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Beyond - Legends Empire of the Hand (Post NJO: Jaina Solo, Jag) Completed 9/26/05!

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  1. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Title: Empire of the Hand
    Author: YodaKenobi
    Timeframe: Post NJO
    Characters: Jaina Solo, Jag Fel, Alema Rar, more.
    Genre: Adventure, mystery
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    Summary: Jaina Solo embarks on a search for a missing Jedi Knight that takes her into the Unknown Regions where something more sinister has been gathering.
    Notes:


    This is a continuation of the storyline from Revolution, The Eighth Cortex, and The Living Force . You don't need to have read them, just know that they replace "The Final Prophecy" and "The Unifying Force" in the NJO storyline, and that the New Jedi Order ended differently.

    This will probably be much shorter than the above fics, as it's just meant to be a launching point for another series later. I hope you all enjoy it :)

    Thanks to the readers of The Living Force for your encouragment :)


    Here is some coverart provided very generously by Maggy:

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    Dramatis Personae


    Alema Rar; Jedi Knight (female Twi'lek)
    Anausia Ciezor; pirate (female Human)
    Belorne; GFFA Commander,Muuri outpost (male Human)
    Brosh; commander of Thrawn's household phalanx (male Chiss)
    C-3PO; protocol droid
    Chi'tolow; bounty hunter (male Tunnisan)
    Corssa; Imperial commander (female Chiss)
    Gazzo; smuggler (male Toydarian)
    Ghost; Imperial stormtrooper (male Human)
    Hunter; Imperial stormtrooper (male Human)
    Jagged Fel; Chiss Commander (male Human)
    Jaina Solo; Jedi Knight (female Human)
    Kyrn (Shawnk'yr'nuruodo); Colonel, Chiss Expansionary Defense Fleet (female Chiss)
    Luke Skywalker; Jedi Master (male Human)
    Lyress; Adjucate, Sabosen family (female Chiss)
    Mysi Ona-Rem; GFFA Colonel, Muuri outpost (female Human)
    Oaxley; Lieutenant, CEDF (male Chiss)
    Runeori; Aristocra, Inrokini family (Male Chiss)
    Soontir Fel; Chief Syndic Chiss Expansionary Defense Fleet (Male Human)
    Strafe; Imperial stormtrooper (female Chiss)
    Talon Karrde; independant information broker (male Human)
    Voss Parck; former Imperial Captain (male Human)
    Wampa; Imperial stormtrooper (male Human)
    Wrev Caster; Jedi Knight (male Human)

    (More will be added to the dramatis as I go)


    NJO Spoiler Warning: I got a PM from someone who was afraid there were NJO spoilers in this fic and thought I should warn people. I'm not sure if there actually are any, since this is written about the NJO with a different ending, but just in case, you may want to avoid this if you haven't read the NJO. :)
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    Chapter 1: Hitchhiker

    She clutched the hilt of the glowing weapon in battered hands, held low and staggering on battle-weary legs. Before her was her enemy, ready to attack, his lightsaber blindingly intense, obscuring his face. She didn't know who it was but she knew that she loved him... and yet they were enemies in this place she could not make out. It was too fuzzy around the boarders, an illusion she could only see peripherally despite her best efforts— but it was windy. Somewhere out in the open. Somewhere at a high altitude.

    She brought her blade up to a guard, hands trembling as she braced herself for her foe's attack; she looked at the ground between them. Writhing in the throws of death was another she loved, but differently... The smell of cauterized flesh was nauseating, and the man's wails seemed more distant than they should have been, as if coming from underwater.

    She dragged her tear-filled gaze away from the fallen and settled them back upon her rival. He stepped over his victim and brought his shimmering blade around in a fierce strike.

    And a deafening scream sent her vision into white.




    The blaring siren of the Millennium Falcon's reversion alarm brought Jaina Solo out of her sleep and jolted her upright with panic. As she looked around the familiar cockpit with wide eyes, the Jedi Knight began to get her bearings and settled back into the pilot's seat. Gently rubbing her eyes and wiping an embarrassing amount of saliva from the corner of her mouth, Jaina reacquainted herself with the Falcon's instruments before the aging YT-1300 Corellian freighter slid out of hyperspace and brought the dizzying stream of lights into single scattered points.

    "It seems we have arrived, Mistress Jaina," a nervous metallic voice announced from beside her.

    "Threepio, you really have begun to master the art of interpreting obvious starship signals," Jaina sighed.

    "Why thank you," C-3PO replied, oblivious to the sarcasm in the young woman's voice. "I trust your sleep was restful."

