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Saga Deception and Deceit Episode II: A/P, OC AU Chapter 11 Updated September 27

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  1. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    Title: Deception and Deceit
    Genre: Romance, Eventual Angst, Some Action
    Characters: Padme, Anakin, Jesse Kaldo (OC), Obi Wan, Chancellor Palpatine, other PT characters.
    Time: 2 1/2 years after AOTC AU

    Chapter 1

    Deception and Deceit

    Jesse Kaldo a newly elected Senator from the planet of Corellia, sat on the opposite side of the desk from Chancellor Palpatine. Jesse was somewhat tall, most women found him to be a very handsome young man. The 25 year old Corellian had light brown hair, and brown eyes to match. He had a small scar above his eyebrow, but most people told him it gave his face character.

    He didn?t want to be a character though. For his relatively young age, he was seen by most as very disciplined and very passionate about his work.

    ?So, Senator. How does it feel?? Palpatine spoke with an elegant but monotone voice.

    ?I?m sorry Chancellor, what do you mean?? Kaldo asked with a quizzical look in his eyes.

    ?To be newly elected. Your predecessor held that position for quite some time. It must be quite an honor to represent your people.? The Chancellor answered.

    ?Oh, yes, I?m sorry.? Kaldo responded, shaking his head as to shake cob webs out of his mind. ?Just that woman that was leaving your office before I came in.?

    ?Oh yes, you mean Senator Amidala.? Palpatine corrected him, informing him of the woman?s name. He smiled at the thought of her.

    ?She?s absolutely gorgeous. I?m sorry, she just took my breathe away for a moment. I?m not usually like this.? Kaldo informed the Chancellor.

    ?It?s quite all right, she has that effect on a lot of men.? Palpatine said.

    Palpatine looked at the young man and smiled reassuringly.

    ?It?s an honor to meet you too you?re Excellency, of course.? Kaldo said with a charming smile. ?I know this might seem sudden, but I?m interested. Is she taken??

    ?There are a lot of Senators, I cannot possibly keep up with all of the rumors. But, there have been some rumblings, but to the best of my knowledge, she is not spoken for.? Palpatine said, grinning uncontrollably now.

    ?Interesting, indeed.? Kaldo remarked.

    The two continued to discuss other things. The Clones Wars became a main topic of discussion between the two men. Several minutes passed as more idle chit chat ensued.

    ?I hate to break this conversation off, but I do have several more appointments to get to today.? Palpatine informed the young man.

    ?Of course, your very busy, as am I. It was a great honor to meet you sir.? Kaldo said, as he stood up and slightly bowed to the Chancellor. He was then escorted out of the room by Palpatine himself.

    ~~

    Padme, Bail Organa, and Mon Mothma exited the Senate meeting room, walking together discussing the day?s events.

    ?I don?t know, I?m still undecided on bill 432592.? Padme said, looking up at her good friend Bail.

    ?Padme, you can?t be serious, it?s an obvious vote for no. We cannot afford anymore of the Republics taxes to be spilled into this War.? Bail said sternly.

    ?I?m just torn, I have friends out there in that war. More money could definitely help, but I?m afraid for the galaxies economy.? Padme told her side of the story as the three continued to walk stride for stride.

    ?Excuse me.?

    Padme stopped as she saw a man standing in front of her. She did not recognize him, but he was certainly dressed as a Senator would. He wore a red almost silky looking throw over robe. His hair was neatly combed. He looked at Padme in her beautiful brown eyes. She wore a long white dress, with her hair done up in buns, but with a few stray tendrils flowing down her gorgeous face.

    ?I am Jesse Kaldo, newly elected Senator of Corellia.?

    ?I am Padme Amidala of Naboo.?

    She stuck her hand out to shake his, but he took her hand and kissed it gently. She did not want to pull away for fear of disrespecting him, but it made her feel extremely uncomfortable. Bail cleared his throat, as to break up the small moment.

    ?I am B
     
  2. WhiteLadyofRohan

    WhiteLadyofRohan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Nice start!

    Oooohh...someone likes Padme!!! [face_mischief]

    I take it Anakin's not going to be thrilled?

    Can't wait for more!
     
