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  1. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    Title: Dark Reflection in a Shattered Mirror
    Author: KrystalBlaze
    Rating: PG-13
    Genre: Drama/Angst
    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi, Xanatos Lyrisis, Qui-Gon Jinn, Sifo-Dyas, OC's
    Disclaimer: All characters except those created by myself belong to Lucas. *bows* Xanatos belongs to Dave Wolverton, although I made up his name.

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    Summary: Banished to a forsaken planet for a crime he did not commit, Obi-Wan Kenobi must struggle to find a way home, and deal with new enemies as well as old. For on this planet with him are two people he never expected to meet: Xanatos Lyrisis, Qui-Gon's former Dark apprentice, and a mysterious Jedi Master named Sifo-Dyas.

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    Thanks: Jane Jinn, who allowed me to take this plot bunny and run with it.

    Notes: I'll be updating this once every week or so, depending on when I can get on and such. I have two more posts written so far, and after that I'm winging it.

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    And now... here is the prolouge of my story.



     
  2. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    Dark Reflection in a Shattered Mirror


    Prologue

    When the prisoner was led through the door at the far end of the High Royal courtroom, he was not dressed in the clothes those frequent in the courtroom were accustomed to seeing. Rather than donning the normal gray prisoner garb, the man was dressed completely in black. His pants, his shirt, his cloak, and his boots- they were all black. Even his hair was black, and his eyes, though midnight blue, appeared black in contrast to his shock white skin. The only thing in contrast with the bleak picture the prisoner presented was the cobalt silver collar around his neck.

    The talking had died once he entered the room, and they did not make a sound as the guards escorted the prisoner past the High Council to sit at the oak table.

    The courtroom was not packed; rather it was bare and empty. Besides the prisoner, only the ten High Council members, two of the guards, and a handful of law students were present. The masses were not allowed in when a prisoner of such high crimes was presented before the court. And even if they had been allowed, they would have known the outcome before they crossed the threshold: this man would not be leaving.

    The prisoner sat stonily, staring at the High Council with no emotion in his eyes. They stared back at him, unflinching. His crimes were the worst a being could commit. He would pay dearly for what he had done to them to their world. He had unsettled the balance of everything.

    ?Prisoner,? one of the Council members said, standing. ?The crimes have been brought before you already, and you did not deny them.?

    ?Of course I did not deny them,? the prisoner replied, his voice such a low purr they had to strain to hear the words. ?I would not deny something I did not know was a crime.?

    The Council member, a woman, sneered. ?You were told the rules of our world before you stepped foot on it. All registered transports have been instructed to tell you the rules. You should not even have come knowing what you are.?

    The prisoner said nothing.

    ?The High Council of Yanari has determined your fate. You will be sentenced to ex-death. We do not believe in the death penalty.?

    The prisoner raised an eyebrow. ?I?m afraid I don?t know what ex-death is, Councilor.?

    She smiled again. ?Ex-death is not death. You do not need to know anymore. Rest assured, though, you will not be killed. We do not believe in such a thing.?

    The prisoner stood, and immediately the two guards rushed over to him. ?You will tell me my punishment, Councilor. You have no right to not tell me. I have every right to know what awaits me once I leave this room.?

    The Councilor stared at the young man, unnerved by the way his voice had remained calm during the entire duration of his sentence. The others before him had put up fights to shake the fires of Denatra. She looked back at her fellow council members, who were glaring at the young man.

    ?Ex-death,? she said, ?is not death. You will be taken to Finistra, a world of criminals like yourself. There you will stay for the rest of your life.?

    Nothing changed in the man?s demeanor. ?You?re telling me, Councilor, I am being banished from your world for a crime I did not commit??

    Her eyes hardened. ?Oh, no, sir. We know you committed crime. Otherwise, we would not send you there. That is all. You will be given your weapon and nothing more. We are a fair people. You brought the sword with you when you came, and it is not ours to take. Be warned, prisoner, there are guards there. Be warned that you will not be able to contact any person. Finistra is a place well out of the way and protected by things you will not know of. No one will find you there.?