    Jaina's brow furrowed as she went over her startling nightmare. It had been so real...

    "Not exactly."

    "Oh..."

    Jaina didn't bother expanding on her answer to the gold-plated protocol droid, instead using a Jedi relaxation technique to slow her racing pulse. It was the second time she'd had the dream in as many weeks, and she was afraid that it meant something more.

    Pushing her fears away, Jaina took in the ship's sensor readings, knowing she needed to focus on her mission and that the distraction would help her ignore the gnawing after effects of such a dream. In a few hours she might forget about it completely or at least forget why it had troubled her so much. It was the same strategy she'd used to avoid internal and personal struggles for years. The chill in her bones, however, told her that this particular fright might take a bit more than simple escapism to resolve.

    "Might I ask why we came out so far away from our destination? It seems to me it will take much longer using the ship's sublight engines."

    Their destination was an innocuous point in dead space according to the nav computer, just outside of the Bright Jewel System and the Outer Rim.

    "Because we don't want to make the same mistake our predecessor made," Jaina explained. "If we run into the dovin basal mines as well, we won't be much of a rescue force."

    "Oh, indeed," Threepio agreed. "I have just never been terribly comfortable with space travel—"

    "I know, Threepio," Jaina cut in. "Just relax. As soon as we get this taken care of, we can get back to what I was supposed to be doing and you can go back home."

    If something else doesn't come up, Jaina thought grimly. The eldest Solo child was supposed to be running supplies and farming equipment to refugees on Ansion. Two-and-a-half-years after the Yuuzhan Vong surrendered at Coruscant, the Jedi were still running supplies to the billions displaced by the invasion force's rampage, while warlords and rogue organizations were attempting to take advantage of recovering worlds and beleaguered peoples. In a time known as "peace," Jaina Solo felt she was more at war than ever. The recovering Galactic Federation was a wounded target, and every militant force in the galaxy seemed to be trying to take advantage while they still could.

    The Jedi Council had assigned this mission to her less than a day after she'd gotten back from negotiating a truce between two warring factions on Bimmisaari and her father had insisted on her taking the Falcon instead of the military issued shuttle. Threepio had been part of a package deal, incase Jaina needed help overcoming any language barriers with the natives on Ansion and Han had seemed all too happy to be rid of the fussy protocol droid.

    Then again, her father and mother seemed to be genuinely happy most of the time these days. And for the first time in their lives together, neither of Jaina's parents were rushing around from one end of the galaxy to the next, putting out brush fires the way Jaina and the other Jedi were doing. They seemed relaxed for the first time.

    After Leia's near fall to the dark side at the end of the Vong War, she spend many hours dutifully completing her Jedi training on Ossus and Denon, no longer constrained by governmental obligations, and Han seemed happy to simply tag along with her. Jaina felt a smile tug at her lips as her nightmare was briefly forgotten, a feeling of warmth as she thought of her parents finding peace after a lifetime of war.

    The last time she'd been able to relax had been on a three month holiday her family had taken on Naboo following the Yuuzhan Vong's surrender. It seemed a very long time ago...

    The feeling quickly passed as she realized just how far out of reach her parent's happiness was for herself. On her way to Ansion, she had been interrupted at hyperspace jump points on two occasions, with emergency messages from her Uncle Luke and then her father. The first was from the Jedi Master, imparting the news that had derailed her supply mission and put her in this lifeless spot between stars.

    The Twi'lek Jedi, Alema Rar, had went missing nearly a month before after investigating some pirate activity along the Outer Rim. The council had dispatched a second Jedi to search for her. When they received a distress signal from him, Luke had contacted Jaina as the only one in the area who might be able to help the stranded Jedi. Much to her chagrin, Jaina agreed to help after her uncle laid out the scenario and the time sensitive nature— a Jedi's life was on the line, possibly two.

    It was after the next jump to her new destination that she received a second, more personal comm call. Han looked almost embarrassed to be doing it but there was an undercurrent of concern on his face as he transmitted the message from Jagged Fel. Jaina had seen Jag once since they'd parted ways on the Super Star Destroyer Guardian, after she'd turned down his heartfelt proposal at the end of the Yuuzhan Vong War. This one meeting in more than two years had taken place a diplomatic dinner on Denon. Jag had been cordial, polite, and as gentlemanly as ever. She'd been relieved there was no resentment there, and the awkwardness was bearable, mostly because she knew she would only have to see him for a couple of hours.

