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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction and Writing Resource' started by Luna_Nightshade, Nov 24, 2011.

  1. TheRynJedi

    TheRynJedi Jedi Padawan

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    Well, not actually planning on writing a Horn story, but I have a clone wars era Jedi character I created long ago who had the same 'disability', and I'm finally getting around to writing her story, and because I'm just weird that way I wanted to make her fit new canon, and I kinda got stuck on this thought about Jedi telekinesis and initiates having to pass some trials.

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  2. Gamiel

    Gamiel Force Ghost star 6

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    Aha, ok. That's something else.

    If she is you could have it so that she is not that good with it, and/or need to concentrate to use it. Maybe she has a self-fulfilling problem with TK, she was not as good with it as the other kids in her class and therefore did not train with anymore then she needed and now she only use it when she absolutely needed it because she thinks she ain’t good with it.

    There is also a possibility if she is from a non-human species that her species just don’t get TK, like how probably blind species don’t get light/colour/sight based Powers.
     
  3. boady22

    boady22 Jedi Master star 2

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    Horn was able to use telekinesis. After he absorbed energy he was able to turn that energy into telekinetic feats. He could do it without absorbing too, just very poorly. It took a lot out of him just to make a rock move but he could do it.
     
  4. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    Hi guys! Writing question: When characters are crying (which somehow makes its way into every single one of my fics...[face_whistling]) how do you balance between showing that (like stuttering, for example) and making it comfortably readable? Any advice would be great :D
     
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  5. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

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    @ThisIsMe1138 - perhaps mention it once, but don't dwell on it?
     
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  6. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    What about quotes though? I mean, in some of them, it's a major part of the story.
     
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  7. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

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    Not sure what you mean there.

    If you mean descriptive words, the Necroscope series is quite keen on "mewling".

    You could also hear a "keening wail", such as would accompany news of the death of one's youngling.

    You can change face colour, and go through tissues.

    Nearby characters can react to such goings on.

    I just had a wierd smartphone error (typing this on the phone) that erased my idea of easing a knife into the sobbing person's hand, and sprinkling slices of spring onion around them, to throw off the authorities. In the manner of sprinkling crack on a homicide victim, as in a stand up comedy set that I recall.

    Of course, that is only if you think you are going to get the blame for them crying.

    Can you give us a sample scene?
     
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  8. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    For example, this is a quote from something I wrote: “What? How d-do you know what hap-happened?” The stutter gets the point across, but when do you stop and have them talking normally? Sorry if I'm really confusing...
     
  9. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

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    Oh, right.

    You stop stuttering at the point that you figure they would have composed themselves enough to stop it naturally.

    Three sentences is a good yardstick, I would say.
     
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  10. divapilot

    divapilot Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Good place for some show, don’t tell. Don’t tell me the character’s crying. Show me the thin lines that trace through the dust on his face. Have her wipe her face with the back of her hand. Have his shoulders shake as he covers his mouth with his hand.
    Focus on the emotion, not the act of crying. Describe how your character is so stunned by grief that she can’t stand up and grasps the railing for support.
    For all that’s holy, please don’t have a single tear sliding from her eye and down her cheek. Gah. Nobody cries like that, and it’s such a cliche.
     
  11. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    I agree. Hate when that happens. I like to make it more... dramatic :cool:

    Anyways, thanks @divapilot and @Sith-I-5 ! Helps a lot!
     
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  12. Snocone

    Snocone Jedi Knight star 1

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    @ThisIsMe1138, it may be creepy, but you'll probably want to observe people crying, either on film or in real life. Crying is a result of any extreme emotion, but speaking patterns can be different depending on the emotion. Someone who is crying from happiness will probably speak differently from someone who is crying from sadness, and also differently from someone who is extremely angry. That may need to be taken into account.

    An example from my own writing:
    Anakin looked at the Jedi. His eyes were full of conviction as well as indecision. "I've always heard stories of brave Jedi Knights who have fought for justice throughout the galaxy—that's something I've always wanted to do myself, too. But, I—I just never really considered that it would mean—that I would have to leave..." His voice caught in his throat as he glanced at Shmi, and he stopped.
    His mother leaned forward in her chair and grasped his hand. "Ani, my place is here. My future is here. It's time for you to go find your destiny—and that's something I cannot always be with you to experience."
    The boy hung his head and stared at the dusty floor. Tears fell from his cheeks, making small wet circles on the ground. "I don't want things to change," he said quietly.
    Shmi smiled and lifted up his chin. "You can't stop change any more than you can stop the suns from setting, Anakin."

    There is a bit of stuttering here, I suppose, but people don't automatically stutter when they are crying. I think the setting and the surrounding conversation go a long way to convey emotion and draw the reader into that same emotion. If you can get the reader to feel the same way the character is feeling, I consider that a great success.
     
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  13. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Knight star 3

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    Is this the story
    Is this the story I think it is! [face_love]
     
  14. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    Haha, yes, as creepy as that sounds, I do :p Thanks a lot guys, these answers have been really helpful! And no, @teamhansolo , *hand wave* this isn't the story you're looking for
     
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  15. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Knight star 3

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    :(
     
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  16. Ewok Poet

    Ewok Poet Force Ghost star 5

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    So...how do we call the opposite of Darth Real Life (DRL). As in, good stuff is happening, yet you're still distracted? :p

    Jedi Real Life (JRL) sounds boring...all about staring at cubes and such.
     
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  17. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Jedi Knight star 3

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    Mando Real Life
     
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  18. Ewok Poet

    Ewok Poet Force Ghost star 5

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    Luvvit. <3
     
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  19. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Knight star 3

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    Me2
     
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  20. Ewok Poet

    Ewok Poet Force Ghost star 5

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    Now I wonder if the story I wrote in December 2017 is already suitable for this enough. The characters read our fics in it and I realise that we'll all die in the end, BUT they themselves don't know that they're in a fic as well.

    Okay, I need help with this. :p
     
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  21. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Knight star 3

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    I'mean interested in reading this story. What do you need help with?
     
  22. Gamiel

    Gamiel Force Ghost star 6

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    If I write that a culture's technological level is "advanced pre-industrial" what images come into peoples' minds?
     
  23. -thor-

    -thor- Jedi Master star 4

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    Hmmm … Transport via carts drawn by draft animals only, unpaved roads with cobblestone pavement only on central city roads/squares, either primitive democracy (voting rights only for men based on land ownership etc) or aristocratic absolutism with strict class division, strong standing of religion in everyday life and politics … That kind of images?
     
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