    The only thing about his demeanor that changed was the eyes. They flashed in an anger so intense all the High Council members shivered. The woman let the moment pass, gaining back her voice and struggling not to look into the man?s eyes and see that hatred that clearly shone. She took a breath.

    ?The High Council of Yanari are
     
  3. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Very good start! I can't wait for more!
     
  4. Opal

    Opal Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Count me in!! :D
     
  5. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Ditto for me! Great beginning! Woo-hoo another Xani story!
     
  6. Shaindl

    Shaindl Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I truly liked your Councilor - there were so many paradoxes there - we're a fair people, you'll never be seen again, here's your weapon, we're sentencing you to ex-death, etc. Great job.

    I'm glad someone took Jane's bunny. I'm looking forward to more, Krystal!

    Shaindl
     
  7. Indra

    Indra Jedi Master star 3

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    Sounds very promising. I'll be following it. Please write more. :)
     
  8. The_Hutt

    The_Hutt Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Ooh, this sounds like an interesting thread. I wonder if Xanatos actually committed the crime...is Xanatos actually of the dark side? Things are going to be interesting when Obi-Wan shows up! A promising plot...and thanks Jane for the PB!
     
  9. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    VaderLV- I must say, you're flattering me to the point of I can't stand it. ;) Thank you very much for the nice comment, and I love the vignettes you're turning out, btw. Good stuff.

    Opal- *counts in* Glad you're sticking in for the ride.

    Kynstar- You were a later reader into "Dream", and I'm glad to see you on this one. Your comments, as always, make me feel better about myself. ;) I'm glad you're liking the Xani plug. He will, of course, be very important later on. I'm interested in having him as a main character in this fic, as I've never written him very largely before. The only story I've ever had him in was a terrible thing I will never post here, so hopefully I won't slaughter his character. :p

    Shaindl- :eek: I'm honored you're here, and may I say I'm a huge fan of yours? :D *coughs* Anyhow... the Councilor already is becoming one of my favorite characters. ;) I've always wanted to write someone like her, and she's going to become slightly important later on. *hinthint* Thank you for your comments. Jane's bunny was just too good to be true, and I'm loving writing it at the moment. It's so fun to work with. Thank you again, and can I ask when we're going to get the next update on "Dark Side of the Road"[/b]? Lovely fic, you have there. :)

    Indra- I'm glad to have assurance of your readership on this fic. :p Glad you enjoyed the first part, and I hope you stay aboard. :)

    The_Hutt- Very happy you think the thread is interesting. Another Xanatos follower. :p The crime is a funny thing... if you can actually call it a crime... Wasn't the plot bunny brilliant? Jane needs to be honored in shrines beyond recognition in halls far, far away... ;) Thank you for reading! I hope you're going to stay on board for the duration of the fic. :)

    And btw... I love Aqua Teen Hunger Force! It's such a guilty pleasure. I always come off feeling dumber for it, but it's so stupidly funny! Go Shake, forever.

    And with the updates, I'm not sure what day will come the next one. Probably next Saturday or Sunday. I'm posting the first part of part one in hopes to keep you statisfied for the week. :)

    -Krystal
     
  10. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    Part One


    The chow hall, as usual, was filled with the noisy din of students and Knights alike. Obi-Wan picked up his tray at the end of the food line and moved through it, scanning the hall for any sign of friends. He would have liked to eat with Master Qui-Gon, but he was currently being briefed by the Council for? something. Qui-Gon did not know what. It had to be important, though: the Council usually did not meet with anyone around the evening meal. Obi-Wan hoped they weren?t sending them on another mission; they?d just gotten back from one two weeks ago.

    Obi-Wan collected his food after thanking the cook graciously, and set about trying to find a place to sit. He had heard Bant and Reeft were in the Temple, but he wasn?t sure. He was about to sit down next to Siri Tachi when he saw Bant jumping up and down, waving to him. He smiled and went over, hugging her before he sat down. Reeft and Garen smiled up at him.

    ?So, hey,? Garen said as Obi-Wan passed Reeft his bread roll before he could be asked. ?What are you doing back here??