    The message she'd received a few hours before was very different. Jaina, I need your help, he'd said. Please, you must come... By all outward appearances, the message was an official Chiss invite to a world that wasn't listed on the star charts, past the Outer Rim. Jag was warning of danger, for the Chiss and possibly the Galactic Federation, but the way he'd pleaded for her to come made Jaina wary to respond. After receiving the message, she'd almost been happy to have to go rescue the imperiled Jedi. That was an emergency, an excuse to put off having to decide what to do with Jag Fel's message. If it had come when she was simply flying supplies, Jaina would have been forced into making an uncomfortable choice. This minor inconvenience had given her a chance to digest the request from the Chiss-raised pilot.

    For a moment, she considered playing the message for a fifth time, but when she looked at her sensors, she quickly decided against it. It was pick-up time.

    Glancing out through the Falcon's cockpit viewport, Jaina stared hard into the blackness of space at the point which the ship's reading's told her she would find her Jedi. She didn't need the sensor boards— she could feel him in the Force, a beacon in a dark void. But she knew better than depend on that. There were others she could not sense...

    A densely packed asteroid field was not far off, and a brilliant nebula of yellows and purple could be seen light years away, expanding in the shape of some majestic hourglass.

    In the darkness a battle scarred XJ X-Wing came into view, its red striped durasteel was chipped and pocked with carbon scoring. When she was close enough to make out the shadowy figure inside, the Falcon's comm erupted with a static filled message.

    "Don't come any closer, Falcon! They're out there."

    Jaina felt a bit of relief that the pilot's life support was still working well enough that he hadn't passed out or gone into a hibernation trance. That would make things easier. "Have you got a read on them?" She asked, leaning over slightly so her voice would reach the pick-up.

    "I'm transmitting the coordinates of one, but the other I lost in that asteroid cluster," came the Jedi's response.

    "Copy."

    Jaina studied the sensor boards and found the first target, then used a more critical eye to examine the asteroid field aft. She couldn't find him.

    This was a classic trick of course, used by pirates for millennia. Disable one ship, then wait for it's rescuers and catch them by surprise as well. Twice the spoils for staking a single area— but these weren't pirates. And they had no interest in salvaging anything from the X-Wing or the Millennium Falcon.

    They also had no idea their would-be-victims were Jedi Knights.

    "Oh goodness, how will we save him?" C-3PO panicked. "If we attempt to assist him, the Yuuzhan Vong will attack, and if you try and strike at the exposed skip, the other will reveal itself but destroy the X-Wing."

    "I'm aware of the situation, Threepio," Jaina said evenly, then turned back to the comm. "Have you got any sublights?"

    "One drive is still functioning. The mines took out my hyperdrive, then the skips were nice enough to disable my weapons and thrusters. I shut the last one off before it was destroyed."

    "Good," Jaina replied, a plan forming in her mind. The X-Wing could at least move a little, but not fast enough to out run a skip, which was faster than the starfighter under normal conditions.

    A plan began to form in her mind. "On my mark, fire up your remaining drive and get clear of our less modest friend out there."

    "Copy."

    The two sadistically patient Yuuzhan Vong were waiting for her to advance towards the X-Wing, or possibly try and attack them— Jaina did neither.

    Instead she picked out the largest asteroid in the field their enemies thought themselves so clever to hide, and opened up the freighter's forward lasers. She used the cockpit controls to fire the dorsal turrets the same direction, and the asteroid exploded in a hail of fire and fragmented rock.

    The limping X-Wing was already wrenching itself in a dive to escape the alerted skips, but he didn't have to worry. The shockwave from the asteroid was traveling throughout the field, pushing the stream of rocks around and making them difficult to navigate through. The skips inside were forced to use their dovin basals to intercept the remnants of the explosion instead of flight, slowing them down significantly to avoid being pummeled by the raining projectiles.

    The skip Jaina could see decided to risk it, and shot through the field toward the X-Wing. He didn’t get far when the rocks hammered his vessel and was crushed by a thrown asteroid. The second was more cautious and took his time, emerging from the field at her nine.

    The warrior was closer to his bait than Jaina would have liked, but she wheeled the Falcon around and kicked her thrusters, leaving a blue ion trail in her wake.

    The skip really didn't have a chance.

    All too quickly Jaina fell into a familiar pattern from four years of fighting the rock-shaped fighters, and peppered its hull with laser fire to overwhelm its already exhausted dovin basal defenses. It didn't take long, and the fighter broke apart with a whimper rather than a fiery blast.

