Fic: A Little Ray of Light - PLEASE READ!

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  1. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Title: A Little Ray of Light
    Author: Keyla Kenobi - delilah_br@hotmail.com
    Rating: PG
    Archive: Sure, if you are crazy enough as to consider this as good stuff, e-mail me! =P
    Disclaimer: The boys belong to George Lucas, you know that director that made us suffer and wheep by killing Qui-Gon and leaving poor little suffering Obi-Wan all alone with the most evil proyect of a Lord Sith as his Padawan....snif snif...okay okay enough of this melodrama and let's get to the action! (??)
    Warning: There is a loving and parental relationship between Obi and Qui, there is no slash so if you don't like that, don't read any further.
    Summary: Qui finds Obi for the very first time, and rescue him from a certain death.
    Note: this fic it's based on one of my fics' (I Found You) extract. It's when Qui remebers rescuing a little boy, which is Obi! (Duh...)
    Anyway, to have a better idea about the whole thing, you should read that fic. It will be a sequeal for this one, longer with obi-torture, and angst, and mush and everything!! It'll be pretty much like 'Kiza'.

    Okey, no more talking! I hope you like it! I'll post the second part as soon as I can.

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    A Little Ray of Light

    Part 1

    "Obi-Wan," a soft female voice called to him gently, "Obi-Wan, wake up."

    Two glazed, blue-green eyes fluttered slowly as they opened, sleepily
    searching for the source of the soft voice.

    "Mommy?" he whispered.

    "Yes, sweety, it's mommy. How are you feeling?" the voice asked with a smile
    as a gentle hand brushed soothingly through his soft, auburn hair.

    Obi-Wan looked up and smiled sleepily in return. The face of a slim, young
    woman looked down at him with love and tenderness. Her deep green eyes
    appeared large within her heart-shaped face, complementing her long, auburn
    hair. Her smile was soft and tender, but the concern in her eyes could not
    be hidden.

    Obi-Wan hesitated for a moment before answering. Taking a deep, shaky
    breath, he quietly replied, ?So, so.? His smile wavered as his eyes
    threatned to close once again.

    Hearing the fatigue in her baby?s voice, the young woman?s heart gave a
    small, painful twist. She quietly approached the huddled form covered by a
    pile of ragged blankets. As she bent down to brush a soft kiss on his hot
    forehead, her eyes reflected worry and concern as she felt waves of heat
    radiating from him.

    "Obi-Wan, I need to ask you a favor," the woman asked as she tenderly
    pressed her forehead to his. She quickly began wrapping her arms
    protectively around her son when she felt the cold wind begin gusting around
    them. Together they shivered beneath the unstable, make-shift shelter that
    she had hurriedly constructed to protect and hide them. Even so, the bitter
    wind managed to penetrate their little encampment, leeching the warmth from
    their bodies.

    The woman was about to continue when her head jerked up in alarm as a loud
    concussion shook the ground, followed by a series of screams. Obi-Wan
    gasped in fear as he buried his fevered face between the blankets.

    "Shh, it's okay, sweety, shh....," she hushed as she picked him up from the
    ground and began rocking him in her slim arms. Soon, other concussions
    vibrated around her, followed by more agonizing screams.

    The situation had gotten completely out of hand. The civil war had been
    getting progressively worse as the days passed slowly by. They had attempted
    to escape the city, but all routes had been completely closed off. The young
    woman knew that every minute they spent within the perimeter of the city
    endangered their lives more and more. She knew they had no choice but to
    make a run for it. As sick as Obi-Wan was, she had to try to make a run for
    their lives. It was now or never.

    "Obi-Wan, listen to me carefully," she waited until the frightened child was
    looking up at her once again. Her sorrow deepened at the sight of fear and
    apprehension staring back at her. "We need to take a little trip."

    "Twip?" the small, shaky voice asked as the little boy frowned in confusi
  2. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  3. SarahJane Jedi Padawan

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    Apr 21, 2001
    This looks so good!!!more please!
  4. Kim-kenobi Jedi Knight

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    WOW, wonderul story I hope more parts are coming soon.

    Kim B :)
  5. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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  6. Kim-kenobi Jedi Knight

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    I cameto check again just in case you posted. UP.

    Kim B :)
  7. LadyVorgunby Jedi Knight

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    oohh...off to a good start...

    can't wait to read what's next!!

    :)
  8. Jedi Susie Force Ghost

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    I feel so bad for Obi and his mother...evil evil man he deserves a lightsaber somewhere I won't mention. You have a terrific first part and I can't wait to see what you post next.
  9. TrianaJinn Jedi Knight

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    Your story has a great beginning. :D
    Eagerly awaiting more!
  10. Neon Star Jedi Grand Master

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    Excellent beginning! Can't wait to read what happens next.
  11. Jedi_Arwen Jedi Master

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    Wow! This is an awesome story! More, please!!

