I have another question. When is it appropriate to use parenthesis? I'm usually used to avoiding them in writing, but my mind isn't giving me any other ideas on how to express the information to the reader. I'm not sure of any other way to break up the sentence so it won't be a run-on. This is the example of what I have... She acknowledged him with a nod and held one webbed finger while giving final instructions to a female aide. Once concluded, the young aide (who was easy on the eyes, Kyp noticed) departed for her task before crossing Kyp’s path. Their eyes met. He winked. She flushed. The moment was brief, and as Kyp returned his attention to Cilghal, he felt those large bulbous eyes chiding him.