    "Nice thinking, Solo," came a grateful voice from the decelerating starfighter. "You'll have to tell me how you thought up that one."

    "We'll have time I think. See if you can get that thing ready to be towed."

    Jaina shut off the comm and turned to face the shinny droid to her right. C-3PO's glowing yellow photoreceptors somehow managed to transmit shock without changing. Perhaps Jaina could just sense it from being around her mother's translator all her life.

    "Go get the docking portal ready. It's time to pickup our hitchhiker."





    It didn't take long to get the towline out or a cofferdam up between the two vessels so the Jedi could come aboard through the emergency portal. A lean looking human with fair skin crawled into the freighter, dropping down onto the deck, clad in a gray flightsuit much like the one Jaina was wearing. He had sharp dark eyes and long curls of brown hair that looked matted and dirty from at least two days stuck inside an almost dead starfighter.

    "Welcome, Wrev Caster," Threepio greeted, his stiff body tilting slightly to raise one hand, to which the Jedi Knight nodded in response.

    "Thanks for the help back there, Solo," he said, turning his attention to Jaina on his opposite side. "It's good to see you."

    The product of a late New Republic starfighter pilot and a Corusanti artist, Wrev Caster came to Yavin 4 at the age of thirteen to begin his training as a Jedi Knight. His father was a casualty of a battle with the Yevetha, and Jaina believed his mother was still alive and had made it to Corellia before the fall of Coruscant.

    A strong Jedi, but not extraordinarily so, as the Skywalker bloodline or Kyp Durron, Wrev's best abilities hinged on the silver cylinder that hung from the left of his belt. This was not surprising, considering he attended the academy with the likes of Ganner Rhysode, Daeshara'cor, and Wurth Skidder— there was an air about those Jedi that made it clear they were more in love with the idea of being heroes than understanding and using the Force. Acting out lightsaber fantasies like holodrama stars instead of true Jedi Knights. Perhaps that was why so few of them had survived the war with the Yuuzhan Vong.

    But there was little denying his talent with the weapon. Jaina was probably the strongest Jedi alive when it came to fighting with a lightsaber but Wrev was one of the few who could give her a run for her money, like her brother Anakin, Luke, or Kyp.

    During the Vong War, Wrev had disappeared after the Battle of Ithor, ending up on Garqi where he fought with the local resistance against the invaders, before he returned with a Shamed One who offered to help the Alliance. He convinced the Jedi to send a team to Coruscant to find the leader of the Shamed One's, Yu'shaa. Though he was unaware that Yu'shaa was actually the cunning executor Nom Anor, Wrev had been in contact with him by villip before the mission without mentioning it to the others. The mission ultimately cost Corran Horn his life, but also led the Jedi to find Anakin Solo still alive on Coruscant after being imprisoned and shaped by the Yuuzhan Vong, and stop an attack that would have been the end of Mon Calamari and the GFFA. In fact, Wrev's deception put in motion several tumblers that ended the war, and was probably the only thing that kept him from being expelled from the order.

    Most still didn't trust him. There was something about him, an edge just below the surface that told you there was more going on than met the eye, and it made Jaina uncomfortable.

    "Was it just the two of them?" Jaina asked, ignoring his greeting and changing the subject to the Yuuzhan Vong skips.

    "Yes. The mine pulled me out of my hyperspace and they were right there to hammer my fighter with plasma before I had a chance to react."

    More than two years after the war, there were still small forces of Yuuzhan Vong who refused to acknowledge Tolok Saa's surrender and were setting up meaningless attacks like the one that caught Wrev in hopes of killing infidels and dying in battle. Admiral Traest Kre'fey had done a remarkable job of mopping up these dissidents, but the Vong were a determined enemy.

    Jaina looked through the portal and dam to see the wreck of Wrev's X-Wing. "I guess piloting is one of those skills that skips a generation."

    Wrev just grinned. "Apparently so does diplomacy."

    Ouch

    Jaina turned and walked towards the forward hold, with Threepio waddling after her and Wrev following on his heels.

    "Would your R2 unit like to come aboard?" Threepio asked, taking tiny steps to turn sideways and look at Wrev in the corridor.

    "I'm afraid he didn't make it, Threepio," Wrev explained. "One of the first plasma salvos got him when the Vong tore my shields away."

    "How dreadful! Those Yuuzhan Vong certainly are cruel, especially when it comes to droids... perhaps it's for the best though. In my experience, those pesky R2 units are almost more trouble then they're worth."

    Jaina heard the slightest sound of amusement coming from Wrev in response to the protocol droid. When they reached the compartment he fell into one of the swiveling chairs that bordered the room.