    Obi-Wan smiled. ?I could ask the same thing of you. Unlike you, Mr. Hotshot, I?m usually here once a month.?

    ?Oh, be quiet,? Garen said. ?I?m here more than you are, and you know it.?

    ?You are not!? Obi-Wan replied. ?You?re here for months at a time, and then you have a big mission that takes months. I manage to get in here every three weeks or so, so we even out.? He purposefully turned to Bant. ?And how are you??

    ?Brilliant, as usual,? she said dryly. ?Unfortunately, I?ll be here for two months. Master Fitso has been taken out of commission for his two broken legs.? She shrugged off their words of sympathy. ?I?m hoping the Council will send me on some form of mission while he recovers. I can?t stand being here for two months.?

    Ever since the death of her first master years ago, Bant had become more restless and aggressive. Although she would always be the same Bant Eerin, something about her demeanor had changed. She was more grown-up, more able to harmful situations. At first, Obi-Wan had been worried about her, but he had come to understand it was her way of coping with her grief, and he had accepted it.

    ?Hopefully I?ll be staying a while,? Reeft said. ?I?m getting tired of this running around.?

    Garen laughed. ?But it?s an adventure, Reeft! It?s fun.?

    ?Oh, yes, it?s fun,? Reeft said, taking Garen?s fruit. ?But it?s also fun to come home.?

    Bant smirked. ?To have fun, a Jedi must not.?

    ?Quote Master Yoda in such a way, you should not,? Obi-Wan said, picking up his own fruit and taking a bite. ?Disrespectful, it is.?

    ?Although funny, I find it,? Garen continued, surrendering his tray to Reeft. ?Honestly, Reeft, how can you eat two meals and still be as slim as a twig? I don?t understand it.?

    At that, Reeft only smiled and continued to eat.

    There was silence as Garen watched his three friends eat. He grinned. ?You, on the other hand, Obi-Wan, seem to have grown. I believe you need a haircut.? He patted the lightsaber on his belt. ?May I be of some assistance??

    ?Be quiet,? Obi-Wan informed him. He looked at Bant. ?A solo mission? Isn?t that usually reserved for those as Senior Level Padawans??

    She nodded. ?Yes, it is. Although it wouldn?t be a solo mission, not really, maybe more a test mission?? Her face fell as she fully realized what she was saying. ?But what else can I do while my Master heals? I?m restless, Obi-Wan. There are so many things I can do while he recovers.? Uncertainty came to her face. ?I don?t think I?m ready, though. I mean? I?m so used to have my Master with me on missions. It will be? hard without him, I guess.?

    ?Agreed,? Garen said. He looked at Obi-Wan in interest. ?Obi-Wan, you?re turning twenty-three in a week, aren?t you??

    ?Don?t remind me,? Obi-Wan said, shuddering. ?And don?t try another surprise party, either. I couldn?t go undress in my ?fresher for a week after it.?

    ?Oh, come on, it was fun!? Reeft said.

    ?My point,? Garen said. ?Is that you?re going to be a Senior Leve
     
  11. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Uh oh! Do I hear *solo mission* coming up? ;) Great work! I'm glad ya sticking kind'a with the storyline and the characters' personalities. I am also amazed at how Reft stayed so skinny eating so much!! hehehe Also Bant being Master Fisto's Padawan was good. Her being more aggressive after Tahl's death; yep can definitely picture that! Now Master Fisto's 2 broken legs? How in the blazes did he manage that? Or should I even ask? ;) hehehe Great work!! Always enjoy reading your fics!
    Can't wait for the next update!!! :D
     
  12. Opal

    Opal Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Nice interaction between Obi and his friends. Your depiction of Reeft was especially amusing. More soon, I hope. :)


    *looks up and sees Kynstar* See, I told you we read all the same stories! :p
     
  13. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Grand Master star 6

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    Nicely done. I loved the interactions among the friends and the way you've woven Obi-Wan's anxieties into the story line.

    I look forward to the next update!
     
  14. jeday

    jeday Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Oh no, the news seems to be bad, very bad. :(
    Looking forward to more!
     
