Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.

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  1. mouse2 Jedi Master

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    Love it!

    Now post more!!!!!!

    P.S. They're gone! They're gone! They're gone! They're gone! Hooray!!!!!
  2. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    Sorry for the delay, I seem to have caught Mouse2 & Mini-Mouse's tummy flu. I even called in sick to work today, my boss was NOT pleased, to say the least. Anyway, here's some more.

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    The hooting of the emergency claxons within the moon colony was definitely beginning to grate on Charsa?s nerves as she and Rela made their way through the flickering illumination of the twisting, turning corridors with the unconscious body of Vicetta Mermil supported between them. Kason staggered along behind them and she could sense the pain that coursed through him with every step he took. The power he had unleashed in the audience chamber had scoured the synapses of his mind raw and would undoubtedly take some time to heal before he felt like his old self again.

    ?You?re sure we?re going in the right direction,? Charsa asked Rela for the third time, her voice coming in gasps due to the exertion of carrying Mermil?s unresponsive body, ?I?d hate to get lost in this place.?

    ?I...know...where...we?re...going,? Rela panted back in exasperation, ?I?m hoping the turbolift system hasn?t been damaged too badly, it would definitely be a help right now.?

    ?If the last one was any indication,? Charsa replied over the bobbing head of the Vicetta, ?we?re in for a long walk.?

    They had found one turbolift access shortly after leaving the small council room that was obviously useless, it was nothing but a deep pit filled with sparking wires and falling debris, all controls were smashed beyond repair.

    ?There?s another one coming up soon,? Rela almost snarled, ?if this one turns out like the last, then I?ll agree with you.?

    As if on queue, another turbolift access panel presented itself, set into the right side of the corridor. Unlike the last one this one?s door was still intact, and when Rela touched the control plate, the door swooshed open with a hiss, and they could see an intact pod waiting there.

    Both women sighed in relief and stepped into the pod with their unconscious burden still held between them, Kason stumbled in behind them clutching at the walls for support as his knees buckled beneath him.

    The door to the turbolift closed with a soft hiss and Rela spoke aloud to the voice control system, ?Hangar level, High priority.? The metallic voice that answered her was garbled and accompanied by sparking static, but it almost sounded like, ?acknowledged.?

    They felt the turbolift whir slowly...slowly to life, and suddenly the floor of the pod dropped sickeningly out from under them. After a nauseating ten meter drop, the sounds of emergency clamps engaging clanged through the small interior of the pod and they felt their descent slow...stop...and then the pod began to rise, hopefully on the way to where they wanted to be.

    After several cuts in power and breathtaking drops, though none so bad as the first, the turbolift pod continued it?s climb and finally stopped, a chime sounded indicating that their destination had been reached.

    Rela reached out with her right hand and keyed in a sequence on the control panel which caused the door to iris slowly open, the door groaning as if it?s abused mechanical parts were struggling to make any motion at all.

    ?Oh FORCE!?, Charsa exclaimed as they took in the view of the all but destroyed hangar bay.

    Huge monoliths of cracked granite stood where many of the ships had been when she and Kason had first arrived there. Twisted and crushed remains of ships could be seen beneath the giant boulders, while some of the spacecraft were untouched by falling debris. People swarmed all over the cavern, climbing over piles of stone and ruined craft, evidently looking for some way to escape the moon.

    ?Let?s just hope our ship is still in one piece,? Charsa muttered to the others, ?otherwise we?re going to have to fight our way onto one that is still spaceworthy, we still have to get to Qui Gon and Obi Wan, at whatever cost.?

    ?We must hurry though,? Rela added, ?there may be others who are thinking the same thing, if your ship is intact, we may have to fight to keep it for ourselves, though I thin
  3. mouse2 Jedi Master

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    Sorry! redface.gif

    But I'm feeling much better now.
  4. HealerLeona Jedi Master

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    Jedi Gryph Grin don't you just love the way family shares everything, especially sickness.
    It appears your illness has benefit your readers with more story so thanks and hope you get better soon.
  5. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    Good action, good suspense. Hope you feel better soon, all of you!
  6. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    Thanks for all the get well wishes! I guess one positive thing about feeling like I'm gonna puke up my toenails at any given moment is that I can write nice loooong posts. Although, I won't repeat any of the words my boss used when I called in sick again today...I had no idea she could swear like that, I guess that makes me feel needed. Here's some more.

