Fic: An Important Presence In My Life - Read it and tell me what you think!

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  1. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    Title: An Important Presence in My Life
    Author: Keyla Kenobi -
    Rating: G
    Archive: Sure, just e-mail me!
    Disclaimer: The boys belong to George Lucas, I have no money so don't sue me! =)
    Warning: There is a loving and parental relationship between Obi and Qui, there is no slash so if you don't like that, don't read any further.
    Summary: Qui finds something that makes him realise of an important presence in his own life.
    Beta-Read by Aida (The best Beta-reader!!!! Thanx!!)
    / Are italics / and // mental talking //

    An Important Presence In My Life

    Part 1

    Midnight, and he was still working. Hundreds of data pads were spread all
    around his room, as well as on the desk along with his books and papers. But
    none of those papers were the ones he needed or was looking for.

    "Sith! Where is it?!", he growled as he checked under the desk, "It doesn't
    have legs, so it has to be somewhere here!"

    As he began to stand up, he neglected to watch where he was going and struck
    his head on an open drawer. He loudly cursed himself, the drawer, the day,
    the papers, and the whole damn galaxy. While warily rubbing his head, he
    looked inside the drawer and spotted a large envelope with "Qui-Gon" written
    on the front. Hoping the missing papers might be inside, he grabbed it and
    opened it quickly. The envelope held no papers, only some long forgotten

    Frowning with surprise and curiosity, he took the holo-pics out of the
    envelope and counted five onto his hand. He examined the first one: it was a
    picture of him, much younger, and standing beside a little boy. Both
    displayed happy, toothy grins, the little lad clearly missing a tooth. Then
    realization dawned on him. The little boy was Obi-Wan at about four years of

    A broad smile brightened Qui-Gon?s face as he stood up, gazing at the
    pictures. Completely forgetting about the lost papers and his subsequent
    mission, Qui-Gon sat down in a chair and was caught up in memories past.

    Contemplating the first picture he held in his large hand, he chuckled as the
    long forgotten memories settled around him.



    "Obi-Wan! What is it?" Qui-Gon quickly rushed into the living area, searching
    for the boy.

    "Look!" Obi-Wan showed the Master a tiny white object that he held between
    his chubby little fingers, "It fall f'om my maus'!"

    Qui-Gon examined the white little object in question and started laughing,
    "Obi-Wan that's a tooth! Let me see your teeth," he asked amused, as he
    looked into the little boy's mouth. Yes, indeed, it was a tooth. A hole could
    clearly be seen in the upper line of teeth where none had been before.

    "A tuth? Dat's bad? I don' wan' healers Quigee!!" the toddler clutched at
    Qui-Gon's leg pleadingly.

    "No, little one, is not bad. It is very good. This means that you're growing
    up!" the Master replied gently, as he unstuck the boy from his leg, then
    picked him up.

    "What was all the fuss about?" Mace asked, entering the living area minutes
    after Qui-Gon.

    "Nothing, Mace, it's just that Obi-Wan lost his first tooth."

    "And you say this is ?NOTHING? ?! We have to celebrate this, man! I'm going
    to bring the camera. Wait here!"

    "Wat Unkl' Mace say?" the boy asked as Qui-Gon sat on the couch and placed
    him on his lap.

    "That we have to celebrate this."

    "Ce'beit?" the child slurred, "Wat dat?"

    "That means having a party."

    "Pa´ty? Yeeey!! Chocolate!!" Obi-Wan exclaimed excitedly as he began bouncing
    up and down, and clapping his hands.

    "Oh, no! You're not seeing any more chocolate for a looong time, big
    guy!" the Master chuckled as he gently tickled Obi-Wan. The small child
    started laughing uncontrollably, trying to get away from the Master's
    tickling fingers. /Again, that delightful sound./ thought Qui-Gon. He
    couldn't help the wide smile that broke on his lips as he watched and enjoyed
    the little boy?s merriment.

    /He lost his first tooth...he's
  2. jodiwent Jedi Master

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    Feb 11, 2000
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    Awe, that was awsum. Very moving.

    I know a few others who haven't been on today who will love this! Keep it up so when they come on they'll see it.
  3. Bastet Jedi Padawan

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    Dec 30, 1999
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    That was so awesome and so sweet! I LOVE lil' Obi stories! He's so adorable!! And the way he talked when he was little, sooooooo cuuuuute! :)
    Thank you for sharing this completely adorable and sweet story with us, Keyla Kenobi! :)
  4. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    Thanks guys!! I'm really glad you liked it!!
  5. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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  6. Neon Star Jedi Knight

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    Wonderful story! Very cute story!
  7. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Sep 19, 2000
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    I just had to read it again! This is such a cute story. It's funny, sad, and sweet all rolled into one. Thanks for sharing it!
  8. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan

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    What a wonderful story.... I loved it!!!!!!

    I love Little Obi to peices and he was extremely cute cute in this. Love the way he talks, little kids are so much fun!

    I love your writing style Keyla, you have much talent.... Thanks for sharing it with us!
  9. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    thank youuuuuuuuuu all!!
  10. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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  11. Uisceban Jedi Padawan

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    That is one of the cutest stories I have read in ages.
  12. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    Arriba caramba!!
    I know, I have to stop buggin' with this =)
  13. I love Sci Fi Jedi Master

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    Jan 21, 2000
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    awwwwwwww That was Sweet.
  14. jedi_dawn2dusk Jedi Youngling

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    That was so sweet and touching, and absolutely beautiful.
  15. Whiskey in the Jar-Jar Jedi Padawan

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    Ah, such a nice warm fuzzy story...perfect for when you need to feel all mushy.

    Very well written.
  16. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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