  15. Shaindl

    Shaindl Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    You're too nice. :) Thank you so much! You can ask me about Dark Side, but I can't tell you when there will be an update. I have to finish a story promised to someone as a prize in a challenge (which will hopefully be up soon) and then I can get on with Dark Side. I hope not too long.

    Well, that ending was ominous, wasn't it? I like how you explored the different perspectives and behaviours of the Padawans. Bant was especially intriguing. I loved how they all knew each other so well - Garen handing his roll over to Reeft, Bant knowing what Obi-Wan was thinking. Very realistic - just like a real group of friends.

    And you brought Garen into it, so how can I not be happy? :p

    More soon?

    Shaindl
     
  16. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    *Waves* at Opal Yep looks like we stick together on these stories, eh? hehehe :D
     
  17. Indra

    Indra Jedi Master star 3

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    Sounds even more interesting now. :D I wonder what has Qui so troubled? Wouldn't he be more proud if this was about a solo mission?

    I like the interaction between Obi and his friends and I love your Reeft. :)

    Hope you'll write more soon!
     
  18. The_Hutt

    The_Hutt Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Hmmm...I like the age that Obi-Wan and his friends are in this fic...not the young padawans they once were, but not yet graduated in knighthood. I can understand their apprehension for going on solo missions. I think the turn Bant has taken in this thread to be intrigueing...it's odd to think of her as a more aggresssive person, and so much older than I am used to seeing her. But I like the different turns! Anyways, great chap, and keep it up!
     
  19. Opal

    Opal Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Just a little bump to encourage a postie. :D
     
  20. Xeana

    Xeana Jedi Youngling star 2

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  21. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    Kynstar- I [face_love] long reviews, and so glad to see you're liking the characters. My biggest problem with that last part was finding definite characters for Garen, Reeft, and Bant, especially since I have never read a fic where Reeft is featured even remotely. I'm building his character from the ground up, and I'm LOVING it for some reason or another. As for Fisto's legs, I'm sure you don't want to know. :p Thanks for the review. :)

    Opal- Woot. Glad you're liking Reeft. :) Thanks for the up. :)

    Diane- Nicely done. I loved the interactions among the friends and the way you've woven Obi-Wan's anxieties into the story line. Thank you very much!

    jeday- Bad news? Bad news? Well, when does good news make an exciting story? :p

    Shaindl- thank you for the news on Dark Side. I can only hope you return to it in due time so I won't have to keep imagining the ending. ;) Very realistic - just like a real group of friends.- I'm glad you think it, because it was what I'm trying to portray. Once I started writing it, it got very easy to write, because I could draw from my own friends. I'm so glad it came out naturally, and of course I brought in Garen. I had your character of him in mind when I wrote it, truth be told. You did a great job of him, he's impossible to resist.

    Indra- welcome! Wouldn't he be more proud if this was about a solo mission? - hmmm... from my observations of Qui-Gon, yes, he would be proud, but pride is not just a perfect Jedi quality, and I see Qui-Gon as the standard for most Jedi. I don't know if that's weird of me or what. However, we get more into Qui-Gon's emotions in the next part, so hopefully we'll clear up some questions. :) Thanks for dropping by, and so glad you like Reeft.

    The_Hutt- Your entire review was so nice I'd have to quote the entire thing to get it right, and I'm not going to do that. :p I love the fact you like Obi-Wan and co. It means I'm making them the way I want to, and that's like, yes! Thank you for the well thoughtout review, and I hope you stick with this story.

    Xeana- thanks for the up, and I also have a "sirious" case of denial. :_|

    The rest of part one shall be posted in a few, and I warn you it's packed with info. :)

    -Krystal
     
  22. KrystalBlaze

    KrystalBlaze Jedi Master star 5

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    He was, as usual, wrong.

    It was worst.

    ?A solo mission? But? I?m not twenty-three yet! They can?t send me when I?m underage, Master. I?m not ready for a solo mission!?