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    Lemur?s cry of a thousand-credit reward for his safety halted most of his (still living) guards in their headlong flight for personal safety. While the majority of them did not care a bit if their ruler lived or died, that was still a lot of money and would do much to improve the living conditions of their families.

    As the guard contingent ran to protect Lemur, the ruler of Osiris continued to scream epithets and point at a single female that was running towards him over the smoking, blast pitted tarmac while swinging a glowing blue stick before her.

    Not a few of the guards snickered to themselves behind their face shields, surely this young slip of a girl was no reason for their ruler to be frozen in abject terror. To stop Lemur?s inane squealing, one of the guards lowered his blaster and fired a single shot at the young woman. All of their mouths dropped open in surprise as the rushing girl brought her blazing blue stick down before her and not only intercepted the blaster bolt, but sent it hurtling back into their midst to impact directly on the chest of the one who had fired, sending his body flying backwards to lay lifelessly on the tarmac.

    Obi Wan, Qui Gon sent through their bond, find a discarded blaster and circle around behind Kithera, we have to stop her and get your lightsaber back before this gets any nastier than it already is.

    Obi Wan nodded once and dashed off through the murky clouds of smoke that still enshrouded the landing field until Qui Gon lost sight of him, though they could still feel each other?s presence within the force.

    Of the now eight guards that had heeded Lemur?s call, five surrounded the ruler of Osiris and the other three concentrated their attention on the rapidly approaching girl with the blue energy stick. Time after time, she used her mysterious blue weapon to block their blaster fire and send it directly back at them diminishing their number even more, though at least one bolt got past her defense and slammed into her lower left hip. The blast caused her to cry out and stagger for a moment, but she quickly regained her headlong rush at Lemur who was now crouched on the tarmac. The young woman was close enough now that the guards could see that there was nothing in her eyes but madness...suddenly, a thousand credits didn?t seem like all that much.

    The frenzied mob at the gates of the city had slowed in their desperate, frantic rush for the protection offered within, and now all eyes were turned to the chaos that centered on the less than popular ruler of their city.

    ?It?s the Witch,? Lemur wailed, huddled on the ground within the dubious protection of the, now four guards, ?The Witch of Dzur Mountain, come to punish us all!?

    The two guards facing away from the charging girl saw a large shadow appear within the drifting smoke that floated across the tarmac. Its long hair flailing in the wind of it?s passing, huge wings flared out to either side like a predatory avian swooping down to strike unsuspecting prey. Both guards dropped to one knee and lifted their blasters to their shoulders, sending a barrage of scarlet bolts at the figure that bore down upon them. Emerald power suddenly flamed into incandescence before the running figure and sang through the air as it deflected the blaster fire harmlessly away into the jungle. One guard fainted from sheer terror, while the other looked from his blaster to the approaching nightmare and back again...measured the odds of his success...threw down his weapon and ran screaming for the protection of the jungle.

    Qui Gon slowed in his mad dash and came to a stop next to the huddled form of Lemur, who still stared in horror at the figure of Kithera who was but
  7. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    YooHoo! Anybody out there?!?!?

    *hears crickets chirping in the background*

    Oh well, I'll post again soon anyway.
  8. Kit' Manager Emeritus

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    Bugger posting soon Gryph! You will post NOW!!!!!! Or Kithera won't be just running after the Jedi with threats to kill them. I'll be runnign after you! tongue.gif

    Kithera
  9. Bastet Jedi Master

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    Cool! cool.gif cool.gif
    This story is very awesome! I loved those last posts! I eagerly await more, and I hope you are feeling better now.
  10. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    Okiday, we're moving into the home stretch here almost to the end. Let me know what you think of this one. *sigh* Alas, I know I used the word 'granite' a zillion times, but I don't own a thesaurus.

