Fan Film Script

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  1. Gilgath Jedi Padawan

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    May 20, 2002
    ugh!
    STOP SAYING MY FREAKING NAME, please...

    I'm not part of this, I never wanted to be, and I never will be.

    End of Gilgath Discussion. IM at Gilgath if you want to carry this further.
  2. Darth_Bender Jedi Padawan

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    May 29, 2002
    Where could i find some documentation on Battle Lingo

    Also, one thing that was very OT, the "i sense a tremor in the force, i havnt felt this since...." very darth vader ish, maybe you could change that somehow
  3. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    Battle Lingo? What exactly are you talking about? And, for the other part, what would you suggest? Any ideas?
  4. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    Um, Whoever, well, Nighthawk is a GUY, and doesn't carry a blaster. And Dal was the original. His name was changed to Darth Torivs. Thanks.
  5. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    GarenLiLorian, you know, that is a great idea. I will put it in immediatly. Thanks for all the help that you have provided for this script.
  6. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    BTW, the sith inflitrator is called the Dark Falcon, and it does have a cloaking device in it.
  7. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    And here it is. The tenitive script of BEGGINNING OF DARKNESS.

    STAR WARS:
    EPISODE 0
    BEGINNING OF DARKNESS

    IT IS A TIME OF PEACE FOR THE OLD REPUBLIC. WITH THE JEDI AT THEIR SIDE, THEY STAND ALL BUT INVINCIBLE.

    BUT PRESSURES ARE BUILDING OUTSIDE, AND EVEN INSIDE THE REACH OF THE REPUBLIC. ONE SUCH PRESSURE IS THE FACTION LED BY THE DARK JEDI LORD DARTH TIBERIUS. COMMANDING A POWERFUL FLEET FROM HIS FLAGSHIP SITHSPAWN, HE CONTROLS ONE OF THE MOST TERRIBLE, WELL-KEPT SECRETS IN THE GALAXY. ONE THAT THREATENS TO ERADICATE ALL THAT THE REPUBLIC HAS LABORED SO LONG TO BUILD.

    BUT ALL IS NOT LOST, FOR THE JEDI MASTER KE-SON MAAL HAS DISCOVERED THE SECRET OF THE SITHSPAWN. SUPPORTED BY A GROUP OF JEDI AND THEIR ALLIES, KE-SON IS ALL THAT STANDS BETWEEN THE REPUBLIC AND TOTAL DESTRUCTION. BUT THERE ARE STILL MORE TO JOIN THE FIGHT AGAINST THE JEDI.

    WARP NOD'S APPRENTICE, DARTH TORVIS, IS SOON TO BECOME A SITH LORD. WITH HIS ELEVATION, THE FIGHT WILL COMMENCE FOR FREEDOM AND JUSTICE IN THE GALAXY...

    (Darth Torvis and Darth Tiberius are fighting in this opening scene. It is his final test for becoming a Sith Lord. In this battle Darth Torvis wins by disarming his master...)

    Tiberius: You are indeed a worthy apprentice! Your training is nearly complete, but your final test is still to come...
    Torvis: I am ready, my master.
    Tiberius: Ke-Son Maal and Smocklay have found out about the cloning chambers. They are fleeing this sector in a pair of T-Wing-class Starfighters. Return only after they have been slain.
    Torvis: Yes master.

    (Darth Tiberius and Darth Torvis walk toward a building that rises over trees in a forest...)

    ---Fade to new scene---

    ---In the Toprawa Control Room...---

    (Camera views everybody, then switches to Kay Mardorn who is pointing to holographic image of the starship Sithspawn...)

    Kay Mardorn: This is the Sithspawn?Gathered sources say that the Jedi Master Ke-Son Maal and Republic Pilot Smocklay are being followed by this Starship. Smocklay and Sui-Son Maal must survive for they have information vital to the security of the Republic. They have fled to the distant planet of Galdimari. We must intercept the Sithspawn at this location.

    ([Scott] is leaning against the wall and then swiftly walks away, unnoticed...)

    ---Screen moves from left to right shifting over to Ke-Son Maal and Smocklay in their Starfighters...---

    Ke-Son: There! In that cave.

    (View of camera panning down to a mountainous terrain toward a cave...)

    Smocklay: Yes, Sir.

    (The two unique ships floats down and enters the rather large cave...)

    Smocklay: We are receiving a transmission from the Republic. They have sent reinforcements to assist us. I hope it?s not too late.

    ---2 Sith ships come out of light speed near a moon...---

    (The two ships split in two opposing directions and the Sithspawn jumps alone while the Dark Falcon joins the rest of the Sith fleet, consisting of 1 Frigate, 2 Victory Star Destroyers, and 1 Modified Corvette, plus 30 K-Wings, 30 Blastboats, and 30 I-7s...)