    "So how's your brother?" Wrev asked, clearly trying to gage Jaina's reaction from his last remark.

    Wrev and Anakin had stopped a warlord on Sullust who'd tried to take control of the world with a droid army six months before. Anakin did speak highly of the unpopular Knight and his efforts there.

    Anakin was the one member of her family Jaina had seen a semi-regular basis since the end of the war, often times being deployed on missions together.

    "Good, I suppose."

    "How is his apprentice working out?

    "She's doing fine as well," Jaina said flatly, not wanting thoughts of happiness about her little brother to distract her from more serious matters regarding Wrev.

    "Look, I really do appreciate you coming out here to get me. Just fly me someplace I can get my X-Wing repaired and I'll be out of your hair," Wrev continued, noting the scowl on Jaina's face.

    "No can do. Uncle— Master Skywalker has decided this mission is too dangerous for you alone now. I'm supposed to assist you."

    "I don't need—"

    "It's not open for debate, Wrev," Jaina snarled, crossing her arms defiantly. "So you may as well give me the details of this mission now."

    She saw the slightest of smirks nudging his lips, as if he found her humorous, but relented. "Alema has gone missing... I assume Skywalker told you that?"

    "Yes."

    Alema was one of the more proactive Jedi and one of Caster's few friends. Perhaps that was why Luke had sent him to find the Twi'lek.

    "Did he tell you anything else?"

    "Something about pirates giving the locals trouble," Jaina replied. "Any chance it was just Vong like the ones who snared you?"

    "No," Wrev assured, shaking his head. "I don't think so at least, though I haven't really gotten a chance to start my own investigation. If it were Vong, I think the difference between their plasma weapons and laser scorching on the victimized hulls would be obvious"

    "That doesn't sound all that uncommon out here," Jaina inquired, beginning to wonder why Alema had been sent. "Pirates have been out here for as long as I can remember."

    "Yes, but these recent cases have been a little more disturbing," Wrev explained. "One entire crew was slaughtered.... And nothing appeared to have been taken."

    "Oh dear!" Threepio exclaimed.

    "So we're dealing with more than just pirates."

    "It sounds that way."

    "And Alema?"

    "I suggest we do what she would have done. Investigate these attacks and we should find what happened to her."

    "Makes sense," Jaina admitted, leaning against the dejarik table. "Can you sense her anywhere?"

    Wrev shook his head.

    "All right then. Where were you going to start this investigation before your legendary piloting skills caused everything to come to a screeching halt?"

    "Muuri," he answered, ignoring Jaina's gibe.

    "An odd choice," she responded thoughtfully.

    Muuri was an industrialized world whose private ship production had seen better days. It was, however, host to a Galactic Federation Military outpost.

    "Not really. The force that found one of the attacked ships is there, and it seems the logical place to go and find out what they saw," he replied, scratching his grimy hair.

    "Okay. I'm going to go ahead and make the jump then. I don't want to wait around here any longer than we have too incase those Yuuzhan Vong had more friends than you realize."

    "Good idea."

    "There's a refresher down that corridor where you can get cleaned up," Jaina continued. "But let's get something straight before you go. This is my ship, and I was sent to help because you obviously cannot do this by yourself. You may be the senior Jedi of this mission, but I want all the information you have, when you have it, and I want to be included in the decision making. If there's something you're not telling me, you'd better tell me now or you may as well go back through that airlock. I do not want a repeat of the Coruscant mission."

    A more prominent smirk decorated the Jedi's face as he stood, somehow seeming to move closer to Jaina without taking a step forward. "Of course," he agreed with a slight bow. "And might I say that the hospitality aboard the Millennium Falcon is everything I dreamed it would be?"

    "If you like dead space better, I'm sure some philanthropist will happen by before the life support in you X-Wing fails."

    "I'd better not. Force knows who your uncle might send next," he smiled. "But I've told you everything I know, and will continue to do so. I would appreciate the same courtesy."

    "Consider it done. I've never had a problem with withholding information."

    Wrev nodded, looking a bit grimmer before turning and heading out of the hold.

    "My, he's certainly a peculiar human being," Threepio said when the Jedi was out of ear-reach.

    "You can say that again," Jaina murmured as she watched Wrev's shadow disappear.

    "My, He's certainly a peculiar human being."