    ********

    Charsa and Rela, still holding the unconscious Mermil between them continued their arduous trek across the landing cavern with an equally exhausted and bedraggled Kason following in their wake.

    Their journey was slowed significantly by the jumbled piles of collapsed granite ceiling that loomed around them on the floor of the cavern. They had to follow a wandering circuitous route to work their way around the towering piles of stone debris, and when no other path presented itself, they had to climb the obstructing mounds and claw their way slowly down the opposite sides; an effort made even more difficult by having to lug Mermil?s still form along with them, trying to avoid injury to him as well as themselves.

    They were by no means alone in their plight. The cavern seemingly swarmed with pilots and warriors, barely seen in the dim, flickering light and sparking surveillance equipment, who climbed and descended the jagged piles of stone in search of their own way out of the moons environs. Occasionally, they would all look up as a starcraft whooshed by overhead on it?s way to the open portal, to pass through the machine generated field that kept the atmosphere intact in the huge cavern, and into space.

    Charsa and Rela stopped in front of yet another unavoidable obstacle and surveyed its surface carefully to mark the most efficient way to climb over. Kason stood behind them silently, gaze directed at the floor as he swayed back and forth on unsteady, exhausted legs.

    ?I?ll go first this time,? Charsa sighed to Rela, ?let me get about halfway up and you push Mermil up the side to me, then you climb to the top and I?ll pass him to you.? Too bad Kason?s so out of it, she thought to herself, an extra set of hands sure would be a help with this. But that blast took everything out of him, he can barely pull himself along, much less drag a full grown man along with him. She shrugged, both in resignment as well as to loosen them up for the climb ahead.

    She called on the force to guide her hands and booted feet to the most supportive of the cracks and protuberances in the stress crazed granite to assist her in her climb. About halfway up, she firmly gripped the edge of an exceptionally large crack in the rock and motioned with her right hand for Rela to push the Vicetta upwards until Charsa could get a good supporting grip around his torso, just under his arms.

    As soon as she was sure that Charsa had a secure grip on Mermil, Rela made her way up the rock face, inched past Charsa?s precarious hold, and proceeded to the top of the stone monolith. When she finally pulled herself to the top, she perched there for a brief moment panting heavily. After somewhat regaining her breath she flopped belly down on the cold, gritty surface and extended her arm downwards, nearly reaching the top of Charsa?s silver maned head. ?Ok,? she wheezed to the Jedi Master, ?pass him on up.?

    After several minutes of grunting and straining, Charsa had lifted Mermil?s form up high enough for Rela to get a good grip on the ruler?s tunic and haul him to the top of the heap of stone, her small form belying the brute strength that she exhibited.

    Despite the seriousness of their current situation, Charsa had to muffle a laugh more than once at some of the vile curses that Rela muttered under her breath as she struggled to pull Mermil?s weight to where she crouched. With her hands free again, Charsa quickly made her way to the top and took a moment to catch her breath and peered over the side to make sure that Kason was starting his own climb. Seeing only the top of her padawan?s grimy, sweat soaked head already moving up towards her, she nodded in satisfaction and turned to Rela, who was no less grimy and sweat stained than Kason and herself, ?Ok, now for the easy part,? she said with an ironic half smile.

    The journey down the side
  11. JediKnight-Obi-Wan Jedi Grand Master

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    Awww his Master died? Thats horrible. Poor Kason. Well don't stop there. Post more!
  12. mouse2 Jedi Master

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    Man, I don't believe that you just did that. It was so sad. Poor Kason!

    Now post more or I may have to sick Bun-Bun on you! tongue.gif
  13. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    Oh, too sad! But a noble death for Charsa, giving her life while saving others. Poor Kason!

    Are the rest going to get out alive? Post more soon!
  14. Kit' Manager Emeritus

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    MORE!!!! YOu can't just leave it like that Gryph. More!

    Kithera
  15. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    Hmmm, I'm not too certain that this post works too well, I left it kinda hanging, my brain just refused to cooperate any longer. Please give me your thoughts.