  3. Jedi_BMK

    Jedi_BMK Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Hmmm... [face_thinking] I see trouble brewing if that new Senator continues to check out Padme and Anakin sees. I like the way this has started. Looking forward to more.
     
  4. VadersMistress

    VadersMistress Jedi Knight star 6

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    Great start! I can't wait to see more. :D Love the story idea. ;)
     
  5. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    WhiteLadyofRohan - Thanks, and who wouldn't like Padme?

    Jedi_BMK - I think Trouble should be Anakin's middle name, atleast in the stories i write.

    VadersMistress - well thanks, hopefully you will continue to like the idea once i get deeper into the story.




    I ALREADY HAVE CHAPTER 2 WRITTEN!

    I will post it LATE today. But if I get enough begging, I might post it sooner than that.
     
  6. Starshine

    Starshine Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Good start :D
    Jesse should be careful or he will find a lightsaber on his throat.

    ?Only if you spent as much time practicing your flying technique?s as you did your wit, Obi Wan, you would rival me as a pilot.? Anakin said, mocking Obi Wan.

    ?I thought I already did.? Obi Wan replied, returning the favor.

    ?Only in your mind, my very old Master.? Anakin said, holding back his laughter.


    I liked it and I wait for more :)
     
  7. Gina

    Gina Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Uh-oh, Anakin isn't going to like this. I doubt Padme is going to be happy about his attentions, either. ;)

    I liked the banter between Obi-Wan and Anakin. On the surface, it seemed light-hearted, but there was also an underlying tension, as Obi-Wan tried to probe regarding Padme.

    Looking forward to more of this!

     
  8. DarthIshtar

    DarthIshtar Chosen One star 10

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    Very interesting start.
     
  9. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    Starshine - You really think Anakin would let him off that easy? =)

    Gina - Your right, definately more to their conversation than meets the eye. Thanks for reading.

    DarthIshtar - Thanks for checking it out.

    Here is Chapter 2

    Chapter 2

    Padme had just finished getting dressed. She looked at herself in the mirror. Obviously like any person, when she looked into the mirror she had a small gleam of doubt of her appearance, but no one else in the galaxy could notice a thing wrong. She wore a spectacular green dress. Along side the arm sleeves the dress became sheer and you could see her silky smooth skin.

    Her handmaidens entered shortly thereafter and helped her with her hair. She went for a less formal look, leaving most of her hair down. It wasn?t quite curly naturally but from all the different ways she wore it, it had become that way. One thing she did love about herself was her beautiful hair. She certainly took pride in that part of her appearance. Although she wasn?t exactly sure why she was going for the less formal look. Either way she shook that from her head, and just thought about the days events.

    She thought of Anakin, and what he must be doing right now. Padme was not a Jedi, and definitely did not know how to use the force, at least not in the ways the Jedi do. But, she could feel Anakin?s presence. She could feel his life force still glowing, and she was relieved. She knew the man she loved was still alive.

    Her good mood then turned into a sour one, the more she thought of Anakin though. It was a morning ritual with her. She would first think of his charming smile, and then think about the anguish he must be going through everyday. Not only was he fighting a war, but she knew in her heart of hearts that he was deeply in love with her. She felt bad for entrapping this young Jedi. He had more important things to worry about, than love. Didn?t he?

    She would soon snap herself out of these trances. She would tell herself there is nothing more important than love. But was that true for a Jedi? Anakin had once told her that compassion, which he considered to be unconditional love, was central to a Jedi?s life. Jedi?s were encouraged to love. She now knew this to be just a way for Anakin to make an excuse. An excuse she was glad he had made at that time. She was sure one day Anakin would grow powerful enough in the Council that he could change the rules, and that their marriage would be accepted by all.

    ?Milady, what do you have planned for today?? One of her handmaidens broke her train of thought. Padme looked at herself in the mirror, as she answered.

    ?I made a commitment to show a new Senator the ropes.? Padme answered after a few seconds. She then thought of Jesse. He certainly was cute, but he was no Anakin. Anakin was somewhat mouthy sometimes, but that?s just because he cared so much, Padme told herself. Anakin was such a man, in her eyes. He was a warrior, but a warrior who knew love. He wasn?t just some mindless creep. He loved her, and that love reassured her.