    Jaina looked at the droid with tired eyes. "This is going to be a long trip."
    Last edited by YodaKenobi, Oct 18, 2015
  3. SilSolo Jedi Knight

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    So Jaina and Jag meet again.
  4. Morgoth_The_Enemy Jedi Youngling

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    Morgoth runs through the thread on a mad sugar filled rush...

    wow YodaKenobi, not bad for a start,but then, it is one of your fics so, i expected no less. I'm not too much of a Jaina fan as i found her to be too, how to put this, stiff and boring in the NJO, then again the majority of that series was stiff and boring (Except Greg Keyes stuff) you make her seem interesting however and I'm intrigued at how the plot might unravel from what I read in the first post.
    I'll be keeping an eye on this, when I've got the time to (See my reply to your message in my fic thread for further explanation)

    well, i'll sit here and work on my Egyptology stuff whilst I await the next post!
  5. JDH3 Jedi Padawan

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    Gazzo; smuggler (male Toydarian)

    Toydarian characters are not often seen in fanfic, but they?re :cool:

    Then again, her father and mother seemed to be genuinely happy most of the time these days.

    Yay! :)

    The last time she'd been able to relax had been on a three month holiday her family had taken on Naboo...

    Nice! I do so enjoy tying things together, even if the characters don?t know it.

    Alema is missing?! And you thought me making her a Dug?s pleasure slave was bad. :mad: :p

    Don't come any closer, Falcon! They're out there."

    Uh-oh... [face_worried]

    The skip really didn't have a chance.

    [face_devil]

    Acting out lightsaber fantasies like holodrama stars instead of true Jedi Knights.

    Reminds me of the Jacen/Anakin duel in Vector Prime. Is that intentional, I wonder. [face_thinking]

    Wrev just grinned. "Apparently so does diplomacy."

    Ouch


    [face_laugh]

    "My, he's certainly a peculiar human being," Threepio said when the Jedi was out of ear-reach.

    "You can say that again," Jaina murmured as she watched Wrev's shadow disappear.

    "My, He's certainly a peculiar human being."

    Jaina looked at the droid with tired eyes. "This is going to be a long trip.


    [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh]

    I can?t believe that Han let the Falcon out of his sight! :eek: And where are Han and Leia, anyway? :confused:

    Great start, YK! :D


    JD.
  6. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Sil: So Jaina and Jag meet again.

    Most likely :p thanks for reading.


    Morgoth: Morgoth runs through the thread on a mad sugar filled rush...

    Good to see you again, Morgoth :D

    wow YodaKenobi, not bad for a start,but then, it is one of your fics so, i expected no less. I'm not too much of a Jaina fan as i found her to be too, how to put this, stiff and boring in the NJO, then again the majority of that series was stiff and boring (Except Greg Keyes stuff) you make her seem interesting however and I'm intrigued at how the plot might unravel from what I read in the first post.

    Yeah, I knew it would be a surprise that Anakin wasn't in it, but this story really only works with Jaina, and I've been wanting to write something that centered around her for awhile (She was a major character in 8th cortex and TLF). Hopefully Jaina will hold your interest.

    I'll be keeping an eye on this, when I've got the time to (See my reply to your message in my fic thread for further explanation)
    well, i'll sit here and work on my Egyptology stuff whilst I await the next post!


    Fun :p



    JD: Toydarian characters are not often seen in fanfic, but they?re

    :D

    Nice! I do so enjoy tying things together, even if the characters don?t know it.

    They were going to Naboo at the end of TLF if you remember :D

    Alema is missing?! And you thought me making her a Dug?s pleasure slave was bad.

    That's because you were going to besmirch Alema's good name. :p

    Reminds me of the Jacen/Anakin duel in Vector Prime. Is that intentional, I wonder.

    Sort of. It's more about all those Jedi in the NJO who came off as show-offs and died :(

    I can?t believe that Han let the Falcon out of his sight!

    Just to borrow it so she could move those supplies ;) he's not using it so much these days anyway.

    And where are Han and Leia, anyway?

    Denon, probably.

    Great start, YK!

    Thanks :D
  7. jasa Jedi Master

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    "My, he's certainly a peculiar human being," Threepio said when the Jedi was out of ear-reach.

    "You can say that again," Jaina murmured as she watched Wrev's shadow disappear.

    "My, He's certainly a peculiar human being."

    Jaina looked at the droid with tired eyes. "This is going to be a long trip."

