Fic: Teaching and Learning - please read and tell me what you think!!

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  1. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    Hi! I'm back with a new fic!! Hope you like it!

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    Title: Teaching and Learning
    Author: Keyla Kenobi - keyla_kenobi@naboomail.com
    Rating: G
    Archive: Sure, just e-mail me!
    Disclaimer: The boys belong to George Lucas, I don't make money with this,
    I just use them for MUSH!
    Warning: There is a loving and parental relationship between Obi and Qui,
    there is no slash so if you don't like that, don't read any further.
    Summary: Obi-Wan is lost in the Gardens on a snowy day because of lying to
    a Master. After finding him, Qui-Gon takes care of a quite sick little initiate
    and make him see that he had done wrong. But he never thought that Obi-Wan
    was going to teach him something too. Obi is 4.
    Beta-Read by Aida (The best Beta-reader!!!! Thanx!!)
    / Are italics / and // mental talking //
    Spoilers: There's a minor spoiler from a tv show that I saw some time ago,
    its a joke that it was perfect for the story, and Xanatos is mentioned too.
    Note: Here in my country (Argentina) is summer and its REALLY hot. So, I
    thought that if I kept thinking 'bout cold stuff it would be easier to bare it
    and it worked! That's why I wrote this fic, I was not going to post it but
    in the last minute changed my mind, so read it and tell me what you think!
    Check out also my other fic if you want:
    Grumpy Tummy, A very Important Prescene In My Life, A Rainy Day, and I Found You.


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    Teaching and Learning

    It was the first winter's day on Coruscant. Obi-Wan Kenobi had his face
    pasted to the window, watching the small snowflakes falling from the clouded
    sky. They looked like feathers escaping from a huge pillow. He had to get out
    there, he needed to touch it, to know if it was really as cold as Quigee had
    told him.

    He smiled as a he suddenly had an idea.

    "Mashtah Lyla," he tugged on the Master's dark brown robe.

    Skyla looked down, "Yes Obi-Wan?"

    "May I go to the bafroom, please?" He asked innocently and wearing his most
    convincing look.

    Smiling, Skyla examined the 4-year-old, secretly knowing that he had no
    intention of going to the bathroom. "Very well. You have permission to go,
    Obi-Wan."

    Obi-Wan smiled happily and was about to turn and leave when Skyla added,
    "But, Master Nerra will go with you."

    Obi-Wan's smile faded completely. Master Nerra was a very strict Master and
    was feared by every single initiate.

    "Bu' I can go alone. Weally, Mashtah!" the little boy asked pleadingly.

    Skyla considered for a moment. She could let Obi-Wan go alone, he was safe in
    the temple. Besides, whatever he was intending to do could not possibly be
    dangerous. She knew that Obi-Wan was a very obedient and careful little boy.

    "All right, you may go. But, you have to remember to come back quickly. And
    don't get into any trouble," she instructed, watching as the smile returned
    to the child's lips.

    "Than' you, Mashtah Lyla!" he said as he grabbed his favorite bear and ran
    outside the classroom.

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    //Quigge...,// Qui-Gon stopped suddenly. Was that Obi-Wan calling him? A
    strong wave of fear suddenly filled the bond he had with the child. This was
    not good.

    "Qui-Gon!"

    The surprised Master turned and saw Master Skyla running towards him, clearly
    worried.

    "Qui-Gon," she said, trying to catch her breath, "I need your help!"

    The Jedi Master was definitely not liking this.

    "What is it? What happened?", he asked, concern written on his face.

    "It's Obi-Wan! He's lost in the Gardens!"

    Qui-Gon was stunned for a couple of seconds before he was able to process
    what Skyla had just said. "But it's snowing!"

    "I know that, Qui-Gon!" Skyla snapped, but quickly realized it wasn't
    Qui-Gon's fault. "I'm sorry. It's just that I'm so worried! He's been out
    there without protection from the cold for about half an hour!"

    What Qui-Gon was hearing made his blood run cold. Obi-Wan, his little
    Obi-Wan, had been out in the snow for more than half an hour??

    "B-but...how?" the Jedi Master asked, very concerned. He c
  2. Jane Jinn Jedi Knight

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    Jan 12, 2000
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    What a sweet story! I had to laugh at the way Obi-Wan put his hands over his mouth and started shaking his head back and forth at the word "medicine". And the way Qui-Gon thought he'd found a way to get out of actually swallowing his own taste, but then Obi-Wan made him try it again, and didn't take his eyes off him until he did it. That was funny! The ending was poignant, too. Good job!
  3. Arctic_Wolf Jedi Youngling

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    Absoulutly loved the story! Can't say enough about it. Good job Keyla!!! :)
  4. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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  5. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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  6. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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    up up!! (yea I know, but I just love doing this!)
  7. Jane Jinn Jedi Knight

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    Jan 12, 2000
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    "That pressure on your chest is called 'guilt', Obi-Wan. When you don't do things right, your subconscious makes you feel guilty so that you can fix what you've done wrong. It's a good thing that you feel that way."

    Very true, and a good lesson for Obi-Wan to learn! I loved the way you showed this, and showed how little Obi-Wan melted Qui-Gon's heart.
  8. Keyla_Kenobi Jedi Youngling

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  9. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Padawan

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    hehe that was SSSSSOOOOOO cute!!!!!
    good job Keyla Kenobi
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