    How had she ever lived before Anakin came back into her life, all those years ago? Too often she wanted to just talk of Anakin, brag upon him. She wished she could tell her handmaidens everything. About their wedding. Their wedding night. How romantic Anakin could be. It hurt her so much to keep that secret inside. Even more, she longed for Anakin. She longed for a man?s touch upon her skin. Before Anakin had come along, she had never thought too much about those things. Anakin certainly changed all that. He had made her a woman, just as much as she had made him a man. They had given themselves to each other, both for their first time.

    Most men around the galaxy might say that, but Anakin was a Jedi, she could trust that she was his first. Padme had been a Queen, and now a Senator, surely Anakin had the same respect for her, or so she hoped. No, she knew. She was confident in her love for Anakin and confident that he loved her back. O
     
  10. Gina

    Gina Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    :eek: Nooooo! Padme is playing with fire.

    Looking forward to the next update!



     
  11. Jedi_BMK

    Jedi_BMK Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Anakin better get back soon and remind Padme just why she shouldn't be doing things like that or someone is liable to go all Dark Side. Looking forward to more.
     
  12. mixza

    mixza Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Love your story so far... the part with Anakin eating bugs is funny; I remember cringing when he did that on the Clone Wars cartoon... and Padme had better set things strait with Jesse before she ends up hurting him, Anakin and herself.

    Hope for more soon!
     
  13. astarael

    astarael Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Lovely story so far, darksideyesplease.

    Padme better not start flirting with a certain new senator and break poor Ani's heart!

    Out of curiosity, Does Ani turn to the dark side in this fic? When you mentioned characters you didn't mention Vader, so if you refuse to give a straight answer I'll assume he doesn't, unless you feel like correcting me.

    Keep up the good work!
     
  14. son-of-kenobi

    son-of-kenobi Jedi Youngling star 2

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    lisa, why would the author tell us that? that wouldn't be very good...keep un in suspense...this is really good....Jesse is gonna get his arse whooped with a big blue saber if he doesn't leave Mrs.Skywalker alone.....

    get him anakin!!!!
     
  15. astarael

    astarael Jedi Youngling star 3

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    lisa, why would the author tell us that? that wouldn't be very good...

    Well, you can't blame a girl for trying, can ya? ;)
     
  16. Starshine

    Starshine Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Okay...Anakin will not threat Jesse. With his temper he will just kill him :p
    Padme, don`t try to do anything foolish, ok?

    Nice chapter.
     
  17. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    Gina - Your right she is, but never the less she has been lonely for the past few months, but that's no excuse.

    Jedi_BMK - Anakin will soon be on his way back home. All in due time. Thank for reading.

    mixza - I must admit I did steal the bug eating from the cartoon, but no biggie, thanks for the compliment.

    astarael - Aww, but if she doesn't flirt I don't have much of a story. And no, I cannot answer that, sorry. Sorry, I know i'm evil. muahaha.

    son-of-kenobi - eventually will be got, sir. =)

    Starshine - Thanks for reading, and we can only hope Padme can keep her wits about her, in more than one way, if you catch my drift.

    Look Monday for Chapter 3.
     
  18. Lieutenant_Jaina

    Lieutenant_Jaina Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Ohhhh Padme is evil lol. How can she 'play' like this?! *shakes head* I feel like smacking that senator (not Padme, Jesse).

    Great chapters.
     
  19. Ataris

    Ataris Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I hope that he leaves her alone and does not tempt her into breaking her marital vows to Anakin because she misses the touch of her husband. Please continue this story soon.
     
  20. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    Lieutenant_Jaina - glad your enjoying the chapters

    Ataris - Padme is just too beautiful to be left alone, on top of that, up to this point he thinks she isn't spoken for, but that will change in chapter 3, speaking of which.

    Chapter 3

    Obi Wan and Anakin had just received word that they are to return to the Jedi Temple for a one week leave from missions. Obi Wan was checking out his ship and communicating with R4 trying to make sure everything was a-okay.

    Obi Wan looked around and saw R2 already mounted and ready to go in Anakin?s Starfighter. But Anakin was no where to be seen. Obi Wan touched out with the force, and knew Anakin was close. He looked harder with his eyes, and saw Anakin in a field several hundred feet away. He was bending and standing back up constantly. Obi Wan focused his vision, to see what exactly Anakin was doing.