    ~~

    hehe

    ps. i read the 3 other stories all last weekend, they were great, i wish that was how the series went itself, bringing anakin back...
  8. Magnuskn Jedi Master

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    Hey, cool start! :)

    But, um, Jaina is having PMS, yes? Because with her behaviour, I´m kinda comparing her to Buffy in season 6 of the corresponding series. :p

    And I had hoped you would write about startling discoveries during the vacations on Naboo... ;)

    Aaaand... Anakin and Tahiri? Where are they? :p I´m guessing she is his apprentice, although that somehow doesn´t sound right, neither...

    Magnus
  9. FORCEBlLADE Jedi Master

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    Not a bad start. Not a bad start at all.
  10. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    YK: Jaina with the Falcon, Threepio, Wrev, and in the background, A/T, Jag, Luke[/Mara], H/L maybe Kyp... and, that title... :D :D :D

    I'm going to enjoy this one! :cool:

    - The Imperial Ewok
  11. JAGSGURL15 Jedi Padawan

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    Very nice! uve got me interested~!
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    jasa: hehe

    :D

    ps. i read the 3 other stories all last weekend, they were great, i wish that was how the series went itself, bringing anakin back...

    Wow, thanks :) I'm glad you enjoyed them.



    Magnuskn: Hey, cool start!

    :cool:

    But, um, Jaina is having PMS, yes?

    Well, that's not the way I would describe it. She's just going through a lot and isn't timid about telling people what she thinks.

    Because with her behaviour, I´m kinda comparing her to Buffy in season 6 of the corresponding series. :p

    I've never really watched that show.

    And I had hoped you would write about startling discoveries during the vacations on Naboo...

    The only thing they discovered was that Naboo is beautiful ;)

    Aaaand... Anakin and Tahiri? Where are they? I´m guessing she is his apprentice, although that somehow doesn´t sound right, neither...

    If it doesn't make any sense, that's probably not what I meant. Of course, Wrev could have meant Tahiri and been joking by using the word "apprentice." But "master" would probably fit Tahiri better for a metaphor on that relationship.



    FORCEBlLADE: Not a bad start. Not a bad start at all.

    Thanks :)



    Thrawn: YK: Jaina with the Falcon, Threepio, Wrev, and in the background, A/T, Jag, Luke[/Mara], H/L maybe Kyp... and, that title...

    Yeah, that's basically it, though I should probably take Luke out of the dramatis cause I think he may not make much of an appearance [face_thinking] I do know of a secret character who you'll be happy to see though, Ewok :D

    I'm going to enjoy this one!

    Hope so :)



    JAGSGURL15: Very nice! uve got me interested~!

    Thanks for reading :)
  13. Magnuskn Jedi Master

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    YodaKenobi wrote:

    >>If it doesn't make any sense, that's probably not what I meant. Of course, Wrev could have meant Tahiri and been joking by using the word "apprentice." But "master" would probably fit Tahiri better for a metaphor on that relationship.<<

    <eyes glaze over> Errrr... yes. Interesting. :p

    Magnus
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    It was intentionally ambiguous :p
  15. Draconarius Jedi Master

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    Ooh. Caught my attention. I'll have to read the other stories. Very nice start.

    Jaina's always been a favourite of mine, so I think I'll like this. Can't wait till you put up Chapter Two!

    Where are Anakin and Tahiri, anyway? Off on the honeymoon, or something like that?
  16. Jedi_Master_Mouf Jedi Youngling

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    *scrolls through pages of fics, YodaKenobi is the author of a fic, does double take and clicks as fast as possible*

    yay! another fic by YK!

    ~JMM~
  17. TahiriSoloFan Jedi Padawan

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    Interesting beginning! =D=

    Poor Jag... :( He needs some one to keep him company. ;)

    I want to know where Anakin & Tahiri are too! :* Hopefully together! [face_praying]
  18. Tahiri-Solo Jedi Master

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    :eek: :eek:

    a new fic?!?!?!?! my life has meaning again!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  19. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Draconarius: Ooh. Caught my attention. I'll have to read the other stories. Very nice start.

    Thanks :)

    Jaina's always been a favourite of mine, so I think I'll like this. Can't wait till you put up Chapter Two!

    Yes, I like Jaina too. I'll have another post up this week.

    Where are Anakin and Tahiri, anyway? Off on the honeymoon, or something like that?

    They're not married. They're probably doing the same type of thing as Jaina, traveling around the galaxy on whatever mission the new Jedi Council sends them on.



    Mouf: *scrolls through pages of fics, YodaKenobi is the author of a fic, does double take and clicks as fast as possible*
    yay! another fic by YK!


    Alright! Someone who will read whatever I right no matter how terrible it is [face_mischief]

    :p Thanks for reading, Mouf; it's good to see you again :)



    TSF: Interesting beginning!