    (Gold Squadron drops out hyperspace with 2 Corellian Corvettes, 1 Modified Frigate, and 1 Marauder Corvette. There are 10 CloakShape fighters in Gold Squad, 12 Y-Wings in Black Squad, and 14 Z-95s in Blue Squad. The 2 fleets engage each other?battle scene...)

    Gold 8: All ships, we have enemy fighters, bombers and interceptors on an approach vector.
    Blue Leader: Interceptors, S-foils to attack position. Black squad, drop back. We?ll cover you.
    GL: All fighters form attack pattern Delta-5. Bombers and interceptors move to mark 3 point 5 and target their bombers. Corvettes stay back until we break thru their defenses.
    Blue Leader: Roger that, Gold leader. Blue squad, Black squad, on me. We?re going in.

    (Black 2 destroys Terror 4...)

    G7: Gold 10 you have 3 fighters coming up on your tail. Turn to point 7-2. I?ll cover for you.
    G10: Copy that Gold 7.

    (Gold 7 destroys 2 Howlrunners and the third flies
    off)

    G7: Got ?em.
    Hope: Some of those bombers and their interceptor escorts have broken thru ou
  8. JEDIBYKNIGHT Jedi Master

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    Jan 17, 2001
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    sorry for saying so 'late'. I quickly read through the first pages of this thread and didn't find this anywhere.

    You might want to think of another name. 'Beginnings of Darkness' is really close to 'Seeds of Darkness' in meaning.
  9. droideka00 Jedi Padawan

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    Jun 1, 2002
    I think I'm going to put Gilgath in my fanfilm too, sounds like a good name to go with
  10. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    Well, It kinda has the same meaning, but not really. But if you think that it is too close to Seeds of Darkness, then what other name would you suggest. Thanks.
  11. JEDIBYKNIGHT Jedi Master

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    Jan 17, 2001
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    Ok, I didn't take the time to read the script. But... Here's what I'd change (minor stuff) to make the crawl look better. However, these are nothing but suggestions. I don't claim to hold the truth ;)

    STAR WARS:
    DUSK OF EVIL

    IT IS A TIME OF PEACE FOR THE REPUBLIC. WITH THE JEDI ORDER AT ITS SIDE, IT STANDS ALL BUT INVINCIBLE.

    HOWEVER, PRESSURES ARE BUILDING OUTSIDE, AND EVEN WITHIN THE REACH OF THE REPUBLIC. ONE SUCH PRESSURE IS THE FACTION LED BY THE DARK JEDI LORD DARTH TIBERIUS AND HIS APPRENTICE DARTH TORVIS. COMMANDING A POWERFUL FLEET FROM THE FLAGSHIP SITHSPAWN, THEY CONTROL ONE OF THE MOST TERRIBLE, WELL-KEPT SECRETS IN THE GALAXY. ONE THAT THREATENS TO ERADICATE ALL THAT THE REPUBLIC HAS LABORED SO LONG TO BUILD.

    YET, ALL IS NOT LOST, FOR THE JEDI MASTER KE-SON MAAL HAS DISCOVERED THE SECRET OF THE SITHSPAWN. SUPPORTED BY A GROUP OF JEDI AND THEIR ALLIES, KE-SON IS ALL THAT STANDS BETWEEN THE REPUBLIC AND TOTAL DESTRUCTION...
  12. Crunchy Jedi Master

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    Jun 29, 2000
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    LMAO My friend had a hamster named Gilgath when we were in Junior High (long time ago); I think the hamster should own the rights to that name, or at least my friend cause the hamster is dead I'm sure. I'll see how legal that is, if the hamster left my friend a will...
  13. JEDIBYKNIGHT Jedi Master

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    Jan 17, 2001
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    Thanks to Crunhy who bumped the thread with his post, I realized I had written "Dusk of Evil" when I meant "Dawn of Evil"... eh eh...so here's what I'd say instead of "Beginnings of Darkness" : "Dawn of Evil".
    Means quite the same of course, but removes "of Darkness" and sounds cooler. :)
  14. AlanSmitheeIII Jedi Master

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    Jan 25, 2001
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    Gilgath IS a pretty cool name...


    Thanks for bringing it up...I'm on page two of my 'Gilgaths Revenge' script....
  15. Gilgath Jedi Padawan

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    May 20, 2002
    For those who are posting just to spite me; your immaturity is not appreciated.

    For those who are posting legitimate stories, I don't care.

    I've had and used this name as an alias and a character for 5 years now, and I've never seen anyone else coincidentally use it ANYWHERE on the 'net.

    I've been impersonated twice already, I don't need it happening again.

    edit: ugh, argolisen, now you put my REAL name in there? ever heard of identity protection? MAKE UP SOMETHING ELSE, please...
  16. Crunchy Jedi Master

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    Jun 29, 2000
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    LOL

    now this guy wants to copywrite his real name, ha ha

    Seriously, my friends hamster was named Gilgath and yes I am making fun of this situation.