    He then realized, he was picking flowers. Anakin would bend down, smell a beautiful flower, and if it suited him, he would pick it and add it to the bouquet he starting to make in his left hand. Obi Wan simply smiled. He had no conformation but he knew Anakin was in love with a certain Senator.

    He had felt that for quite some time, but had chose not to voice his concerns to the council, for he cared for Anakin too much. Perhaps he was going against the Jedi Code, perhaps he was too attached to his former Padawan. He did not want to see him expelled from the Order, so he chose to stay quiet.

    Obi Wan continued to observe him. He had not seen anyone that happy, perhaps in his entire life. That did it for him, he knew Anakin was in love. He could feel it through his bond with Anakin, now more than ever. The aura he gave off, was that of someone completely infatuated with another.

    A small smile came across Obi Wan?s face. He feared for his friend, but also felt a great deal of happiness for him. He knew that if he had to be in love, that Padme was definitely the right choice. She was worth risking everything, even Obi Wan could understand that.

    ~~

    Padme had asked her handmaidens not to accompany her. She had intended to go for a walk alone. After much arguing they finally agreed to let her go by herself. Padme looked amazing as usual. Wearing a very sensual black dress, letting her curly brown hair go free, she didn?t make it tens steps before she felt someone?s presence.

    ?Padme.? A voice called out from the shadows.

    Surprisingly it didn?t startle her, as she recognized the voice very well, almost too well.

    ?Jesse.? Padme responded as she turned around, and could see his figure turn from silhouette to flesh.

    ?I was hoping that you might leave your apartment sometime soon.? Jesse said, a bright smile coming over his face.

    Padme looked more than a bit flustered. She had gone for a walk by herself, because she couldn?t get over the conflicting thoughts. One minute she would be thinking about her Anakin, then the next she would think about the chemistry she had felt the days before with Jesse.

    ?I hope I am not bothering you, I didn?t want to knock and disturb you.? Jesse said. Although he could have seemed like a stalker very easily, to Padme he seemed sincere.

    Padme looked up at him, as he caressed his hand over his smooth cheek.

    ?It?s ok, I have actually been thinking a lot about you.? Padme responded, she immediately felt ashamed of herself when those words slipped from her soft lips. Jesse?s smile became even bigger hearing this though.

    ?Really? I haven?t been able to get a bit of work done, all I can think about is you.? Jesse admitted. Padme?s cheeks turned flush red.

    ?There is.? Padme started to say and then broke off.

    She looked up at Jesse again, they eyes making contact, and the electricity was flying. For some reason she felt close to him. Jesse couldn?t believe her beauty.

    Jesse slightly bent down, his lips coming ever so close to her. He was waiting for her to respond. She met him the rest of the way, and a passionate kiss ensued.

    Jesse pulled her closer, a
     
  21. AnakinPadme4ever

    AnakinPadme4ever Jedi Youngling

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    what the hell is wrong with padme..........why is she kissing some guy when she knows that she is already married to anakin........i cannot believe her.........
     
  22. Anakin_Heartbreaker

    Anakin_Heartbreaker Jedi Master star 4

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    OMG! Padme...how could you?!!!!

    I hope Anakin chokes that sleezy lover-boy when he see's him. And I mean phyically choke him.

    Great story, I wish you can post soon!
     
  23. darksideyesplease

    darksideyesplease Jedi Master star 4

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    AnakinPadme4ever - People do strange things in strange times.

    Anakin_Heartbreaker - Anakin might not even get the chance if a certain friend of his gets his hands on him first.... oops I've gone and said too much.


    I've got Chapter 4 all but complete! It's going to blow you all away!!!!!!!

    Oh I can't wait to get some reaction from it, but I'm going to wait. I'll post it this afternoon. OMG I LOVE THIS FREAKIN STORY!

    thanks for reading guys!
     
  24. Starshine

    Starshine Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Hmm...I somehow understand some reasons why she is doing it but that is not an excuse.

    Of course, Jesse is the main problem. No Kaldo, no problem [face_devil]
     
  25. AnakinPadme4ever

    AnakinPadme4ever Jedi Youngling

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    exactly she can't do that to anakin who is saving the world so that they can have a peaceful place to live in.......but i love the story.........
     
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