[Fanfic] The Random Story (AU, X-over)

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  1. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    Title: The Random Story
    Author: JediMasterAmanda
    Genre: Humor, x-over, AU, other?
    Characters: Jak, Torn, Obi-Wan, Anakin, Daxter, Banjo, Kazooie, Pikachu, Naruto, Inuyasha, Sasuke, ect
    Summary: People from many shows and games get locked in a room together.
    Author?s Note: It?s suspose to be funny?

    Daxter: Where are we?

    Banjo: It appears to be a room of some sort.

    Kazooie: Of course it?s a room! *pecks Banjo on the head*

    Naruto and Sasuke:*arguing over whose fault it is*

    Pikachu: Pika pi?..

    Inuyasha: Shut up rodent.

    Pikachu: *uses Thunderbolt on Inuyasha*

    Inuyasha:*falls over*

    Jak: What have we gotten ourselves into?.

    Obi-Wan: I?m sure there?s a way out of here.

    Anakin: I miss Padmé. :_|

    Obi-Wan: What was that?

    Anakin: Nothing Master. *gets hit in to head*

    Naruto: Sorry!

    Sasuke: Watch where you punch, idiot.

    *Naruto and Sasuke go back to fighting*

    Torn: *has fallen asleep* I-)

    Daxter: Hey! What are we gonna do?

    *An owl flies by saying things*

    The Owl: The answer is in the pudding. *leaves*

    Daxter: What pudding?

    *pudding falls on top of Daxter*

    Daxter: Oh, that pudding?.*sigh*

    Inuyasha: Find anything in there?

    Pikachu: Pikachu!?

    Daxter: Just this sock.

    Sock: I am the sock of JMA, and I can return you home. *turns into a Tamaskan puppy*

    Anakin: A dog?

    Obi-Wan: That can transform apparently.

    Inuyasha: It?s a demon!

    Tamaskan Puppy: I am not a demon. I am a Tamaskan puppy with magical powers!

    Jak: So how are you going to get us home?

    Tamaskan Puppy: Easy, but first you have to run around in circles, scream like spider monkeys and dance randomly.

    *everybody does this*

    Tamaskan Puppy: *barks and everybody disappears back to whence they came* Well my work here is done. *disappears from existence*
  2. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    I don't know half the people appearing. :oops:
    *zaps Pikachu*
  3. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    Jak-from the Jak games
    Torn-from Jak II and 3
    Obi-Wan-from SW
    Anakin-from SW
    Daxter-from the Jak games
    Banjo-from the Banjo games
    Kazooie-from the Banjo games
    Pikachu-Pokémon
    Naruto-from Naruto the anime
    Inuyasha-from Inuyasha the anime
    Sasuke-from Naruto the anime
  4. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    Know:
    Obi-Wan-from SW
    Anakin-from SW
    Pikachu-Pokémon
    Inuyasha-from Inuyasha the anime



    WTH?:
    Torn-from Jak II and 3
    Daxter-from the Jak games
    Banjo-from the Banjo games
    Kazooie-from the Banjo games
    Naruto-from Naruto the anime
    Sasuke-from Naruto the anime


    [face_plain]
  5. Daft-Vader Force Ghost

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    I know Anakin Obi-wan and Pikachu.

    It was good though
  6. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    :eek: You don't know Banjo or Kazooie. That game's so old I figured everyone who was around during the nintendo 64 time would've at least heard of it before...
  7. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    Thanks Dafty. I wasn't expecting everyone to know everybody. I just inserted random characters
  8. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    We neveer had a Nintendo. :(
    The first comp in my life was an IBM PS1, and we only very few games for it, too.
  9. Daft-Vader Force Ghost

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    Never Heard of them

    [image=http://www.ugo.com/movies/who-is-the-coolest-star-wars-character/images/Jango-Fett.jpg]
  10. MsLanna Force Ghost

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  11. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    Aww I'm sorry Lanna. [:D]

    I'm not a huge fan of Banjo & Kazooie or Banjo Twooie but I never met someone who never heard of them before. I geuss now I have.

    Haha, nice pic Dafty. But i don't get how it fits...oh wait nevermind now I do *headdesk*
  12. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    I am in Germany. A lot of pop culture referrences don't work.
    Would be like expecting people ehre to know about Little Witch/ Little Ghost/<insert random German classic kids book>

    Anyway, now I get why talk is discouraged in the story baords[face_laugh]
  13. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    I do too Lanna. It deters from the story. [face_laugh] Though once me and someone else had conversations between updates of someone story and they integrated our conversation into the story. [face_laugh]
  14. MarcusP2 Games and Community Reaper

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    It would seem to me that if you;re going to cross over the origins of the characters should be somewhat relevant. This plot makes no sense, the characters are all ciphers with famous names and blatant one line references and as a result the humour falls flat. One senses it was written in a hurry. Suggest taking the concept and reworking, perhaps with less of a giant cast shoehorned in for no discernible reason.

    However, the script could be of interest as an absurdist exploration of the tendency of fiction writers to create explosions of characters with no justifiable reason for their interaction or existence. Upon creating such a work logic immediately disappears- perhaps the disappartion of the puppy is commentary on this point. Given the uninspiring buildup, has one doubts.

    Final Grade: D. Has potential, but extremely unpolished in many facets.
  15. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    I saw that coming. Funny though, I can't be offended by a bashing that made me laugh. [face_laugh]
  16. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    [face_hypnotized]
    Wish I got comments like that. So many complicated words, you don't get the content for the lot of them.

    Beautiful.:_|
  17. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    The whole point right there. ^ Plot that makes no sense, characters there for no reason. Hence why it is called The Random Story. Sao instead of bashing it, I guess you just gave the whole reason why I succeeded. :p

    No Logic is usually my brother forté, but I decided to give it a shot. :p
  18. MarcusP2 Games and Community Reaper

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    That was certainly not a bashing...now if one of my fellow JCCers decide to 'review' your story, you can expect one. :p

    Anyways...'Random Story' suggests the existence of a 'story'.
  19. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    The 'story' is of the characters being locked in a room and getting saved by a puppy in a very illogical way. I've read too many of my brother's stpries....they rarely ever follow logic...
  20. MarcusP2 Games and Community Reaper

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    I would continue discussing this with you but I've already lost 3 friends from fanfic association. I don't want my parents to disown me as well.
  21. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    I'm sorry. Some people just don't appreciate good fanfiction, not that this story was good persay. :oops:
  22. Aragorn327 Manager Emeritus

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    ZING
  23. Darth-Seldon Force Ghost

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    I'm from the United States and I don't catch those pop-culture references. I don't know those people.

  24. JediMasterAmanda Jedi Grand Master

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    :eek: Someone who's from the US who knows less than I do about American pop culture. *dies from shock*
  25. Darth-Seldon Force Ghost

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    I know American pop culture. I just don't know these video game/anime/comic characters.
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