    Sorry you got impersonated but if this guy, Ad_Argolisen wants to use "Gilgath" or even "Scott", then he can for his nonprofit film.
  17. AlanSmitheeIII Jedi Master

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    Jan 25, 2001
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    "For those who are posting just to spite me; your immaturity is not appreciated"

    Ask me if I care.


    "I've had and used this name as an alias and a character for 5 years now, and I've never seen anyone else coincidentally use it ANYWHERE on the 'net. "

    And you've been to EVERY forum and EVERY page on the net?

    Look, if you make the name public, then it will be used, whether you like it or not. If you don't want it used, just talk to yourself in the mirror, and keep it between you two.

    BTW, I'm on page 12 of my 'Gilgaths Revenge' script.
  18. Gilgath Jedi Padawan

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    May 20, 2002
    My main goal is to prevent further impersonation.
    After that, I know it's a cool name, and I would like to keep it my own. I made it up long LONG before I found that McCaffery had used it too, and also that it's some legend blacksmith guy.


    I'm not trying to copyright my real name =P
    it's just that 'Scott' isn't very Star-Wars-ish, wouldn't you agree?


    What bugged me is that 'Lisen used my character without giving credit, and forcing him into a completely new character.
    It's like writing a SW Fan Fic, but making Anakin play as a stormtrooper through the whole thing. Not too fun.

    I don't want to come off sounding like a n00b here. I'm a digital artist, a decent 3D modeler, a writer, and a well-on-his-way concept artist. I just don't *do* Star Wars, and I would rather that my name be kept out of it.


    edit:
    [ And you've been to EVERY forum and EVERY page on the net? ]

    of course not - I'm not fanatical about preserving this name. however - run a google search for 'gilgath' - every match that is talking about an actual person is referring to ME.

    [ Look, if you make the name public, then it will be used, whether you like it or not. ]

    You think I don't know that? That's why I don't want the name public, silly.
  19. Crunchy Jedi Master

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    Jun 29, 2000
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    You think I don't know that? That's why I don't want the name public, silly.

    of course not - I'm not fanatical about preserving this name. however - run a google search for 'gilgath' - every match that is talking about an actual person is referring to ME.

    you contradict yourself here...

    if you don't want people to use that name or know that you were intersted in using that name in your own project, but really all I can say is 'tough', you weren't the first person to use that name. You really need to think outside of the box!

    also there are more than just one search engine out there, sorry if you felt that it was a unique name, all I can say is "back to the drawing board" huh.

    :)
  20. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    Okay now. First of all, Gilgath, you put your real name in the first post you made on this topic. And could you all please stop posting about the name GILGATH. And what do you mean about using your name without giving credit? And your name is just a placeholder. It will not be used in the "final script". It will be Gilgath or if whatever name that you want for the fan film. Thanks.
  21. GarenLiLorian Jedi Knight

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    Nov 1, 2001
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    Hey, np. That's what we're here for... Although, the Writer's Resource board has some good people too. You may want to post this there as well. Just an idea. Now, back to business... :)
    -who is "rupert" and why do we never hear from him before or after that one line?

    -"Kay: Greetings, all. I welcome you to the Republic Warship Thunderbolt. You are a large group? and what is this? I do believe that this young lady has force potential.
    Nighthawk: What are you are talking about?
    Kay: You mean that you didn?t know? I am disappointed in you. Even though it has been many years since you were a Jedi, you still should have been able to sense the force potential in her. She has great power, this one. "
    This sequence is a little stilted, especially as Cindy doesn't end up being much of a character (at least in what you've posted so far) I understand that you need to show that Nighthawk used to be a Jedi, but I think it could be more natural. I'll think of something, if you like, but I've got to run now. Your script has excellent potential, but I think there are too many extraneous characters as it stands now. Good luck and feel free to ask me anything, either on this thread or PM me.
  22. andalite Jedi Knight

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    Jan 29, 2002
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    LOL!!! I have been reading this whole argument on "Gilgath" and it's quite entertaining! All of you know that "Gilgath the person" is going to be in "Beginning of Darkness(or whatever we change the name to)" right? :p

    PS: this name issue has been a problem ever since we started writing the script, this is not new. But it's still funny :D
  23. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    GarenLiLorian, were did you see the name 'Rupert' in the new script? It has been changed to 'Nighthawk' for a long time, so were did you see it? Also we can't seen to be able to add to Cindys' charater. Any ideas? And I would like for you to think of something for the talking between Nighthawk and Kay. As for the extrenous charaters, they were brought onto the movie out of nesserity. And what does 'PM me' mean? And how do I do it? Thanks. Bye.
  24. Ad_Argolisen Jedi Knight

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    Mar 29, 2002
    Just a friendly *bump*
  25. GarenLiLorian Jedi Knight

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    Did you get my PM (private message)? When you login, check the upper left, to the right of logoff. I put some more suggestions there.
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