Saga Escape and evade (Obidala and Ani/Yane)

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  1. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    Title: Escape and evade
    Summery:The net closes in around Obi Wan and those he loves
    Disclaimer: Characters aren't mine I'm just playing with them

    Anakin heard it first, in the heavy,clammy night the whisper of a breeze brought a sound. A soft heavy thunk.
    Without opening his eyes he streched with the force, pinpointing where the noises origin. Outside he could feel a being, from what he could tell human, and there were more. Turning his head slightly enabled him to sense the others... Anakin shot up, the bedroom seemed to still and the padawan gently eased his breathing, concentrating fully on the noises. They were coming closer, slowly and methodically.
    Almost matching their movements Anakin climbed out of bed retriveing his lightsbaer and boots and moving soundlessly to the door.
    He counted to three before he opened the door, wanting to make sure, once he knew, he eased himself into the hallway. It took him barely a minute to acertain the situation, the invaders hadn't yet reached the top floor, sensing a creak before he heard it he whirled but came up short when he saw Yane.
    Her light brown hair, several tones lighter then Amidala's shone in the moonlight, her eyes broadcasting that yes she had sensed the unwelcome presence. Quietly and skillfully she joined Anakin in the tight hallway, standing in front of him Anakin could feel the press of her body against his lightly,he forced himself back to the situation, staring into the well of darkness that cloaked their hunters.
    Anakin raised three fingers then one by one eased them back, Yane nodded, bringing her blaster into view, ready to fire on Anakin's will.
    One...two...threee....



    Padme wasn't aware she was dreaming, but her thoughts flowed in that way mimicking the dream state but pictures would not flow. Her senses seemed to darken and instivievly she reached for Obi Wan, for safety and came up with nothing....Padme opened her eyes, letting them adjust to the darkness, to the fact that she was alone.
    Padding softly to the door she paused, not sure why. Reminding herself of Obi Wan's warning of a seperatists attack she pressed her palm against the door and opened it.
    Through the gloom she saw Anakin and Yane as if on a spring they launched themselves down the stairs and what followed Padme could only describe as bedlum.

    Angry and confused, Padme entered a combat zone in her mind, her brain clicking into what needed to be done and how to do it. Before she could process the fact that she was getting dizzy for some explicable reason she felt a strong hand clamp over her mouth filled with something that made her gag.


  2. Wedgeatbarkura Jedi Knight

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    ohhh... interesting... pretty short, but good anyway... Keep it up!!!
  3. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Interesting beginning, I look forward to more updates!
  4. Obi-Wan21 Force Ghost

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    Yeah, this is an interesting beginning. Looking forward to more! :D
  5. diamond_pony2002 Jedi Master

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  6. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    Yane had always possessed the ability to distance herself from combat, a state of mind she entered when all that she knew was to survive. She couldn't see much in the gloom, but she knew she had enough training to sense her assailents. Anakin's lightsbaber was in constant motion, a blur of light that slashed through the darkness, so quick that the light seemed to be a reflection of the slash that came before it.
    She hit out at her assailent and found her arm grasped in a tight lock, to her dismay she couldn't wrench free and before she could call for help her assailent dressed from head to toe in black military garb threw her over the banister of the stairs to the next floor.

    Padme opened her mind, trying to remember everything Obi Wan had taught her, she cleared her mind of fear but whatever substance was filling her senses made her head spin so tightly that she felt it would be wrenched from her shoulders if she moved too quickly. Everything blurred together, but she still had the full faculties of her legs, with one swift movement she slammed her heel into her assailents leg, tripping him up she was too slow to stop falling herself but whoever grabbed her had let her go.
    Still groggy from whatever she had been drugged with Padme hit the floor on her hands and knees, desperatly trying to keep her eyes open as she grapsed futively at the wall for support. She felt very much alone and unsafe in this delerious state. Giving up she slumped against the wall, her arms and legs useless and her whole body seemed to be that off a rag doll she had played with as a child.

    Anakin dove up the stairs two at a time, chasing the black robed man who had tossed Yane over the stairs, he hadn't paused to look for her. His impatience to get this over and done driving out fear for his compainon. Without thinking he stepped over yet another man, this one knocked unconcious when his head hit the floor. He found himself in a narrow hallway he had begun in, his own bedroom sat at the end of the hall and Anakin thought longingly of the bed he could be sleeping in right now. Cautiously he edged along the corridor until he came across the senator.

    She lay half slumped half laying on the floor her big brown eyes staring sightlessly at the wall opposite her, her features remained slack as he gently touched her cheek and neck, looking for a sign of life.
    He stifled his impatience back to where it belonged, he knew little of the senator from Naboo only meeting her breifly with Obi Wan, they had never had much to say to each other and Anakin didn't particulary like having to be responsible for her.