    ********

    Rela caught her breath and held it as she watched Kason make a headlong dive and scrabble across the hangar floor, trying to reach his master in time. From her vantage point next to Mermil, she could see Kason?s shoulders moving quickly back and forth as he lay on his belly next to the gaping chasm in the granite surface. What?s happening? Rela screamed inwardly, where is Charsa? I can?t see anything from here dammit! What?s...

    A cold knot of fear cramped her stomach as she noticed that Kason?s shoulders were no longer moving, he was just lying there...staring into the pit. ?K-Kason?? she managed to choke out, ?is...where?s...is Charsa ok?? Her voice trailed off uncertainly.

    Kason moved slowly, too slowly as far as Rela was concerned. He inched backwards from the edge of the chasm and Rela gasped when she realized that his hands were empty. The young Jedi rolled onto his back and sat up, his gaze moving immediately to meet Rela?s.

    When she saw the heartbreaking grief in Kason?s emerald eyes, the cold knot in her stomach exploded as if someone had physically punched her in the stomach. Oh Force...oh Force, no, she thought, Charsa?s gone... She felt the pinpricks of unshed tears sting her eyes as she imagined the sense of loss that the padawan was feeling right now.

    Rela watched as Kason stumbled his way to where she stood, his face revealed no emotion whatsoever although she could see the dried tear tracks running through the dust and grime that coated his face.

    ?Kason, I?m so sorry,? she stammered when he was close enough to hear, ?I?ll miss her too...?

    ?Later,? he almost growled, obviously trying to keep his emotions under control, ?there will be time for mourning later. We need to get out of here. She...she would want that.?

    ?I would have to agree,? Rela replied softly as she reached out to take Kason?s hand in sympathy, she got the hint when he snatched his hands behind his back before her?s was even close, ?let?s get to the ship and make tracks, I?m starting to really not like this place.?

    Without another word she bent down to grab Mermil?s left arm and motioned for Kason to take the right. They hoisted the Vicetta between them and started to make their way to the ship that sat only a short distance away. ?Did the pilot stay on board for the whole time you were here?? Rela asked, panting again from the exertion of carrying Mermil.

    ?I...I dunno...? Kason gasped in reply, ?Charsa always...I guess I didn?t pay too much attention to that...?

    Rela glanced sharply at the young padawan and was not pleased with what she saw. He?s too pale, she thought, and my trouble bump is itching like crazy again. He?s exhausted and he?s totally freaked out about losing Charsa, we?re going to need some help.

    Kason stumbled to the right and his legs gave out beneath him, causing Mermil to thunk unceremoniously to the floor when Rela released her grip to avoid being pulled to the floor herself.

    POODOO! Rela shrieked to herself, only twenty meters to the ship and I?m going to have to find some way to get an unconscious man and an exhausted padawan the rest of the way not to mention making sure we have a pilot...waitaminnit...is that who I think it is?

    ?Sorry,? Kason mumbled as he strained to stand up and failed, falling to the ground again.

    ?Stay down cat boy,? Rela muttered absently, staring into the distance, ?at least for now. I think I see a helping hand.? She hoped fervently that the tall shaggy figure in the gloom-enshrouded distance was who she thought it was.

    Kason watched in dumbfounded amazement as Rela began to jump into the air over and over again for no apparent reason, waving her arms and shouting at the top of her voice.

    ?Hrruggla, Hrruggla, over here!? Rela yelled, her voice cracking with the volume that she tried to project. The shaggy figure made no indication of having heard her and continued to move slowly in the
  16. HealerLeona Jedi Master

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    Poor Kason, I kept hoping there'd be a ledge or something, but alas.
    Great post!
  17. Bastet Jedi Master

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    What? Charsa is really dead? Noooooo! Say it ain't so!
    And now Rela is about to be torn limb from limb by an enraged Wookie! Aaaaaahh!
    Please hurry and post more soon!
  18. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    I was beginning to get rather depressed, so let's visit good ol' Qui Gon and Obi Wan for a bit, shall we? And, no, Rela and Kason have not yet gotten off the moon, nor has the wookie gotten ahold of them...that part is coming soon. MTFBWY

    ********

    A very confused Obi Wan stood next to an equally perplexed Qui Gon Jinn within the domed council chamber in the capital building of Osiris. While they had not exactly been greeted with open arms, the natives of the jungle world were surprisingly tolerant of the Jedi?s presence here.