    Despite his worry for his Padawan, Qui-Gon had to smile at his rants. Obi-Wan was sitting on couch in the front room of their living quarters, his head clenched in his hands. However, when the apprentice made a move to pull his hair out was when Qui-Gon decided he needed to step in. Gently, he placed his hand over one of Obi-Wan?s and guided it away from his ginger locks. Obi-Wan looked up, startled.

    ?Master? you put them up to it, didn?t you??

    At that Qui-Gon laughed out loud and sat next to Obi-Wan on the couch. ?Obi-Wan? never would I think to even suggest for you to go on a solo mission because I knew you would act like this. However, the Council has faith in your abilities, as do I. Yes, you are not yet twenty-three. However, you will turn that age next week, which I think is close enough in letting you go.?

    ?But, Master? I don?t know anything!?

    ?Oh, Obi-Wan, I?m sure you?ll do fine,? Qui-Gon said. He patted his apprentice on the back. ?Never, Obi-Wan, would the Council send you out if they did not think you were ready. You need to have faith in your abilities, in the Force. You can?t go wrong there.?

    ?Yes, but only there,? Obi-Wan breathed. He stood abruptly and looked at Qui-Gon, abashed. ?Master, I apologize for my behavior. It is not becoming of a Jedi, and I apologize for it.?

    Qui-Gon smiled at him. ?Padawan, it?s all right. A first mission, if I remember correctly, can be extremely difficult. However, there is no need to pull out your hair with worry. Everything will be fine if you listen to the Force. Now, would you like to know the details of the mission, or do I need to strap you down before you hyperventilate again??

    Obi-Wan laughed easily, sliding back into his spot by Qui-Gon?s side. He willed himself to be still, to keep his mind on the present. His insides were somersaulting over each other in a much disorganized kata. They were sending him on his first solo mission. Hadn?t his friends just been talking about this at evening meal? It was beyond weird, it was downright creepy.

    ?This is Level One clearance, Padawan,? Qui-Gon said seriously, all traces of joking erased from his features. His clear eyes were sharp and stern. Obi-Wan knew what Level One clearance was: undercover work. He felt his breath catch in his throat. ?You cannot, in small terms, discuss this with anyone outside the Council and myself. This request comes directly from the Supreme Chancellor himself.?

    Obi-Wan?s insides pushed the ante a little.

    ?Okay, then. The world you will be sent to is called Yanari; it?s in the Middle Rim. The Republic is very concerned with the happenings on Yanari. Although the planet is officially part of the Republic, they have not elected Senators, nor have they had any contact with Coruscant for quite some time. The Republic was concerned, naturally, and sent an emissary to meet with the world leaders. However, the emissary never returned, and when the Republic sent an inquiry committee, the two people never returned. Yanari denied they even showed up.

    ?The Republic is very concerned. They do not wish to send any more people to Yanari under the Republic name because they are afraid of losing them. They sent their own undercover force, but when they returned, they were on the brink of madness. It seemed the Yanarians do not take kindly to undercover people, nor do they care of Republic meddling.?

    ?But they are part of the Republic,? Obi-Wan said in question. ?Why would they not welcome the Republic??

    ?In short,? Qui-Gon said grimly, ?they are threatening to break away from the Republic. The Senate fears this greatly. There are worlds, of course, who refuse to be part of the Republic, and the Senate is fine with that. However, a planet breaking away is something they cannot tolerate. Do you know why??

    Obi-Wan thought a moment. ?Yes. If Yanari breaks
     
  23. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    yippee! It is a solo mission! And undercover at that! My fav types! :D :D
    Ahhh Qui worried for Obi! How sweet!! Good to know he is confident with his Padawan's abilities!

    Great work! Can't wait for the next chapp!
     
  24. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Grand Master star 6

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    I loved that Qui-Gon had such faith in Obi-Wan. But this mission sounds very difficult and dangerous. Why couldn't it be a nice easy mission for those just reaching Senior Padawan??? Oh, well - then it wouldn't be an exciting story.

    Good job. Keep going.
     
  25. Opal

    Opal Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Well, I wasn't expecting that one! :eek:

    Loved the twist.
     
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