I have read all of chapter 15 now, and this is my response to it: Your opening of having Mace as a predator, and describing him as prowling are words describing Satan, and in a way that can be characerstic of people who do bad things....this is especially clear for something like sex offenders, which of course makes sense, as those things would be bowing to Satan,, or falling prey to Satan himself As for this "The Guide" person, also reminds me of both Satan and Palpy. Could be either. As for your scene of Yoda transferring everything he knew into Ankain through the Force, that reminds me of the book The Giver, in which the Giver transfers all of the community's memory into the Receiver, so that one person would have all of the memories of the bad things before the "perfect" community was created. I don't know if you've read that book or not. I found that scene a little weird, but you really wrote the scene wonderfully, and I think it will fit very nicely into your story. As I was reading...it might have been the beginning of the next section of the chapter, or maybe I was just thinking about the chapter....I don't know...but I was wondeirng if it were possible that Palpatine did the same thing with Mace before Palpy died...maybe THAT was the thing Palpy reacted to during the fight in the beginning of your story....like the Yoda/Anakin thing. Which, if that was the case, it is evident that the storm that Mace saw was caused by this transfer between Yoda and Anakin....if this is true, was there a storm back during the Mace/Palpy fight...I can't seem to remember. I could go back and look, but I think I"ll just keep reading....I can never seem to find a particular spot in a story when I want to go back and check something. If Yoda could do this, maybe Palpatine could too I'm happy that PadmÃ© didn't die, but I'm not sure if I feel comfortable with the whole healing thing. Anakin seemed to be the one to do the healing himself, through his effort alone....not sure how that scene was intended. To properly comment on it, I would need to know the intent. I can see two possible intents...one I would be okay with, and one that would really bother me. Same thing with the permission thing....not sure how that was intended...have a couple of ideas, but I'll have to learn more before I can comment.