    After some semblance of order had been regained on the ruined tarmac and Lemur?s body had been bundled up and taken away, the two Jedi had been led here by the members of what had once been Lemur?s council of advisors. The woman in blue, Countess Neila, had immediately taken charge of the proceedings and had politely asked first Obi Wan, then Qui Gon to address the council and give their reason for being here, as well as to relate the details of their journey to the city.

    While each of the Jedi in turn told of the events that had led them here, the Council listened patiently with very few interruptions. When they were finished, Countess Neila again took charge and asked them to stand by in case there were any further questions for them. Qui Gon bowed formally and led his Padawan off to the side of the chamber to stand in the cool shadows of the enormous room.

    Countess Neila stood alone on the raised dais that had formerly held Lemur?s seat of power, the silence in the room lengthened until several of the assembled members shifted uncomfortably. Neila raised her gaze and stared out over the group of advisors. ?My esteemed colleagues,? she began in a strong, clear voice, ?for many years the majority of us have fought together to lessen the damage that has been caused by Lemur and his tyrannical ways. All of us have suffered the loss of family and friends at Lemur?s hands, but our memories of loved ones lost did not weaken us, those memories served to make us fight even harder against what that madman would have us do. Alas, none of us found the courage to oppose him openly...if we had, perhaps today?s terrible events would never have transpired, but that is in the past. Now we must move forward I say, we must put Lemur?s ways behind us and strive for a future in which we and our families can live without fear for doing what we feel is right.? She paused, scanning the faces of the assembled nobles to gauge their reaction to her words.

    ?Master,? Obi Wan whispered, his lips barely moving, ?doesn?t this seem a bit odd??

    ?Perhaps the reports of their maniacal hatred of outworlders was somewhat exaggerated,? Qui Gon replied just as softly, ?for the meantime, we will wait and listen. Be patient Padawan.?

    After noting several approving nods from the council members before her, Neila continued. ?As these two Jedi have stated here, our reputation among other worlds is not the best, and we are considered to be ignorant xenophobes by many other cultures. You are all well aware of Lemur?s hatred of outworlders, a mindset that he inherited from his father...and his father before him, that family?s short-sightedness has almost brought our civilization to it?s knees. I say it is time to change that. Here is what I propose: We now have the ability to rule this world as a committee...a Congress if you will, with no one person holding absolute power. And to keep us all honest, no one will be guaranteed a lifelong position here if they do not discharge their duties as befits their station.? Neila paused again to take a deep breath, she opened her mouth to speak again, but instead jumped in startled surprise as every member of the Council rose to their feet, erupting in thunderous applause and cheering wildly.

    Countess Neila stood as if dumbstruck by the standing ovation of her peers, her eyes welling with unshed tears of relief. The nobles continued to applaud wildly, the entire group milling around as handshakes and hugs were exchanged. The emotion of the moment reached a fevered pitc
  19. HealerLeona Jedi Master

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    Loved how Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan got the attention of the nobles and I'm relieved to see the new governing body of Osiris being led by such a wise, goodhearted individual.

    Now hurry, let's see what's going on on the moon.
  20. mouse2 Jedi Master

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    Okay Gryph I want you to isten very closely. Come in close so I know that you can hear me.

    POST!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Sorry I'm back now. Mini-mouse took that oppurtunity to dump an entire full bag of animal crakers on to the floor. Okay where was I? Oh that's right!

    I don't believe you left them that way on the moon! Although if I know Rela, which I do, she can take him.
  21. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    Good writing, powerful descriptions, interesting plot twists, excellent characterizations, WELL DONE, Jedi Gryph Grin! Keep going!
  22. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    Sorry for the delay in posting, I've had a devil of a time just trying to connect for the last two days. Anyway, here's some more, almost at the end now. Comments please!