    Thanks :)

    Poor Jag... He needs some one to keep him company.

    Yes, it's cold on Csilla. Perhaps he could just curl up with a book :p or maybe he'll meet a nice Chiss girl.

    I want to know where Anakin & Tahiri are too! Hopefully together!

    Well, Tahiri's last name is still Veila if that's what you're asking. That post references Anakin having been on Sullust recently. Basically, the Jedi are all over the place, and Anakin and Tahiri are probably apart a lot more than together.



    Tahiri-Solo: a new fic?!?!?!?! my life has meaning again!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    [face_laugh]

    I'll be sure to tell your son that someday :p Thanks for reading, Erin :D
  20. zettazofia Jedi Youngling

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    I did a marathon read of the other fics in this series, and really enjoyed them. I'm excited to see a more Jaina centric fic coming from you, and I look forward to the updates.

    One question though- Stent is listed in your Dramatis Personae. Didn't he die in Red Sky, Blue Flame? I'm a newbie to SW fiction, so I don't know how well the short stories like that work into fanfic, so I'm sorry if that's a stupid question.

    Anyway- I'm really looking forward to reading this. It sounds like it'll be a great read. :)
  21. TahiriSoloFan Jedi Padawan

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    Anakin and Tahiri are probably apart a lot more than together.


    Awwwww! [face_not_talking] You are NO fun! ;) Oh, well... at least the time they do spend together should be really meaningful! :* [:D] =P~ [face_love] @};-


    [face_laugh] ;)

    ...and Jag needs more than a book! :p
  22. Jedi_Master_Mouf Jedi Youngling

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    of course I'll read when you write no matter how bad, because you actually consistent and will post when you say.
  23. FORCEBlLADE Jedi Master

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    The part you wrote about some Jedi still not sure about Wrev - could that be forshadowing?
  24. Tahi Jedi Knight

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    Yay! You're away again, Yoda. This looks GREAT - off on a slightly different track from the other which makes it especially challenging. Good for you - it's always good to sample how the land lies with other characters.

    I love the banter - and I'm enjoying your Jaina. Like some of the others I found the NJO Jaina a bit tedious, especially after the YJK Jaina who I liked.

    Nice combination of characters here. I'm looking forward to what develops. :)
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    zettazofia: I did a marathon read of the other fics in this series, and really enjoyed them. I'm excited to see a more Jaina centric fic coming from you, and I look forward to the updates.

    Wow, thanks :D that's a lot of reading for one weekend :p hope you can still see straight.

    One question though- Stent is listed in your Dramatis Personae. Didn't he die in Red Sky, Blue Flame? I'm a newbie to SW fiction, so I don't know how well the short stories like that work into fanfic, so I'm sorry if that's a stupid question.

    :oops: I had not read RSBF before and I had no idea [face_blush] Was it published in gamer? Anyway, someone sent me copy today and you're right, Stent it dead. His death is a little ambiguous, but I don't feel like going into a big conspiracy to get him in the story, when an OC chiss will do just as well :p that and I've used up all my bringing back the dead credit on Revolution.

    Thanks so much for telling me. That would have been really embarrassing :)

    Anyway- I'm really looking forward to reading this. It sounds like it'll be a great read.

    Thanks again :D


    TSF: Awwwww! You are NO fun!

    You already knew that :p

    Oh, well... at least the time they do spend together should be really meaningful!

    Yes, you can imagine whatever you like about their time together [face_mischief] 8-}

    ...and Jag needs more than a book!

    The book was "How to impersonate a human being".


    Mouf: of course I'll read when you write no matter how bad, because you actually consistent and will post when you say.

    :D I'll try and keep it that way.


    FB: The part you wrote about some Jedi still not sure about Wrev - could that be forshadowing?

    It certainly could be ;)


    Tahi: Yay! You're away again, Yoda. This looks GREAT - off on a slightly different track from the other which makes it especially challenging. Good for you - it's always good to sample how the land lies with other characters.

    Thanks so much :) I really wanted to write something that centered around Jaina and it's kind of nice to work on something that isn't such a huge scale as TLF with about 90 characters and all.

    I love the banter - and I'm enjoying your Jaina. Like some of the others I found the NJO Jaina a bit tedious, especially after the YJK Jaina who I liked.

    Yeah, at times in the NJO she seemed cruel for no reason at all.

    Nice combination of characters here. I'm looking forward to what develops.

    I'm glad, but you're going to ruin the end of TLF for yourself :p
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