    ~Arwen~
  12. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Hi guys! I'll post as soon as I can! really! the second part is already finished but it's being beta-read, so as soon as it's ready i'll post it, 'kay? :D
    Up!
  13. Kim-kenobi Jedi Knight

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    crossing fingers, hoping thatpost is any minute....

    UP

    Kim B :)
  14. LadyVorgunby Jedi Knight

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    please post again soon!
  15. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    YAY!!! The Jedi save the day again! :D MORE PLEASE!!! :)
  16. JediCandy Jedi Master

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    up

    post
    again
    soon
    please


  17. Jedi_Arwen Jedi Master

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    Up up up up up!!

    ~Arwen~
  18. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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  19. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Here's the second part!!! Sorry about the delay!! :D Thanks for being patient!

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    A Little Ray of Light

    Part 2

    Slowly, she opened her eyes. She blinked and attempted to recall what had happened to her. Without success. She found herself sprawled on the ice cold ground, leaning slightly to her left side. She tried to raise her head to look around, but it throbbed unmercifully, forcing her eyes to close in pain as she lay back down.

    As she shifted, she became aware that her aching head was pillowed by her left arm, and that her remaining arm rested over a small, unmoving form that snugged against her. Re-opening her tired eyes once again, she groaned as her surroundings appeared to swirl around her in slow motion. The images flashing in front of her were blurry and confusing, only lights and shadows being distinguishable. She lifted her gaze skyward, dully noting that a fluffy blanket of dark-gray clouds were covering the usually clear blue sky.

    A faint smile crept across her trembling lips as she recalled the numerous times that she and her infant son had sat and watched the beautiful dawns and sunsets that had painted that same sky. As she continued to look at the mournful sadness of the sky above her, her eyelids fluttered momentarily before closing again. Slowly, reluctantly, she gave herself to a deep and peaceful sleep that gently tugged at her. A sleep she knew she would not be waking. Her entire being was slowly relaxing. She felt a strange peace surround her as her remaining strength began to take flight like a small bird, a bird finally given its freedom. Her head lolled forward as her body
    arranged itself into a fetal position. As she felt herself descend into the depths of a peaceful oblivion, she heard a faint, choked moan. Forcing her already unresponsive eye to open one last time, she looked down to see the small, huddled form of her son curled against her.

    Obi-Wan! Her breath suddenly quickened as a wave of joy and relief washed over her. Her little baby was still with her!

    Weakly lifting an unsteady hand, she placed it over the downy, auburn-colored hair, lovingly stroking it with extreme care and tenderness. Her trembling fingers momentarily hesitated to touch it as her mind still doubted that this was true reality. As she gently stroked the so-soft locks of her baby, she felt a sticky wetness coat her fingers, and then frowned in dismay as she noticed the blood streaking across her baby?s soft features. A wave of cold fear ran up her spine as the idea of her baby being injured shook her to her
    core. As she tried to changed her position, she winced at the almost-forgotten pain searing her back.

    Her small son couldn't be injured! Not her Obi-Wan!

    "O-obi-Wan?" her voice trembled as it came out in a mere whisper.

    She waited for an answer, remaining very, very still, afraid even to breathe. She noted that Obi-Wan's breathing appeared shallow and almost imperceptible. At the sound of her voice, the boy's respiration quickened, and the whirring wheeze returned again. His small, tortured lungs appeared to be failing as they struggled to take in oxygen. And this scared Saari to no end.

    Again, she called out, "Sweety?"

    The small child stirred, as if battling against unconsciousness. Was his mommy calling for him? He was certain he had heard her voice, but he was still unsure. He began to drift off once again, his young, weary mind unable to remain awake for too long. But, he was suddenly brought back from the dark comfort of sleep when he again heard his mom's worried voice. "Obi-Wan, you have a beautiful pair of eyes...please, let mommy see them." He was unable to resist that sorrowful and choked plea. With great effort, he opened his eyes and very slowly turned his gaze to his mom's worried face.

    Saari choked back a sob. The boy's eyes were glazed and looked so exhausted. They looked lifeless, dull and lacked their normal sparkle.

    Obi-Wan blinked and a small flicker of a smile crossed his tiny, pink lips. Lips that the cold w
  20. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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  21. Jedi_Arwen Jedi Master

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    Wow, that's almost beautiful!

    ~Arwen~
  22. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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  23. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    YAY, Part 2! :D Awesome! Loved it! Want the sequel!!! :)
  24. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Knight

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    Thanks! there will be a sequeal don't worry! :D
    Up!
  25. TrianaJinn Jedi Knight

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