    ********

    Rela watched the wookie?s progress across the cavern floor and noticed that its path had gone somewhat astray. What is the galaxy coming to when a Wookie can?t track? she wondered silently, kind of a chilling thought, that. Oh well, time for a course correction.

    She once again fired a micro bolt from her blaster, aiming just above the wookie?s left ear. ?RRRROOOOWWWR!!!?, a scream of primal rage echoed across the cavern as the shaggy figure turned its path slightly and finally spotted Rela standing stock still, with her blaster still in her hand.

    The Wookie?s speed increased as it approached, bounding over the scattered piles of debris, its angry growling that punctuated its strides could be heard even at Rela?s distance.

    When the approaching figure was close enough to be seen from his vantage-point on the ground, Kason?s eyes widened slightly in surprise and concern. ?Um...Rela, you do know what you?re doing...don?t you?? he asked, his voice more than a little bit strained, ?I really don?t think that I?m in any kind of condition to fight off an angry Wookie.?

    The tall shaggy form was bounding even closer, both youngsters could hear its deep, guttural growling and occasional howl of anger.

    It?s definitely headed directly for Rela, Kason thought to himself, almost in panic, I?ve got to help her, that Wookie?s gonna tear her apart, what could she be thinking? He pushed himself up off the cavern floor and slowly stood up, his legs quivering with fatigue. He took one agonizing step forward and his knees buckled beneath him, sending him sprawling to the floor once again.

    Kason could only watch in horror as the Wookie ran past him as if he wasn?t even there. It reached out for Rela?s slight form and grabbed her in its huge, powerful hands. It swept her high up into the air with its massive arms, then brought her close in to it?s own body and...planted a big kiss right on the center of Rela?s forehead.

    HUH?!?!?! Kason thought as his mouth dropped open in surprise. His confusion only increased as he saw Rela wrap her arms around the Wookie?s neck and give it, her Kason?s mind told him, a heartfelt hug.

    {Little Rela}, the Wookie growled at the young human woman she held in her arms like a child, {how you?ve grown! I haven?t seen you in a gundark?s age. What are you doing so far out on the rim?}

    ?Oh, a little of this...a little of that,? Rela replied in her usual evasive manner. She gave a close approximation of her usual impish smile, but evidently the Wookie knew her too well to be deceived.

    {My dear child}, crooned the Wookie, concern evident in her dark brown eyes, {whatever has happened to you?}

    ?Too much to tell right now,? Rela almost sobbed, her eyes brimming with tears again, ?I?ll tell you later, but for now we need to get out of here. We have a ship, but don?t know if we have a pilot. I?ve got one unconscious friend, and an exhausted Jedi apprentice who can barely hold his own head up. Will you help??

    {Of course, dear child}, the Wookie replied softly, {truth to tell, I was looking for a way out of here myself. And besides, your friend Qui Gon would ship my scalp to Mandalore himself if I refused you.} The Wookie gave a deep grumbling chuckle.

    ?Ummm, S?cuse me,? Kason interrupted from his place on the floor, ?could someone tell me what?s going on here??

    ?Oh! Sorry,? Rela replied hurriedly as the Wookie placed her gently back on her own feet, ?Kason, this is Hrruggla. Hrruggla, this is Kason. And the unconscious guy over there is Vicetta Mermil. Hrruggla and her family took care of me for a while, um...when for a while I was unable to take care of myself.?

    {You travel in auspicious company these days little Rela}, Hrruggla whuffed gently, {do apprentice Jedi no longer travel in the company of a teacher?}

    Kason?s quick intake of breath belied his calm exterior and Hrruggla quickly fixed him with her pene
  23. Jedi Gryph Grin Jedi Master

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    POST MORE!!!!!!! NOW!!!!!!!!

    Kithera
  25. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    "...memories...are bright ribbons to be hung in the wind..."

    Excellent line! Good action! It was also very believable, the way Kason didn't know the code to open the ship because Charsa always took care of that. Good idea with the Wookie subtitles, too. And the way that Hrruggla knows that Qui-Gon would send her scalp to Mandalore himself if she let anything happen to Rela. All in all, another excellent part of a completely excellent story! Keep up the great work!
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