun off and grabbed a small velvet bag and put it in his pocket.The man then aimed the gun at the door and pushed a button on his desk as the door fell down.He stroked the trigger until he had a clear shot and fired he hit one of the men in the heart and another one between the eyes.He then opened the balcony door and shot once more striking the one of the men in the arm.He then jumped over the railing of the balcony and landed on a floating board and it glided away from the balcony with the man on it.
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    JFettG Jedi Master star 4

    Jun 12, 2002
    The board glided through the traffic as the man kept his balance as he jerked his head to the left and saw two black Speeders speeding after him with two guys in each speeder.He shot his gun and hit one man in the passenger seat and he fell out of the speeder yelling in pain and fear.He holstered his gun and then tilted the board to dodge a sign which clipped his leg.He grabbed his leg in pain and then balanced himself out again and then went through one of the service tunnels and jumped on an Imperial Speeder which was right next to him.He threw out the Imperial Trooper who was sitiing in the driver seat.He grabbed the controls and punched in a few buttons wand when he came out of the tunnel he went straight down and and hovered beneath a garbage hauler.
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    JFettG Jedi Master star 4

    Jun 12, 2002
    No feedback so far?
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