fan fiction

hey everyone, i just found a story that ive been working on for a loooong time. i thought it had been deleted, but its still around. i told Robby about it and he thought it sounded cool, so im gonna post the link to the story and if anyone wants to read it please do and give me some feedback.

http://f2.pg.briefcase.yahoo.com/bc/newageknight18/lst?.dir=/stories&.order=&.view=l&.src=bc&.done=http%3a//f2.pg.briefcase.yahoo.com/

just dont be too harsh with your feedback, please. oh and another thing, i started this story when i was 15 and finnished when i was 18 or 19, so youll notice my age progression in the writing. the timelines dont add up too well and im working on fixing that. any suggestions will be graciously accepted.

 

the link is screwed up

 

http://f2.pg.briefcase.yahoo.com/bc/newageknight18/lst?.dir=/stories&.order=&.view=l&.src=bc&.done=http% 3a//f2.pg.briefcase.yahoo.com/

 

Still having trouble with the link.

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i guess, try copying and pasting it, if that soeant work ill have to stick it somewhere else.

 

ok, hmmm, i dont know where to put it, i cant even get to it right now. d@mn yahoo,

 

if it wont click, copy and paste, its working... for now. its the unedited version so its still a bit cheesy.



http://f2.pg.briefcase.yahoo.com/bc/viewanbeleck/lst?.dir=/My+Documents&.view=l

 

nevermind, i guess ill have to get it posted here first. anyone know any beta-readers?