    Taking a deep breath he lifted her bodily into his arms,adjusting her weight, he knew Obi Wan was engaged in battle downstairs since his masters ability to track and sense attackers were much more attuned then his apprentices.
    And Anakin was stuck babystting his wife.


    How they were going to escape was beyond Anakin right now, the whole place was crawiling with Palpatine's men, not just seperatists but specialists trained for this type of combat that Anakin simply wasn't.The odds looked bad but he wasn't going to go down without a fight.

    Author notes: Okay my first attempt at action of any kind so if it's really bad I apologise but I figured a little action couldn't hurt. Anakin and Padme aren't exactly the best of friends forget them meeting in episode 1 all Anakin knows is that shes a senator.
  7. Obi-Wan21 Force Ghost

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    Nice update! I thought the action was well done! Great job on it! So they know Palpatine's a baddie huh? Interesting. Curious to see how this plays out.
  8. Lady-Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Doing good!

    I remember when i wrote the lightsaber duel in "Twist of the Fates" I was nervous about writing action for the first time. My Readers said I did great and you did great too, Hananiah.
  9. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    Thanks to all those who reviwed I really, really apprciate it as I'm going into dangerous territory here.


    "Ow" Yane muttered as she finally gained her vision back. The word came out gargled as she realized some one had a booted foot against her throat-and was pressing down on it.
    Yane tried to take a breath but couldn't manage it. The eyes staring down at her was cold and alien, a human face but with inhuman cruelty.
    Yane tried to bring her legs up so she could buck him off but he was so strong.
    She was going to die, her throat burned and her vision blurred.
    Suddenly the man above her pitched forward unconcious. Yane blinked as Anakin came into view-or a seriously blurred view but she was glad to have it-and to breath again.
    She took Anakin's offered hand, getting her bearings.
    "Anakin, what's going on?" she hissed below a whisper.
    The blond shook his head.
    "We're being hunted, Palpatine has stepped it up we have to go now"
    Yane picked up on his aniexty.
    "Where's Padme?"
    "In the forest, she's safe, I sent Obi Wan to pick her up."
    Yane took his hand without being aware of it, just knowing the feel of his skin against hers was a wondeful feeling.
    "We need to relocate" she said to make the feelings go away. Anakin stared at their intertwined fingers, his expression a mixture of emotions but then they cleared and he nodded.
    "You ready?"
    Yane nodded.



    Mush on the next update folks



  10. CrystalKenobi Jedi Master

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    I like this very much. I like how you have devloped the pairing of Ani/Yane. Its a wonderful idea. I thought the action scene was good.
  11. diamond_pony2002 Jedi Master

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    I would probably say what Crystal said, so there you have it!
  12. Lady-Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    HOORAY MUSH SOON!

    Another WOBDERFUL CHAPTER, HANANIAH!
  13. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    She finally collapesed but allowed herself the dignity to not allow Anakin to catch her as she crumpled to the ground.
    Tiredly she wiped her hand across her forehead, hissing as her hand touched the gaping bloody indentation in her head.
    "Here let me"
    Too tired to resist she let Anakin gently brush her forehead, she imaginded she could feel the healing touch close the wound, and making the skin grow. The feeling that she had earlier of his hand on hers intensified, maybe because he was using the force but Yane felt as if she were floating and she realized he was urging her into sleep.
    Her tired eyes snapped open and she glared at the Jedi. She didn't trust the force, or those who claimed to use it, and the fact he was using it on her to manipulate her....rage bubbled in her chest.
    "Don't do that!" her words came out clipped and hard and almost immediatly the dreamlike state she was in faded.
    "I'm sorry" he muttered, colouring slightly. "I was only trying to help"
    At that moment he was a little boy and Yane only wanted to hold him, against her better judgement she reached for him, wanting to ease his own pain. He came to her willingly and the hug they shared was slightly tighter and longer then necessary but Yane didn't much care. Here was a being in pain and her natural response was to soothe that pain.

    He seemed to appreciate it, the hurt dulled but didn't vanish but she felt his arms around her were in genuine affection.
    Affection and nothing else, Yane reminded herself as she felt Anakin lean on her shoulder and tried not to feel the warmth of his skin through her shoulder and cheek and not to feel the silky hair beside her ear.
    She was getting in too deep and she knew it but her musles were too sore and tired to move.

    Right?

    (I know cliffie but I need to work on the end of this scene to make sure it works out. Update later I promise.)
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